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"Writers are vain, selfish and lazy." ~George Orwell

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Octavia's creativity pays off one day during a concert, where a special piece she adds as a finale brings out a new fan. But the fan appears out of nowhere, and no one seems to notice her but Octavia.

And all she does is dance.
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Featured on Equestria Daily November 15th, 2012.

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 53 )
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This is NOT a shipfic between Octavia and Vinyl. Vinyl isn't even a major character. Just so you guys don't make decisions for me.
Slice of Life is the tag that suits this story best, but in reality, I can't really define it.

Looks interesting. Must read this!

Read the first chapter.
It's much like what I had suspected based on the description.

I can not say for sure that I know exactly what you're planning,
but I am assuming that 'The Dancer' is something of a muse.
Or perhaps a manifestation of Octavia's well inspiration.

It's a really unique concept. And I'm assuming this mirage
only appeared just now because this was the first time
Octavia had decided to play something like that.

A Octy fic with no Vinyl?
I got my eye on you >.>

hmm. I shall be watching this. this fic could go places. (already has considering I found it on EQD)

>Slice of Life fic
>Vinyltavia shiptease
>EqD features

I find this vaguely suspicious... Maybe the dancer is some kind of shapeshifted mythological creature that normally lives under the stage, turns to stone in sunlight, and eats goats? :pinkiecrazy:

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1635938 YOU HIT THE HAMMER ON THE NAIL STOP REVEALING SPOILERS

Very nice! Very refreshing read!

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I was thinking in the Black Swan of Natalie Portman.

*Reads first chapter* "This is look promising and interesting, can't wait for the next chapter". A year and four days later: "Well....that took a while" :raritywink: Love it

3466377 This happened a year and four days later?
Well, it's about time you got on it, YY.

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3466624 You look incredibly familiar. I swear I've seen you on another one of my stories before.

And to 3466377 and you, that won't happen again. Promise.

3467379 And I believe that the story in question has been deleted, or I can't find it...

I think I was the one that was kinda new to the fandom and ended up hating above mystery story because it involved my favorite character at the time, Rarity, being murdered. I was an insensitive little kid, I was.

Now do you remember me?

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3467426 Dear god, that monstrosity. I had never written creatively in any capacity before that happened, so it turned out... well, you saw what it looked like. Thank god you're the only one who remembers—I'd prefer if no one remembered it, but oh well.

But yeah, I remember now. Sorry about making you upset then (I remember that happening too).

3467431 Meh, I think we both learned from that one...good to see you have EqD worthy stories now! Much more bearable death!

Comment posted by Deceased deleted Nov 10th, 2013

she got up from the coach she had been resting on

Couch.

Other than that, good job. I look forward to the rest of this story.

Lindsey Pop:rainbowderp:y Stirling !!

I love this. More, please!!!

I think I need some time to cool off.

You got that right.

Also,

My cello Is in the back room.

Unnecessary capital.:derpytongue2:


Seeing this updated was a pleasant surprise. Keep up the good work.:twilightsmile:

I'm still sad I can't find a story... well couldn't, just rechecked, apparently it's buried on the site... Maybe because it's sick and twisted in any way possible... I sincerely doubt any of you have read Elege Op. 24, I highly suggest any Octavia fans don't read it... of course I did and it's just an interesting story if you don't mind substance abuse... I have yet to read this one though, and am looking forward to giving my opinion on it~ :raritywink:

Hooray, Octavia is not insane!

Awesome story!!! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:
I would be most very honored if this story was in this group: The MLP Fan Club: source for all good fics

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3550301 If you want to add it to the group, then do it by all means!
3550730 You came at the right time—next chapter is nearly done.

3484450 I have read part of it, and have regretted it ever since.

Is thisa rewrite of some sorts? I am pretty sure i have read a similar story with octavia seeing a dancer, except staccato had another name and was more commercially focused. And it was father alongthan this.

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3591904 This was somewhat of a rewrite, but Staccato has always been Staccato.

My reading material for the night. Very well done. Seeing this story update always makes me happy.

Octavia put down her cello into its velvet-lined case

I would say the "down" is not needed, makes I kind of weird. And change "into" to "in."

I've been listening to Tiny Dancer for the past few days.
I was humming it when I was reading the story.
Then I saw that author's note.
I just...
Wow :rainbowderp:

Finally having cleared up enough crud to get to good stuff, and its a fun end, if certainly troubling last line. Very nicely done.

I can't read past the first three paragraphs. Your sentences feel rushed, and your tenses are a bit off.

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3724180 Excuse me? I'm all for opinions, but that is an incredibly strange comment to make. Please cite the sentences and I'll concede this.

...Hmm. Can't say I've ever seen this idea before, nor this writing style, for that matter. I'm intrigued.

Purify the colours, purify my mind...

This story is a good idea, and I like your writing. Only point of complaint: please use quotation marks (") to show speech, not an apostrophe ('). It hurts my brain, and it makes reading your story difficult.

A haunting ending note here. I keep viewing it as something akin to the older gem right here.

Damn I almost forgot the shivers I get from this story...

Am I correct in assuming that these chapters were redone/republished? Because I really thought that the story got so far even before i started reading tonight... still, a hauntingly beautiful story nevertheless.

Pretty powerful chapter. I've missed this story, and I'm glad you're back at it. Found a small mistake:

You’re probably well aware that that pony was Staccato

Given the context, I think this should be Sonata.

Huh, I guess we'll soon find out what happened in Ponyville.

Great chapter though, you certainly have a great knack for writing - these chapters are all a great read :twilightsmile:

"... dancing together for eternity." Perfect.

This story... it is not even action, yet it literally made my heart tremble. I don't have words to express my feelings here... but congratulations. For everything.

Closure.

What a fitting ending to this. I can't tell you how glad I am that you finally finished this story, and how glad I am to see that you haven't lost your writing touch.

Wow. That... that was an amazing chapter.
Sad to see Octavia leaving the band there... but there's truth in what she's saying - home should not be forced on you, and you won't be happy if it is.

Alto's ghost is happy now, and he can be at peace. Time to do the same for Allegrezza.

Wonderful. Truly.

It's been a long time in making (lol pun that mirrors our own timeline as well), but it all was worth it.

And the ending was truly fitting - a perfect dot behind a lovely story :twilightsmile:

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6868264 6869278 6871050 Really glad you guys liked the finale so much. Even if the story itself and my writing quality/speed aren't up to standards or whatever, I really think I hit off the ending. Endings have always been my strong suit

Was that a reference to Whiplash? If so, congratulations, since the endings of both managed to inspire very similar feelings on me.

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