I love it!

have some mustaches!

interesting

Twilight is best Changeling!

Very interesting story you got here. I love the 'X=Changeling' thing (writing one myself) so I'm looking forward to what you'll do with this

I'm always a sucker for the "Twilight becomes a/n x" fanfics.

Interesting idea I'll be waiting for more

....Moar? Plz?

This is amazing! Please, continue.

Fav'ed and voted even before reading. I just love those kind of fictions. I know they aren't the most original ones, but with the amount of fiction the fandom produce it's hard to be original these days.

I'm going to read later, but I'm sure it'll be good.

"Twilight becomes/is a Changeling" fic #51029375!

This fits rather well among my interests, dood.

As a side note, can someone answer a simple question for me?

When Twilight turns out to be a changling, the worst things possible seem to gravitate towards her; When Rarity turns out to be a changling, she gets sex.

Can anyone tell me what's wrong with this, and why people think it's fair, dood?

I like it, very good style and interesting enter to promising plot

Though they consistently show blind obedience and devotion to their queen, to the point of fanaticism, they’re actually quite intelligent.

My internal prediction algorithms are predicting a 70% chance of Celestia being a changeling queen.

Great start!

Well if she encounters another Changeling, we'll know that she'll be safe. No Changeling ever harms another.

Wow, you people are insane. I'm trying to reply to comments and literally every 30 seconds I get notifications.

Edit: NOT THAT I MIND IN THE SLIGHTEST, CONTINUE BOMBARDING ME WITH DELICIOUS NOTIFICATIONS

>>14989631498963

My life is now complete. I have drowned in mustaches.

>>14989671498967

I've seen that! I haven't had time to read it, sadly. But the art is badass. I'll probably wait until I'm done writing SL to read it because I don't want to accidentally rip anything off.

>>14989681498968

Isn't there one where she turns herself into a cloud or something?

>>14990711499071

Yessss

Beg meeee

>>14990911499091

OH YOU BET I WILL

>>14990991499099

I'm the original MC Parasprite, yo! Nuthin moar original than me!

Now I'll go check the 22 notifications I got while writing this comment... I don't know whether to rejoice or be horrified by the number of favorites I'm getting in such a short time.

I got a 23rd while I typed that sentence, ahahaha.

Thanks for all the appreciation.

hmmm, been done before but like I have said elsewhere, "Some ideas are like potato chips, you can't have just one"

I would normally read the whole thing before commenting but this is almost 13k words!  Perhaps you should have broken this first posting into two or three chapters?

Oh well, maybe there weren't any good points to break it off *shrugs*

In any case looks like I got me some more reading to do!

best x becomes a changeling story evaar!

this is quite interesting, I look forward to more of this.

>>14991211499121

I think it's because in addition to being a changeling, Rarity is actually a robot like her little sister. Except Rarity isn't a normal robot. She's a changeling sex robot. Twilight is just a regular, depressingly ordinary robot with a huge brain, like Marvin the Paranoid Android. Everything bad happens to her because everyone hates her. Don't deny it. You all hate her. That's why she sits in the corner and rusts when Rarity is having changeling sex. Robotwilight hate.

>>14991301499130

What does that make Luna?

>>14991411499141

Well there was that one time...

hey keep it up i love the story so keep it up

>>14991881499188

Trek rules. And besides, if I'm correct, Twilight didn't know she was a changeling and thus wouldn't follow the code. And if Chrysalis knew, I think she'd wake her Sleeper agent. Or Chrysalis could give commands to Twilight's sub conscious. "Would you kindly subdue your friends? Would you kindly open the gates? Would you kindly kill Celestia?"

>>14991481499148

You know, I thought about doing that, but it would have interrupted the flow. It's one continuous scene, so there really wasn't anywhere I could cut it without resorting to

melodramatic cliffhangers

you need OC's?

well this was long and good and a bit of a change from other chengeling fics

Personally I am glad you kept this together as a single chapter.  Longer chapters means that I've got something to read for longer rather than being left bored waiting for an update.  

I like this story.  Its interesting both in the conditions of discovery and what the possible results might be.  I can't wait to see what happens in this.  

The greatest story with ponies-are-actually-changelings was the comedy where ALL the ponies turned out to be changelings.  That was so beautiful... the way it turned the absurd concept so utterly on its head and pointed out the flaws in such a cunning fashion.  

That said, I shall be VERY harsh in my criticisms if you don't have a very good, well-formulated reason for this set-up.  

And I am a master at logical plot analysis... especially Twilight's plot... mmmmm, dat plot...

Adult fear. http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/AdultFear

That is all.

