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Have Spike take the C.M.C.'s on a tour of Canterlot so that they don't interrupt Braeburn's ceremony? It was such a simple solution, but even the best laid plans can go awry. Now, Luna and Applejack must contend with some unfinished business from the princess's past as Twilight deals with the fears and concerns of two little fillies... and two little dragons.
well, i have to read it, but i know it´s gonna be good
Haven't read it but would suggest staggering the release of chapters. It's nice that you've completed it but a lot of great stories get very few views due to how fast they leave the first page. Maybe have a release schedule of every three days or something to let your readers know when to expect it and will also allow others who didn't happen to be online in the brief period it was on the front page to see it.
"Shipping is as shipping does" in this fic... I hope you like it anyway when you find out what I mean by that.
Thanks for the vote of confidence! Love that .gif!
"Shipping" is a matter of opinion in this one, but I look forward to hearing your thoughts on it!
That is actually a good point. It proably explains a lot about my "story view" count, huh?
You know that I'm looking forward to your thoughts on it when ya' get a chance!
I'm glad that ya' believe in me, Redz!
Bonk indeed! I wrote that scene on election night, so you can tell whee the influence came from!
Thank you so very much. It is the most important aspect of the series to me, and I'm glad that you approve of how I represent it.
The first one, perhaps, certainly the latter!
How Hitchcockian!
That's a matter of opinion in this one... I hope you'll understand what I mean by that, and I look forward to your thoughts!
I'm sorry that you find it daunting. I always release my stories in completeness (with the exception of exceptionally long fics) so that they are thoroughly edited and make sense as a single narrative, and so that the readers know that I'm not abandoning them in the middle of a work which will never be completed. I can only apologize that it was off-putting, but please know that there's no rule that you have to read the whole thing at one time.
Well... ummm, yes and no? It's hard to explain... there's a lot of questions about love, but love plays a part in it. I'd love to hear your thoughts on the story, and whether or not you think it needs a romance tag or not, if you'd like to read it!
Well, jeez... I don't know if "shipping" is the right word or not!I'm of course very happy to read your thoughts, Aslin!
Everything I ever wanted and more.
Consistent yet the tone changes smoother then a Film Flam Bros sales pitch.
I really love how you paint a deeper and more mature equestria without using gore or dirty language.
Not many writers can do what you do and you should be proud of that.
Well said. 
@The Descendant Once again you have painted a picture of a greater Equestria sitting just beneath the pastel surface we all know and love. Of course, thanks to you, I have to draw the CMC and Spike with Twilight kissing his forehead... One more on the to-do pile I guess.
And grats on the feature, no matter how little time it spends there!
URG my "read later list is PAST capacity and I have 34 chapters to read on 6 different stories that i have fav'd! RHETT RHETT! WHENEVER SHALL I READ THIS?! I know already that I'm just going to read it right after i read the conclusion to Background Pony BUT WHY?!
EDIT:
... I'll just give this a preemptive Fav so I A) remember to read it and B) because I already know it's gonna end up on my fave list anyway
This might sound a bit dick-ish, but as a matter of personal taste, based on the pic and description, I wouldn't read this. I rolled my eyes at the description and was actually going to close the tab without even putting it on my ridiculously long (892 currently) Read Later list. Then I saw your name.
I am going to read it, simply because you wrote it. This is for the simple reason that everything of yours that I've read has varied between "good" and "amazing and awe-inspiring".
Too little time, too much awesome to read...
Well, at least this one is short, just 26,000 words. I'll probably love it after I'm done.
Ciao.
“Whom calls for me by name?!” she asked, her mane flying out behind her.
“Whom is in my chambers?!” she yelled, turning back to Spike as he lay cowering beneath her. “Whom is there?!”
These should all be "who." Who is used for subjects, the focus of the sentence. Whom is used for objects, nouns that aren't the subject in a sentence (and also nouns acted upon by a preposition). If you ever get confused, try wording the sentence to use he or him instead; if it should be he, it should be "who," and if it should be him, it should be "whom."
Another very, very good story. I absolutely love world building and you never seem to disappoint. I have to admit I was kinda hoping Chance's spirit would pop up in the whelp, but I knew that wasn't gonna happen. Poor guy. Love be such a fickle thing.
Good ol' Spike. One hell of an old soul.
Also, why do people comment before they read a story? That's always struck me as odd. Here especially, since the cover art is quite a misdirection from where the story actually goes. Ah well.
Tada!
And I love it, Dag... and I love it... ...
Heh, thanks Zap! You know I love the gifs!
You know that I'd love to see that picture, Ry!
Maki (she actually has many fan-names) has a very interesting style!
Neat how she manages to get into stuff like that, huh?
I'm glad that it had some emotion in it for ya'!
