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Months after the events in the crystal empire. Twilight feel ill with a disease caused by the dark magic that coursed through her body. Now she lays in a hospital fighting to stay alive while a cure is found and her friends and family visit her everyday to remind her that they care for her.

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Well that was... Different. :unsuresweetie:
I loved it!!! Bravo! Incredible! Other terms of praise! It might be labeled complete but that ending is more than enough. I will be coming back here to point out one mistake I noticed. Because I can.

Why can't you do more stories like this? This was sad yet heartwarming in a way.

It's nice to see you writing many different styles of fics (And actually being good at them) and not just clop.:ajsmug:

I liked it. There's not enough stories about Twilight and Shining Armor that show how much they care for each other.

Very well executed, almost tearing up at a few parts.

Just one thing: “I remember a few of those winter nights back when we were fillies."

Twilight would've been a filly, and Shining would've been a colt. So it sound've been: “I remember a few of those winter nights back when we were foals."

Although it would be nice to know if Twilight ever DOES recover this is a good story and the ending still does function for a one-shot ending. :pinkiesmile:/:fluttershysad:

(Here have some fitting music, warning it's sad!)

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I agree with you, a little closure would be nice.

hmmm... needs more death... I MEAN CLOSURE!:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

His litter sister, I'm sorry, but Twilight is NOT trash!

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Shining had awakened as quickly as he had fallen asleep. Celestia's sun beamed through the windows, blinding the stallion. He covered the light with a hoof before moving out of its path. As he slowly woke himself up, he looked back down to Twilight, who was, as he knew, still in the coma.

"Morning, Twily," Shining began.

He looked at his peaceful sister. She looked just as pretty as when she was just a filly, Shining remembered. When she went to Magic Kindergarten, when she gained her cutie mark...He remembered it all.

The stallion leaned down to give the comatose Twilight an embracing hug to let her know he was here for her. His warm body touched her cold body.

Shining's eyes opened fairly quickly.

"Twilight?" He said. He began to feel the mare from head to hooves. She was cold. Freezing would be the better term. Not only that, but she was also...stiff.

"Twilight?!" He yelled. No response. He looked to her chest to see if she was breathing. Nothing.

He moved his hoof down to her neck to check for a pulse...Nothing.

Shining looked at his sister, his eyes widened like saucers. He didn't say anything. All that came out was one word, but as a whimper...

"...T...Twily?"

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Wtf is wrong with you

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Holy hell, I actually wrote that? What. lol

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