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  • E Twice as Bright

    Celestia likes her routine. Tax reforms, grants, laws and construction projects are all a princess needs to be content. It's just her luck that for Pinkie Pie, "content" is not nearly enough.
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  • E Ode to Friendship

    Octavia feels trapped in the stage that is her world. Will a certain pink pony be able to help her?
    13,885 words · 2,431 views  ·  215  ·  1
  • T Within and Without

    Luna takes the Elements of Harmony on a journey in more ways than one.
    154,174 words · 9,606 views  ·  1,083  ·  19
  • E Building Bridges

    Action-and-confusion-filled fast-paced shipping, yay!
    16,016 words · 26,791 views  ·  1,663  ·  36
  • E Lost and Found

    AJ and FS are lost, trying to get home. Meanwhile Dash struggles to understand what FS means to her.
    168,377 words · 7,490 views  ·  759  ·  14
  • T Taken for Granite

    Ask Applejack, and she'll tell you Pinkie Pie can be a few apples short of a bushel. They've always been good friends, but what could they possibly have in common? Turns out there is an answer to that question.
    61,172 words · 5,377 views  ·  672  ·  12
  • E Where Earth Meets Sky

    Rainbow Dash suspects Applejack is stealing her oldest friend from her. Is it really that simple?
    40,301 words · 10,972 views  ·  763  ·  16
  • E Where Your Heart Is

    Rainbow Dash begins to question where she truly belongs.
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Blog Posts31

  • 63w, 6d

    First, I want to thank everyone who's contributed to, or read, Taken for Granite. The comments and the mails have been far in excess of what I expected from an ApplePie ship-fic not featured on EqD.

    I still wonder if I did the right thing in detailing in the authors' notes how hard writing that particular story was for me. Usually, I strive to minimize my own personality because I feel the stories are more important than the individuals who write them. That's the theory, at least, but I think I'm doing a worse job of it with each fic I write. Either way, talking about the process that led to a story is relevant and perhaps interesting to some individuals. Complaining about it being "hard" isn't. At best, it's begging for sympathy. At worst, it changes how people see the story, and that notion fills me with dread.

    Regardless, the story has been well enough received, and now that it's all over, I can say I'm glad to have written it. We're moving on.

    Those who read these blog posts will know I've had quite a few different stories and ideas I've been toying with. I'm really liking the idea of writing another grand adventure along the lines of Lost and Found and Within and Without. I have a temporarily shelved RariLuna political intrigue/adventure/peril/shipping fic, I have a FlutterDash longer-than-long romance that may become adventure-romance, and I have a number of other less-interesting stories that I want to get around to. Which is it then?

    None of the above. I'm going on hiatus for an undetermined period of time.

    A while back, I promised myself I would never give people estimates, and that I would never set deadlines for myself. They are sure-fire ways to kill my joy for writing, and this promise helped me recapture much of my love for putting pen to paper—or hoof to keyboard, as it were.

    I broke another barrier when I managed to let dead fics lie and kill my need to stick with a story until it was done. Being able to not pick back up the FlutterDashFire story I had, being able to shelve RariLuna for this recent ApplePie, those were all victories.

    It's not enough, though.

    My relationship with writing has been problematic for a very long time, and it's not getting better. Some people use ponyfic as therapy, as a means to cope, and as relaxation. AbsoluteAnonymous was very vocal about exactly this. Unless I misunderstood or misremember this, writing was a temporary hobby to her, a process of healing that led to her coming out on top. Me, I think I've written myself sick.

    Until I can figure this out, I'll be out. I'm sorry for not responding to comments in the foreseeable future, and I'm just as sorry that if I return, my OCD attitude to comments will result in a batch of week, month or year-old comments being replied to.

    Naturally, my promise not to set deadlines or give promises might work both ways. I may be writing again next week. I may be writing tomorrow and start posting chapters of some long adventure-fic, but I find it unlikely.

    I'm not saying goodbye forever, but right now, I need the peace that comes with a break.

    36 comments · 1,569 views
  • 67w, 4d
    Incoming Story: Taken for Granite

    27 comments · 552 views
  • 70w, 4d
    The Long Summer

    First, I apologize for the long silence. I don't expect people will really have noticed, because that implies people sit on edge waiting for something to happen, for me to do something. Instead, I am the one who gets stressed by inactivity. It goes without saying and without putting it into system that two months' hiatus is worth a lot of stress by that token.

