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Fimbulvinter


Yea, I'm a writer and I occasionally freelance as an editor or collaborator.

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This is beyond suspension of disbelief and too OOC for Shining.

1509759 I've added an 'Alternate Universe' tag to the story. Beyond that there is nothing else I can do. The choice of characters was based on a picture, so I did not choose them myself.

Homosexual futa incest.

Niiiiiiiice.

1510972 Ah Scorpio, Now there was a man who enjoyed his work.
What particually did you not like about it?

1511084 It gets worse. the Futa is a few chapters off yet

To think, if this would have been, per example, Twilight x Dazzle x Spitfire, this wouldn't get even half the hate it does now.
Whatever, upvoted and followed.

1510976 Alright.......this now makes sense to me

1511273 Perfect example of gender bias.

even in today's supposedly enlightned society, Lesbianism is considered far more 'acceptable' than gay.
E.G. a woman can have a lesbian experience and still be considered straight, while a single gay action will forever mark you.

I may do some Mare on Mare after finishing this story for comparison, but as of the moment this message posted, the likes beat out the dislikes. someponies out there like what I'm writing.

I didn't hate the first one, but this fic...
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...just back away slowly, without hitting dislike, and walk away.

Just kidding. Or am I?

Keep the yaoi. Yuri is fine but this is really good. I enjoyed the slow romance more then the hardcore but the hardcore is wonderful too. I am following if I didn't already.,

1513572 The original idea was the Shining would be a little hesitant after waking up and that his beautiful experience with Soarin' would convince him it was right, but it turned out a bit different than in my head.

Thanks also for the follow.

Yes! Yes! Yes! Far better than the first! Still a few grammar mistakes, but hey I'm no expert. :heart::heart:

Also... Soapy water and anal sex? Don't try that, my wife said her butthole hurt for days.

Are you trying to turn me into a clopper my friend? I read your stories, not being a clopper, and finish them on the verge of clopping. Why do I keep reading? BECAUSE YOU RULE!!!!!!! Oh, and please hurry with the other chapters...whoops. I forgot that I'M the one preventing that. SORRY! :twilightblush:

1517671 Fear not my Intrepid readers. Chapter 2 is well underway. and feel free to clop. I spent much time writing these with one hand afterall.

1517829
I don't wanna clop! Well, my body does but my mind doesn't. Should I give in to my animalistic urges? I have Luna to please me yet this makes me want to clop! Am I becoming a colt-cuddler? Maybe this means I'm bi... Does it make you bi to clop to gay porn but have straight sex?

1517843 Not at all. almost every straight person will have a gay fantasy at some point in their life, its perfectly normal. I've clopped to written gay erotica but the idea of having actual gay sex does not interest me, it will never progress beyond a fantasy.

1517938
Okay, now I'll clop freely. Thank you for letting me out of this cage my faithful editor. and XD, type ur stories one-handed.

This chapter wound up a lot darker than I initially planned for, Blueblood raping Shining purely to prove a point.
This is as dark as I plan to take this story.

Rest assured at Blueblood will get his comeuppance before the story ends.

Thanks alot Fimbulvinter, now I have to go clop in the bathroom before I get shit all over my keyboard. I though I wasn't going to clop ever again but you just have to be so descriptive and so talented. Oh shit, :fluttercry: no Fluttershy! Dammit! Fluttershy caught me clopping! Now I have to go and try to do something to make her stop crying. Can't touch her, can't talk to her. Maybe hump her? She might like that. Should I? I'm married to Luna but you think she'd let me get away with this? It is Fluttershy after all...

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And I like dark. :pinkiecrazy: I think I've told you this but I'll say it again, I'm mentally unstable.

:rainbowhuh: He didn't even try to deflect or deny anything? He just outright admitted it. Seems legit. :unsuresweetie:

But whatever, clop is clop.

I have a hard time feeling sorry for Shining Armor, seeing as he seems almost eager to throw his marriage away.

