AH! My least favorite ship!

Still good though, thumbs up

>>15201871520187 Lol, thanks man

Although I hope you don't mind her picks for the other ships

>>15202441520244

Unless Twilight's arranged marriage is a black and red earthpony...I probably will mind.

I kid of course.

>>15202541520254 Lol, irony in that is that the pony she came up with is almost the exact opposite of Laughing Stock, colors and all

>>15202561520256

Just a yes or no answer: Does Big Mac ship with anyone?

>>15202601520260 *ahem* Eeyup

May have multicolored hair

>>15202611520261

Oh that's fine. If there was Flutter x Mac, I would find your house and burn it down. Nothing is worse than that.

Luckily that pony in question is the worst imo, so I don't care!

Can't wait for the rest!

>>15202661520266 Thanks man. I'll probably write a chapter for this tomorrow and then start on a special story, where I might toss Laughing Stock into for fun

Wait, so they're actually going to just get married?! Just like that?! With no fighting or struggles?!

I'll continue reading this though.

>>15202701520270

You can't do that, I never gave you permission! If you do, I'll make up a story about how you and your girlfriend met!

Actually, I might do that anyway...you weren't born and raised in south Detroit by any chance...were you?

if you don't get it, I'll cry...

>>15202821520282 First chapter only, wait until the other couples meet each other

Also, power of the crown, lets you do basically anything

>>15202841520284 Nice one there

Also, no taking my idea, it's why I'm thinking of using Laughing Stock

>>15202901520290

I'm just messing, I look forward to seeing what other writes do with that adorable goofball...

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>>15203001520300 Lol, I may write it in so he's hitched with Twily

Thanks for permission though

>>15203061520306

The message I sent you is why I'm picky about who uses him...you and Carnage are the only ones I'm fine with, for obvious reasons.

>>15203161520316 Lol, ok. Maybe we should move our convo so the comments on this story aren't filled by us

Until it was mentioned that all of them would be paired with stallions, I was thinking of Celestia pairing up Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, but that's probably just my own shipping bias speaking,

Anyway, this is an excellent read but the chapters do seem to go by a bit quickly. Maybe add some more breadth and depth to bump up the word count a bit, and explain why they'd be perfect for each other?

>>15202611520261 *finds Big Mac is involved* /unmanly squee

*... with Rainbow Dash* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

Please put Dr. Hooves with Twilight then plzplzplzplzplzplzplz /plz

I love how you begged the girl's stallions. I probably would've made Rarity's sound a little less stuck up and expanded Twilight's, but the rest are dead on and even those two aren't off.

So far I'm quite enjoying this. Spike and Rarity are the reasonable set for a calm proposal considering everything. What I really liked about this was that Spike was distressed by the news. It shows a lot of character that he's not excited to be getting married to Rarity, but is instead worried that Rarity is being forced into something she doesn't want. Above all else, he wants her to be happy.

so she's not just going to play matchmaker?

Hmm, seems i wassnt the only one playing with the idea of a aranged mariage.

Altough mine is

But i`ll see where this is leading

What the ponies want may not necessarily be the same as what they NEED.

Rarity doesn't need someone who will be her slave, she needs someone who can easily accommodate her busy career and make her life easier.

Dash's dream stallion doesn't HAVE to be a Wonderbolt.

And stallion who acts just like Pinkie Pie? the image makes me uncomfortable, not because of the comical ramifications, but because they would just tire each other out and eventually get bored with their marriage if their lives were just sweets and partying. Pinkie needs someone who loves everything about her, but is also calm and can keep her gently grounded in reality.

>>15211591521159  no she's not. she's looking at theiir personalities, who they're around most and how they act toward them, and how well she thinks they'll get along together

I bet one of these is going to fail.

D'aww, this ship doesn't get enough love.

This is the greatest ship in the entire universe.

Heh...silly Soarin tand your apple pies. Lovin' this by the way!

she give me pie if you're outside! Think you wanted won't in there.

Seemed a little too easy time around. I mean, beside the famous stuff, they hardly know anything about each other.

>>15251141525114 They both knew the consequences if they didn't want to do it, and AJ, being the mare she is wouldn't want him to spend 10 years in jail because of it.

