pretty short story the pink one just wanders into a star'buck's coffee house and gets a coffee... that it, really, honestly, you don't even have to read the rest because nothing else happens.
Preparing to receive hate...
hope you all liked the story
best comment wins a
Erm. This story sucks?
Oh boy, "X verbs Y!" Definitely going to be featured!
Just kidding though. I hate these unoriginal titles but maybe the story's good. I'll pass however. Not my cup of decaffeinated orange pekoe tea :)
Prepare for my rampaging hatred.
How dare you post this?
You have terrible spelling, punctuation, and grammar, to the point where I can't understand what's going on at all and need to guess most of the time, so forgive me if I'm a bit unclear on some major plot points.
And you're clearly still learning English, you third grade dropout.
Everyone and their mother is criminally out-of-character.
Your plot is unoriginal.
Your title is boring and resembles those of several blockbuster movies.
Your prose is purple.
Your alicorn OC is red and black.
This "OC" of yours is also an obvious self-insert.
And a lunar guard.
With a badass name of death and destruction.
Not to mention your human in Equestria!
This is Cupcakes-related.
This is My Little Dashie-related.
This is Rainbow Factory-related
It moved too fast at some points.
And too slow at others.
There was almost no detail.
Except when describing your OCs.
Your clop is unsexy and boring.
And has no detail to it.
And involves your OCs.
And your human self-insert.
And Rainbow Dash.
You made everyone a lesbian.
You wrote scootabuse, you heartless bastard.
This is a train wreck. Choo choo, motherfucker!
The very existence of this story is a festering boil upon the face of the metaphorical brony that is the My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic fandom, and I suggest it be cleansed from this earth with the scorching, purifying fires of an atomic bomb, then left to soak in fallout for the next fifty thousand years as a precaution.
...do I win best post?
P.S. I enjoyed and upvoted
Pinkie Pie drinks coffee? Ever do a site search so you don't have duplicate story names like here and here?
It just helps to distinguish your fan-fiction from the rest.
Are we reading the same fan-fiction or are you copy-pasting a series of cliches? It couldn't of been SO much worse, my god, just take a gander down the TWE hallways.
Anyways, BookWyrm you definitely need to look over once more or grab yourself an editor cause this is riddled with more holes than Swiss cheese. It's not a bad fan-fiction though, oh no, no, no. It just needs some correction grammar-wise and it could be great!
How dare you accuse me of copy-pasting? I wrote all those myself, just now. He wanted a good, original post.
But I put it in a text file for later use because I'm incredibly lazy...
Edit: It was a joke, dude.
You are worthy of your name.
EDIT: Having RD in a story is a problem? What? *directs to Austraeoh*
Personally, I saw lots of issues. Like it's not Pinky, it's Pinkie. But then again, I've seen who have said something like this.
You spelt blah wrong.
Guess what? Spelt is a hardy wheat. So I will wait untill this story is over, and then I might load you up with critiscm. So get ready.
Well, i fell asleep, woke up, and now I'm off the main page... So no more views for me. I guess that just leaves the
Reading comments now...
huh... I knew taking pinkie with me to fix the problem that was that SOMEPONY SPILLED SODA IN THE SPACE TIME CONTINUUM would end up as a disaster
Congrats you win best post...
What can i say... I like dr who.
Here you go...
>>15268731526873 YES!!! a fellow Broovian!!! It's about time!!!
Bowties are cool
The cake is a lie
Who is john gault?
You can get anything you want at alices resturaunt
...sorry went off there... But yes... Dr whooves kicks flank
>>15306911530691 Words cannot describe what i'm feeling right now