Oh lord, these are some short chapters!

The description certainly doesn't help your case when you don't capitalize or spell-check.

(GREEN = Corrected)

When memories of his mother and father haunt the dreams of DJ N3ON, he goes out in search of his sister, who he hopes will have the answers to his questions. But not all is as it seems when they soon discover who they really are.

This story takes place in a world where Princess Luna has only been imprisoned on the moon for twenty years, (thus the events of Luna Eclipsed never happened) and Vinyl Scratch's only memory of a childhood is growing up in a orphanage.

Also, It's Pinkie Pie, not Pinky Pie.

canterlot should be Canterlot.

In side should be Inside.

and Sugarcube corner should be Sugarcube Corner.

It's strange how inconsistent you are with capitalization.

This is a fantastic idea, but the story is just so chock-full of errors that it's not readable.

DAFUQ

DJ-N3ON eh? He's gonna suffer for impersonating me. Unless, What he thinks that he actually is vinyl's sister?

>>15202021520202: Sorry about that!

My mom is suppose to be editing them (she is a writer) and never edited the descriptions.

Also the chapters are short so I can put them in the story quicker.

>>15204721520472: what is that suppose to mean?

>>15202051520205: are you complementing my work or making fun of it?

Expect longer and more full chapter coming up in the future!

hmm pretty good fic kinda short thou but ill keep reading :D

>>15208721520872 What have you not heard the legends? The legends of a great assassin, A greater swordsman, and best of all, The biggest badass you'll ever meet. Hello, my name is vinyl slash, And this is my sword. This is the story of a Smoking barrel and if you want to survive, you should read it

GERONIMO!!!

>>15248861524886:I hate to tell you but I know two people that are just like that, one is my best friend and the other wants to kill me. And second of all neither of their names are Vinyl Slash.

>>15249281524928 ... THAT IS ALL.

GERONIMO!!!

Constructive criticism only!!!

Or else i will have both N3ON and PON-3 AND Digital Magic kick your sorry flank out of this story.

Yes yes , I think I like this story... ALOT

Awesome

Btw for anyone wondering, there is going to be a second story after this one. I may or may not reviel more in the future but I will reveal thisFirst pic with three inside it is the one

Please let me know what you think so far.

OMG! We are like, so in snyc!

Yes bucking way!

Whaaa?

BTW if anyone has trouble loading the picture please let me know, thanks

good story.

>>15202021520202 .........dude be nicer with the corrections.

Well, finally got around to making a custom pic. sorry about it's bad quality, I made it in skitch and during a plane flight so...ya

MORE!!!!!!!!!

>>21853832185383: did i just read your comment right, you want more of this story?!?! Because you are the first pony to say that to me the next chapter (and author notes before hand (seperated)) will be dedicated to you. better get ready for wubs and neyhem.

>>21940322194032 thanks!!

It has come to my attention that I have not fulfilled my promise to you all. So as of now, I will be finally publishing the next chapter while I am in calif. (whoops, let that slip didn't I?)(*cough* Anthrocon *cough*). Please give me some ideas in regards to my story, thanks!