The "shipping" here is subjective, but I hope you find it to your liking once you've had a chance to read it!
Thanks for the vote of confidence!
I certainly can't judge, as I've done the same thing. Thanks for believing in me, though!
Me too, he's always been in a very unusual position. I hope you enjoyed the story!
Thanks!
Indeed, he's in such an unusual state, and to still be the great little guy that he is after all he must go through... that the Spike I write. Thanks for checking in!
That was the intent, and I'm very happy that you feel it worked!
I look forward to your thoughts!
I'm glad that you found the emotion in the story to your enjoyment!
It makes me very happy to know that you found my story so engrossing! Sorry about the lack of sleep, though!
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
How in the heck did that happen?!
>>1597989>>1597900>>1597989>>1598145
I'm glad the story was able to take you on such a roller-coaster ride! Thanks for reading!
Oh, good catch. I was "over-Canterlotting." Thanks!
I'm glad that there was emotion for you in the story!
I'm very, very glad that you enjoy my sense of world building. It means a lot to me that others are intrigued by it. Heh, someone once called me an "old soul" too... it was quite a compliment!
I think that people sometimes get excited to see certain aspects of the show, so they comment about how they can't wait to see it unfold in stories and the like. I didn't mean the image to be misleading (it does happen in the story), but I can certainly see how it could be construed that way.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
It was supposed to be shorter, but I had to rein it in, so I'm sorry that it was a bit fast. Thanks for reading and commenting, though!
Bonk indeed!
He's just a great little guy, so easy to write for!
Thank you so much!
Thank you so much for the vote of confidence!
*Takes a bow.*
Very happy to have supplied you with emotions!
Well called, sir! It feels good to be back on the Bar!
I wish I didn't read this at 1 in the morning, but I just couldn't put it down. Love how intertwined the story was, giving us needed background information at a generous pace, while still advancing the story until it all clicked together. All the characters were spot on and I agree with >>Fleet Foot definitely "classy shipping", story well deserves a star and favorite. The only problems I personally had was keeping track of the past, for it seemed at first to be a battle between Luna and "Nightbringer" before I realized she was facing the wizard. Also it seemed to me that it was the wizard that was attacking who tried to blow up the bridge, and not Luna. Most of this probably stemmed from being awake at 1-3am to read the story. Still amazing story, very interesting to read, and very sad for future Spike who will probably end up like Chance. Damn you feels!
To be perfectly honest I was not too sure about this one. While definitely still far above the standard for this and other websites, it seemed I couldn't get emotionally entranced as I usually do by your work.
Your flow did seem a little bit fast which is particularly uncharacteristic for you. I don't suppose this was an attempt to 'de-purple' your work?
As for the actual story it was quite entertaining. I think that up until Luna woke up you did a great job describing the Crusaders and their exasperated chauffeurs. I also think that when Applebloom's spirit returned to the real world that it was quite a strong bit. I gather that Chance is a character you have introduced before, so perhaps if I had read that story beforehand I would have appreciated this a bit more. All in all while still a strong story, to me it just did not seem to be on the same level as your usual work.
Sorry to be such a downer, but I suppose it had to happen at some point, and I am very glad to see that I appear alone in this opinion, as saying anything other than pure praise is actually rather discomforting and even a bit insulting 
, so again I apologize.
However, it seems that the internet does not agree with me, congratulations on your feature
This was a very well done fic, though I wish Apple Bloom had stayed in her dragon form a bit longer. I thoroughly enjoyed that part, her and Spike bonding through her learning about her new form. And just like i said on the last chapter, BY GOD THE POETRY! You, sir, are a fine poet. A damn fine poet. You have gained yourself a follower. Good day to you, sir, and I hope that you continue writing.
Inside Spike a memory had taken hold, something he had seen earlier that very day. In his mind’s eye he saw Mrs. Cake going on and on and on about her vacations.Inside his head Spike drew a connection between what that mare had done and what Apple Bloom was doing to herself.
Oh shi- 
As usual, superlative work. (I caught the reference to Variables, which I think was the first fic of yours I'd read, and snickered.)
I like the fact you throw a few glances to a larger world; the unexplained brass cylinder springs to mind; I like things like that. One should always have a few mysteries left in the world... (Though if you were to ever bring that up again in a later story, it wouldn't be amiss...)
Keep up the great work!
Ah Mr and Mrs Cake!! I swear yours is the only story I've seen that explains their past.
It's a shame there wasn't a soul for the body, Spike needs someone after all!!!
And as for the "shipping" part: "A term used to describe fan fictions that take previously created
characters and put them as a pair. It usually refers to romantic relationships, but it can refer platonic
ones as well. (Just think of "shipping" as short for "relationSHIP".)" (Urban Dictionary)
So all these Draconequus, is that another story you wrote that I haven't read yet? Or one you are planing?