1532970
Agreed. No wonder Blueblood is "talented" at finding things out: Ponies suck at keeping things secret.

1532970>>1533713
Yes it is true that ponies are not good at keeping secrets, but also Shining was farsighted enough to see that Blueblood would follow the trail back to Soarin' or Orion.

By Volunteering the info, he was able to dictate how it was revealed and retain some control over it.

I'm not much of a clopper, but this? This is art! You have talent.

1537112 Glad to hear you are enjoying it. Plenty more to come.

Everypony listen up. I need your help

I'm looking for a believable way in which to get Dazzle in on the action.

Hmmm.... Dazzle (shinings mom right?) gets ahold of the "manase" from the first story. Nice chaper bye the way!~

1549430 you are a good witer so you could think of fun things to do with that. But if you can't, have this idea. She finds the manase. She figures out what it is. And she wants more, but it tastes different, she wants to know how he got it to taste that way. Done. :p

1549455 whatever you decide to do, bring back the manase for comedic effect! It would be so funny! ...but it's not my story so you can do what you want with it.

1548874
Well, you could do something with Blueblood's blackmailing, and have it not quite work out how he intended... ;-)

Just caught up, gah! I love it so much, fabulous writing.:heart:

1548874
First of all, this story is excellent. Keep it up!

Dazzle is my favorite MILF in the series. (Mrs. Cake being a close second.)

I'd like to see Dazzle upset with her son and deciding to punish him. (This would include bondage and spanking.)
Dazzle's full punishment would come when she uses magic to give herself a huge futa cock to ream her son's butt.

Hmmm well, let's see.

Dazzle has a hunch that her hubby is seeing somepony behind her back. She goes to the guy everypony knows would know exactly who that is: Blueblood. The prince doesn't want to forward said information, so Dazzle shows him which side of the family Twilight's magic power comes from and rips it from his head. Shocked, hurt and confused, she runs off to confront either Orion or her son to verify what she's learned. She finds them together, and in a fit fueled by rage and neurosis (again, Twilight's mom), she makes them 'prove' their attraction to one another via force; or tries to show Orion she's still 'better' than any stallion ever could be. Shining Armor doesn't want to hurt his mother any more than they already have so he doesn't fight back, while Orion's simply overwhelmed by her powerful magic. Afterwards, they might manage to talk her down.

Meanwhile, Blueblood panics because he's broken his word, and goes to see his sister Cadance in order to get in her good graces before everything falls to pieces. She, however, already knows about her husband's affairs. She's appalled by her brother's blackmailing of Shining Amor; perhaps she's always suspected Blueblood was involved in some shady dealings, and that he resented her, but never realised how deep he'd sunken. She doesn't want to break off her ties with him (they are siblings. Also, the royal family has a tradition of siblings clashing like this, and making up), but before they can get to redeeming him, he needs to be put in a position where he's no threat to others, and to a lesser extent, himself. Like an "open-ended sabbatical", time actually spent in house arrest with his sister and in-laws.

That's some of the things that popped up. Hope it helps!

1551990 Some of those ideas are good. I think I can work some of that in.

1549756 That is going to be part of it

I'm mad for one reason, I clopped earlier today. I wasted a good clop on some M/F. I never got the update. Oh well, maybe I'll reread tomorrow and clop them. Oh, and about Dazzle? I have an idea.
It starts out as An orgy, Twilight, Soarin', Shiny, Orion and Cadence. Dazzle walks in on them and joins. You like? Or bad idea? :pinkiecrazy: Any clop is a good idea to me.

I am going to edit my editor's story.

Cadance looked horrified at the sight of her husband standing there, watching her along with a pegasus she thought he recognised.

"he should be "she".

Shining prised himself off of Cadance’s member

Should "prised" be "pried"?

Its function fulfilled, Cadance’s cock shrivelled and disappeared, sucking itself out of Shining’s body.

Isn't that spelled shriveled?
If I'm right, then :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowwild: Fimbulvinter! I edited you story! MWHAHAHAHAHA! I AM THE TEACHER NOW! If I'm wrong then, once again, you have done wonderful.

