YES !!!! fINALLY A BEAST WARS CROSS OVER I FAV. YOU SO HARD!!!

Beginning Read now, Opinion pending...

Reading Concluded. Opinion processing...

Opinion formed. Dispensing.

Opinion: Satisfactory, with hope for continued quality. Characters seem to be handled correctly, pacing is done well for a starting chapter.

Concerns: I fear what will happen should you fall victim to the trap many others do, and leap right into action, or force one action after another, which has ruined crossovers that started otherwise fine before.

A beast wars and mlp Crossover???

EPIC WIN!!!! awesome work!!

There's a lot of minor spelling errors and capitalization errors in this story.  Also, there's a few places where you have two-section names as two words (Black Arachnia, trans warp) in one area, but as one word (Blackarachnia, transwarp) in another.  It's enough that it's...  really jarring.

But I'm going to watch it for a while anyways because Beast Wars is great and a crossover would make me happy.  Plus I want to see Waspinator meet Pinkie Pie, somehow.  

>>14850751485075 Thank you for your concern, don't worry I'm going to ease the Maximals into the world before the action really starts. I'm also going to balance the daily life with the fighting, that's the intention anyway.

P.S. Why are you writing like that? Are you Soundwave?

>>14855501485550 Thank you for catching those errors, can you tell me where they are so I can fix them?

This is the second MLP/BW crossover I have seen. The first one is called Predator's Moon and I recommend that everypony reads it cuz it is AWESOME. This one looks like it is shaping up to be a masterpiece as well. I was wondering are any of the Maximals and ponies gonna be paired?

>>14855501485550 I'd like to point out that at the moment, Waspinator's still back on Earth, lording it over the proto-humans.

Oh man, this looks to be a great start to a great fic.

I haven't even read it yet and I know this is going to be awesome.

Edit: I was right Was anyone else reading the maximals' lines in their voices? Can't wait to see what ol' dragonbutt has up his cybernetic sleeve this time.

minor quibble with the writing in relation to the transformers part of the fanfic. if its set during beast wars and from the look of things at least season three prior to the events of beast machines and you refer to the two factions as Autobots and Decepticons instead of Maximals and Predacons.  I'm guessing this is an early draft so its not that big of an issue its more of a continuity issue in relation to beast wars compared to G1 transformers.

The Autobots and Decepticons upgraded as a side effect of "The Great Upgrade." to Maximals and Predacons which were more resource efficient forms

I have only one thing to say:

Oh, and take these:

another Beast Wars crossover added to the ranks for transformers crossovers. Lovely job so far. I would who's going to be paired up with who?

I know two pairings: Rattrap & Applejack, and Cheetor and Rainbow Dash!

>>14848601484860 Not to toot my own horn, but there's also this here. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/42547/Predator%27s-Moon

>>14856751485675 When you say paired, do you mean each one lives with one of the mane six, or do you mean romantically?

>>14865281486528 Five mustaches? I am honored.

>>14882281488228 What do you mean by pairings exactly?

>>14899851489985 I have read the first four chapters, and I have to say it is great.

>>14918081491808 Both actually.

>>14864661486466 This takes place maybe several hours after the end of the final episode, so that's when it is.

I don't remember ever mentioning Autobots aside from that the Omega Delta was an Autobot shuttle. If I accidentally got the factions messed up tell me where so I can fix it.

>>14918121491812 You'll find out later.

i think i may have glossed over it too quickly and not noticed that you switched as the story went on

>>14918081491808

By pairings, I mean team-ups, like buddies/friendship pairings. like how in the Transformers Prime crossover "Friendship is Prime," Twilight Sparkle was paired with Jack, Raf, and Miko; Applejack with Bulkhead; Rarity with Bumblebee; Pinkie Pie with Ratchet; Rainbow Dash with Arcee; and Fluttershy with Optimus Prime.

That kind of pairing.

>>14919991491999 I'll have to read that one. Well that does sort of happen, but I'll keep that to myself until later chapters.

>>14918081491808 Wow, thank you!

>>14947691494769 Any chance of a chapter five anytime soon?

>>14954101495410 As soon as I can cure my writer's block I'd love to jump back into it.

