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MisterMercenary

Joined April 2012
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When "best friends" Matt and Pat find another cardboard box that sends them into a different universe, they are suddenly thrust into Equestria and must discover a way out without getting themselves killed in the process. Will Matt be more stupid than usual? Will Pat piss off everyone in Equestria? Will their friendship survive unscathed? Will the next episode of TBFT be uploaded in time? Will this gag ever end? Probably not!

Two Best Friends Play crossover with MLP. If you haven't seen these guys before, go watch them. Watch them all. Watch them or I'll eat you.

My very first fic, so constructive criticism is greatly appreciated.

First Published
24th Oct 2012
Last Modified
29th Mar 2013

Comments ( 149 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

Alright, I'll give it a look:  I really love "Two Best Friends Play." Though I'm really busy, a thousand words or so isn't too much trouble to look at.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

Hmm, wonder how this will go. I can see them commenting on everything and seeing how pissed the ponies get haha

#3 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

You have my attention. Proceed.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 6d ago · · 2 ·

>>1499776

I do too, which makes this story even worse.

I mean, the punctuation fuck-ups are par for the course on the FimFic front page. That I get, and frankly I didn't expect anything more. No, the part that bothers me is when people write generic, shitty HiE fics and throw in the names of some moderately famous internet figures to increase their popularity. On top of that, the things that normally make Two Best Friends funny (banter between Matt and Pat) don't translate to text, so all the jokes here seem forced and, frankly, painful to read.

This is neither well written nor original nor funny. 2/10.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

MOAR!!!:flutterrage:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>1499840 Yeah, you're right. I hardly took the time to brush up on either MLP or TBFT. This story was a rushed piece of crap that I had written off some emotional itch that for some reason I needed to fulfil. Hopefully next time I'll take the time to plan and write out a decent story. If there is a next time.

#7 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 5d ago · · ·

*scroll scroll*

(sees matt and pat)

(takes hooves off the mouse)

"Hmm interesting..."

[Proceeds to read story]

#8 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 5d ago · · 1 ·

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other than that at the beginning it's pretty solid, now go get chapter 2 done or else...

#9 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 5d ago · · ·

Eh, I didn't find it to be THAT bad (for example, I disagree with the "WALL OF TEXT" comment. It's just that, usually, here on fimfiction, it's normal for there to be smaller paragraphs, nothing else). It's certainly an interesting concept. I mean, it was only a matter of time before someone made a TBFP crossover with ponies.

To stray from the bland and generic HiE idea, I suggest adding some spice to the mix! Like, giving them both a special ability (hint: Pat has something to do with not being visible and Matt has something to do with a nation). AND, since their "friendship" is based upon a love of video games and not of each other, that will certainly clash with the ponies's ideals ("I wish you nothing but a fiery, painful and slow death." "Love ya too, Pat.").

Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter (if there is a next chapter, that is)!

#10 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 5d ago · · ·

you know what would be funny :pinkiehappy:

if two best friends them selves read this fic on you tube. :rainbowlaugh: but it probably will never happen :fluttershysad:

#11 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

I love this please give me more

#12 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1505531 Thanks for the help. It's really appreciated.

#13 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

I can see this going very well.

#14 · Chapter 1 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

i was the first to do this.

you were the second,

but you were the first to do it right, and make it funny as hell and for that we thank you:yay::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#16 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

my sides are just gone from laughing the last part got me good

#17 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

Now that's more like it. I swear, the Captain America scene had me grinning ear-to-ear! :rainbowlaugh:

#18 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

Now thats the pat that I know and laugh at:ajsmug:

#19 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

My god, this is the best thing ever!

Please, for the love of all things Two Best Friends, update this fic soon! :twilightsmile:

#20 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

when he said he was saved by captain america I was thinking "aw. matt must have been helped by a guy on halloween dressed as CA when matt was being bullied by a bunch of trick-or-treaters " :twilightsmile:

But Nope. He read too many comic books and had a wild imagination :rainbowlaugh: LOVED IT

#21 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

FUCKING

GENIUS!!!

#22 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

. . .

#23 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

deh fuq

#25 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: I cant stop laughing LOL

#26 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

Aww shit America and pat ist invisible ...  HES INVISABLESSED!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#27 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

I want to laugh so hard right now, but my mouth physically can't do that.:rainbowlaugh:

#28 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

Cutie marks on the back of their hands, DAMN IT! :twilightangry2: I was going to do that :ajsleepy:

#29 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

With Mat and Pat Equestria will never be the same. :facehoof:

PLEASE KEEP IT UP.:rainbowlaugh:

#30 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

Awesome.  Just. . .awesome.

#31 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

that is an interesting concept Humans having a reaction to magic :rainbowhuh:

Brilliant :pinkiehappy:

#32 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

I can just see Matt running through ponyville yelling "Fucking America!"

#33 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

His special talent is America? Now thats something. Oh and aren't they from canada or something?

#34 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

AMERICA! FUCK YEAH!

I don't give a shit if I'm Canadian.

#35 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

MERIIIICA! FUCK YHEA COMING TO SAVE THE MOTHA FUCKIN DAY YHEA

MERICA! FUCK YHEA

SO LICK MHA BUTT AND SUCK OF MHA BALLS

MERICA!

#36 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 1d ago · · ·
#37 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 1d ago · · ·

Yes. Yes. Yes. A thousand times yes. ALL OF MY YES! TAKE 'EM!

#38 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 1d ago · · ·

"What the fuck happened?" Pat questioned.

"Quiet! There are foals here!" Twilight shot at Pat. He put up his hands defensively

#39 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

What's better than being invisible? Being invisibless, because your so fuckin invisible! :rainbowlaugh:

You should seriously put that in later

#41 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 6d ago · · ·

AWESOME CHAPTER AND I MEAN IT






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#42 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

you should make Lyra break into the house in the middle of the night and then she starts doing some weird shit to the (Matt and Pat)

#43 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 6d ago · · ·

"It's not rape if you like it." Then it's rape

#44 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 6d ago · · ·

I love dis :rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy: why dint they use thier powers in the first place?

#45 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

OH GOD THIS IS BRILLIANT!

#46 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

Invisi-Pat, awesome sauce. I'm honestly imagining this whole thing like an episode of the flash series, and it's brilliant. More.

#47 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1542001 Thanks. The "Funtime Adventures" feel was what I was aiming for.

#48 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

da hell matt!

#49 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

FUCK YAAAAAAAAAA

#50 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

You got the 2 of them messed up matt is the nice one pats the mean one :moustache:

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