A camping trip in White Tail Woods quickly turns deadly when Cheerilee's class is kidnapped. Desperate, Cherilee calls Private for aid in this endeavor. Accompanied by Twilight, Big Mac, and Fluttershy, Private ventures into the woods and finds a mysterious mansion. It quickly becomes apparent that Private and the group are not welcome in the den of a madmare. Meanwhile, Tailspin has to convince the class to work together to escape this evil place. But will the differences between the kids drive them apart before Private can save them?
Just who is behind this evil...?
Chapters (8)
It's great to see Tailspin taking the spotlight in this case, I feel he's going to be a big help in making sure nopony turns on eachother. Also loving the art you're putting on each case, what program did you use to make it?
Oh hey Psycho Me, what are y-
Bonk!
LOOKS LIKE I'M HERE NOW. FOREVER! MUHAHAHAHAH-
A shotgun reloads
That's it! We haven't done this for a long time, but you've left me no choice!
Get back in the cage!
White Tail Forest? Isn't that where Private's lupine friend lives?
1561799Nah, Luca's setting up shop in Everfree
1560851Ask Skullman846, he's the guy who made all the covers.
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*poof*
A wild Skullman appears.
I use Paint.net to edit the covers together
Also, awesome chapter. Looking forward to more
1561928You think you could do the new sides story cover?
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I'll get on it
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*A wild Psycho Me breaks out of his cage
THANK Y-
Get back you bastard!
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The wild Skullman faints!
You gain -500xp!
*Blue screen of death*
1561985 Maybe try a choke chain?
Aw, can't they just beat her up a little bit?
1562081No, sorry, Rich has me on a contract that says I can't kill his daughter...just kidding,
1562089 Well, they don't have to kill her just black an eye or break her nose!
It was like it didn't know how to handle it's own body...
It must be from Garry's Mod!
Psycho Me, add this to the conspir- Oh right, you're in the cage. Forgot about that. I fitted it with lasers so if he gets out, hes pretty much toast.
I really do like how Tailspin is taking a leadership role in this case, one that may shine in later cases or side stories. Great work on Big Macintosh aswell, we haven't seen him in the spotlight since Case 1, and it seems he's commited to keeping his family and marefriend safe whatever the cost.
I may not like this story as much as the rest of them so sorry but its not due to the writing but more along the lines that its a bit flutterMac focues and I am not a fan of the paring but I will still read it
1563965That's not the focus of this story and I'm sorry you see it that way.
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And I must aplogies for marking it down cause its in there
1564027Alright, I guess not everypony is going to like who I pair with
I think I see what's going on with this story. Revenge is a dish best served cold, eh.
1564604My lips are sealed...
I think I know who- what it is. The next mystery is, what is it planning?
I wonder if Tailspin's story will be like Lord of the Flies?
I think the culprit is the ...oh wait. People hate spoilers. Never mind. Can't wait to see more.
hi
I'm sensing a Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde vibe in this one...
1575731Also the mansion is a reference to another popular horror series...
1575751 The Walking Dead?
Great chapter, showing yet again Tailspin's leadership role, and a friendship forming between him and Rumble. I state yet again, this is actually the first fic I've seen where he is an asshole. I sense Private and co. will be facing the monster, and probably end up getting saved by the kids. Great work you two!
I like the part where they shove Diamond in the room with the monster.
1577826"Cause you have the most experience being an obnoxious brat"
I love that line
Ohhh shit.
AND YAY SWEETIE BELLE! :DD
Shapeshifting? Or more necromancy? Hmmm.
Or yknow, could just be a new character.
I'm gonna take a wild ass guess here and say the mansion is either from Resident Evil or Silent Hill.
Great chapter, SB finally getting her mark. Good job you two!
Now i'm sensing Frankenstein....
>> 1579003 Resident Evil is mostly the inspiration behind this one. The mansion, and later the name of the monster that's been chasing the kids, well, there will be references to another video game series with another monster that comes up.
Astro made me watch Silent Hill with him and may I just say... Yuck.
1579128 Amnesia : The Dark Descent? Alan Wake?
Even though I openly ammited I would mark you down for this story... The tailspin sceans made me change my mind I love tailspin put him in more
1580253Honestly I was a little bit nervous about having a handicapped character. But I'm happy to see some many people liking him.
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Tailspin is handicap but people like him cause he shows he is coping with it this fic brought that out beautifully
1580293I'm happy to have made such a beloved character
Hohoho Dayum!
Really good chapter! I have a feeling 'Grandma' will mysteriously pop up behind them and say something creepy
Amnesia : The Dark Descent reference ?
1592791Mostly Resident Evil, but I guess you could see a little bit of Amnesia if you want
Oh, the pop culture references! Are One Direction big in America?
The ending was quite dark, but good. I wouldn't want to be describing the gore in too much detail if you do in future chapters, in case you push for the M. Overall great chapter, and hopefully a new colt to add to the series!
On a side note, did you see the premiere? I think Sombra could have been used a lot more. Also, Gak is best pony
1592951No! Don't spoil! I have no access to cable! Somepony send me a link when it comes on youtube! So no spoilers please.
1592956 Never fear, I am here!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XpCcAXyWTH8 there you go!, in full HD 720P.
If you're wondering what Gak is, it was spammed in the commercials.
1592817 Hell yeah I do ! Btw, the grandma reminds me of Justine from Amnesia : Justine
Sh*t just got real...
ohohohoh dis gunna be gud
I'm gonna take a wild guess and say Fluttershy's talk with Genova will change her allegiance.
Great chapter, showing Tyran is pretty peaceful, but provoke him and he's a vicious fighter. Also, karate Fluttershy
Keep up the good work you two!