1557855 Some of it is right, some of it is regional dialect such as color vs. colour. You may have noticed I have always spelled Shining Armour with a u.

1558108
That's how you guys spell it. British English is what I call it. Most of those words are like that. We say favor, you say favour. We say color, you say colour. We say Armor, you say Armour. I hate English all together. LETS WRITE THIS ALL IN SPANISH! Just kidding. But I do hate English, so many different ways to speak it. Oh, if I become successful, I'm taking a plane to Australia. I'll need you address but not now. Later. I'll be visiting maxmoefoe there so I'll take you with me when I go there. lol, M/M.

WHAT THE HELL BOY? YOU JUST SAID THAT ABOUT YOUR OWN FRIEND!

So?

HE'S YOUR FRIEND! YOU DON'T MAKE GAY JOKES LIKE THAT!

Why?

BECAUSE!

Exactly. Your argument is invalid. Now begone. Sorry about that, I fight with myself alot.

And with me.

Luna! Stop embarrassing me in front of my friends!

I love when you get embarrassed. You wings open and your horn glows a little.

Stop!

That's what she said!

Damn you Pinkie. You got me before I could say it. Why are you so fast?

That's what she said!

Stop!

That's what she said!

Please stop.

That's what she said!

I give up. You win Pinkie.

Howdy. What Ah miss?

Oh, hi everypony...

Hi Fluttershy.

What's up Applejack?

Hello dear.

Why is everypony here?

I don't know. Just let them be there. Just fade into the background. Become a wallflower.

Ah, the perks of being a wallflower.

COPYRIGHT INFRINGEMENT!

*Slowly steps away and mumbles* I can't stand her when she gets like that.

I'm a perk. Correct?

Yes you are Luna, yes you are...

So that is how the mother will get involved. Something tells me Blueblood will wish Shining would beat him up when this come to ahead. I can hardly wait. As for the rest of this story, the...sex...was...HOT!!

1572210 My prediction based on all the crazy plot twists so far: the mother will be into hardcore BSDM and will rape and dominate Blueblood. And then of course there'll be a huge orgy.

1572210>>1572301 I've already written how Dazzle gets involved. it was meant to be part of this chapter, but I felt I was trying to stuff too much into one chapter. As for Blueblood. Tyek, you are not far off.

You just love orgies, don't you? You've got a damn teen hooked on clop. If I get a laptop and an update comes for a story in the middle of class....look out school books, here comes cum! These stories make me think you never have had sex. No offense, but those who don't have sex often write about others having sex. Am I right my faithful student?

main beg.

Dafuq was that? Isn't that supposed to be "main bed"? Oh, and loved the puppy dog eyes Twi gave to Shiny.

Please BBBFF. Fuck my ass.

What the hell was that? I love but I think you are fucking stupid! Why would you do this? Please hurry with next chapter man, I need some more stuff to clop to. And one more thing before I go: orgy with the coming soon. the participants in this shall be: Twilight Sparkle, Shining armor, Soarin', Orion, Dazzle, Cadence, Prince Blueblood. You have been warned. Now please clean up your keyboards and put your dicks back in your pants. Exit the theater through the nearest exit. Thank you and have a nice day.

1575504 Whats wrong with the BBBFF comment? And Don't say 'its out of character'. The Alternate Universe tag renders that argument invalid.

1575676
No. Just saying why the hell would you do that?! I love it! I need to know why you did it so I can do the same thing. Make my stories much better. That is really what made me love this chapter so much.

1575866 You compliment me by calling me stupid, this must be one of those new defenitions for the word stupid I was previously unaware of.

As for why Shining Fucked Twilight's ass, it was partially a tribute to Bronystories 'Adventures of a Teenaged Foalsitter' in which Twilight want's Shining to fuck her but he refuses. Also I wanted to include some M/F Anal, and had already written that Soarin' was spent, so Shining was the logical choice.

(Props if you can identify the reference hidden in this message. Don't Panic if you can't)

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