Congrats on the feature box.

Woa.

Heh, yeah.

If you need OC's, i can give you a bunch just off the top of my mind. They'll be all yours.

>>14991461499146

I bucking hated that one. The Fridge Horror in it nearly broke me.

Reminded of this for some reason. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PTss-ueSQvo&feature=relmfu

>>14991881499188 I don't hate Robot-Twilight, she is my favorite pony, dood.

Wow this just came out and it's already this popular, nice job guy!

Love the story by the way.

>>14992301499230

Would you kindly have a nervous breakdown and make everyone think you're crazy so no one believes you when you say your old foalsitter is actually the queen of the changelings?

>>14992741499274

I could come up OCs on my own, but I want to interact with my readers a little.

>>14993101499310

There are so few good ones out there! Actually that's true of cliches in general. They can be the best stories, but only if you write them right. Ex: all the Cupcakes/My Little Dashie sequeripoffs out there. It's not the idea that's bad, but the way it's written...

>>14993131499313

I fucking hate short chapters of anything arghghghh

>>14993211499321

Fear not the dark unknown of the future, my son. I wouldn't write something as complex as this without determining how it would work first.

>>14994291499429

Exactly! Would you kindly  . . . powerful phrase. Familiar phrase to Twilight?

oh. mmm... you can use my OC Storm Shadow.

>>14994401499440

Bioshock changling Twilight mashup?  Hm... would Twi need plasmids?  Oh bugger you lot have me pondering things now.  

Image: http://images.wikia.com/totalminer/images/a/a0/Duck-Sauce-Charlie-Sheen-Spinstyles-Bi-Winning-Edit.jpg

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A CHANGELING ROMANCE YES

Wow this is great I can not wait for more.

I have a possible picture for you:

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She may not look particularly distressed, but she looks less like it's a gradual thing.

Status?

Curiosity: piqued

Favorite: commencing

Thumb: waiting...

could of left twi with her mane

I was pretty sure this was going to get featured from the moment you mailed the first version to me. This is the best "X is changeling" story i've seen, and it was a pleasure to preread. This story is going places. Congrats on the feature.

I'm curious. Is this one of those things were "X was secretly a changeling the entire time and never knew it", or "X was turned into changeling at some point.". I kind've hope it's the latter, because the former usually opens up a bunch of plot-holes if it's one of the mane 6.

My OCs name is Borderline hes a grey and black unicorn with a dark red secondary ^^ if you use him great if not ill still love ya ^^

>>14997031499703

Thanks. It wouldn't have turned out half as well without your help!

>>14997531499753

You'll find out... eventually...

My OCs name is Borderline hes a grey and black unicorn with a dark red secondary ^^ if you use him great if not ill still love ya ^^

Im not sure if i already posted this and it derped or I posted this on  a now  very confused author's page who is now wondering why i sent him this... oh well what happens happens

Wow, great job! =O I really felt the panic and desperation, man! You got me right in the feels XD

>>14992391499239

Lol, Yeah, I finely read through all of it, extremely well done and very descriptive without breaking story flow.  Though there definitely are limits, for the most part even the most bland or simplistic story can be made a work of art with proper imagery, or likewise a wonderfully thought out and intricate story rendered worthless by the lack there of.  Your story has both a well constructed backbone and flesh to go with it.

Big thumbs up!

As for why it was one big chapter I can see what you mean, its the same sort of issue that leads to many of my sentences becoming run-ons whenever I write anything.

But I think I could find a few places to make a couple breaks, I mean all three chapters would need to be posted together to make sure and hook a worthwhile hunk of readers while its still on the front page but I think you could place cuts around here,:

“Mayor Mare asked me to, ah... I... Aha!” The first page of her notes after her checklist now sat on top of the stack. Now she was prepared. “Mayor Mare recently came to me and requested that I help clear up some of the rumors surrounding the changeling threat. To that end, I put together a brief presentation for all of you.

“I’m going to assume you know nothing about changelings and start right from the top. There’s a lot of misinformation flying around out there, so you’ll probably be surprised. First things first: This,” she said as her horn lit up brighter than the soft purple glow that was holding her notes aloft, “is what a changeling drone looks like in its base form.”

and over here,

I shouldn’t have put that much magic into the spell! I forgot I have limitations! I’m not a goddess! Now I’m going to die and I can’t do anything about it! Oh Celestia, please don’t let me die! I should never have done something so stupid—

A steady stream of energy swirled around the unicorn’s body and materialized into a cyclone of bright green flames revolving around and around her. The tingling grew into a raw tearing sensation that quickly spread downward over her head and neck. The closest thing Twilight could think of to compare it to was having her skin slowly peeled off. She tried to scream; to let everypony else know there was something very wrong; but her body was as paralyzed as her magic was.

