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  • E The Apple of Spike's Eye

    Dedicated to the episode: "Spike at your Service" and all the AppleSpike fans
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  • T Holiday Chronicles

    Origin stories for Overlord Flinx's characters for his contest. The legends, myths, fables and stories of the holiday spirits.
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  • 10w, 4d
    Important Announcement

    I've decided to take off Trials of Equestria for now. Namely, I'm reworking it and when I'm done, I'll delete it before reposting it.

    Also, I'm looking for a beta reader and I need one.

    I thank everyone for their patience.

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  • 19w, 4d
    A Setback

    I bet you're all wondering where the update is. I encountered a setback and that's how some of the writing doesn't make sense. As I began making changes to what I perceived as better, it also began to change the tone of the story which means more editing to do.

    Hope to get that done soon.

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  • 28w, 5d
    Status Update!

    Thanks for everyone being so patient and I suppose you are wondering what's the hold up? In layman's term. A lot.

    First, I have some final papers to try and do as well as a final film that I need to try and do these upcoming weeks. Furthermore, I am waiting to hear from Turner for a summer internship and to study over at Disney for the fall. However, I have been making some edits here and there on the fanfic and I will be making more throughout the time. Furthermore, the new episodes are providing with new ideas and opportunities. So I hope to post soon!

    Everyone have a nice day!

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  • 42w, 1d
    Happy Holidays and Happy New Year!

    Well I hope everyone had a happy holidays and happy new year! Now, I bet many of you are wondering about the status of my main fanfic. Well, first I would like ts tart by thanking all of you for your patience. Second, a bit of advice. Sometimes it is best to step back and relax and relook at your work later on. That is what I did. The good news is that I made some revisions here and there. Currently, I am going to edit a good potion of the end of the last chapter. We are past the half-way marker. The problem was the arrangement and placement of things while also seeing what Season 4 has to offer.

    On a related note, Chinese zodiac is saying it is year of the Horse.

    So, this is the Year of the Pony essentially.

    Once I finish editing the last chapter, I will begin working on the next.

    Holiday Chronicles will also have the next chapter out when I get MLP Friendship Chronicles out.

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  • 87w, 3d
    Man School is a bother

    Sorry for the delay in the chapter folks. Class is starting to wrack my nerves with the first grades starting to come in and I hoping circumstance doesn't decide to screw me over or anything. I have my share of I wish I could change things. I may or may not have to do something drastic in class. Normally withdraeing this late is nuts though in this case it would be a time and teacher change. Ho boy.

    Besides that, finished two internship applications and I generally am getting a hold of things. Anyway, I will probably discuss my story plans. I will plan a sewuel (or add chapters, whatever you gusy want) to Apple of My Eye. One would be based on the interpretations of the dragon tune he sang as well as some insercurity and even one chapter with the Apple Family reunion.

    My main fic will also go through a few changes. I will make D Anomaly more ambigious by lessening his description. Hair and eye color will remain, but besides that, not much else. Name will be out. After the Crystal Empire, we'll enter a calm before the storm period before Discord's inevitable return.

    He has new tricks, an... older look and curve balls provided both by D and Discord that will lead to the next story.

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Equestria is a land of magic and mystery and ponies. They have a vast and rich history and secrets of all kinds, some good and some bad. One legend was of the SinEater... Lost to all but a few raggedy tomes, the legend of the SinEater told of a being chosen from a race not known to any of Equestria.

And now, the SinEater has been brought to Equestria, with no memories and instructions from an engimatic pony. His path crosses with those of the Elements of Harmony and the cataclysm of a great change is on the horizon.

First Published
12th Nov 2012
Last Modified
10th Aug 2014
#1 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

Interesting so far.

Just.. well, personally i hope D wont be a overpowered god.

I hope D will act with subtlety, sneakiness and such to spread chaos (unlike big D's approach wich was clever but massively obvious chaos) . Self-restraint (to avoid detection/suspicion) and smart and subtle chaos like a trickster.  

DVB
#2 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

@twad

Well, it will be interesting because as you could see, part of him enjoys this newfound power while at the same time, part of him feels this power is consuming him and robbing him of who he is. He will cause chaos, but Celestia and the others will catch one when they see Discord's statue gone. Will be wondering how much of Season 3 will have an impact though I will probably do the Crystal Empire arc.