And, hey, I'm sure if you told a girl she had to marry a famous athlete they'd be totally fine with it

>>15251951525195 Don't think that'd matter much to AJ

>>15252771525277 Yeah, but in her line of work, a stallion like Soarin would be damned helpful since he's probably just as strong as she is, so he could help with the apple bucking

>>15252911525291 Indeed, still, she isn't the type just go along with something cause she's told to either. I think there's a solid possibility on the ship, but it feels too easy like this.

>>15253281525328 Well, wait until the other mares have learned who their stallions are, or dragon in Rarity's case, and you'll see why she went along with it

>>15253461525346 Rarity was quite pleased. Spike and Rarity being easy makes sense because really they weren't. You have all the history and the build up. Here though, you had a chance to really expand on the characters. As I said on the Sparity chapter, Spike being worried about what Rarity wants over his own want to be with her showed a lot of character. Something like that here beside, Soarin is afraid of jail, would of been the perfect touch.

>>15253721525372  aren't you putting abit too much thought into a KID'S cartoon, dude? we write these out because it's fun. if other people like it, great.  now, you're just saying we're sloppy. dude, we're amatures. we can't write a great story, gooed ones, yes.

>>15254061525406 I'm showing him how he could improve and deepen the story. So instead of going, "Oh look, someone who doesn't just comment more and gives actual feedback lets come to the writer's aid from this villain!" Try to actually read what's written and think about it before attempting to troll someone as a white knight because they're trying to help. It amazes me that you even have the gall to claim self righteousness on someone else's work.

>>15255591525559 Okay, no fighting in the comments #1, and #2, it's actually her idea here. She's my girlfriend and I write all these stories for her based off ideas she has, so, yeah...

And about the story, I understand what you are saying, and it will be addressed later on in a few chapters

>>15255951525595 Suppose that explains the last part. I'm not gonna lie, I think this has a lot of potential and could be really good, because if I didn't, I wouldn't bother trying to offer thinking points. Hell, pegging the girls necessary attributes alone gave you quite a bit of credit in my book. There's a lot of humor, sweetness, romance, and fun to be had here, and I for one, would really like to see it for all it's worth.

>>15256431525643 I can understand your reasoning,  and I will try to keep your points in mind as I continue to write this story

>>15257121525712 And that's all anyone can ask when offering critiques.

They seem to be a bit TOO accepting of the orders. Soarin would be blameless if AJ refused to marry him.

And Twilight is going to get the parliament to get that law repealed, or at least see if it's still in effect.

>>15259181525918 They live under a monarchistic rule, so there is no parliament, there is only Celestia and Luna, or at least, that's how I see it

And in that kind of society they don't really have an option, if the princess tells you to do something, and it's protected by a law, you have to do it

Be that as it may, Twilight is going to find a loophole in that law, somehow...

>>15265181526518 Probably

Nice chapter I definitely can't wait to read some more in te near future.

I also think you deserve a moustache

>>15265891526589 I will add that mustache to my collection

Oh and P.S.: this is your fanfic so do as you see fit to make this a good story if you think that some of the ponies will act a certain way in a certain situation then go for it. That's what makes your story good in my opinion.

That was certainly swift.

Awaiting further releases.

she could have sworn she saw her brother flying

OK, so Big Mac can fly now?

>>15279781527978 Short answer, magic, long answer, see next chapter

Another great chapter. I've never been one for Soarin x Applejack, but i approve of this.

I hope everyone likes this chapter, I've never really done a MacDash specific chapter before, so...

i LOVE IT!!! it's cute and it was done so well   

That was really good, if a bit of an odd pairing. Anyway, the Department of Redundancy Department throughly approves of this sentence with great approval

Rainbow looked up to see if Mac had left, but she found him sitting in front of her looking at her with sad eyes, a hint of sadness in them.

>>15374561537456 Thanks, and I really don't know what happened with that sentence

Yay! Can't wait for MOAR!

The world definitely needs more RainbowMac

Okay, I like this fic, but there are a few spots in this chap and about the fic in general I'd like to bring up.

I'm assuming this is a vignette style fic, in the sense that each character's story will be loosely connected to each other, but not necessarily integral to the plot of the next one. In that respect, I won't penalize for the lack of explanation as to why Celestia is doing this in the first place. (I know she heard Shining arguing, but that whole reasoning seemed a bit... weak) Anyway, lets start with the good! Most everyone was in character. Mac seemed a bit talky, but that can be forgiven, as everyone writes Mac a different way. Technical aspects of the fic were good, not many grammar errors, a few typos. for example, this utterly confusing sentence:

He was her best friend's brother after all, and how would the Wonderbolts react to her betting married so soon in like.