Overall, this one has struck a chord somewhere in my head, but not sure where or how!!
I thoroughly enjoyed this story, however 'short' it might have been! Your descriptive skills are very, very good; you portray the emotions and scenes in an extremely good way! Not sure if it was your plan all along or not, but the story itself seemed to have that sort of hidden morales.or it seemed to me. I have the habit of looking too much into stuff.
Regardless, excellent work!
Naw, I loved this.
One thing it reminded me of was a topic of discussion I've been thinking about a lot recently; how affection between friends seems kind of socially unacceptable. It seems... wrong, on the outside, to do anything with a friend that you would also do with a partner, like kissing or holding hands or snuggling up together... and I think it's a real shame, because those things are beautiful and they only serve to bring you closer together.
There are so many kinds of love.
Philosophers, theologians, and that one guy who sits behind the Seven-Eleven mumbling to himself have pondered that question for generations.
I'm glad that I could add something to their story for you, DJ!
I'm gla dthat I was able to present you something that you could enjoy so much! It would have been nice to let Apple Bloom explore the draconic form, but this was already at 25K words, and I didn't want it to spiral out of control. The poem form is a big part of my story The Song of Syhlex, if you haven't read that, by the way! Thanks for reading and commenting!
You know how much I love world-building, Lurk! I'm glad that I was able to send you on that roller-coaster ride, as you know how easily I get weepy with the emotional stuff and the like.
Thank you so much!
I'm sorry that I kept you awake, but I'm glad you found the sleep depravation worthwhile! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!
Yeah, that was a great little stinger that I knew I had to include!
Feels good being back on the "Premiere Side" of the Featured Bar, that I have to admit!
I would have liked to have spent more time with her, but the story was spiraling out of control, so I had to tighten it all up. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and commenting!
While the attempt to "de-purple" was a part of it (this story has a 6th grade reading level, compared to my usual 8th grade), the bigger problem here, Fleet, is that this is actually an abandoned arc from my upcoming uber-fic Zenith. As a result, it doesn't have the context of the rest of the story to rely upon, or to give the reader a chance to "breath". It was a demon I had to exercise, as it kept interfering with the other five arcs that I decided to keep.
I'm sorry that it wasn't up to what you consider my usual level, but I'm glad that you feel that I'm capable of better. The draconequus Chance first appeared in my Fever Dream story "Hello", if you'd like a little more about him.
Feels good to be Featured for the first time since January!
In my fanon, the draconequus are ancient spirits, even older than the alicorns. Here, "lord" is used as a term of endearment. I hope that makes sense. Glad you liked the politics joke... I wrote that during election night!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Thank you so much!
I've been writing fan-fiction for nearly two decades, so this is the "end result" of a lot of practice.
Thank you so much!
Spike is my favorite character, and I'm always receiving compliments about how I portray him, so I thank you. You can see more of my take on him in The Talk, Of the Fair and All After, The Silent Shore, The Purple Mare, and my Fever Dreams story "The Singular Constant"!
I'm glad I could play upon your emotions a touch!
That's a unique sediment, but we can't take it for granite. As far as we know Tom's full of schist.
This is perhaps the first time I've seen a story with this kind of premise. I've read 44,000 thousand plus pages on FiMfiction alone so I know a little bit about what I'm talking about. While I can't say that this story would make it into my favorites list, mostly because I have a hard time reading sad stories, I can say that it was a very thought provoking and well written piece.
My world building is something that people seem to enjoy about my works, so I'm very happy that you sensed it as well. Good catch on the Variables reference! I'll keep doing my best, and thanks for reading!
I know that I've done well when I have your approval, Delta! Nice job catching the Variables reference!
I suppose that, by that definition, this counts as a "shipping" story, but if that's the case then I "friendship" and "familyship" Spike constantly, eh? I fell in love with the Cakes when I was writing A Sweet Taste of Cake, so that's why they keep showing up. I'm glad this has found a unique place in your mind, Lucky! Thanks for reading and commenting!
It makes sense in context!
Yeah, I didn't put a romance or shipping tag on it because I didn't want to mislead people. I'm glad that you enjoyed it in any case!
There are definitely currents in this story about platonic vs. romantic love, our responsibility to others, growing up, but I didn't want them to overpower the narrative. Nice job picking up on them!
Please, no need to bow! Just throw money!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Indeed, that was one of the main themes. I'm very glad that it made a connection to the "real world" for you! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
Me too! He's such a great little guy despite having such an unusual and complicated life. I'm glad that you got some powerful emotions from the work!
I hope it worked in context. Thanks for reading and commmenting!
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