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    Trixie strives to reach her ultimate goal of becoming great and powerful through Luna's teachings.
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  • 86w, 3d
    In Search for an Editor

    Hello everyone!

    First off, I'd like to say thanks a whole bunch to everyone following my story, Lodestar. I really hope you're all enjoying it so far! Now, onto the point of this post. I'm in need of an editor for Lodestar. Someone to read each chapter before proofing and publishing. I'm looking for someone willing to give honest feedback, suggestions, thoughts, and to spot anything I myself have possibly missed. Now, I really want to stress, I am looking for an editor and NOT a proofreader. The technical aspect of my chapters can be ignored as I have a very capable and awesome proofer with one of my good friends. So even if you're not the best at grammar, it's okay. So anybody willing to work together with me, please feel free to leave a comment below or send a PM! I'll reply when I can and see how we can make things work from there.

    Again, I'm looking for an editor and not a proofreader. Thank you so much!

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  • 98w, 2d
    Just a few things...

    Hello everybody! I’ve got a few things I’d like to cover here really quickly.

    Fist of all, the episode “Magic Duel” will be affecting Lodestar in order so it can stay as close to canon as possible. This means anything in the past and any future story points will be changed to reflect the events from any episode Trixie has been a part of. On another, but similar, note, anything new from season 3 will also be taken accounted for as well.

    I would also like to talk about my very first fanficton, “My Dearest Students”. As most of you probably wouldn’t know, I haven’t updated it in months. And for this, I’d like to apologize to all of its readers. I’d like to also thank any of those readers that stuck to it for so long, even to this point, if there is anybody still out there. Also, I’d like to say this. Being my first piece of creative writing it holds a special place in my heart. I will be completing it one day, definitely. Although, the day I actually get back to work on it is still a mystery, even to me. My focus has shifted to “Lodestar” and I feel very adamant towards completing it.

    That’s all for now! Thanks, everyone, for taking interest in my stories! I hope you enjoy them as much as I like writing them. And that goes for both “Lodestar” and “My Dearest Students”.

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  • 143w, 1d
    In Need of a Little Help

    Hey everyone! Like the title says, I'm in the need of a little help... If you have been following my story, "My Dearest Students"(Thanks again!) you may or may not have noticed that I'm not exactly the best at grammar in a technical sense. There is no one to blame but myself for this. Probably due to my lack of experience with creative writing like this and whatnot. But I'm getting better! And one way that would really be a huge help would be for me to get an editor!

    So, I'm here to ask if there's anyone out there who would be willing to give all my previous and future chapters and works a thorough review before all updates. I'm looking for someone that's, forgive the expression, a grammar Nazi. But even if grammar isn't your strongest area either, it would be great help just to get a second pair of eyes on my chapters.

    Another point. I would really like it that whoever would want to be my editor would get on a more friendly bases with me. I don't want someone to just email my chapter to, only to get a reply of what errors should be fixed, back. It's always good to have someone to talk to and bounce ideas off of. Friendship is magic! I wont force conversation or anything if you prefer not to though. But this doesn't mean I don't want a serious editor. The whole point is to improve my writing skill and release high quality chapters for anyone and everyone to enjoy!

    I wont bombard anyone with constant questions and favors either. I have my own non-pony things to do and I'm sure you do too. I will only ask for edits when chapters are complete and I feel are sufficient enough to pass on. No pressure on replies either. No one likes to be pressured and it only lowers the quality of work.  

    So, again, If anyone has any free time to edit and review my chapters before I post, I would be extremely grateful! You don't even know how grateful I would be haha. I'm always missing little thing here and there.

    If you would consider, please just comment here and I'll send you a message and we can then take things from there. Again, lots of thanks to everyone that's reading "My Dearest Students"! Really makes me feel good, knowing that I'm contributing even a minute amount into this great community! Brohoof to everypony!  

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Immortality can at times be a double edged sword. Celestia recalls past memories of the students she had cared for dearly from the times since she banished Nightmare Moon to the present. Now that Luna has returned, Celestia recites these stores to her sister which in turn offers her comfort and tranquility  

My first fic so please, if you can, review, comment, rate. Anything at all will be accepted with gratitude.

Inspired by and loosely based off of this comic here: http://misteraibo.deviantart.com/art/Curse-of-Longevity-228243107

First Published
6th Jan 2012
Last Modified
19th May 2012
Comment posted by LunaUsesCaps deleted at 8:21am on the 10th of December, 2012
#2 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

That was really touching. Its rare to find a fanfic writer with this good of writing. I'm definitely going to be watching. ^^

Comment posted by BubuJones deleted at 8:22am on the 10th of December, 2012
#4 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

Aside from some grammar errors, this is absolutely lovely!Now tracking and eagerly awaiting more.