Embedded in the ruble

1. Rubble.

Interesting. Time to recap on the entire Beast Wars episodes

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I have a feeling there are going to be people who are opposed to my ponifing the maximals. I don't blame you, but this is just how I want the story to go. The reason I did that was to create an obstacle that the maximals had to deal with, and it will help create some interesting character moments, plus it relates to the mythology to be introduced later. I'm sorry if you hate me for taking this direction, but it's my story about things other people made and I'll do what I want.

If you do want to read a non ponified Beast Wars crossover I would suggest reading Predator's Moon written by Atomic Chinchilla. It's a very good story, though only four chapters so far. Maybe if he/she/it gets more readers Atomic Chinchilla can get around their Writers block.

Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to pine for my perfect score of zero dislikes.

I have no problem with the maximals being ponified. My only concern is will they be bale to transform again in the future? Will they find a way to make their new organic bodies into beast modes, and make them Cybertronian again? =3

Other than that, is story is turning out good. KEEP GOING!

Not only is this a cool cross-over, it's actually written in a feasible manner!  Bravo!  (or Brava!)

Like how you referenced both Prime and G1.

Megatron surviving would be the first normal think to happen today

1. Thing.

I am surprised that you decided to take this route. But I have no qualms about it either way, hope to see how it will go

oh, how we HATE the 'Gold Plastic Syndrome'

I am liking this story very much

>>15187701518770 I can tell you they will have their cybertronian forms again at some point, and perhaps even the mane 6.

>>15190441519044 That would be a bravo.

>>15192281519228 I enjoyed both series. So much I accidental keep reading Primal's voice as Peter Cullen.

>>15204251520425 Dang it, thought I got everything. Well I guess that's what I have you guys for.

>>15206661520666 GPS claimed my transmetal Megatron.

A few comments

1. Optimas should be an alicorn just because  he's awesome.

2. Silverbolt should be a griffon because since he was a mix of two animals before it would make more sense.

3. Are we going to see any protoforms?

>>15231221523122

1. Then he would draw too much unneeded attention. Eh maybe when he dies and has to be resurrected again.

2. Pegasus is already two animals, horse and bird. You'll find out my other reasoning later on.

3. Maybe, they'll probably be obscure BW characters like Cybershark or Scarem. I'd have to come up with a reason they ended up in Equestria though.

>>15237181523718 I wholeheartedly agree with with your number one option... mainly with Optimus dying and getting ressurected again mainly cause, what kind of transformers show do you have if optimus doesn't die in it at least once?

>>15258931525893 He has yet to literally die in Transformers Prime

Ooh, the plot thickens.

Well dang, thanks to Gyvon I find myself adding yet another story to read on top of my already out of hoof and growing list.

>>15589301558930 >>15576741557674

Same. Darn Gyvon and his use of his powers of fame. *Hoofshake*

not enough the knock a pony off their feet

Which was a house that looked to be made entirely from sweets.”

Welcome to Ponivile Maximals

1. To.

2. Extra closing quotation mark at the end.

3. Ponyville.

Aaand excrement is going to hit the proverbial ceiling device...

>>15589301558930 I think I hand in that as well.

>>15602831560283 Primus Damn it. Why do I keep missing these?

>>15608501560850 Don't worry, stuff like this will happen to everypony (everyone?)

>>15576741557674

Indeed.

BTW, how's that 3rd entry to your Transformers crossover doing? When we'll we be able to read it?

Nice work so far, but there are a number of minor mechanical errors throughout the story so I would strongly recommend getting someone to proofread this for you.

>>15610581561058 Everybot too.

>>15620131562013 If you mean chapter three it's out now. Normally I try to post a chapter weekly on Saturdays.

>>15626181562618 I might.

Sweet read. Hope one of the new maximals ends up as a griffin.

>>15663341566334 Well. . . .

"You, soldier! You re ot of uniform, put on some pants." freaking loved the Fowler you put in

>>16736141673614 I felt it was appropriate because ponies don't wear pants, not often anyhow.

>>16736231673623 well then:

She then set him down justt outside

1. Just.

Oh snap... Things are going to get ugly... Now the only question is; are there more coming for both sides?

>>16738631673863 I'm thinking I should just make you my proof reader or something.

I'll never tell, you'll just have to wait and see.