    I'm also sorry for neglecting comments and notes. I'm working on that, and will try to catch up. I've done a terrible job at reading all the things I've said I would, too, for which I am also supremely sorry, but I don't know what more to add to that. I've no real excuse, and will get right back on it as soon as I can.

    On my front of things, I've aborted work on one story, started work on another, and actually sort of almost completed it. It is currently mid-edit and pending cover art, and there is a chance it will be published in a week or two, or a month--thereabouts. Failing that, if I can't beat it into shape, I'll scrap it and start something else.

    I hope you all have had, and continue to have a very pleasant summer. If you're interested in listening to the Muffin Loving Productions guys host me as a guest on a podcast, you can do so here! It was fun, and proves that listening to your own voice later will never be cool.

    Also, I had a birthday somewhere along the line, which led to multiple awesome artpieces being made. Snowtrail and Kits for best pony.

    Back to edits and work.


    13 comments · 390 views
  • 84w, 4d
    Next Story, Ideas and Between Fic, W&W/O eBook

    That's one more wrapped up! Thank you, everypony who took time to read Twice as Bright. It's been an absolute blast to write, but I definitively need to re-think and re-consolidate my writing/publishing strategy.

    By which I mean "Cloudy is a dummy who should've never broken his self-made promise not to publish during the writing process after Lost and Found nearly permanently killed his desire to write." The whole re-thinking line is a lot catchier, so we're rolling with that.

    Anyway! Point is, Twice as Bright is done! I am celebrating by staring at excellent, relevant artwork--holy butts that is beautiful and I almost embedded it but I don't know if that's a breach of etiquette--and by planning more stories.

    Breaks are for, um. Well. People who take breaks. I mean, I've had a two day break, I suppose, but you're not here to read about me drinking sugar, eating sugar, and eating things not made of sugar but still covered in or frosted with sugar. You're probably here for:

    More Ponies

    Whenever I finish a story, I like to cleanse my palate. That's a fancy word for scraping your tongue clean. When I first started writing ponyfic, I watched the entire show at least once between each fic. I find this very useful to re-center myself on canon. It probably sounds pretentious or ritualistic, but it's as simple as me valuing starting from scratch very highly.

    Lately, I haven't done this. In part because there are a lot more episodes, and not-writing hurts. In part because, without going into detail, there are elements of season 3 that I did not enjoy as much as I had hoped. Still, this time, I'm going to begin by re-watching the show. The last thing I want is to get mired in my own headcanon.

    It's been surprisingly long since last I watched season 1, and I absolutely cannot wait.

    Second? I plan to read. I plan to read fanfiction I promised I'd read, because I genuinely want to read more fanfic. I plan to read more fanfiction to make a dent in my Read Later list. I plan to read at least one non-pony thing--probably Daetrin's non-pony book, The Demon of Cliffside. I've been wanting to get at that thing for ages now. Before, during and after all this, I'm going to discuss all the ideas I have with my friends.

    And then?

    We write

    If I sound very, um, pompous here, it's probably for a reason. I'm the kind of pony who, in writing, makes faces. If I'm writing Pinkie making a grimace, I'm making the very same grimace. If Rarity looks arch and scoffs at something, I'm staring at my computer screen like its very presence offends me--you get the idea. That I'm writing a long piece on this is because it reflects what I want to write. I'm leaning towards something longer. Something grandiose.

    That's not to say I'm decided yet, and I've said time and again I hate making promises even to myself. I'm just thinking out loud, and all I know is this:

    *The next fic will feature two or more ponies.

    *At least one of these two or more ponies will think that one of the other two ponies is really, really cute/swell/nice.

    What I suspect is this:

    *It probably won't have the majority of its action in Ponyville or Canterlot.

    *It will probably involve perceived or very real peril.

    In short, I'm thinking another adventure along the lines of Within and Without or Lost and Found. When I say "along the lines of," I really only mean "long adventure," and even that's not set in stone, but I will say I'm looking towards W&W/O with fond memories.

    Add to list of things to do before writing: Re-read own adventure fics.

    I have no details, and I have tons of other ideas that may make it into fic. A lot of authors seem to do these compilation posts of ideas for fics and such, and I don't know how interesting it is to most, but if I can mention in no particular order:

    RariLuna slightly-dark/adventure/political/mystery.