#3 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

interesting story so far. You earned yourself a thumbs up. :moustache:

#4 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

Your pacing seems too rushed and sporatic, while the dialog doesn't seem evenly spaced or organized either (hard to keep track of who is actually talking).

Scraping off the top layer of details from the prolog just make this seem like a "copy/paste" set-up taken from "Discord's heir".... Deal with Discord, changeling chaos, chaotic behavior in front of statue, (how you describe the) rush of raw power. The only notable difference I see, is the first contact.

Sorry but this isn't my cup of tea, so you won't get my 'track' or 'like'

DVB
#5 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

>>1606043

Well we are all entitled to our opinions. Thank you for your criticisms. I will try and improve on my writing though I will say that do not be so hasty to judge. We were all beginners.

#6 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

>>1606067 If my criticisme comes to benefit, then my work here is done. Yes, everyone have to start somewhere, and with practise comes perfection.

But as I said, for me it feels just too similar from the starting point, that I can truly enjoy it.

Still I would like to wish you good luck with the rest of the story.

Thule out!

#7 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Prologue- The Gray Pony ·

Perhaps i shall continue reading this intriguing Story :moustache: Please Continue

DVB
#8 · 101w, 3d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

Well, pehaps I will go back and change the Prologue to be more original. Sometimes all you need is a little time off to go back and revise your work.

#10 · 101w, 2d ago · · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

>>1606067

may I add also that.....well 'D anomaly' is a being of chaos now....the story is kinda improved by your chaotic style....OVERAL I APPROVE HIGHLY!

geniusly hilarious lawl........D anomaly practically kidnapped Twilight.....and did a crude drawing on her leg, NICE keep it up!:ajsmug:

This story is like the most delicious apple I have ever eaten off a peanut!! :pinkiehappy:

I like it! :moustache:

moar please:yay:

#15 · 101w, 4h ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

Why do I get the feeling the entire chapter wasn't means to be in italics?

DVB
#16 · 101w, 3h ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

>>1623407

Thank you for catching that :twilightblush:

Didn't notice that at first.

#17 · 101w, 3h ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

>>1623407 i didn't even notice till you pointed it out... i'm an idiot:facehoof:

#18 · 101w, 3h ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

lol wait what? YES maybe PERHAPS .... CONTINUE PLZ:pinkiecrazy:

#19 · 100w, 6d ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

Dun...DUn...duuuuuuun!

#20 · 100w, 6d ago · · · Chapter III- Reception ·

HAHEM!.......fish fish fish fish fish fish:twilightoops:

#21 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

Lulz!!!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: And now they know how much of an assholes they are!! :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

#22 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

The Changeling should have a wonderfully ironic name. And in that spirit I believe that shle ahoys be named Laatikko, which is Finnish for box.

This is for two reasons, one we news more Finnish in fics,  and two you could say he put a box in a jar.

This comment wwas brought to you by my crappy andriod, which is now dead.

#23 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

Jeff.

#24 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

I rate this story...

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:/:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

(5/5)

Good work, keep it up.

DVB
#25 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1641748

Interesting name, though his role will be a pretty interesting one, especially with what will happen in later chapters.

#27 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

Great job indeed!

I've been reading this from day one. I've noticed that the 'accidents' have been growing less and less, also descriptions are becoming more detailed! :twilightblush:

#28 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

i concur for box

DVB
#29 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1643084

Thanks, I will keep trying my best to avoid accidents and to improve my writing

#30 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1642043 When in doubt, name someone after an inanimate object in a foriegn laungauge.

DVB
#31 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1644147

Well, I suppose I will wait. Meanwhile, I notice no one has commented on the 'lair' thing. I thought someone would say something like: 'Make the library a floating island like Angel Island' or 'An airship' or something by now :rainbowlaugh:

#32 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1644162 Or an entirely steampunk floating fortress, powered by glowing hello Science Juice.

But yeah, that's kinda odd.

Edit: Actually, I could see it now, haphazardly placed engines rotors, and bat wings made from steel frames and canvas, with massive pipes full of the glowing yellow substance.

