Didnt even read yet, liked and favourited anyway because Halo.

>>15031821503182

Please continue

This would be like the third Halo crossover I've seen. But, then again not only is Halo awesome enough to warrant that, also they all seemed to be missing something. Lets see if you did a better job.

Edit: Yeah, So far this is really damn awesome. Can't wait for more

"How could it take on all of us?", little did poor Rainbow Dash know they were already doomed

Ah, I have I a question. Why make a Halo crossover? I'm not degrading your' story in anyway, what I mean is, how did you come up with the idea of making a Halo crossover. I personally like Halo, but I have yet to read a crossover if it, and MLP. Just curious is all.

Just be glad that the Dawn's main reactors were all knocked off-line when the ship was cut in half by the gate shutting down prematurely.  All big fusion reactors going up when the wreck hits the surface would probably have rendered the continent uninhabitable!

Cortana has problems, of course.  She's going mad and she knows it (a horror that's hard to imagine).  There is a part of her that loves the Chief and that unfortunately meshes rather well with the obsessive/possessive aspect of rampancy.  Add on top of that, the Chief is a soldier first and foremost.  He can survive most things but one thing he isn't good at is the "love and tolerance" thing, which is how the Equestrians mostly do things like this.

Overall, the two of them are about to have a very, very hard time waiting for recovery, assuming that it ever comes.

IIRC, ODST drop-pods are basically a parachute descent frame/cage surrounded by ablative heat shield that's designed to burn away and fall off as the pod descends.  That said, even the landing cage would have the pod's computer, landing equipment and life support system attached and would be unimaginably alien to the ponies.  After all, they've barely entered the age of steam.

The 'electromagnetic fields' Cortana has detected are probably the perimeter of Everfree, where its 'wild' magic meets the controlled magic of wider Equestria.  It's a common fan theory that the forest is a magical fall-out zone from the war between Celestia and Nightmare Moon (specifically the strike that destroyed the Palace of the Royal Sisters).  Under this theory, most of the monsters are the result of a huge amount of residual magic mutating normal creatures' genetic codes.  Of course, the Chief's armour should protect him from the worst of this but electronics sometimes don't like large magical fields and Cortana is in a fairly delicate state anyway...

Celestia and Luna's non-explanations are somewhat suspicious.  I wonder if they know more about what's happened and what the 'meteor' is than they are letting on to their little ponies.

Interesting start.  I'll be looking out for more.

aawww man dis gonna be good  

Nice.

>>15031821503182

I like it keep up the good work

Love it

How could it take on all of us?.... Bwhahahaaa.... Rainbow you so silly... Let's see lived falling from space, faced the flood , and won. Taken on much stronger things then the ponies. (celestia/Luna included ) lastly elements of harmony wouldn't work on the chief... Else you might aswell use them on anyone who disagrees with your views.

master chief better be badass and not a annoying retard like in most crossovers

>>15033401503340

Well I was planning on writing a fic for a while since I really enjoy reading other peoples fics, and since I knew a fair bit about Halo I decided to stick with what I know.

>>15038451503845

That is exactly why I wrote this.  Too many other fics have him become some pushover.  Master Chief is no pushover.

>>15032631503263

Really?  You've only seen three?  There's, like, hundreds of the damn things.

this looks like its going to be one of the better halo crossover fics can't wait to read more and im glad your not going to make the chief a pushover because like you said he's defiantly no pushover

Usually Halo crossovers are a dime a dozen.

However, I will give this one a chance.

On to reading.

OK Chief this is a first contact situation. Don't be like the Covenant and attack the other party. Of course if the rainbow one attacks you can knock her out.

Also Cortana please try to hide your crazy.

It's good to see a Halo crossover where the Master Chief is still portrayed as a true hero.  How was he portrayed that way when he hasn't really done anything yet?  Simple.  The mark of a true hero isn't how many bad guys they kill, or how awesome their gear is, it's one simple ability that so many lack: the ability to ALWAYS escape certain death....just in time.

