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Sequels1

  • T Return to Slender

    In the long anticipated sequel to 'Slender,' Mac returns to Ponyville with a team to put a stop to the evil once and for all.  · Jade Ring
    8,025 words · 428 views  ·  30  ·  2  · 

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More Stories25

  • E Dear Applebloom

    Applejack writes her sister a letter telling her about the night of her birth.
    5,818 words · 5,509 views  ·  474  ·  7
  • E Dear Sweetie Belle

    Rarity writes Sweetie Belle a letter revealing her true origins.
    5,343 words · 8,964 views  ·  751  ·  14
  • T Paternally Yours

    The long-awaited sequel to 'Dear Sweetie Belle.' Now a teenager, Sweetie Belle travels to school to find her biological father.
    5,128 words · 3,524 views  ·  328  ·  5
  • E Dear Scootaloo

    By popular demand, the follow-up to 'Dear Applebloom!' Inspired by Rarity and Applejack's letters, Rainbow Dash writes one of her own to a certain orange pegasus
    7,356 words · 6,507 views  ·  538  ·  14
  • E Saying Good-Bye

    Pinkie Pie finally has to give up her beloved pet.
    1,155 words · 1,587 views  ·  151  ·  2
  • T Morning Glory

    The morning after a wild wedding reception, truths come to light...
    16,388 words · 3,910 views  ·  219  ·  15 · sex
  • T Sweet Dreams

    Many miles from home in Ponyville, Caramel's only solace comes in his dreams of a certain pink earth pony.
    3,289 words · 922 views  ·  63  ·  2 · sex
  • T Let It Snow

    Several sweet and romantic drabbles set on one snowy night in Ponyville.
    5,259 words · 663 views  ·  63  ·  3

Blog Posts75

  • Monday
    Small Update

    -I... I'm actually taking my time on this clopfic. I thought it was finished, but I was wrong. So it's either gonna be really great, or it's gonna be the worst thing I've ever written.

    -'Changelings' still has two chapters coming before the month ends.

    -Believe I've solved a major plot point for 'On the Wings of War.' So, that's good news.

    -Progress has been slowed due to a minor hand injury. Slightly burned myself tending to a fire. Hence the shortness of this blog.

    1 comments · 29 views
  • 1w, 6d
    One Year Ago...

    5 comments · 44 views
  • 2w, 18h
    Christmas Fic Contest WINNER! Also Updates.

    -And the winning title is... 'Branches of the Hearth's Warming Tree,' as suggested by sparkypchu. Congrats, the story will now be dedicated to ya. Thanks to everyone for their suggestions.

    -I've shifted the fics framing device. Santa Hooves visits a bickering Time Turner and Colgate and tells them the stories in hopes of getting them to see the real reason for the season. Due to the time travelling nature of the three characters, that frees me to tell the stories in any order.

    -Expect the next two chapters of 'Changelings' up next, followed by 'Greatest Gift' and this story.

    -Each title of 'Hearth's Warming Tree' will of course be inspired by a classic Christmas song;

    We Three Ponies (Prologue)

    Blue Hearth's Warming (Rarity/Sweetie Belle)

    It's the Most Wonderful Time of the Year (Rainbow Dash/Apples)

    My Grown Up Hearth's Warming Wish (Scootaloo)

    I'll Be Home for Hearth's Warming (Shining Armor)

    No Place Like Home for the Holidays (Caramel/Pie Family)

    O Holy Night (Epilogue)

    -How's everyone doing?

    3 comments · 30 views
  • 3w, 3h
    'Lunar Slender' Notes

    -To avoid being unfair to the other 'Return to Slender' contest winners, I had to kill off Leo Heartship and Swirling Line rather quickly. Sorry guys.

    -Each of the 'Slender' stories is ruled by a different type of horror. The original is Atmospheric Horror, the sequel is Lovecraftian Horror, and this one is Body Horror. Hence Chrysalis' rather messy demise.