#33 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

Hmm…I'm not very good with names but I have suggestion for the place.

What a about a techno team park, with all Anime and other video games as theme for the place. D bedroom, (that will be the arcade), will be fill with al source of consoles, videogames, to giants tv and an entire wall be a Computer scream.

Twilight bedroom (that will be the house of laugh), will have a theme similar of Dexter lab, with a series of book shelfs that when take one book out it will open a secret door to a lab, witch connect to every other attraction on the park .

The changeling can live in the center of the hall of mirrors.  

#34 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

For the changeling i suggest Chuck Testa and for their "house" a Spaceship like the Destiny :pinkiehappy:

DVB
#36 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter IV- Cause ·

>>1645758

For catching that reference, I will put you as a cameo. I do like the Howl's Moving Castle. I prefer clockpunk over steampunk though. Also, unique name. You may have won yourself a double or triple cameo. Congrats! :twilightsmile:

#37 · 97w, 2d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

Awww no D Anomaly in this chapter.:fluttershysad: Still good though.:moustache:

#38 · 97w, 2d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

YEAH!!!!

#39 · 97w, 2d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

Cangeling name.... Chuck Testa!

#40 · 97w, 2d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

Changeling Name- Inso or Inse or even Derrick the Magic Changeling.

#41 · 97w, 2d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

Changeling name: Flipperdoodle, because D Anomay is an insane powerhouse.:trollestia:

The main idea, Twilight's friends and the Star bros. try to find her. The Star bros. succeed but hang around them for a while. Her friends keep missing them but run into D Anomay all alone but he just fools them into thinking he is a random ape reject (Instant Fluttershy pity/care) and has a bit of fun with them. Flipperdoodle (if you choose that to be his/her name) will eventually help D Anomaly with pulling pranks and such.

That preview of the next chapter you gave us is probably leading into an already thought out event, so no comment.

I hope my suggestions help you write a bit, I really do like this story.:yay:

#42 · 96w, 6d ago · · · Prologue- The Gray Pony ·

What is the question of life if 42 is the answer?

We may never know because the dang Vogons blew up our planet!:twilightangry2:

#43 · 96w, 6d ago · 1 · · Chapter I- First Moves ·

Twilight gazed at the being. “How did you get here? What do you want?” she asked him. “How did you get here? I saw that princess banish you here and I know your friends, brother and mentor left you, so why don’t you share with me what happened?” D asked her. Normally, Twilight would wonder how this stranger knew of what happened, but that wasn’t important right now. D leaned down and she pressed her horn to his forehead.

Two things here:

1) When a new character speaks, you ALWAYS put it in a new line.

2) Twilight just injected memories, including personal ones from her fillyhood of time spent with Cadance, into the mind of a complete stranger of an unknown species?  It doesn't really seem exactly like something that Twilight would do.  Wouldn't she just tell him what she felt that he needed to know?  Even with the circumstances as they were, I just don't think that Twilight would have just magically shared her memories with someone she know nothing about.

Still an interesting chapter though.

The symbol for balance; I like it!  What I do not like is the idea of Twilight belonging to D..  Well now to find out what happens next.

#45 · 96w, 6d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

It was O.K..

I just noticed that we can thumb-up or thumb-down comments now.:rainbowderp:

DVB
#46 · 96w, 4d ago · · · Chapter V- Effect ·

>>1801597 Actually, that is a modified symbol for 'Discordism.' Besides, do not assume many things are of certainty here. I have surprises in store...

#47 · 95w, 1d ago · · · Chapter VI- Consequences ·

yay:yay:

#48 · 95w, 1d ago · · · Chapter VI- Consequences ·

Interesting...a moving castle....be sure to write the next one as soon as possible,I'm highly interested in this.

#49 · 95w, 1d ago · · · Chapter VI- Consequences ·

WRITE MOAAAAAAR YOU USELESS SLAVE NO LIFE FOR YOU UNTIL YOU MAKE MOAAAAAR

#50 · 95w, 1d ago · · · Chapter VI- Consequences ·

D is planning to make his own army? Also, did he mention that his magic is also corrupting his thoughts, or he is waiting for the right moment to tell that to Twilight? You know, don't overcharge the poor mare with to much information  

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