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Having lost much of her past, memories and purpose in life, Aurora Borealis stumbles upon the junkyard and its sole inhabitant Scraps. Having regained her name and desiring to find her past and place in the world, she begins to walk the paths of discovery. But what she finds and what impact she has may be more than she ever expected.
Eh, it happens. The nature of differing opinions, some people don't like particular variations on a setting or idea. Still makes me sad to get down-starred just for choice of venue, rather than actual quality of writing. But hey, the star rating is there for expressing opinions I suppose.
The best at parties! Never have to worry about talking over the music again!
Sadly doesn't surprise me about the errors. I found three minor errors rereading Chapter 5 shortly before submitting the story here. Wouldn't surprise me if there are others in the other chapters I didn't catch. Spelling and grammar, why you so hard? 
Alright, finally got to reading this. Now, I'm not the best reviewer, I admit. It's just the way I compose it or something. Whatever the case is, I'll try my best.
*cracks hooves*
After reading what you have so far, what strikes me most isn't the characters surprisingly. It's your style of writing. The way you sew the emotions, weave the sensations into your descriptions... it's... it's just amazing, really. From Aurora's crushing guilt from ravaging the raider fortress to the euphoria of tasting food likely for the first time since her transformation, the way you write is just spectacular, magical. After reading the first opening paragraphs of the prologue, I thought to myself, This is gonna be good. That feeling doesn't come often, especially not after just the first few paragraphs. And you didn't disappoint, let me tell you. Your conveyance of emotion and atmosphere... job well done. Job damn well done.
Characters... I'll be honest. I think it's a little too early for now to say how well you do them. Aurora is done very, very well to be sure (though I was a tad skeptical of having an alicorn as a main character, even if released from the Unity by the balefire bomb detonation if what I suspect correctly), and Lilac showed a surprising amount of depth with this most recent chapter. Requiem... she keeps on being a wild card. I'm interested to see how she develops. However, some things seem a bit... inconsistent. Arsenal, for example. She's supposed to be Enclave, likely military judging by her accuracy with the gem-powered rifle and the fact that she has power armor training. Yet she complains that much? Granted, the world above the cloud cover is likely much better in quality-of-living, but with what she had to go through for military training... it just doesn't add up.
It certainly makes her as annoying as Aurora and Requiem make her out to be, though.
Aaaaand, I think that's it for me. I'm not too keen on reviews, again. I do hope, however, that I do well enough for you. You're doing an excellent job so far. Keep it up.
Cheers,
Adder1
>>120923 Not stopping any time soon, most likely. Hoping to finish it someday.
>>120950 I'll be honest, the emotional tone is something which worries me at times. Because how deep it gets into that swings very heavily depending on what I'm writing. And it worries me that I may be getting too thick on introspection at times.
Arsenal, for all of her complaining, is tougher than she lets on. Remember that when Aurora first meets her she's been kidnapped, maimed, starved and probably raped and beaten more than once. She is, at this point, about as far down as you can get. Her complaining might have gone a little thick in Chapter 5, but she has good reason for it. There's also some other elements to her you haven't seen yet, which may help explain why she acts that way. Just hope I can make them stick right when I get there.
>>121005 It fits Aurora's character, though. She gets so caught up in these emotions she stumbles into things without noticing them beforehand. As for Arsenal, that makes sense. She's still a relatively new character. Well, best of luck when you reach that point in developing her then. 
I just love the relationship thats building between Aurora and Requiem 
Its a great contrast to the evil of the wasteland and not as used as lover relationship.
Maybe aurora was a mother running away from loosing her foal(along with her whole stable?) before she joined Unity?
Still one of my favorite FOE sidecfics
>>135048 Yay! Glad you're enjoying it.
I knew the relationship between Aurora and Requiem well before I started writing the story. There's still a lot more of it to grow and change over time.
You'll eventually get Aurora's backstory. But the details may take a while to come out. I imagine most will have guessed the over-all shape of it long before I get there.
Alrighty. Let's see what I can do...
Aaaand... I totally got nothing. See, this is why I suck at reviewing. I can't pull my thoughts together. Maybe I should just try giving commentaries as I read or something...
Your way with emotions still amazes me. I just absolutely love your style, and it blends with Aurora's character so well. That, at least, I can say.
Also, I half-expected Requiem to be some kind of monster that could disguise itself when she popped back up. Judging by the fact that she leveled up and gained a new perk, I guess not. Huzzah!
... unless you plan to give us a mindfuck later.
Confound you Ilushia! You drive me to irrational thoughts!
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