    -Discord's taking was originally much different in the original plan. He was going to go toe to toe with the Slender One, unleashing all sorts of chaos upon him. As it went on and the Slender One remained unaffected, Discord would become more and more unhinged until doing the most unpredictable thing he could think of; giving up. I thought the published version was much creepier.

    -Some of you might know that King Sombra will be showing up in the Continuity down the line. I can assure you that no matter the story, he is always a colossal dill-weed.

    -I made a promise that Alicorn Slendy would show up in this story. There he is.

    -the Hell inside of the Slender One is purposely vague.

    -It's always difficult assigning an origin to something like Slendy. I believe my current favorite is TribeTwelve's theory that it was brought to this world as part of a Nazi experiment gone wrong. My theory, that it is the darkness that existed before the Big Bang, came to me in (I promise this is true) a dream.

    -When the chips are down, Luna is willing to sacrifice a whole 'nother world just to save Equestria. There's something noble about that.

    -The image of the Slender One literally spitting out Celestia is easily the most frightening image I've ever conjured in my own head. If someone actually drew it, I would probably scream. (Hint hint, wink wink, nudge nudge)

    -Show of hands; how many of you would have killed me if this had all been a dream?

    -Ha ha, 'Lost in the NIght' reference.

    -Small cameos from the cast of 'Return to Slender.' I hope you're happy, RushingAutumnLeaves. Icy wound up with Mac in the end.

    -And here's Applejack, the first to oppose the Slender One, to close the trilogy's circle.

    -The last line of 'Mortals' mirrors the final line of Marble Hornets.

    -You all knew that I had to reference the Slender Cameo in 'Pinkie Apple Pie.'

    2 comments · 35 views
  • 4w, 6d
    Christmas Fic Update... and Kinda Sorta Contest!

    Yes, once again my gift to you all will be a pair of Christmas/Hearth's Warming themed stories. The first is the oft-delayed 'the Greatest Gift,' a story I will reveal no plot details about.

    The other... well, there's the issue.

    I have the story worked out, thanks to Rubycast. She suggested that since 'Let it Snow' was so entrenched in romantic love, that this year I should focus on familial love.

    This sequel to 'Let it Snow' will of course take place in the continuity, but not in one single night. I'll jump about the timeline in order to tell the best stories possible. Here's what I've got so far...

    -Rarity and Sweetie Belle's first Hearth's Warming as mother and daughter... and their first without Rarity's parents.

    -Rainbow Dash spending her first Hearth's Warming with the Apple Family. It also happens to be little Scarlet's first Hearth's Warming... and Granny Smith's last.

    -On the first Hearth's Warming since Applebloom and Sweetie Belle got their cutie marks, Scootaloo tells her parents exactly what she wants for Hearth's Warming.

    -Shining Armor hatches a scheme to attend both Morning Dew and Moon Shadow's first Hearth's Warming that requires Twilight's help.

    -Caramel comes with Pinkie Pie to visit her family on the rock farm for Hearth's Warming. How will they react when they find out that the pair have already gotten married?

    For a framing device, I'm thinking Bon Bon and Lyra's wedding. The chapters will be character recollections.

    BUT I HAVE NO TITLE!

    So I throw it to you all. The best title wins and has the fic dedicated to them!

    7 comments · 89 views
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Something evil has found Ponyville. The town's children are disappearing, each disappearance preceded by a dream of an impossibly thin stallion.

When somepony she loves is the next to vanish, one young farmer must venture into the forest to find her. Once there, she will encounter an ancient force. It is powerful. It is terrifying.

It is hungry.

Amazing cover-art by the equally amazing Swirling Line. (She's also doing a stellar comic adaptation. Stay tuned!)

Cool bit of fan art by Timey-Wimey

First Published
29th Oct 2012
Last Modified
29th Oct 2012
#1 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Well damn.  This was an excellently crafted horror fic.  Keep up the good work I say!

#2 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

This is delicious. /mbison

All to be said.

#3 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

I seriously pissed my pants in here.