Tee-hee, anyways that's where I would put it, also if you don't already have a head cannon on how/why changelings need love see what you think of my explanation in my blog, hopefully I can get around to altering it soon myself as I have decided to write the story it contains and want to eliminate what now amounts to a giant spoiler not to mention thank the ones who did reply, anyways love your story, keep up the good work.

Man. That was intense...

saw this in the new fics page, decided to skip over it, refreshes the fimfiction later, same fic is now featured, very well you have my interest

I don't usually read non-gore, non-violence, non-profound-evil-killing-a-lot-of-characters-taking-over-the-world stories...

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But you just gotta love 'em changelings... Especially when someone turns out to be one not even knowing about that before... Sort of like a sleeper agent y'know? And this, thing right 'ere seems to be this kind of story and who knows... Maybe I'll find just a little tiny bit of gore there? Small amounts of violence? One can only hope... Will read this splendidly promising story for sure!

Bloood!

You just always have to put something like this in every single comment?

Well, technically I'm YOU so YOU'RE putting it there...

Well played...

So wordy this is, not in a bad way mind you, but jeez. Takes five minutes to read one minute of time passing in the story. (though that's probably just me)

Great so far regardless, congregations of words are good for being descriptive and you are certainly good at getting everything across.

A very effective horror story without being 'shock horror'.  A touch of purple prose here and there, but doesn't that just suit her?  

Looking forwards to more.

Interesting premise, not something I've read before, do continue.

Damn this is amazing!

>>15000761500076

Purple prose for purple mares, hm?  

Image: http://cdn.memegenerator.net/instances/400x/23536987.jpg

Will be keeping an eye on this one.

>>14991411499141 it depends if Twilight is part of the hive. maybe like ants, Changelings can sense another Changeling if it is a member or not, if not, the intruder DIES!

Image: http://www.southernhoopty.com/images/DAMN_NATURE_YOU_SCARY_by_Dageon22.jpg

>>15003951500395

In which case, if Twilight isn't part of the hive, they wouldn't feel any loyalty to a traitor. But if you go by Deep Space 9 standards, the Changelings reach out to their own, namely Odo, and try to get him back. And yes I do now about the aforementioned events in the show where he kills a Changeling, loses his powers, and then gets them back. Since Twilight hasn't killed, she could still be welcomed back into the Hive. And what if there are other sleeper agents in Canterlot? Like Spitfire? Or Vinyl?

>>14990991499099

First thing first : Daaaaaeeeeyyyuuuummmm.

You deserve it all. This is amazing. I'm seriously impressed at how well you managed to pull that off. I mean... I was sitting on the edge of my chair since things began going down for Twilight. It's... wow.

I really am impressed. Suddenly my own fic look like total crap

Take all my praise, you deserve it all.

>>15004461500446 true, the ways of Changelings are not very well or fully explained.

*looks at tags* Romance, Adventure and Dark.

*looks at character tags* Twilight, Spike, Trixie and the rest of the Mane 6.

Why Romance?

im a little confused towards her appearance, she sounds like a mix between a chrysalis type changeling (smaller though) and a normal drone. her midsection thing seems like it looks more like chrysalis, as well as her horn while her mane on the other hand seems closer to that of a drone (which doesn't even resemble hair at all), and her eyes seems to be compound eyes, although the "insect" vision could also have been the result of her banged up state. and what of her ears; they had become smaller and thinner (both chrysalis and her drones have smaller and thinner ears than the normal pony, the drones more so), but i im not sure which kind they resemble the most, and those antennae-like protrusions, i don't know what to make of them, can't quite imagine them at all. lastly; her fangs, the drones fangs are pretty extreme; like "going past their jaw"-long, while chrysalis have smaller fangs which actually stay in her mouth...

is her appearance going to be cleared up or can you answer me directly? it's pretty nice to have a solid image while reading you know.

otherwise; very good first chapter!

A Twilight changeling story that's projected to be very long?

Hell YES

This was surprisingly awesome!

I thought I was jaded to all the Changeling stories.. but this. This is good!

You got me hooked already you magnificent bastard!

*clap clap* Ha, makes me look forward to when I introduce a changeling into more story.

>>14991881499188

you're right, I do totally hate Best Pony.

Oh yeah, and you can use my OC.

His name is Royal Guard. He's white with a brown mane and tail. He is a Royal Guard.

>>14991161499116 That is a good thing!