    Those who read my earlier blogs will remember this one. It is one of three ideas I had in my mind a while back. Also, when I say "slightly dark," you have to keep in mind how incredibly resistant I am to darkfic and such. What I call "dark" when I write probably doesn't match others' definitions.

    FlutterDash long ship.

    Lost and Found really made me want to explore FlutterDash on a deeper level. This is it. The problem is that I'm not sure I can write another non-adventure ship just yet. It'd be fairly intricate and emotional, but I've done a lot of those lately.

    Other ships/stories I want to do:

    TwiJack - I have an angle that could work. It's Ponyville-centric, so the problem is the same as with FlutterDash, but I really want to do this.

    RariLight - I have some very specific unicorn-centric ideas that could be good. May even be a friendship fic. (Cloudy writing non-ship? Ha!)

    FlutterDash - I have no less than three other ideas for this ship of varying length, though the goal is to use as much as possible for the fic above.

    PinkieShy - Of all the "pure" ships I want to write, this one is very high on the list. Again, same issue as above with it being a pure ship, but if I could make it part of an adventure, I'd be very happy.

    AppleDash - Problematic in that the ship's been done to death. That in and by itself isn't the issue, but that I don't know if I'm stepping on others' hooves is. I have two possible angles, one being rather different from the usual ship formula.

    ApplePie/RariPie - I have semi-similar ideas for these, but I've written so much heavy emotion Pinkie Pie that this will probably go on the back-burner. Also, it's actually the closest to sad that I'll ever want to go. I could write an ApplePie that I'm sure would be a decent read, yet I'd have no desire to read it myself. That is an odd position to be in.

    RariDash - Painful sweetness here, but it needs a framework I haven't worked with yet. One that is neither adventure nor simple long-ship. This will be a challenge, and I'm not convinced yet.

    That's basically what's in my head at the moment. The two ideas I had in the last ficwriting deadspace are still very strong, those being RariLuna and FlutterDash. The PinkieShy idea has basically taken the spot of CellyPie now that that's done. Still, I am almost positive that in reading, watching and talking in the coming weeks, I'll have far more ideas to choose from, and hopefully I'll land on one that convinces me fully from the get-go.

    If you've read this far, well, damn. I thought about cramming some images in here, but I have no idea what those would be. Sprucing it up with images just to make more people read it is silly anyway. I figure people will read if they're interested, and if they are--if you are--I'm flattered.

    In Other News

    There's a reason for that Within and Without tag other than "hey I may write something similar." If you've problems with the downloadable formats available through FiMFiction, there's an awesome guy by name of JeffersonPeters who took it upon himself to provide a superior alternative. Here is a downloadable ePub variant of W&W/O for all your reading pleasure! I don't have a fancy reading thingermabob, but I'm told it's quite good.

    It's worth noting that he used alternative cover art in the .epub file, and the artist hasn't yet responded to the request for permission to use it, but there should be a link with attribution and everything in there. The real problem, though, is that the artist's dA has been taken down since, and redirects. Still working on that.

    That's it! Thank you for your time. If you hate me for abusing your eyes for italics, well, at least I didn't use comic sans. I'm gonna get around to replying to comments on TaB as soon as I can, but know that I've read them all, and that I'm floored (and thankful!) for all the comments!

    53 comments · 762 views
  • 87w, 3d
    March Apologies, Twice as Bright

    I am just leaving a quick note here to say that I'm sorry for not responding to PM's, comments or mails for the moment. I've tried to keep on top of things, but it's just not working out. If you're just tuning in, or if you've recently left a comment or sent me a PM, I am very happy to make your acquaintance, please don't doubt that -- I can only apologize for the delayed response.

    I'm having a bad time of it, and I need to readjust. There's no drama, and everything that's failing is related to my lacking ability to deal with things that are beyond my control.

    Fic updates will go along as planned because quite frankly, I don't know how to stop. Twice as Bright will likely continue at one chapter per week unless something changes.

    52 comments · 537 views
  • ...

It's one thing to wake up on the wrong side of the bed. It's something quite different to worry that it doesn't have a right side anymore. Stuck in an artistic rut, Rarity has to rely on an unlikely friend to understand who she is, and in doing so, discovers that what we want may not always be obvious, even to oneself.

There may or may not be an excess of hats involved, and fabulosity is guaranteed.

