Spike has long since liked Rarity, and when Twilight Sparkle decides to hold a party and she's invited, Spike must decide if he will build up enough guts to tell her how he feels. He is determined to do so, but that has happened before and he's still chickened out.
AUTHOR'S NOTE: I update a little on the slow side, but please don't let that deter you!
Though I have written this particular work, it is based of of the TV show "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic" which is owned by Hasbro Inc. To reiterate, NONE OF THE IDEAS, CHARACTERS, OR SETTINGS CONTAINED HENCEFORTH IN THIS LITERARY WORK OF FICTION ARE OWNED BY ME. THEY ARE OWNED BY Hasbro Inc. I DO NOT CLAIM TO OWN THEM.
Chapters (6)
Thanks for reading my story. Sorry if I've done something wrong, this is my very first upload to this site. This is also my very first fanfiction. Ever. And the first story I've written in 7 years. So please, be kind with your comments, which I would very much appreciate if you would comment. I hope you enjoyed it!
That... was... awesome. Tracked times a billion.
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Thanks so much! Although I'm not sure if I'm going to continue it, but if I get more responses like yours I was planning on continuing it if possible.
109874 I hope you do contiune to do this! I can see this fic getting very popular.
Saw five stars was suspiciouse.... Totally worth my five stars... Here take them
This was really well written character felt believable and well I just had a grand old time reading it. Wasent too long and wasent to short. Really only thing that I'm mad about is that there is no chapter 2 right now. 5stqrs all the way across the sky
Sparity must always be continued. It was an enjoyable read and I would gladly read future chapters of this.
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aww, thanks guys! I'll try to continue this, just gimme a while. i wrote this in about 5 days, writing a few paragraphs a night, just cramming last night to get it finished. although I need ideas before I can write... But seriously, I thought that this was a crappy story. Then again, all artists think their own work is terrible, so does this mean I'm an artist now? lol. Again, thank you so much for the feedback. and 200+ reads in 7 hours? AWESOME! Thank you so much guys, this'll gimme some inspiration to work on another chapter or something!
fantastic
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Thanks!
MY BONER IS AMPLIFIED
Even tough I don't really like the idea of Rarity and Spike, this was well-written.
But nothing beats "Soarin' Hearts" :3
Spike, I think you did a little more then just kiss Rarity you horny dragon
I DEMAND moar of this! If it's umm... ok with you... I mean
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
>>Snapple Jack >>Meta Knight
Thanks so much, I really appreciate the support! Been brainstorming all day during school, but not much has come up. Hopefully I can think later tonight lol. It will be coming slower now that I have school again though D:
I love this, my friend. Nicely written!
oh fuck... this chapter has 666 views XD
lulz. But overall, Give it a Go is coming in on 1000 views, Thank you guys SO MUCH! Chapter 3 is starting to come along, although I'm having a terrible writers block. I have around 700 words right now, and I want to make my chapters at least 1800 words each. So yeah, I just need to think. Again, thanks for almost 1000 views :D
K, I know this one seems a bit short. Couldn't add any more too it, I prefer to keep my chapters as like one day. Prolly gonna have to stop that eventually but oh well. I'll try to get the next one to be a bit longer, but no promises. Had a lot of trouble writing this chapter as it is. I literally just finished it up over about 5 hours after a sudden idea during english class.
NOOOOOOOOOOO NO DETAILS! I hate clop fics
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Calm down SJ it's just a story
Anyway, your story is beast and I can't wait to see what will happen next
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To snapple, I said NO CLOP. I'm not going to do clop, but I'm wondering if you'd be okay with makeout scenes, and if so how severe would you be okay with? I'm definitely doing NO CLOP!
And to dayland, that's what I was thinking about doing, like I'll imply sex maybe? Idk, I haven't even brainstormed in the slightest for chapter 4 beyond distant thoughts in school. I should start thinking ahead...
Be descriptive up until you start counting the pores on your character's faces. So yes, more description.
Also, the story isn't quite long enough for me to give it a rating, it's sort of teetering on four-star to 3-and-a-half-star. Keep writing and maybe I'll give a better review.
Its kinda hard detailing a make out scene without inducing boners. Just....uhm....instead of giving details about the make out why dont you....uhm....err....concentrate in other aspects? For example, instead of saying what they are doing say something like that they kissed, and it was so passionate that it would a french pony to shame, or something like that.
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"instead of saying what they are doing..."
"they kissed, and it was so passionate that it would a french pony to shame"
bit of a contradiction in what you're telling me to do there
I dun understand... I did what you're saying I didn't. I left this open to interpretation on the end while I ask people how they want the make-out scenes handled...Maybe i'll edit it and be more descriptive after I get an answer. anyway, I just dun understand what you're trying to say. Please, if I'm being an idiot and somepony else gets what he means, let me know.