Oh look, another one. I'll add it to the pile in read later.

Hold on, Twilight is changeling (meh, doesn't say much really) Trixie and Spitfire are characters (interesting, especially with the 'mane 6 is a changeling' cliche) first chapter and is first in the featurebox (well written, imtriguing prospect, no gurantees for continuation of story and/or plot) 12k words in first chapter (SWEET much more likely to be continued, slightly higher chance of remaining within plot) Romance tag on first chapter (ok, not as likely to take over halfway through and get rid of any remaining plot [crap, that sounds bad for a changeling romance fic]) Dark (less likely to have an easy perfect ending!)

Read later when there are more chapters (I am tired of reading featured one chapter incomplete stories that the writer never continues)

Heh, looks promising! I'll keep an eye on it!

You know the artist for the cover art said to not use that vector, right?

>>14991411499141

Unless changelings fight for dominance within the hive structure. Just a possibility.

>>15008301500830

Yeah. I spoke to him personally and got permission.

>>15008421500842

Unless your Odo.

That is one of the most well written chapters I have had the pleasure of reading in quite some time.

I did find some of the Ponyvillians actions a bit extremist. Like a Unicorn would never want to break off another's horn. That would be like castrating somepony. Not something to be taken lightly. They are a prey/herd evolved species, they would most likely run to safety where there is no danger. Some might try to fight back if she was attacking, but being dazed, it's unlikely they would try anything so drastic.

As for her friends, they would, of course, want to capture and interrogate her. Letting her be attacked and possibly killed by others would mean the changeling couldn't tell them where Twi is.

Also I doubt AJ would be advising anything to turn itself in to an angry mob who is trying to cut off it's horn any more than she would a unicorn in the same position not a pegasus that they wanted to break the wings of so it couldn't escape.

Also, she has rope, right?

Now as for giving Twi motivation to run, she does not recognize her friends, she only feels their anger and negativity toward her. Never being an empath before, somepony being pissed at you can easily feel absolutely murderous. Not to mention her changeling instincts.

Basically I recommend the townsponies to either run or try to capture her, not snap off her horn.

As for Twi's speech on changeling tactics, it's a little off IMO.

A changeling replacing a pony for infiltration purposes would very carefully study it's target and would bewitch the ponies closest to it. No changeling has ever been shown in this capacity other than Chrysalis herself.

As for standard changeling love harvesting, it's unlikely they would draw suspicion by kidnapping or killing ponies.

Also, a few technical notes:

Twilight belatedly realized she had probably startleded a lot of the ponies in the crowd

Her purple curls bounced about as she did.

casting it would have the same effect as an earth pony trying to teleport or a unicorn trying to summon lightning.

>>14996311499631

No. More than likely she will look like the generic changeling.

Loved the Monty Python reference when Twilight was hesitating to cast the spell.

Also, I was listening to the soundtrack from "John Carpenter's The Thing" while reading this.

>>15005841500584 Even mine!?

Ouch! Right now I'm particularly concerned about the unicorn whose horn Twilight damaged in her panicked fight. Sure, it was self defense, but still very ouch. Will pony medicine be able to fix that?

I was under the impression that Changeling magic was always green even while transformed, hence the green glow and green eyes on the fake Cadence (Chrysalis) in the show as she tears stuff apart while sort doing a monologue in song. Twilight's magic was purple here until after the spell.

I'm in favor of channeling changeling magic possibly turning you into a changeling (excepting Alicorns of course) -- hence maybe the original changelings didn't start out that way, maybe Discord had a hand in it... I doubt Twilight could really hide being a changeling and not know about it, although there is at least one other story where I suppose that's true.

>>15010171501017

I agree their behavior is out of sorts, especially since Ponyville itself wasn't affected by the changeling scare. Unless maybe she was projecting fear to them (i.e. that 'wall of fear' wasn't them, but her)?

Idle speculations and all that. There had better not be sleeper agents, or this had better get a lot more interesting.

MOAR!

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Her messed up spell which replaced her magic is what caused the changeling transformation, at least that's how I see it. Now! all she has to do intelligently is find a massive font of love that will love her unconditionally then cast the same spell except reverse using her old unicorn magic then she'll become her old unicorn self again.

cheers

I like your approach to a common story.

>>15012211501221

oh, it's not that bad, one person won't make that much of a difference, will it? the rest of us still like your changeling story, it's just that...twilight is best changeling.

Huh. Accidental transmutation. Never good. Hopefully Twilight will have enough time to herself to get through the pity and start thinking, otherwise she's pretty much doomed.

In any case, looking forward to more.