First Published
29th Oct 2012
Last Modified
31st Oct 2012
#1 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Commence Read.

#2 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Nah, 10 bits says it's a Twi-Spike:trollestia:

#3 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I approve

#4 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Man, I wish I had someone doing cover art for me :|

Also, Raripie. Not enough of that in this fandom, certainly.

#5 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


I could do some. As long as you're not expecting reacord breacing art and they have up to 4 ponies only.

#6 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Sweet, I've really been looking forward to this. I'll read it first chance I get tomorrow.

#7 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

That notification noise always scares me when I have headphones in.

When it's for a story by Cloudy? Totally worth it

  I'll edit this after I read.

Edit: What I really love about your style of writing, Cloudy, is that you never fail to make the characters come across as believable. To me, that is one of the biggest achievements any author of fiction can accomplish.

In particular, Pinkie's defense to how difficult it is to plan and brainstorm in her line of work really hit home. Nothing gets under my skin more than when authors fall back on the already-overdone shtick that Pinkie's a fourth wall breaker and lunatic on a constant sugar rush; it seems so forced and a terrible waste of a character's potential.

You, on the other hand, manage to emphasize that underlying focus and pride that she takes in baking and party-planning. It was a fairly unkind thing of Rarity to claim, even if she didn't mean it; how would she feel if somebody else came by and casually mentioned how simple it was to look beautiful all the time?

Rarity's losing her creative muse? Scandalous! A bit of an overdone topic in that regard but that is probably my only complaint about the chapter. Rarity more than makes up for it by embarrassing herself with a fruit bowl fez! The fact of the matter is that it can be very hard to acknowledge that someone else had a great idea in a field that you consider yourself to be an expert and even more difficult when that idea turns out to work. Her willingness to at least take Pinkie's suggestion to heart puts a bold face on that humility and willingness to adapt.

A fantastic start to what I'm sure is going to be a fantastic RariPie fic. Keep up the good work and take care!

#8 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


You do art though :|

Not that i'd say no to someone doing my art for me. Art takes forever :V

#9 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

omg Cloudy wrote PinkiexRarity.


EDIT: And... it's not a oneshot?


#10 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I like this. I like this alot. It's so rare to see Rarity and Pinkie Pie in fics together, but this works so awesomely.

#11 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh hello there new Cloudy Skies story.

#12 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·



*begins praying*


F***it. I'm reading this.

#13 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·



#14 · 108w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Cloudy fic. Commence favorite, like, and read. Huzzah!

#15 · 108w, 13h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Aw man.. and I'd just worked through my backlog enough to start reading Lost and Found.  My mouth is already locked in a rictus of AWESOMEFACE from reading that...

She canna taek mewch mewre, Cap'n!  :rainbowderp:

#17 · 108w, 12h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Liking it so far. Will this story have a schedule like your last one?

#18 · 108w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I don’t know where those go, but they don’t go to your flanks, I’ll tell you that!


It's been too long since you wrote a story that featured Pinkie. Actually, it's only been a couple months. But still, you write her so well, you should be writing her all the time.

#19 · 108w, 9h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

and wow, I don’t know where those go, but they don’t go to your flanks, I’ll tell you that!

Oh Pinkie, you're a marvel.

#20 · 108w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


He really does. I love his Pinkie Pie so much.

Clearly, Rarity is meant for Pinkie. Neither one can resist fudge.

#21 · 108w, 4h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Mmm. Fudge. This is clearly a fudgetastic fic. Continue! :pinkiehappy::raritystarry:

#22 · 108w, 3h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>1524436 Kits is a gem like that. I can't thank him enough, but I will try.

>>1524479 No sir! It's not terribly long, but it's got s'more chapters!

>>1524522 Thank you - they're definitively among the rarest in the bunch!

>>1524760 Hopefully in reverse order, hah. No, honestly, I appreciate the faith, and hope it's to your tastes!

>>1525234 Valve is wise.

Oh, you mean that was a critique of Valve's hat-obsession? Silly!

>>1525540 I'm not sure about a set schedule, likely one chapter per two days or so? I kind of want to see what EqD says before I release the first chapter since it's a bit awkward to send an update before it's accepted. Then again, I may cave in and just do 1 chapter a day and burst this out. It's all finished anyway.

>>1525859 >>1526553 It's been far too long since I've had the pleasure of writing Pinkie, so!