#4 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

APPLEJACK!!!!!!!!!!!! :applejackconfused:

#5 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Definitely well written.

#6 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

That was a good ending. THUMBS UP!! Slenderman is pleased.

#7 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Alright, alright...I have to curse here.

FUCKING BEAUTIFUL!!!

You are the first writer that I have seen to portray Slender into to what he truly is: Mysterious, Fear-inducing, and Scary as FUCK!

By far the best Slender story I have read, despite being a little over 2000 words long. My only qualm is that AJ died, but hey, that's Slender for you. He doesn't descriminate.

Here, have all of my moustaches.

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#8 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

:eeyup: <i feel most sorry for big mac. lost both his sisters and grany smith

#10 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

5/5 good job! :twilightsmile:

#11 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

AHH IT'S SLENDER-MANE!!

#12 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Well, this is something right here. A well crafted piece, my friend.

#14 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

OH MY GLOB, FUCKING SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

:raritydespair:

#15 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Pretty darn good.  I would have enjoyed a happy ending though, I love AppleJack way too much to see her die like that. :ajsleepy:

On a side note, I also wish you had done the chase scene a bit differently.  AppleJack is tougher than that.  She didn't even try to maintain composure and fight her fear.  AJ would never let fear get the best of her like that. :ajbemused:

Plus, even if she was exhausted on the verg of death, I don't believe she would have gone down without a good old fashion brawl.

#16 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Wow, man. Just...wow. This is really great and creepy. Just in time for Nightmare Night. Squeee! :pinkiehappy:

Take my moustaches. :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

#17 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

That was really good, could be longer and more detailed but it was good over all. 5/5

Had chills running down my back the whole story.

#18 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

*Before reading*

Ugh... ANOTHER Slendermane fic? This is gonna suck. :ajbemused:

*After reading*

Damn! This was actually pretty good. Mad props to you for taking an overused concept and making it something very chilling and fun to read. :pinkiecrazy:

My only complaint is Applejack was a TEENY tiny out of character when being chased by Slender. She's tougher than you implied her to be and wouldn't let herself be that scared that easily.

All in all, it's still a great fic! 4/5 Moustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#19 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

Rather excellent, with just the right amount of horror befitting a Slender Man story.

#20 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

I'm looking around me, afaid it'll appear...celestia damn it.:fluttershbad:

???
#21 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

made him sound like a weeping angel

#22 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1528327 One does not brawl with the Slender One.

In all seriousness though, I'm chalking up AJ's character in this to both mental and physical exhaustion. As I've said before, the sisterly bond between AJ and AB is one of the best. If anything happened to the silly little filly, it would be AJ who would take it hardest (minus Granny Smith.) With Applebloom gone, AJ wouldn't be in the right state of mind.

Combine that with the pounding noise, the images put in her head by Granny Smith, the picture on the tree, the loss of her father's hat, etc. she'd be pretty near the breaking point. Combine THAT with the exhaustion she must be feeling from wandering in the woods for Luna-knows how long AND sprinting as hard and fast as she could from an unseen evil... Yeah. I think anyone in that position would just be past fighting.

Plus, it's a good old fashioned horror story. It's gotta end with a scream of terror, not a roar of defiance.

#23 · 107w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1529375 Hee hee hee... Kinda what I was going for.

#24 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

Good... Good... That wasssssss a good sssstory...

But, too bad Sssssslender doessssn't ssscare me anymore...

Heh... I musssst me be off... Time for adventuressssss...

*Hiss* Have a nicssssse Halloween... Reply if you want...

I'll be waiting... Hesss Hesss Hesss...

#25 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

well hell, this was great.

have some derpy for a job well done.:derpyderp2::derpyderp1::derpytongue2::derpyderp2::derpyderp2:

#26 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

SCP-173 will only move if not in a direct line of sight.

#27 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1531873 It attacks by snapping at the base of the neck.

#28 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1531889

Two personnel must maintain eye contact with the SCP at all times.

#29 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1531903 "Send in the class Ds."