>>15039151503915

Finally< Someone who makes the cheif his normal, Taking rockets to the helmet, awesome supersoldier self!!!!!!

>>15036781503678

Thanks!

>>15043911504391

>>15031951503195

Will do :)

Your going to kill me with suspense.  oh my Celestia

Is halo the most crossover-ed thing in the fandom right now? And is crossover-ed a real word?

I'm keeping an eye on this. It has great potential

Hmmm sounds orgasmic. Faved. And stuff. Also, I don't think the Chief would be that openly hostile to ponies as you described in the description... But violence is nice.

>>15058731505873

Must have MOAR violence.

>>15059291505929 It always need MORE! Always.

Hmm.. you have my attention. Do continue my good sir.

You have pique my curiosity, please continue.

Oh shit.

Wooh I made the featured list!

>>15039151503915

good, i have seen a large amount of crossovers (not just halo) where the main badass charecter becomes a pushover. thx for not making chief a pushover.

and btw

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YEAH MOTHERFUCKERS!!! VIOLENCE! YOU DON'T FUCK WITH THE MASTER CHIEF!

Hooray for killing!

i was going to say that i hope Chief is awesome in this one, because too many fics turn Chief into a wimp. then i read the other comments and saw that some thanked you for not making him a pushover. sooooooo... imma go actually read it now.

[size=18][/size] shit just got real

Yes!

Master Chief don't give a fuck!

You interfere with his mission, you will be removed.

End of story.

Also, nice to see a crossover that shows the Chief is not useless without guns.

Still, perhaps lethal blows  might have been a bit much....

oh well.

well that was kinda unnessisarily violent but ok I'll take it.

Seems like a foolish course of action from the Chief's part.

>>15068351506835

He won't be fighting them like a phsychopath forever, he's just focused on getting home and doesn't want anything bothering him.  Plus, a little hint to possible future content, decaying AI's inside of your head = pretty drastic thoughts and actions.

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you still have me hooked

Hell the fuck yes finally a chief who's not a pushover

Technically John can be at his most leathel with just his bare hands, as dor the Alicorn problem, sneak up behind them and stab them like the tf2 spy!

>>15068021506802 You have to think. He is strong enough to break someones arm with one of his own, without his armor. With it, he can flip a tank... A tank. Tanks are pretty heavy.

That, Celestia, is why when the Chief tells you to get outta his way, you do it and stay as far away as possible.

>>15069201506920

Aye, I know that.

Some people who wrote Halo crossovers on here

either forget that part or ridiculously underplay it

by amping up the powers of the alicorns.

I'm no saint when it comes to grammar, but there are a couple of sentences in here that you could adjust into separate sentences and not a run-on one.

In other news, I'll enjoy this story.

>>15069341506934 Exactly.

Format is decent, and the chapter looks cleanly presented at the very least.  With that said however, I do not think you managed to capture the characterization of the Master Chief that well.  He seems overly aggressive and not really thinking things through, even when it was stated that they meant him no harm.  At the very least he would not have come off as antagonistic as was portrayed in this chapter, and would more than likely have let diplomacy play out unless they outwardly threatened him.  Also, I'm not sure how much you've read up on Spartans, but for him to alert them to his presence in such a amateurish fashion (the snap of a twig) feels more like a convenient plot device than a realistic action on his part.  I see that you are trying to use Cortana as the reason for his actions, but I don't completely buy this argument at the moment.

>>15069391506939

Yeah I spent a lot of time tweaking things to make them look better, but there's a lot of information to get across.  As the story progresses and settles in things will get smoother

>>15069551506955

Well, I can't make everyone happy

>>15067961506796 i believe the words are supposed to be in the middle

like this  shit just got real

Holy Crap. THIS is what I love about HiE: A bad start. It gets a Drama Bonus.

