My God... i must read!

>>15257101525710 Wow thank coming from the person who makes a new fic and it gets in the fet box in 10 seconds

DEATH NOTE! YES! YES! CRYSTAL APPLES! YUUUSSSS!

I'll give it a read. I love me some Death Note pony crossover. ;3

Love it...

>>15257291525729 thank you

I don't just like it I LOVE IT make moar

L is...surprisingly believable as a pony...Hang on, if L is here as a pony...that means Kira is......

Equestria's doomed, or not, with Pinkie Pie by L's side nothing's impossible.

>>15258301525830 Will do

Nice start, do go on good sir

>>15258701525870 I will

in the name of god what

favorited before I even read it

>>15259101525910 Well i  hope you  like it

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Yes!

>>15259391525939 glad you like it

I love Death Note to pieces (I'm partial to Near and Beyond) but there is something I have to say regarding L...

I don't remember the words exactly, but they said something about how the evil he dealt with was so bitter, he always had to sweeten it up.

good work on this. I don't think I said that the character is well pulled off but please don't let him die at the hands of Light.

>>15259481525948 Trust me you are going to like this story and in this case it would be hooves

I'm not sure how I missed this, but capitalize the letter I when used as a word.

I noticed that you used your instead of you're. If you are ever confused about the two, see if "you are" works there. If it does, use you're but if it doesn't use your.

I in no way intend to demotivate you but I remain, and always shall, a grammar Nazi.

Only some grammar errors here and there. And it feels a little rushed.

BUT THAT DOESN'T ADD UP TO HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS STORY AND L!

>>15262411526241 thanks i was running out of ideas half way through

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>>15262521526252

Don't stress it. On a semi-related note, this is the best (funniest) AMV I've ever watched:

>>15259391525939

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I stole this gif, but it summarizes how i feal so well <3

>>15263391526339 wow thanks i did not expect people to like it this much

I'm sure you got the you have some grammar to work on comments, but just pointing it out again.

Hmm... I think to make it more interesting is maybe have somepony die or something. Dunno why that is a personal like on my side but it is your choice to take my advice.

Other than that, i like the concept and cannot wait for more.

FANGASM!!!!!!!!!!!1

FUCK YES THE ONLY DEATH NOTE CHARACTER I COULD TOLERATE IS IN EQUESTRIA

>>15267051526705 I love L i cried on the episode with his funeral so i wrote this funny thing the picture is what gave me the idea

I'm going to try and get at least a little bit of sleep before me four hour work shift today.  When I get home I'm going to read this.

If I remember correctly, L is the one that helps find the guy using the Death Note.  L himself does not use it.

Considering L's personality, depending on his arrival method in Equestria, it will be fun reading how he takes being a pony, (or at least just being in a land filled with talking ponies), and dear lord, meeting Pinkie.  I say this will be extremely entertaining before I've even read it.

P.S.  The look Pinkie has in the cover art, aka, a smiling, cute version of Pinkamena, its slightly unerving, like she should be holding a bloody knife behind her back when she has that look.

... Who's L?

>>15294961529496 he is off Death Note

Awesome

epic win L is best pony

>>15297581529758 Yes he is

I love the idea, but there are a few problems. Example:

“Ok L now i need some flower” Pinkie said over the music

flour* and capitalize the i's

It seemed to be rushed or not thought out properly, so before you go too far, I would like to ask of you something.

Treat the ideas carefully.

The ideas are like delicate flowers with hidden potential that can either shatter or support the structure, the main idea, of the story.

Don't lose that potential and you will do just fine.

I'm telling this just because,"dramatic romance reader", Rarity won't whine on me for not telling you this. If you know what I mean.

YES! YES! THIS IS DELISHOUS!

>>15311591531159 thanks

soo interesting I need more

It feels a bit rushed (as others have said) and I don't think Pinkie's family hated her talent, so far I'd have to say it's ok.

its good and i can see this happening to L. whaen hes with pinkie pie

I love this. I need moar. Very soon.

That first paragraph is just one huge ass run-on.

>>17476451747645 Don't worry I am having a few editors and proof readers go over it

>>17476521747652 you need to work on your chapter length as well. 546 words is very........ unsatisfying.

SPOILERS

>>17476521747652 twilight has  the  book

>>17476691747669 But it makes people want more

>>17476861747686 Okay first thing is first I LOVE that Dr.Kelso pic 2nd thing who knows  

>>17476871747687 If I didn't want more, I wouldn't have favorited the story in the first place, now would I?

It's just a peice of advice. It's your story at the end of the day.

>>17476951747695 thank you

i do she is the same kind of crazy that light was

It would have been nice to see how they slowly fell for each other over the months but I guess this has to do

Short and I'm not into OC.

But interesting.

good one man

you better continue this fic. or i'll find you and make you pay. lol. just like you tell me.

Bang

Kay......Faved And Liked......

About time we had a Death note cross over!!

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I approve!