#30 · 107w, 4d ago · · ·

Looks like tonight i wont be sleeping, but i know that's what you were going for.

#31 · 107w, 3d ago · · ·

holy shit you made me pis my fuckin pants and i dod get scared very much :fluttercry:

#32 · 107w, 3d ago · · ·

i am blown away. that was fantastic and scary I fell bad for pony vile :fluttercry:

#33 · 107w, 3d ago · · ·

Holy crap, My heart was pounding, but i could chalk that up to listening to the music from the gaem when you have 7 pages, it fits well, too bad for Big Mac though, all of his family is gone, having died a horrible death :fluttercry: :applecry: :raritydespair:

#34 · 106w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Holy buck. :pinkiegasp:

The horror fic. Doing it right, you are.

#35 · 105w, 6d ago · · ·

She blinked and it was there, standing just beyond the forest boundary.

She blinked, and it was out of the forest.

She blinked, and it was in the south field.

She blinked, and it was in the garden.

She blinked, and it was at the porch steps.

She blinked.

:rainbowhuh:?

*5 seconds later*

:pinkiegasp::raritycry:

#36 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Woah! Make more, I love this.:raritystarry:

#37 · 102w, 17m ago · · ·

YOU KILLED MY APPLES!!!

DR. WHOOVES!!!

ANTHROPONY CHUCK NORRIS!!!

...

...

We have an eldritch abomination to kill...:twilightangry2:

(Like and favorite).

#38 · 101w, 4d ago · · ·

Man, that was a freakin' awesome scary fic!

LOVE IT!:twilightsmile:

#39 · 99w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

It would be funny if slender pony just took them to a never ending party of fun.

#40 · 96w, 7h ago · · ·

Holy CRAP that was scary! :rainbowderp: Well, I'm not sleeping tonight! :moustache:

#41 · 88w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Dinky Hooves was the first to disappear.

NOOOO!  Not Dinky!

One week later, Rarity’s parents burst into their eldest daughter’s home in hysterics; Sweetie Belle had received the same dream.

:flutterrage: SLENDERMANE MUST DIE!!!

#42 · 88w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Perhaps he didn't kill them and he just took them to a magical place in the forest!:pinkiegasp::raritystarry::twilightoops::facehoof:

#43 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

Slenderman is one of the most amazing, imaginative creatures to ever be thought up. Slendermane is equally as terrifying. This story is short but sweet, dark and amazing! Loved it. :twilightsmile:

#44 · 86w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Okay, I enjoyed this story for what it was, but I have to say.

Applejack gulped. “What… what does it eat?”

“Fear. It feeds on fear. And children.”

The delivery here made me laugh out loud. Because it was so tacked on.

It came across as:

"It feeds on fears. Also babies. But mostly that other thing." :trollestia:

Regardless, entertaining story.

#45 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

So, it looks like our fic has the same name.:twilightsheepish:

#46 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

>>2437907 'tis to be expected. It's a common enough title for stories such as this.

#47 · 82w, 4d ago · · ·

Now that was something. :pinkiesmile:

#48 · 78w, 6d ago · · ·

Wow. I'll be honest. The bit with Granny Smith at the end sent shivers up my spine. I don't think it could have rightly ended any better way.

Very good stuff. And great cover art too! :raritywink:

#49 · 73w, 3d ago · · ·

I've been reading some Slender style stories on this site lately and this is the first one I've commented on. This was incredible for a story that was just over 2,000 words.

The opening narrative setting up foals disappearing and the consequences set up the story in a good way.  I literally got a shiver when Applejack was reading the note in the forest. That was great imagery and I could imagine it perfectly, very frightening.

The ending was my favorite of any story I've read about Slender yet. Granny Smith took it like a pro.

I went into this thinking I'm not going to get much for the word count, but I've read plenty of stories that just throw in fluff and nonsense. This story didn't mess around. Very nice job.

#50 · 73w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2782311 Stephen King's 'On Writing' is my biggest influence on my writing style, and the first lesson King teaches is to cut out unnecessary language.

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