>>15069511506951

Those are my thoughts exactly, but too many stories have the Chief becoming a push over weakling.  He definitely isn't going to be like this for the rest of the story, but he's not going to be totally trusting either, despite what they say.  Also, Cortana is a key factor in the Chief's behavior, with rampancy and everything.  Kind of like Tex and Omega from Red vs. Blue, but he won't be crazy for the entire story, trust me.  I'll balance it out.

Great, I don't know which is a bigger threat now.  On one side you have a fully armor trained killing machine and on the other two pissed off alicorns.  Can this get any better, will they ever make peace, can the chief admit that he just f*ck up?  Find out in the next chapter.

MasterChief.... Now public enemy #1.

after reading:

OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH

thank you so much! finally someone passed the memo to the fanfic version of Chief that NOPONY gets between a Spartan-II and the mission!

How can Celestia hold him steady? His suit weighs half a ton.

>>15070361507036

Godly magic n shit son. But seriously, I don't think the show catches how powerful the two princess' who are freaking immortal should be.  

Ponies about to get butt-sore from some serious fragging.

>>15070481507048 Umm... she got her butt whooped like it was nothing in season 2. Plus, I really doubt Celestia is actually a goddess like so many bronies think so.

Well, nice to know you've stayed true to Master Cheif's personality. Than again, all we know is that he is a soldier, and I've only read one book that featured him in a couple of chapters: Ghost of Onyx. All I know is that he is not a person of vanity (Halo 2: He doesn't like cameras), honor-bound by the UNSC code, and is very tense and most likely to react with violence if things don't go his way. Heck, he would even jump to conclusions and attack straight away (Halo 3: First 'Civil' meeting with the Arbiter. Sticks a pistol up his jaw).

Edit: Oh and he doesn't talk a lot.

Edit Edit: And stubborn. Did I mention stubborn?

Ha! Love the unnecessary violence Probably shocked the hell out of the Mane 6. And please don't turn John into a softy. Please

Buahahah there are 117 likes XDDDDDDDD

I haven't read it yet, but apparently there is DEATH. I'm not the only one to finally show that a Spartan isn't going to pick dandelions with the ponies.

(INDISCRIMINATE ADVERTISEMENT OF MY OWN STORY  IS INDISCRIMINATE)  

>>15070041507004 Doesn't matter to me. I like to see other peoples view on how the characters act. As long as it seems vaguely realistic (for fantasy that is) I'm intrested. Except for the wierd/distrubing stuff, like Cupcakes.

>>15070481507048 Overall, just don't have the Princesses beat him so easily. They are not invincible.

>>15069691506969 Eh, it happens. I kinda like the story, myself. Only problem I have is that, I really don't think celestia is near 7 ft tall. Chief should be at least a foot and a half taller than her OR MORE. Yeah sure shes pretty tall, but that's only really compared to everypony else. I'd say she might be still in the 5'9, 5'11 maybe? mark or lower. sense ya know, Chief is tall as all fuck.

>>15070041507004

The problem though that I have with that theory is that it assumes that a redundancy doesn't exist that ensures an AI cannot influence the user without their knowledge.  Though AI's with this interface reside both in the mind and in the suit at the same time and has access to most of the suit's internal systems, ultimately the Spartan has the ability to override any control the AI may have of the suit itself.  This feature being in the suit also suggests there are security measures in place that would disallow what you are suggesting.

That said, I do understand where you are coming from by mentioning that many stories eventually portray the Master Chief as somewhat too docile, and I agree this is generally a failing of many Halo fics.  Yet, I think in trying to avoid that problem, you've gone a bit too far in the other direction.  Still, these are only my thoughts and opinions and you may take them for what they are.

Shit just jot real. I NEED MORE

>>15070781507078 Yeah, but they can tie him down with magic. And that's the simple shit.

>>15069511506951

Hmm, I'm gonna have to agree with you.

But the previous Halo crossover I was following that starred MC

had his character stray quite far.

People tend to forget a few things when they write about MC.

