It's all Rarity's fault.
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Chuckward
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That... WAS AWESOME. YOU GET ALL MAH INTERNEHTS!
...what.
I don't know if I should love this or hate this, but I'll stay for a few more chapters.
This was friggin' hilarious. And you did it without being sucky. Good job.
That set of quotes should not be there.
Again, Make sure the quotes are in the right places that includes spaces between narration and quotes beginning dialogue.
Also, this is more of a technical preference, but the song sequence is probably a little hard to follow, try italicizing and single spacing for that sequence.
EDIT: But still, an amusing premise, I'll track for now.
>Comedy, Random
>1000 words
>puns everywhere
inb4 feature box
The hair people? I see no great horde! Come, men! There are villages to burn and people to kill! Show no mercy!
1528055 Oh don't worry, there will be mass destruction.
By the way, you were always my favorite deathbringer.
Nuke everything.
1528238
The golden horde shall destroy these hair people! No mercy will be shown! Everything will burn!
1528553
Hair > gold
1528705
My horse archers will pepper you full of flaming arrows. You will burn for this.
1529548
Bitch I've got hair people defending me.
1529570
I have hundreds of thousands of highly skilled horse archers at my beck and call, all using flaming arrows. Those hair people will burn right up.
1529588
Not if their hair gets wet.
1529619
Hundreds of thousands of flaming arrows beg to differ. And while they're busy with the fires, we'll gallop in and cut you down where you stand. You don't stand a chance against the Mongols!
1529632
Hate to break it to you Mr.Khan, but we have millions of hair people, and B-52 bombers, as well as guns. Plus we have a city wall.
1529675
A city wall, eh? We'll be more than happy to starve you out.
1529730
No but see that's the cool part. A large portion of our country is agricultural, so you can't starve us. Besides, the wall cuts across the country, it only blocks your army. On the other side we have acess to hundreds of trade routes. Plus we've got bombers, we'll just blow your ass up.
1529760
The Great Wall of China couldn't stop the horde. Your wall is puny.
1531116
Yeah but are you forgetting the millions of hair people armed with guns and bombers on the other side?
1531803
I love JonTron.
1531848
I know!
But back to your fic
It's actually quite subtle
if you spell subtly like this :)
1531914
Well it wasn't written to be subtle, just random and funny(dem tags).
1527812 Actually the quotations should be there, as they are put around character dialogue, as for the song I appreciate the advice.
Celestuna > Lunestia
1543852 Lunesta, not lunestia.
Hey you worthless pile of fat hoarse ass! Why do you subject us good pony folk to your worthless piece of shit stories. You are just bad a everything and that projects onto your writings. Every time your fatass releases one of these asspiles you call stories hundreds of lose so much spaghetti its just horrifying!