Fix up the spacing, please.

That ... was SO weird.

I personally think it would've been less uncomfortable and more fun if Rarity or Twilight had turned gigantic.

Not bad. You really need to add a extra enter between paragraphs, though. You could go into emotional depth further, but it was still quite enjoyable. You missed capitalizing Spike once. Honestly, I'd probably throw a romance tag on this since it actually goes quite well for Spike and Rarity. There's a few tense issues, and the universal number for the pause with periods is three, although more may be used for emphasis.

Poor Spike, he's gonna take the butt of the complaints and anger for Twilight screwing up her spell.

>>15376861537686 Done

>>15388201538820 Hmm thats a point. Thank for your comment, you've inspired me to rewrite this story and the ending, and I hope the finished product is much better now. Let me know what you think.

>>15519971551997 It as quite a nice improvement. Still have some issues with your layout though. Some stuff seems to ahve gotten hit with a enter in the middle of the sentence or paragraph.

I loved the original edit, and I freaking love this new version. The spacing is a tad distracting and there were some small spelling errors, but if you need a proofreader I'll be glad to help. And here's a free mustache!

Not bad, not bad at all.

I found this story quite amusing!