This an excerpt from a post I made on an earlier Halo crossover.

"He is a super-soldier trained from childhood.

He saw the horrors of the Covenant and the Gravemind.

He saw the power of the Forerunners.

People may say its good to give him character, but it's not.

Because his character IS the stone-cold, unflinching, and seemingly unfeeling mass alien killing soldier.

That's not to say he does not have feelings; he cares for Cortana greatly;

chances are high he would still go after her even if she didn't have all the valuable intel.

I really do not see him getting to the point of committing suicide out of depression.

Killing himself to save others, yeah, that's in his character.

Having him outwardly express his emotions is just not right in my opinion."

This might not make a lot of sense here at the moment, but let me explain.

In this story, the author had MC start breaking down emotionally to the

point that he attempted to off himself with his pistol.

Now, I don't know about you, but to me, MC does not seem like the soldier

who would fall that deep.

Also in the story, Celestia dropped the bombshell to MC that humanity did exist on the planet at one point.

And she wiped them out.

What did MC do? He took it in stride, and accepted Celestia's logic.

I think the author of that story might have got his character a wee bit wrong, is all I'm saying.

DAYUM this is exiting

I absolutely love halo so I do hope that this story is the best

well dam

There must be Flood!

SHIT HATH HIT THY FAN

>>15072121507212

Maybe there will be Flood....     ON THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON

>>15070891507089

I always thought Celestia to be around 6'5, and Chief is 7'2 in armour, 6'9 I'm pretty sure out of armour.

D.A.M.N. THAT ws awesome

Maybe there should be a chapter where they fnally reach some sort of diplomatic level. But overall, I'm loving this!

>>15070481507048

Should and IS are two very different words.  

She SHOULD be before

She IS weak

>>15072641507264

Yeah I'm not planning on Chief being a murderous psycho for the whole story, but he won't be a wimpy push over either.  I'll balance things out, but this is certainly going to have more action than the other Halo fics, I had a hard time reading those when they turned Chief into a wimp.

>>15071041507104

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>>15072281507228 Pffft, hahaha! You should do a little side chapter with the gravemind stuck on the moon with a bunch of infection forms running around.

Finally a Master Chief who isn't a gigantic puss. CONTINUE PLS

>>15072851507285  

Also THANK FUCKING GOD, I hate it when they make chef a pussy.

Fuck one fic they killed the human race and he was like meh.

Hey guys I just wanted to say that some of these ideas I got were from other fics, specifically Master4871's story The Mercy, Regret, and Truth.  You should check it out, it's what inspired me to make a fic.  Also, some of your ideas and thoughts posted in the comments may be in future chapters, so keep an eye open!  Thanks for all the great feedback, back to writing!

>>15072851507285 I mean a point where Celestia and Luna and the Mane 6 relize that he's not there to hurt him and it was all a misunderstanding

>>15071381507138 To be fair he edited the chapter and had the Chief angry to Celestia.

>>15072961507296

Hahaha, that would be strange

>>15073171507317

Indeed he did; I remember reading the author's post on that.

However, the story itself eventually went in a direction that turned me off.

That is not to say the story was bad in any sense of the word; it just wasn't for me.

>>15072471507247 It is definitely an odd concept sense I don't really think we have anything to realistically compare them too sense everything they have is probably made to fit their size. Its one of the tiny little things that poke at the back of my mind, but then again, they don't seem to be that big to begin with. Note it being called my little pony. But eh, its just what I think of her height, sense realistically at 6'5 she'd be towering over most of us like a building (its taller than people think), and sense it looks like most ponies such as twilight might come up to our waist, and twilight on her own is actually comes up to Celestia's chest, I just kinda estimated that height area from those things plus the average height of people here etc. But its just my personal thoughts on the matter. I can just ignore that minor detail and imagine it how it want. Its simply just little, itsy bitsy details like like such, that would drive me up the wall. No problem though mate, I guess.