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Set in the Fallout Equestria universe as described by Kkat (if you haven't read it yet, http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/04/story-fallout-equestria.html go read it now, I can wait a couple of weeks)
Ember is a young unicorn mare who regains her freedom after years of slavery. Follow her on her journey through the wasteland. Will she withstand its horrors without going crazy? Will she be able to come to peace with her past? Will she ever find happiness? And most importantly: will she ever find something tasty to eat?

Only one way to find out.

If you do or do not like this story, please leave a comment. Feedback is appreciated :D

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 141 )

Not to say this story isn't good or well written, as I have not read it yet, but:

Don't you think there are enough Fallout Equestria spin offs? Fanfiction about Fanfiction itself is kind of redundant, but we're reaching the stage of ridiculous. There is more spin off work than their is of the original, and that's saying something as the original is over 2,000 pages. I see this is your first fanfiction, and I just want to forewarn you that you picked a pretty hard area to satisfy as your first story. Most spin offs just try and capitalize off of the success of the original.

Just thought I should throw that advice to you, but good luck with the story.

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Thanks for the heads up, and yes, there are a whole lot of spin-offs.
But I just got this story in my head so I decided to write it out.
So the only thing I can say is that I hope you enjoy reading it.
And thank you again for the good luck.

Oh, hey. Another Fallout: Equestria story. I give all these a go.
Good start. There was the occasional grammatical mistake, but other than that, a good start. The part about losing Stargazer was interesting, and the beginning reminded me a bit of Pink Eyes. However, that magic fire tornado seemed a little OP to me... Just saying

106648 has a point, but following what he says to a logical conclusion, couldn't that also apply to fanfiction in general? Kkat invented a world, a mix between two of the greatest franchises of all time, that is well done and exciting. Who wouldn't want a part of it? Writing in an established world saves time and effort in world building, and building off the success of other franchises is nothing new or particularly bad. But what I think what he was getting at was that this story has to be able to stand on its own and be more than "Mary Sue's Adventures in the Wasteland" (not to say that yours is, but if you're not careful, it could become that. I have seen more than a few Fallout: Equestria stories go down that road).

Nevertheless, I see potential in this story. Tracking to see how this plays out.

I have read Fallout Equestrian fan fiction over and over again, and am writing my own. I have other I ideas I plan to do too. But this is a good start! I understand the errors (Which I pay no mind to at all). It's fun to see the stories of others in this wonderful world. I just have to say that you shouldn't stop no matter what others tell, thats one thing this fanbase has taught me, KIU! (Keep It Up)

106899 It's not uncommon to capitalize on success, but I think F:E has been near milked dry at this point. People are more or less just stealing Kkat's idea now. World building is one of the most interesting parts of story telling, and really it's something that you're going to essentially have to learn to do as you progress as a writer.

I wouldn't say that NO good spin off of Fallout Equestria exist, but I will say that we shouldn't just encourage more and more of them, because it's really going to eventually lower the value of the original. There is more ways of a post apocalyptic world than Fallout. I actually have a story that got posted on Equestria Daily that has to do with ponies in a post apocalyptic world that has NOTHING to do with Fallout.

I do cocaine.

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Really sir i was almost sure that this community was about support and careing i agree with you that there are quite a few fallout site ficts that have came from Kkat's and sombers ficts but you have to think obn the part of the wrter not all fan ficts gather a huge following, but think of it if you find something you love or widely enjoy you want to be a part of it. This might go from writing a simple spin off of your own design that never gets read to a story that creates a giant splash where even the author of the original work comments on it.
some storys may not be the best but i give every one a good fighting chance to seceded and to liven someones day.
i hope you have a wonderful day
a fellow brony NeverKnown

107089 Ummm, I never recalled signing a paper that made me obligated to blindly love and tolerate everything that came my way, and personally that's a terrible logic. Liking everything and appreciating it for the simple fact that it exists only encourages more low quality things to be made, and before we know it, we're covered in garbage. That being said, you need to understand that love and tolerance was created to counter the trolls outside of the MLP fanbase, not within our own ranks. So no, this community is not about support and caring, it's about enjoying My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. We do not condone blindly following some magical rule book created by young fans who have created the illusion that this community is meant to be a perfect utopia. We are here because we like Ponies, and we want to look at pony related material for entertainment purposes. There is no magical "brony code", and there are no rules on how we're supposed to conduct ourselves. Discrimination within our own ranks is the only way to becoming a RESPECTABLE community. The problem with a lot of fandom is blind tolerance of everything, including crap.