#5 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

wonderful. please give me more.

#6 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

I agree with everyone else. Tracking.

#7 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

I'm guessing few of her students died of old age.  I wonder if any where heavily into medicine?

Nice story there.

#8 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Starlight ·

A very interesting and moving read. Tracking this to see what else you have coming :twilightsmile:

#9 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Starlight ·

Thanks everypony for such nice words! The next chapter shall be uploaded shortly within the next few days. :pinkiehappy:

>>112761 And yes I already have an idea for one of her students to pass away of old age. There might be more. Not so sure yet.

#10 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Starlight ·

{Pre-Finish comment}

I'm sorry, but I don't think I'll be able to finish reading at the moment. :applecry: I'm sick with a menstral cycle and bipolar dog, it's better if I come back at a later time. Don't wanna kill you unjustly.

However, while I'm here, I may as well leave my opinions on your writing style. Typical fan fiction fare, nothing wrong with that, though in some instances the syntax leaves much to be desired. Your ideas are conveyed, but in a clunky manner. For example: "Luna would often pause to awe and admire the fine pony work done on the stain glass windows that depicted tales of history and ponykind. " Excessively worded. "Awe" is out of place, considering it means that one is feeling reverential respect mixed with fear and wonder; how and why she'd be slightly afraid of windows, I know not. "That depicted tales of history and pony kind." -You mean OF pony kind, I assume.- This phrase would have been better used spliced before "the stained glass windows" or as a sentence by itself. "Luna often found her hoofs stopping before another example of Equestrian history: stained glass windows, only masterpieces for the royal abode." Like that.

Or another: "Luna had just returned from the successive deed of lowering Celestia’s sun to give way to her impressive array of celestial bodies that would brighten up her night." I know that character names shouldn't really count, but avoid using the same word twice. It would be as though someone wrote, " Rairty yelled a swear angrily, then stomped off in anger." Redundant. It'd be better to either simply call them "stars" or hit the thesaurus button. (Though I suppose using the same word correctly may be better than raping said referance book. Mayhap.) How about, "Luna almost began to perpersate as she recalled moving the sun, how much heavier it was than her elegant moon, and how she almost stopped wanting to set the night aglow with her plethora of stars, if only for reason of quitting." Expect better.

Again, for a first fan fiction, the style isn't bad. At least you clearly have picked up a book in your life. (That's the simplest way to improve your writing, to read and pick the book apart.) And I would also suggest using future chapters to test out different writing voices if you haven't already done so with private exercises. Oh voices, they are fun to dick around with.:pinkiehappy:

Until next time, write with joy,

DWW

#11 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Starlight ·

>>113167 Thank you for that great insight! I'll make sure too take it all into account. This is the reason why i decided to upload this in the first place. It's always good to receive any sort of feedback to improve ones writing skills.  

Hope you get better soon! Not just to read my story but to get better in general lol. Thanks again!

#12 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Starlight ·

More please!

:rainbowkiss:

#13 · 146w, 3d ago · · · Firefly ·

No worries dude, another excellent chapter, looking forward to more :twilightsmile:

Also, i'm not ashamed to say more manly tears welled up

#14 · 146w, 3d ago · · · Starlight ·

Had this on my backlog for a while, finally got around to reading it.

Interesting idea, not too fancy, not too shabby. Looking forward to the rest. *tracks*

#15 · 146w, 3d ago · · · Firefly ·

Fancy surprise, just decided to read chapter 1 and when I was done, saw this one popped up.

Good story so far, good use of emotions. Still looking forward to the rest, and good luck with school, as well. =3

#16 · 146w, 2d ago · · · Firefly ·

Indeed, manly tears.:fluttercry:

#17 · 145w, 3d ago · · · The Doctor ·

Another excellent chapter, looking forward to the next one :twilightsmile:

I approve of the backstory for the Doctor

#18 · 145w, 3d ago · · · The Doctor ·

Another interesting chapter. Noticed a small couple of random spelling mistakes, but nothing serious.

And contrary to your initial statement, I liked it. Looking forward to the next one.

#19 · 145w, 3d ago · · · The Doctor ·

>>133499 >>133567 Thanks! I'm happy you're enjoying it so far. I was just glad I was able to finish it with all this school work I've been doing. Confound those spelling errors. They always find a way to slip through. Sorry about those.

