Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon dare the CMC to explore the haunted house at the top of the hill. Since is a dare, they go in, but then the door locks and they now have to find a way out!
I'm sorry that the chapters are so short! This is my first fan fiction, so I am very sorry it is not perfect, although, no story is perfect. There is ALWAYS room for editing. Also, I'm sorry if there is some grammar issues. Again, this is my first. Hope you like it! XD
OC Crest goes credit to PinkiePie37!
Chapters (6)
Took me sooo long on chapter 3... im tired,
I haven't read the complete story yet, but if you wish to check over your story, I'd advise the download of 'Ginger'. It's a free spelling and grammar check software that is very subtle. It's also very good
Haven't read the rest yet but prologue:
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It was alright, good of been better if you hadn't given Sweetie Belle a sword for a weapon. Maybe something more practical, like a knife or something. All in all, pretty good. It could be longer but its your first one.
Part 3.....
Well, it would be nice if you could describe how the voice changer would look like so that it does justice to why scoots wore it around her waist instead of at her throat. And the you mentioned the Discord head as though the reader was supposed to know it was there. Maybe try:
. Another thing, you could add a bit more emotion to Scoots than just a sad 'oh' from hearing that one of her best friends have been killed. I don't mind that the stories are short, it's just that some parts need elaboration.
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Thank for pointing that out! I fixed that just now! And thank you for reading!
...I feel like I'm being trolled. Am I being trolled?
1620325 thqnks for thé comment, in working on à new one, my redition of thé trotting it dead, chapter 1 id about 1000 words, in mqking long now
If you write more try slowing down and taking your time