Secondly, there's a difference between being a part of something, and trying to steal a piece of the glory. We've passed the point of "trying to be a part of something" a long time ago when we had 10 Fallout Equestria spin offs submitted here every single day. People need to start creating their own ideas and not just following ideas that were successful. Why tell a story that's already been told when you can tell something new and creative?

I'm sorry, but I write all my own stories, I don't borrow anyone else's. Even if they aren't as good as Kkat's, I'd rather my stories be mediocre and be original, than be "good" and be someone else's. Fallout Equestria was in fact a masterpiece of Fanfictions, however the credit belows to Kkat and Kkat alone.

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technically the same could be said for you and everyone else who writes fanfics based on ponies or anything else who writes things based on other stuff. dont you think that there's already enough fanfics based on ponies as it is? if one wishes to write fanfic on someone elses story then i say go on and ahead if its bad tell some things on what they can do to fix it if they are stubborn and don't listen then let their story fall to the ground. Also if your sick of all these FO:E stories then simply don't read them an just ignore them. Now please try not to be a burro and be a little more positive to those who are just starting on their first fic. Thank you kindly

sweet story don't think i read a story about a FO:E slave yet. so ill take it her cutie mark is a ball of fire or something? at any rate who's up for a BBQ we're serving up ponies n griffens from rare to well done :pinkiehappy:

107188 Im going to put this kindly DO YOU KNOW THE REASON WHY SO MANY HAVE JOINED THIS FANDOM?
FOR THIS REASON WE TRY TO TAKE CARE OF OUR OWN And love and f**** tolerate IF YOU'VE FORGOTTEN THIS GO WATCH THE SHOW AGAIN!!! DO I HAVE TO REMIND YOU ITS ACTUALLY A CHILDREN'S SHOW Theres no need to put down budding writers. I Don't have a care in the world of this social monarchy that you think this FANDOM should have EVERYONE'S EQUAL HERE NO ONES BETTER THAN ANYONE ELSE.
This garbage as you call it could be equated to us copying off my little pony friendship is magic so before you start putting others down because you think theirs too much of their type of writing ask your self. DO YOU REMEMBER KkAT ASKING OTHERS TO WRITE SIDE STORIES?
Sorry it take allot to work me up but another author trying to kill off others creativity drives me insane i will probity read you work and enjoy it ive just never left anyone bad news only encouragement.
Also i would like not to hear more on this topic thank you
A perfectly reasonable human being
~NeverKnown

Tango: I really enjoy your out take on a slave being the main character of your story i was thinking of doing something like this but it looks like you mostly beat me too it &^^ ive got a few friends who chat on skype send me a pm and ill give you were to look me up im sure theyd be happy to have some new people to talk to ^^

107188 also Discrimination within our own ranks is the only way to becoming a RESPECTABLE community. The problem with a lot of fandom is blind tolerance of everything, including crap. How are you even a brony that is the basis or the pillar of our community

Thank you to all who support me :D
I enjoyed writing it so far so I will keep going.
Also I've already thought about the firestorm being OP thing, and I can assure you that it was more of a one-time frustration outlet.

107543 Kind of difficult when there is at least 10 of them submitted every day. I think that attention could be given to other more creative stories. Also notice I have NOT said anything about this particular author, I even wished him good luck. So I have never tried to shoot down this author, only warn him that he has picked a difficult place to start.

107675 NeverKnown, I understand your intentions are for a good cause, but calm down for just a second. You're jumping the gun, and you're making assumptions. Just THINK about what I've said for a moment. Why did people join this fandom? Because they like My Little Pony, nothing more. Love and tolerance is just a meme that was created within it. The show never once mentions or preaches love and tolerance, in fact look at the Zecora episode. It could be see as blatant racism. Everyone treated her like an outcast until they found out she was okay. Not even the ponies blindly love and tolerate everything in their path, and we should not either.