>>1526819 >>1527276 But then she gets a pudge, and then she can't budge!

>>1524527 >>1524601 Oh goodness. No pressure, right? Will be over here trying to control breathing.

#23 · 108w, 3h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


I'm sure there's a few readers willing to help with mouth to mouth if necessary~

#24 · 108w, 2h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>1524459 I'm really glad to hear this! I mean, if the characterization worked for you, that's pretty much the biggest point of praise imaginable considering that I find it both the hardest and most rewarding aspect of this all. I share your thoughts on Pinkie here: She does break the fourth wall and generally acts a menace in the show, but it's not all she is. There's a real pony underneath. I think Swarm of the Century is the best example of both these aspects of her; she acts "silly" and out of touch, but there's a method to it, and there're very real feelings there too.

The setup of the fic probably isn't a huge upset, but I hope (and perhaps even have to believe) that the fic has enough unique traits going forwards. Here's hoping!

>Her willingness to at least take Pinkie's suggestion to heart puts a bold face on that humility and willingness to adapt.

And this; I'm sure I could've played up the opposite approach here and made it a point of drama, but it really isn't the focus of the fic, and since this is very much a post-S2 fic (what else?) I like poking at friendships that are advanced by now. They know how to work together even if they don't see 100% eye to eye all the time.

Thank you for your thoughts so far!

#25 · 108w, 2h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Pinkie? Trapped? Unable to escape?

The possibilities...

Dash could tickle her. Oh my.

I need a minute. Is it getting warm in here?

#26 · 108w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


no that is not a critique of valve; I am comparing their wiseness to you for having hats in your story

#27 · 108w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Aaaand your avatar perfectly frames this post's frame of mind :rainbowlaugh:

#28 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


And your avatar is butts!

#29 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Yes, I need a new one! :raritycry:

#30 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Rarity and Pinkie eh.......You have caught my interest as well come on it like mixing strawberries with green grapes you don't think they would go together too well but actually they are not that bad at all when mixed.

Keep up the work as I want to read more......that and I love Pinkie with a passion, she makes me so happy at times ^^

#31 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

First fanfic i have read in quite some time, Honestly this wait for season 3 took it's toll on my interest in such fan thing's. I got to say though this was really cute and a lot of fun looking forward to more :pinkiehappy::heart:

#32 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


You're very welcome! And don't worry about the setup; to be honest I needed at least something to critique lightly because I saw no grammar/spelling errors at all! Nice job on that :twilightsmile:

#33 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

RariPie? You madman, you'll kill us all!

#34 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

interesting hope there will be more romance in the other chapter's :pinkiehappy: :raritywink:

#35 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

You had me at

"I don’t use wax, and I don’t even own a weather-vane.”

#36 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

aww yiss

#37 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oof. That last part was a doozy. Everything said was a symbol, a medaphore, of something else, and all the while the scene played out. Masterful work Cloudy. Love it! :D

#38 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Hmm, that was interesting.

#39 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Before I go to the next chapter, I'm just gonna say I'm surprised that people keep calling Raripie rarewhen I've stumbled across at least three of them over the last few weeks.

#40 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Aww, that bit at the end really warmed my heart :twilightsmile:

#41 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Do I see Rarity falling in love? It just feels that way to me

#42 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

The song says "It's a long way to the top," but what about when the jurny is over and there is nothing left of the road? What do you do then?

You find a good friend and tell them about just how long the way was.

And maybe, just maybe, a new road will open itself up to you. One full of great times with somepony you love.

#43 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This story gives me the Warms in my soul :D Can't wait for the next chapter, the story just feels so... graceful. Raripie FTW!

#44 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


This is an interesting story, truely. I look forward to seeing what comes of this.

...this is still incomplete, right? It feels like it could be complete, but it also feels like there's much more to be told.

#45 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I am loving this! :rainbowkiss:

#47 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

....this is adorable.

#48 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Very interesting. There's such an odd dynamic between the two, though it's more like it's odd that Rarity had lost her touch. But I really like the premise of it, and the friendly, doting touches that Rarity has with her friends. That last one might have been more friendly than I think though :rainbowkiss:

#49 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is very nice :heart: i hope there is more to come :raritystarry:

#50 · 107w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I really should learn not to check this site before bed.  I'll do that later though for now reading.

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