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Excellent hook. Good luck on extending it! You have done well enough to deserve my applause, like, and fav.

>>14991211499121

It's because she's Rarity. She's the sexiest pony around. She has to literally beat the males away with a stick...

which really only applies to , but you know...

>>15005061500506

...it has a romance tag because it contains romance...

>>15010851501085

>>15010171501017

You bring up a lot of good points.

I did find some of the Ponyvillians actions a bit extremist.

Me too. They're basically in a recently-declared state of war against the changeling race, though, with the accompanying mindset. It's a bit like if you were an American in the 1940s, and you looked out your window one day and saw a uniformed Nazi with a machine gun walking around in the middle of your street... except they're all brightly colored ponies living in a kingdom ruled by a winged horse with a horn on her head.

Like a Unicorn would never want to break off another's horn.

But Twilight isn't a unicorn a[nymore...

They are a prey/herd evolved species, they would most likely run to safety where there is no danger. Some might try to fight back if she was attacking, but being dazed, it's unlikely they would try anything so drastic.

I could just say 'oh well artistic liberty' or 'they're not 100% normal ponies' or something, or that there have to be a few aggressive ones somewhere in the crowd. Pick one...?

As for her friends, they would, of course, want to capture and interrogate her. Letting her be attacked and possibly killed by others would mean the changeling couldn't tell them where Twi is.

Also I doubt AJ would be advising anything to turn itself in to an angry mob who is trying to cut off it's horn any more than she would a unicorn in the same position not a pegasus that they wanted to break the wings of so it couldn't escape.

I see what you're saying, but in response I would point out that 1) they believe this is a changeling (enemy!) that may have killed Twilight and could just as easily kill them as well, and so as long as it's alive to tell them what happened to her I doubt they'd care much for its comfort. 2) Applejack told her she should give up, not that she should submit to having her horn cut off. The other second unicorn that tried to de-horn her pretty much attacked her from behind. Applejack or someone else probably would have taken control of the situation if it hadn't continued to escalate.

Also, she has rope, right?

Yes! There was a part about her using rope that survived the first 4 rewrites or something, but I ended up taking it out. By the time Applejack gets through she's too injured to escape anyway, and rope wouldn't stop her from doing magic. But good catch.

>>15012651501265

I was under the impression that Changeling magic was always green even while transformed, hence the green glow and green eyes on the fake Cadence (Chrysalis) in the show as she tears stuff apart while sort doing a monologue in song. Twilight's magic was purple here until after the spell.

I'm in favor of channeling changeling magic possibly turning you into a changeling (excepting Alicorns of course) -- hence maybe the original changelings didn't start out that way, maybe Discord had a hand in it... I doubt Twilight could really hide being a changeling and not know about it, although there is at least one other story where I suppose that's true.

You're very perceptive

I'm the author so I can discord whomever I please in whichever way I please. So I guess Discord did have a hand in it...

But it will make a small amount of sense when it's explained. Gag!

>>15005371500537

You're also very perceptive. Most of it's just artistic liberty with the general changeling appearance, though, especially the horn. For all intents and purposes she's just a regular drone.

>>15012211501221

NEVER! Wanderer D, you write awesome stories. I meant that after you did it... there was kind of a glut of them.

Some have been good... others have been just meh. They are not bringing anything new to the table. This one... it is taking a new approach. I like it.

>>15016411501641 But between whom?

>>15016781501678

I really liked Forever a Changeling and Changelings, Changelings, Everywhere.

There was also one called Who We Are or something, but I can't find it offhand.

>>15016971501697

You'll see.

>>15017941501794

I haven't read the first two... but I have read Who We Are. I really enjoyed that one.

I will keep those two you recommended in mind...

Great beginning by the way!

This story.... is very well written, but there is one major mechanical issue I hope you will address..

How did Twilight not get blasted out of Canterlot by Cadance's and Shining Armour's spell if she was a changeling, and if she was never a changeling... well then that's a different question.

Medic excellent

>>15016781501678 Agreed. I was quite taken by Twilight's completely visceral reactions and her confusion. This story certainly plays into something most people ignore which is all the new senses that come with a new body! The more I think about it, the more I like it! Sure there are some extreme reactions as someone pointed out, but the feeding of the paranoia could justify such an act. I just hope it wasn't any of the Mane Six who would attempt to tear of her horn though. That one I wouldn't buy. The average Ponyvillean? Hell yeah. Them ponies are a paranoid lot. The series has proven it!

Pony names? How about throwing out a MGS reference, Solid Snake: royal guard. Keep goin and stay golden^^