No I do not remember Kkat asking others to write side stories, which is exactly why it should stop. People are doing it without his permission and essentially stealing his work.

I am a writer yes, but as a writer I want to see other great writers. I have never aimed to kill off anyone's creativity, and if you re-read my messages you'll see that I'm encouraging the OPPOSITE. I am challenging authors of spin offs of a story to try and create a new story, to make something for themselves. That's FAR more creative than making a spin off or a sequel. I am telling authors to go out and try all your own ideas rather than borrowing someone else's, and that even if it is mediocre, at least you tried. Also you have to consider I never spoke negatively about this author, and wished him good luck on his endeavor even though I did not agree with it.

You claim you don't want to hear more on the topic, but then make another response? I don't think that makes much sense... Either way I am entitled to respond, as freedom of speech and all:

107705 I have long since abandoned words like "brony", and avoid calling myself such. It makes us sound like a cult, which we're not. I am a fan of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic.

That being said I am guessing you need me to elaborate on what I said there.

Don't get me wrong, I still wholeheartedly believe that discrimination within our own ranks is the only way to become a respectable community in other's eyes, but I perhaps need to explain this better so you understand WHY I feel this way, as I will admit it may sound a bit extreme standing by itself:

I'm guessing you've not seem many of the "bad" fandoms out there. Fandoms like Twilight, and Hetalia. I'm going to use Hetalia as an example. Hetalia is an anime that was made some odd years ago, that has an incredibly large fanbase that is notorious for being obsessed with yaoi (male on male depictions) and notoriously bad. That community is essentially all a bunch of screaming fangirls who will blindly tolerate anything within the community, provided it has to do with Hetalia. As a result the entire fanbase is generally hated by a majority of anime fans who are not in it, and whenever most of them see them at anime conventions they are shunned and outcasted like social pariahs. This is not from my personal view of them, as I personally could care less if they existed as I'm not a part of them. I did however once see a group of them chased out of an anime convention, and have seen them insulted directly to their faces on a repeated basis.

I'm sure there are some Hetalia fans who are normal people who happen to just enjoy the anime, but you'll probably never see them because they are swept under the rug like the rest of the crowd. Their fandom has been filled with so much stupid bullshit that no one can take them seriously.

Now I ask you: Is that what you want for My Little Pony? For us to come off as so stupid and childish that we are never taken seriously? To where we are known for being so notoriously bad that no one wants anything to do with us? That is the perfect formula for killing the fanbase off. If we make ourselves to where newcomers won't want to be a part of us, then we are essentially locking the doors. When those of us already here leave, we'll have nothing left then. We'll dwindle to nothingness. I speak with the idea of a FUTURE for this fandom.

Let me ask you: Do you support people making porn of My Little Pony? How about stories about raping fillies and then violently murdering them for no reason? Well it's happening. Under your policy we are required to "love and tolerate" them as well. They call themselves bronies, and there is no way for us to deny them of that.

I understand you have good intentions, however you have to look at it realistically: you can't love and tolerate everything. If you do, then we'll be filled with shit in no time.

I agree with the "love" aspect, but only in perspective. Love your fellow fan in the sense that you try and help them. Don't encourage them to make crap, but point them in the right direction, and smack him when he does something stupid. It's called tough love, and it works. Under NO circumstances however should you blindly tolerate everything though, it just makes a mess.

I hope this offers some clarity on what I said, and I hope you'll actually THINK about this and not just jump the gun on me. I aim not to worsen the fandom, but to better it. The thing I've loved about this fandom so far is that a majority of people are older and more logical and less "fangasm"-y to where we look like a bunch of Hetalia fans. I have enjoyed how people can take criticism and use it to move forward.

I understand fanfiction comes with the territory, but if that's the case let's contribute the best material we can.

107989 sorry i cant sway your hard locked views just enjoy the site and read its for the fun of it :pinkiehappy:

Slave? Interesting. I hope you'll write her psyche right - she was conditioned into submission, so she'll submit instinctively. It'll make interesting conversations and adventures. Also hope she'll find her first companion in that very same slaver mare.

