Working on my creativity. Appreciate constructive criticism.
Scootaloo has a big meet approaching and she has to workout to prepare for it. She is taking on a very rigorous workout and at the same time reflects a bit on how Rainbow Dash has impacted her life. This takes place several years in the future.
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I liked it. I don't know how I feel about 2nd person fics yet, I don't usually read them. I'm always a fan of Scootaloo anything, though.
Did see some places where commas would be nice. You get a like and a follow!... for now
Ok, as a cross-country runner, it took me a moment to remember she's a pony, not a human, a 15 minute 3 mile isn't really fast, doable for some, but really fast
anyway, not much of a fan of the second person part but otherwise pretty good
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I tried second person, but I can always change it. Thanks for the read.
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I ran XC too. I tried to draw from workouts and past experience to make it seem realer. Thanks for the read. I'll work harder to improve.