ALSO: Do you think I should add a Comedy tag? I end up putting up a couple jokes in there, but I don't know if it would be enough. Or do the Comedy and Tragedy categories refer to the theater/theatre terms, meaning Comedy is a happy story and Tragedy a sad story? Please let me know if you think I should add comedy tag, it kind of bugs me just having one tag, Romance. But if it's how I write, I'll keep it that way. God, I need moar opinions lol.
126978 Making out scenes are prefectly ok with me. Just no clop. I don't have problems with clop, it's just Spike clops. It's just thinking about a lizard having a boner, it's not a pleasnt thing to imagine
Damn you chomping on the bit! You scared me for life!
Enjoying it so far. Descriptive make-out scenes are fine to a point, just don't go Twilight levels and start having them lick each other's faces
I look forward to reading what happens next in your story
Need more of this
ASAP
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Thanks for the feedback guys, I'm gad you like it! unfortunately, I've been in a Skyrim-y mood and I haven't gotten started on even a brainstorm for chapter 4... sorry guys. I'll try to get started later tonight, but no guarantees.
Detailed makeout with some implied sex would be a good direction to take it. Detailing can lend itself to future scene interruptions that would make it hilarious regardless of who is walking/bursting in.
Lovin the Sparity
At long last, I open MS Word to start Ch. 4 (donthatemedonthateme for just now starting, Skryim has been fun for the past week... or 2...), and IT'S NOT RESPONDING!
Okay, it's working now. I'm trying to start writing Ch. 4, please, please don't hate me for just now starting. I've NOT been in a writing mood lately.
Shit, I messed something up. And I just now realized it. Fuck
Okay, it's fixed.
Likeing Rarity willing to be more public with Spike.
Keep up the Sparity greatness, all of us bronies believe in you!
Dont believe in yourself, rather believe in us who belive in you. For your pen is the pen that will pierce the heavens!
Awesome chapter, looking forward to more
I am proud to say I helped contribute to the 1000 views my good sir. This story is quite the good read! Tracked! Have fun with your 1000!
-PwnyBrony
>>PwnyBrony
TECHNICALLY it's 2000... 1000 chapter views. Still :D
I had no idea the first story I wrote in 7 years would get such a good response. Thanks guys! If you have any suggestions or if you notice a grammar mistake, please let me know as I had a huge one and it pissed me the fuck off until i fixed it lol. Anyways, thank you so much for the support guys! I'll try to get the next chapter going soon, and hopefully it won't be another 2 weeks before i write it haha.
>>Evil Paladin
Thanks, and I'm glad you like where the story is going! I'm still debating about how detailed to get, so if anyone has any suggestions PLEASE LET ME KNOW! The most important thing is that YOU THE READERS enjoy it! So i'll likely go to popular demand (if this ever become popular enough to get more than 10 comments a chapter. Srsly guiz, don't read it and leave. Comment and rate PREASE!), unless the popular demand is sex. Though a friend irl is trying to convince me to write porn, I may, but NOT FOR THIS STORY!
This has to be said, right now.
This is one of the best romantic fics I have ever read. Ever. You are typing pure gold here bro, pure fucking gold. I eagerly await the next chapter. And now here's Twist riding an angel chicken:
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Thanks Snapple, I must say: You are my most supportive fan, and I really appreciate that. Honestly, it was you who got me to get started on writing Chapter 4 cuz you seem to love this so much, I just felt bad haha. Anyways, thanks again so much for your support, I really hope I can get chapter 5 done for you guys tonight, though it is looking more like tomorrow or the day after. Depending on my mood tomorrow.
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I'm honored.
just read all 4 chapters and gotta say its pretty amazing i would like some more detail at the romantic parts doesn't have to cloping though and could u have less eating in it cause its 2 in the morning im starving and have nothing to eat and every time i see got a snack i get sooo jealous also your awsome
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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Come on guys, 24 views and no comments? I am disappoint!
You're story's good so far, but ending every sentence with "HAHAH" is really annoying and makes you sound like Tommy Wiseau. If you want your characters to laugh, just SAY that they laughed instead of writing it out. But overall, everything seems in order.
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Hmm... I shall look into this. Thank you for your opinion.
EDIT: Whoa, that was kinda cutting the story's circulation wasn't it? Thanks for that, it is now fixed.
I'm thinking that this relationship is actually having an adverse affect on Twilight if she isn't willing to study or anything.
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Well, they broke the news to her last night, and she couldn't sleep. That resulted in a headache. Which results in no studying. So perhaps you're right, but as of right now, she just had a headache.
cool chapter also your awesome and should feel awesome
I bet those sapphire cupcakes sell horribly
. loving the story and the pairing.
You gotta be patient for the comments man and as for proof/pre-reading I'd be honored for the oportunity if you'd allow it.