I'm loving the story so far, I'm looking forward to see how Ember fairs in the wasteland, given how her life has been.

same here im actually excited to see the outcome of this first chapter :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

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Okay, everyone, let's all ignore the troll and get back to commenting on the story.

Anyway, it's a good story. I find the slave angle interesting, and I want to see how it plays out. Like I said before, this fire power seems a little bit over powered as is, so hopefully you can find some way to balance it out. When do you figure the second chapter is going to be ready?

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I'm not a very fast writer unfortunately so I'm not sure when the next chapter will be ready unfortunately (I'm now 1000 words in).
I originally created Ember as a roleplay character for a PnP roleplaying game (under development) and while writing the background story I decided that I really liked it, so I am now writing this.
Also for the sake of roleplaying everyone agreed that the ability to completely destroy everything with magic fire is a tiny bit OP so I already had to figure a way to avoid her using it during the game. So don't worry, I got it covered, I hope.
Hopefully I won't dissapoint you guys.

110599

>Implying anyone with negative criticism of an over-saturated genre is a troll.

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The whole thing seems like a silly argument though. "XXX has too much fanfiction" could be said about anything. The reason Fallout: Equestria gets so much of it is because it's not just a story; KKat built an entire world, and only used a small fraction of it. Like the FiM world itself, that makes it interesting to set other stories into it.

112465 The same could be said about any story though. There's stories created every day with expansive worlds where only small fractions of it are used, but that doesn't mean to just go in and make a million stories off of it.

It's far from a silly argument, it's a growing problem. You can't deny how much Fallout Equestria is being posted here. It's every single day, several times a day. The problem is that it's starting to shadow over other stories at this point, and it's reached the point where a lot of people are just doing it to get attention.

I think the BIG difference between "XXX has too much fanfiction", and this is: This is a fanfiction ALREADY. Having too much fanfiction is one thing, but then having too much fanfiction ABOUT fanfiction is something different all together. You have to admit the idea of so much fanfiction ABOUT fanfiction is a bit ridiculous. Also I've even seen: Fanfiction about side stories of Fallout Equestria. In other words Fanfiction about a fanfiction OF a fanfiction. This is getting ridiculously redundant. People are quickly exhausting the creativity from this universe. Plus has it not occurred to anyone that Kkat doesn't own the monopoly on the idea of Fallout crossovers? Is NO one capable of making a DIFFERENT Fallout crossover? Why must it be Kkat's? Her original was good and all, but you can totally make the same concept with a different idea. I think the fact that if anyone DID make a new Fallout crossover they have to state that it's NOT related to Fallout Equestria is kind of a sign that there's too much Fallout Equestria.

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> complaining about fanfics on a site about fanfics. Of a series that's made of Lauren Faust's own fanfic world of My Little Pony, for which she got the one-in-a-million chance to make them official.

Why are you even HERE? Seriously. The fact people make fanfics of something is because they like it. That's all there is to it. You don't want to read more Fallout: Equestria derivatives? Then don't. It's that simple. Ignore it. As for "no one making different Fallout crossovers", it's just because KKat did it so well. We LIKE her vision on a fallout+ponies world. No need to reinvent the wheel. Fan fiction of fan fiction may be an odd thing, but when it happens, there's a reason for it (hint: the reason is, we like the original).

It's not a 'problem'. You just make it a problem, and you're hell-bent on sharing your obnoxious vision with the very people you know won't care about it. So if not to troll, then why are you here?

Also, just to point out your flaws, FO:E is not a 'genre', it's a setting.

Btw, I don't really care if you keep ranting here, but Tango said he'd start deleting any comments not about the fic. So kindly, stop bothering the people who DO like Fallout: Equestria fanfiction. Just because you don't like it doesn't give you the right to judge it; I know plenty of MLP fans who wouldn't touch MLP fanfiction ITSELF with a 10-foot pole. You don't see them ranting on the comment pages of your stories, do you?

Are you all done with the arguments? I have no problem with people expressing their opnions but this has gone off-topic I think. So if you really want to continue this discussion and not talk about the story, then please, send each other private messages or something. Otherwise I will start deleting those comments.

112710 Out of respect for Tango's request as he has been very kind to this point and I appreciate that, I shall take this to private messages with you. I will say I only respond because others respond to me. I am entitled to a response if one is presented to me, I will however take it to private.

