There is a dent between the human world and the world of ponies and Twilight, Rainbow dash, Applejack, Fluttershy, Pinkie pie, and Rarity must go out to find what is causing it. The result is something.... that will haunt them for life MUAHAHAHAHA! Based off the classic Disney world ride. Ugh! And Disneyland.
Will be remaking it into something better. This specific story is not cancelled for life, we will just have to wait and see.
what the chirp is this
1522490 I dunno. What the fuck are you?
1522506
chirp chirp
How did I expect people to hate my stories?
1522511 allow this to answer your statement.
1522531
i hear my cousin frank chirping in the background
1522537 To bad. I used up my garbage day.
1522550 Oh boo hoo. Hold on i'll just step on him.
hey guys whats going on in this thread
1522598
frank run
1522598 Ur cuz hatin. Me hatin on ur cuz. It's just like school!
1522611 At least I make stories.
I'm so sorry about those two. I don't know how they got out of the jar...
Frank! Cricket! Get over here!
1522636
cmooooooooooooon
1522636
but moooooooooom
1522636 ... Ok then.
1522640
1522643
No buts. You're both grounded for a month.
1522643 I am quite confused.
1522653
Can I have them?
1522653 .......... Huh. Everything worked out for me once. Alright then.
1522673
No. Go back to the airplane, Wil.
1522681
But...
My life is messed up.
1522686
Airplane. Now.
1522698
Awwwww
Da fuq happened in these comments.
1522705 Ha ha!
1522709 the Apocalypse.
Remember to capitalize your names. And it's a bit 'said' heavy. Other words if you please.
1522709
I second this... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
1522724 I! Have no idea what you just said.
Also, you should refrain from using words like "thing" or "stuff."
This shows the reader that you cannot generate creative imagery and it breaks the reader from their immersion in the story.
Upvoted because of comments.
1522743 Yeah I suck at that stuff. I'm just awful at thinking up shit like that.
1522739
See this. Missed capitalization on Rarity. Just one example of a few.
Said this, said that, too many saids. Use other words instead of said. OK boyo.
I don't even know what's happening anymore D:
1522744 I don't know if I should be completely offended cause you don't really like the story or I should thank you for upvoting.
By the gods, this is probably the best comment section I have ever seen.
But yes. Capitalization, Word Choice, and the like. Those need to be worked on.
1522763 Yeah I know. I tried to not have many saids but they keep coming to my dumbass 12 year old mind.
i got out of the jar again
1522777 ya don't say?
1522786
GOD DAMNIT
That may be one of the greatest comment threads I've ever seen on this site
1522770 .... >:D This is all an illusion! You aren't really here! You are talking to a meat saucer!
1522797
I concur.
1522797 I know. On my story to. Weird.
1522744>>1522774
Another happy customer, I see.
1522790
Pffffffffff my baaaaaaad
1522805 Lol.