• Member Since 21st Oct, 2012
  • offline last seen Dec 22nd, 2014

MrPockets


Hey there. I'm a brony and I'm trying out this whole "fanfiction" thing. Hope you like reading my stuff as much as I like writing it.

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Hey there, my name is Jon. I know, boring name, huh? But it reflects my boring life. I decided to spice things up one day by learning how to dream, ultimately hoping for lucidity. I got something way better though, when I woke up in a bright green field and realized I was a pony. Now my life is far from boring, as I attempt to find my place in this awesome duality.

EDIT: I have gone over this story and fixed all the rookie mistakes I made when I wrote it last year. Give it another read if you liked the story! There's more good stuff in there now, and feel free to point out everything I missed in the comments.

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 95 )

ha. pretty cool to see a well written story that doesn't have the protagonist as a loser with no friends and a dead end job

Ok, I'm following this, *holds up a bunny rabbit* "MOER or da bunneh 'gits it" :flutterrage: Good Start :twilightsmile:

Great story bro thats exactly how i would react :D

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Heh, you know what they say; write what you know.

Also, thanks for the comments! This is the first full story I'm attempting to write, so I really appreciate the feedback.
Second chapter should be coming along soon. :pinkiehappy:

project second life is a go:pinkiehappy:
make more please

Keep it up brother your story has me waiting on the edge of my seat! xD *cough* I mean... Your tale is very promising, please go on.

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(Joke) Alt. Title: Jon: The Least Interesting Fanfiction In Equestria
And why is there a monochrome DragonBall in the cover art?

Aaaaw I so wanted first on this chapter, I've been waiting forever for it. :(

I had know Berry for how many days? Three? She had been drunk or hungover on every one of them. And here I was drinking with her. Enabling.

That was worrying.

We finished the bottle. I fell asleep after 9pm and was late for work for the first time in 5 months.

Heh that killed me. "It's terrible what am I doing! Whelp to late bottles gone now." :pinkiehappy:

Thank christ pockets, was going nuts here. :pinkiecrazy:

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Haha, I hope it was worth the wait and/or temporary insanity.

night cap is a fool. he could never hope to defeat the gak overlords!

>Can be woken up from either dimensions if alive in them.
>Trapped in Equestria with no way to wake up since he is dead on Earth.

I really like this conflict, it really goes deep.The protagonist is truly trapped with no way of escaping. Yet, you can clearly see that the author is even digging deeper. I like where this is going.

Ok it's early to comment on this. But Holy Shit. This better not be THE END OMFFGWTFASFHGRRRZZARGLEeeeee...

:pinkiecrazy::rainbowlaugh:

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Not quite yet, still a fw more chapters to come. And possibly an offshoot, but that has yet to be decided. :ajsmug:

All aboard the Unwelcome Thought Train, Bitches!

Very good ciffhanger you gave us here. Make me want to say, "I can't wait for the next chapter.", which I can't. :twilightsmile:

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I'm very glad you people are actually reading and enjoying this story! It's by far the longest thing I've ever written and it's a blast to write.
:twilightsheepish:

Heheee this gets better and better!

Nice changes Bren, I like it. xD Get any more faves?Sorry if my asking is a taboo, like asking a woman her age or something. :twilightsheepish:

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Thanks bud, your help was much appreciated (I need to add an author's note on Chapt 8) and yes, I got 2 new favs so far :twilightblush:

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*borat voice*

Great success! Abhorsen has 8-ish at the moment. :3

You just gave me an idea. A machine to control/influence dreams. :pinkiehappy:

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Cool! Just don't make me dream about zombie clowns eating my face. That is my GREATEST fear.

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Holy Christ-kabob, it's been so long since I've actually seen one I forgot how creepy they are.
As far as Furby pics go, however, I'd have to go with this one:
i.imgur.com/kzkNWSy.jpg

Needed more moreness. But good enough!

So ever sleep in a tub before? Or will this be a first. xD

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Ha! I have more than a week and very little left to write. :ajsmug:

I just noticed you named chapter nine the Triumvirate of Stupid, lol....

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The Epic finale everypony!... :rainbowhuh:

Whooo....! :rainbowlaugh:

You deserve one mustache. :moustache:
Okay, two! :moustache::moustache:
Possible sequel?

You just failed the test. That was overseer 0-1's boss and you botched it hook line and stinker.

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And the confusing comment award goes to this guy!

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I was talking about Night Cap -- and the other dimensional travelers. They were told to keep everything hushed and prevented from traveling. Seven years later, Pina comes along with that story? Definitely a test, and they failed.

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Have you ever heard the old adage : "fuck tha police"?
:rainbowdetermined2:

If and when the gooey Gak ponies come back for me, I will be as far as possible from anyone else they can harm.

:rainbowlaugh:

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Watch your back, it's a Gak Attack!

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Oh, yeah. Just finished this thing, anyway. Great story, by the way! Have a favourite, and you can thank MerlosTheMad for publicly recommending this.

…I always loved good endings, even if they sometimes make professional critics jump out of their 6th floor windows. Ah well. It made me smile, that's for sure.

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Ha thanks for he fav, I'm glad you liked the story (especially the ending lol, it was very fun to write)

Sorry, but there seems to be a bit of a problem here; if i favourite your story, the site constantly says that I have two unread chapters, both from Duality. As you can imagine, nobody really wants that. I'll contact knighty or someone and report it when I can, but if it's never taken into consideration, just imagine you have one more favourite than it says. :twilightsmile:

In the meantime, I'll add this to my Read it Later list so I don't forget of its existence.

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Huh, weird, I wonder if others have this problem?
Oh well, thanks for the heads up!

*tut* Sorry. Still not working.

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