Pan Equistrian Gargle Blaster....... Mother of god thats going to be some hang over if she doesn't wake up in some random bed with a two way tattoo
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something like that :pinkiehappy:

btw, shouldn't that be mother of Gawd?

120491 "Mother of Gawd" oh, all the Gawd jokes...
Sticky Piston? His cutie mark should've been the Minecraft sprite for a sticky piston...
And the commentary on the slave collars. They were invented before the War, but what use did they serve?

120382 Fixed it
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120676 Sir i applaud you have made my morning (´▽`)/) ==> Brohoof

121026 (\ (´▽`) Brohoof

This story is turning out pretty good, Tango. Keep up the good work!

120676 That's perfect!
About the slave collars, I don't know what use they served before the war, but in the Fallout universe, they were invented as a prisoner control device.
And I'll do my best to keep writing.:twilightsmile:

ps. Small update, fixed some errors and made small improvements.

*Ahem* A lot of random arguements in the comments... Anyway, I love Fallout Equestria. So I gave your story a shot. I'm just getting started, but I like what I see so far. I really expected Stargazer to become Ember's companion, so I was taken by surprise by his death. And you used the change from third person to first person well. I also don't really find it too out of the realm of possibility that Ember could use fire magic. Twilight Sparkle did something similar in the show, just on a much smaller scale. Anyway, can't wait to see what else will come from the story.

Things are starting to pick up now! I gotta admit, the dragon threw me off at the beginning. I had no idea how you were gonna write your way outta that one. But you pulled it off, with a nice reference to New Vegas to boot. I also liked how Ember had such conflicting feelings about her Cutie Mark. Its her talent! But it killed everyone... I wonder what's next for the liberated pony. I'll be watching!

i like it ur the first to use a slave as there main charecter so thats a plus right anyway i like it i hope you keep goen just sayen.

Wow im really likeing the story also looking forward to Ember drinking again ^^ :twilightsmile:
Also

PONYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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128189 It's good to know you like it :D

128521 I have a fixed point were I'll be heading with the story, I just need to figure out the way to get there, but so far I have no intention of stopping.

134035 I'll see what I can do :yay:

until then: have a drawing!

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135296 awesome sounds good to me if i can help in anyway let me know. Cince i read all these fallout equestria they are intriguing me to try out the actual game so ya i got kinda addicted to fallout o well lol but if i can help let me know and ill c what i can do.

judging by the pick ill take it eventually Ember will use a flamethrower? an use it without a fuel tank. still sweet story lol gecko king

I gotta say, I think this is my favorite chapter yet so far. It had a funny and interesting beginning, kept that interest through the chapter, and ended with a heartwarming moment. Wasn't a very action-y chapter, and it didn't need to be. You did a good job mixing humor and showing the effects of being a slave had on Ember. I was concerned that her past wasn't being explored, but I'm glad that isn't the case.

And of course the drunken adventure was cool. Bit surprised her friends didn't offer to join her on the quest, though. Anyway, we'll see what happens. You got my interest!

137042 maybe :3

136716 reading FO:E also convinced me to buy Fallout 3 and New Vegas. I have no regrets!

137467 I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it, I'll do my very best to try and keep it up.

137779 lol same here i think when i finally beat the game ill probably start a new one agin lol

"Fixer snickered when he looked in one of his mirrors..." I thought Fixer was a mare and a doctor not a sniper lol.

137852 yeah I thought that too >.>
fixed it now, thanks

Finally got around to reading the full chapter (after reading just the hangover scene before ;). You definitely keep it interesting :)

141139 Glad to hear that :D

:rainbowlaugh: the pony hanging from the billboard. dark humor is funny aside from that damn slavers attacking and enslaving er attempted to enslave Ember was pretty awesome. Shame that Shield kicked the bucket i was expecting him to live at least two fights. Boulders making ponies go squish since ponykind existed.

144963 I didn't really like Shield, because of him I had to rewrite parts about five times. Just because I couldn't find a good name for him. Oh well, he died protecting other ponies.
Furthermore boulders are the best. Ask Rarity :raritywink:

Oh, quick quiz. Try to guess the name of Lazuli's sister :3

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