Growing up in the hooves of some-pony who you aren't even related to is hard. Especially when I'm not supposed to be with him. It's torture. You won't believe me if I tell you where I am. Starved, thirsty, I don't know how I'm still alive. It's impossible to escape, it's not like a handsome prince will just appear and take you away. Nothing's an fairytale in my world.
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That was interesting. I saw a few spacing issues and I kinda felt it was rushed. I mean, Twilight goes to sleep and suddenly Pinkie. Huh? Where does she come in?
1588531 Yes, I'd have to agree. I'm actually going to fix that now you've brought up the subject. Thanks. Then again what can you expect, she is Pinkie Pie after all...
indeed darling you need more detail in most parts of the story don't think of me as a cridic of cause. just details is best story telling
I swear that image is the only image of Twilight being sad that anyone can ever find on the internet
Very interesting story my friend, I've always contemplated on what happened when a pony's life came to an end with the prevalence of magic and all. Like MidnightCandyBar said it would definitely be interesting to find out how exactly Pinkie got there. Also it would be interesting to see Spike's reaction to all this.Otherwise a good story and a very creative idea on the subject of afterlife.
OK, call me crazy, but I have seen this EXACT story before. Like, I haven't read it, but the description is one that, if I didn't know better, I would say you copied and then pasted onto this story. Not that I think you did, but the deja vu hit me like a freight train.
Gah, sorry, but this gets a downvote from me, primarily because of the bad grammar and tons of spelling errors making it difficult to read. There seem to be odd shifts between first and third person. Ordinarily I'd point out such mistakes but there are just too many and I'd be here all night.
Even trying to look past the technical issues, the story is poorly told. It feels dry and uninspired. Twilight dies and then is a ghost? I don't empathise with any of the characters; I can't feel their pain or sadness because the writing doesn't bring it out. It just asks me to accept that they feel sad, but gives no real reason. Even Twilight thinking of her friends is just painfully cliched and elicits no emotions.
1590621 If you read her biography this story was on her original account but that account was deleted and now this is the main one so the story was re posted here. So don't worry your not going crazy, you probably did see it before.
1590621 Yeah, what he said xD You probably read it on my old account called " RainbowboltPegasus " I no longer use that account, not sure how to delete it. Yes it was copied and pasted, a few edits were made but don't worry, your not crazy. Im sure you wont be the only person to do that.
1590621 Yeah, what he said xD You probably read it on my old account called " RainbowboltPegasus " I no longer use that account, not sure how to delete it. Yes it was copied and pasted, a few edits were made but don't worry, your not crazy. Im sure you wont be the only person to do that.
1590862 Yeah, this was a dare from my friend. I had to write a story like this in a certain time. I think I'll need to put that in my description o_e Thx for reminding me. My new story coming out isnt related to a dare whatsoever, so alot of effort will be put into the next one