That sentence, along with a few misplaced words (like the word person, feet, ect...) made it a bit less immersive than it could have been, but that's generally the only thing I found wrong with it. Other than that, it's an interesting jaunt into what happened if Celestia decided to pair up her elements with a variety of stallions!

I'm looking forward to seeing who else gets paired with who!

"I don't know" Rainbow said quietly, looking at the floor as she did, "The Wonderbolts wouldn't accept me if I'm pregnant right?"

She's sure thinking pretty far ahead, isn't she? And I love how Mac didn't even react to it

Rainbow has that same issue in another fic I'm reading called "Breaking Barriers" where she is with Big Mac and is pregnant. You wouldn't happen to have borrowed that idea, have you?

Great chapter, and I can't wait for the Fluttershy one!

Oh dear, that stallion will be so fitting for Fluttershy.

Awaiting further releases.

>>15376081537608 Well, for the next three I'll be venturing into OC territory per the lady's, aka Pink Pearl's, request. This whole thing is being written because she asked me to do it, so I'm doing as she asks of me for the pairings

>>15376191537619 Funny thing is, the writer of that fic commented above you

And yeah, I took some elements of it for my own use, but I did ask permission first

Nice! Never read a MacDash fic before but I really like how you managed to do it!

Who's the Pegasus?!!

      ~Ace~

>>15377001537700 The Pegasus at the end is a character made up by my girlfriend for the story. He's a groundskeeper in the castle

>>15377041537704 ohh interesting well I can't wait to see the next chapter, especially with fluttershy's shyness

This is what I'm talking about, way deeper and thought through. I do think you should have had RD react at finding out that AJ got Soarin, especially considering that it was previously mentioned she had dropped his name as a viable romantic partner.

Story, story, story, and quick resolution. And then they ate.

Great chapter, loved seeing Summer Skyline put Angel in his place .

Another great chapter!

So it's either Pinkie or Twilight next...

yay

Wha-!? An OC who isn't anime-esque?!

Excellent!

Summer is the perfect match for Flutters. I think they are the only pair that should never object to Celestia!

Well, that's the nicest OC I've ever read about. It goes perfectly with Taylor Swift's Last Kiss.

I'm all like

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Forced Marriages?!!

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The Author is just like

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*Sigh* Hits like button.

   makes me happy

Twilight's next!

My prediction...it's the guy in the jelly from hearts and hooves day.

And Twilight will reject the order and willingly turn herself in.

Once again, the OC is good.

>>15542671554267 Then Twilight would pobably develop a strange addiction to jelly.

yay!!!!

Need to see whats going on. So everyone accepted while it seems strange they had decent people choosen. Now to see what occurs.

Why is no pony objecting?

>>15600001560000 They each have their own reasons

Also, read Pink Pearl's comment below mine for a better explanation

wait awhile...they'll reject. they're accepting it right now because celestia told them to. wait

w00t XDDDD  

Spike, put your porn away!

Ok I won't lie This is good. rushed a bit but good.

Can't stop laughing. !

>>15212771521277  You have a VERY good point.  What you said just made me think of a famous saying:"Be careful what you wish for...you just might get it."

Spike x Rarity I can understand.  They have known each other for awhile and habor feelings for one another (though Rarity only recently figured it out.)  Soarin x Applejack I don't understand.  Why did Celestia put them together?  And why Big Mac x Rainbow Dash (that is where he was headed)?

Big MacIntosh doesn't like heights.

And you put him with Rainbow Dash who lives for flying.

I do have to ask, why didn't Rainbow Dash react when Soarin's name was mentioned?

So the die as been cast.  Now we wait for the Elements to confront Celestia, then the fireworks will commence.

As always, a fun read, but, seeing as I'm a nitpick, once again, zyr's drive-by nitpicking comes 'round to point out your errors:

"I only did this in order to protected you six" Celestia said sadly, looking up slowly at the mares in front of her. Instead of looking at her angrily, they were not worried.

Protected should be protect and the last sentence confuses. Should it be that they were worried?

>>15718181571818 Fixed!

Is this a real threat or is it just a ploy as part of their plan?

These chapters are a little lean. They are like Caramel when they need to be more like Macintosh.

Add more description and try to tell a little more of the story without the use of dialogue.

This chapter adds the sense of realism the story needed, as well as, a rather ominous foreshadowing, well done.