#20 · 145w, 2d ago · · · The Doctor ·

Like you said, it wasnt really all that sad like the other two. I know this question is going to sound a little stupid, but this is Doctor Whooves you've written about right? If so, I think it would have been, (or may still be) interesting to include something about his time control abilities. Of course, he's not the only pony with that ability though.*cough Colgate cough* Good job on the chapter, keep them coming :twilightsmile:

#21 · 145w, 1d ago · · · The Doctor ·

>>137746 That's not a stupid question at all. Its perfectly reasonable. And the thing is, I sorta wanted to make the reference to the actual Dr. Whooves but not too direct. I wanted to leave it a little open. It can be the Dr. but also cant. Your choice really. And I didn't want to make it exactly the Dr. because I've only really seen one episode Dr. Who. Didn't wanna throw off any Dr. Who fans. I hoped that helped with your question.

I'm really happy you're enjoying my story so far!   :pinkiehappy:

#22 · 143w, 3d ago · · · Surprise! ·

A very nice chapter... Admit I was bracing myself for something ultra sad to happen, but this ending was perfect. Looking forward to the next chapter :twilightsmile:

#23 · 143w, 3d ago · · · Surprise! ·

I love this story so far.  I can't wait for more.  MOAR TROLLES-er-CELESTIA! :trollestia: :trollestia: :trollestia:

#24 · 143w, 2d ago · · · Surprise! ·

I loved it. I am tracking now.

Also, sucks to hear of you having problems with alcohol in your family authorman; alcohol can do bad things like that. It can definitely be enjoyable when drank responsibly and in moderation though.

My extended family is full of alcoholic troublemakers, which is why I never ever drank with them. (helps that I'm underage) A cold beer every now and then never hurt anyone though.

I really want to commend you though, because even though you don't like the stuff you still wrote the fun parts of it well, and your note at the end tells of the problems that alcohol can bring.

Have a good day authorman.

#25 · 143w, 2d ago · · · Surprise! ·

Happy ending this time around. I have to say I chuckled a bit at the idea of drunken Celestia.

Looking forward to the 5th student. =3

#26 · 143w, 2h ago · · · Surprise! ·

Surprised I havent done this before, but I have a bunch of friends who think Luna is best princess.. pffftt.. I'm gonna link this story to them all. :trollestia:

#27 · 137w, 6d ago · · · Surprise! ·

Nice story,

again I expected something sad but this was surprisingly funny and heartwarming. Unlike the 3rd chapter it was easy to get a connection to Surprise (despite not knowing much about her).

I really like seeing the story lighten up and Luna being a bit more caring instead of teasing the hard times out of Celestia. Not that I got a good idea about what good writing is but the story is improving a whole lot imho.

Oh and Surprise was a pretty neat pick. :pinkiehappy:

#28 · 137w, 1d ago · · · Zuri ·

This was my favorite one personally.

#29 · 137w, 20h ago · · · Zuri ·

>>322351 I'm so glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy:

#30 · 136w, 4d ago · · · Zuri ·

"Supernaturals" is yet another way this ties into the show, good job.  I really liked this chapter, it's my second favorite.  After The Doctor.

#31 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Starlight ·

Not bad, but I was a bit freaked out by how she died (no, that's not a bad thing):twilightblush:

A few errors I spotted:

“Yes, and she had a personality and the magical prowess to match. Her name was Starlight. She was one of the castles many servants at the time and one of the few that was actually able to see through my facade. castle's

“And this is the reason why I am here today. There are many factors to be taken into account befor even considering a teleportation. You need to be focused; you need concentration and attentiveness.” A single hoof was raised. before

#32 · 132w, 3d ago · · · Zuri ·

>>454880

Thanks for the comment! And especially for finding those little mistakes. I'll get em fixed right away.

Just a heads up, the next chapters are going to have a fair amount of mistakes. My whole story is going through some pretty heavy edits that will be updated later so i apologize for any of those. :applejackunsure:

Again, thanks for reading!

#33 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Zuri ·

I really like that she's the author of Supernaturals :twilightsheepish: Good job!

I'm really enjoying this, glad to see another chapter and hope to see more soon :twilightsmile:

I enjoyed this one, but you probably already know that. :P

Huh, I guess this is the end since it was posted so long ago. Thank you for these stories, they were a very interesting and enjoyable read.

#37 · 41w, 2d ago · · · Starlight ·

Starlight reminds me of me :trollestia:

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