Reading this makes me want to watch the Beastwars series.  I've never been big into it, I prefer Generation 1 and Prime myself.  But hey this story is good!  Keep up the good work!

>>20982252098225 The fact that it's my fic that makes you want to watch the show is a great honor to me. It means that I'm doing something right, thank you.

I admit that Beast Wars has it's flaws, but it is a great show I highly recommend watching it. Entire thing is on Netflix and Youtube.

>>16738631673863

I would love me some Dinobot and Waspinator

love this watched the beast wars when I was younger and this makes me want to go back and watch it again. and please have the other maximals show up I would love to see griffon airrazor and tigertron and a dragon dinobot would just make my day

>>20991582099158 Both are the top two favorite Cybertronians of all time, both part of the origional Darksyde crew, and voiced by god among voice actors Scott McNeil. I'll see what I can do.

>>20991742099174 Quit reading my brain notes!

“Whoa, whoa, whoa.” Pinkie stuck out one hoof and waved it around while the other held her head. “I feel like I’ve been here before. Did we meet before in Derpy’s basement, or is that a different story?”

Ha. Hahahaha. Hahahahahahahaha. The best part is that I just read that chapter from the other Beast Wars crossover a couple days ago. Oh poor Tarantulas, he gets to deal with Pinkie in not one, but two crossover fics within the span of a month or two.

Props for getting this crossover with the best transformers series ever underway!

>>21022722102272 That was hilarious. With Tarantulas's luck, he'll probably get tormented by Pinkies from other universes.

Tarantulas (in "Too Many Pinkies"): BY THE PIT! DEACTIVATE ME NOW! NOW!

Okay, so I'm re-reading this story after the last chapter update, and I couldn't help but get even more excited after seeing this at the end:

In the darkest hours of night, high in the stratosphere, a rift of dark energy divided the heavens. From the rift poured orbs of light. Eight spheres of malicious intent.

As if to answer the darkness’s challenge, a second rift formed, and from it came five more orbs of light. These spheres came with a far more virtuous intent.

Aaaand I immediately went to listing off the Maximals and Predicons in my head (including some that may or may not have been introduced in the next couple chapters). Theoretical question time: would Tigerhawk make a possible appearance in this fic WITH a possible Tigatron and Airazor? As in, all 3 co-existing at the same time.

>>21119912111991 Concerning Tigerhawk, yes and no. That's all I can say.

Ok One thing I see thats wrong is how twilight reacts to the princess. She might of not bowed like the others but she would not call her by her first name she would say princess, also it shouldnt be a 'sisterly embrace' I can't think of the word that should go there but sisterly is wrong.

Nice to see you've updated.

Celestia knowing Megatron?

The plot thickens.

This should be interesting.

making or way from Ponyville

Once passed the gates

Silverbolt reasoning with Blac arachnia

and momentarily say the outlines of a wild cat

1. Our.

2. Past.

3. Blackarachnia.

4. Saw.

Why not? Might as well apply now for this 'editor' position and see how it goes (Might not end well)

“That’s right. Sorry, I’m following so many stories, it’s hard to keep track."

Oh Pinkie, how true it is...

>>23877412387741 This takes place after the whole alicorn shtick. Somehow, someway Twilight either decided to voluntarily or involuntarily gets stripped of her alicorn powers and title as princess. In spite of this, Celestia still insists on Twilight being on the same level as her and they consider each other as family, sisterly for lack of a better term. I was going to address this later on when it became relevant.

>>23888612388861

2. Passed is the past tense of to pass, past is what has happened prior.

3. It's an invisible K.

What do you mean, might not end well?

I really want to see this fic succeed...and if the position's still open I'd be happy to sign up for Editor. I'm a might busy at the moment though, but things should calm down in a week or so.

>>23892132389213 So far only you and Refferee have volunteered. I'll have to see figure out who would be the best choice.

>>23891012389101 Only cause shenanigans may occur... as well as those few hiccups that happened.

>>23891012389101 so the story i going to talk about twilight being an alicorn at one time?

>>23896392389639 Eventually, I'd like to know more about season four before that though.

So far I'm liking the story, mainly because the narration doesn't sound like dictated by a 5 year old toddler with ADHD (too cruel?), that's the first thing I look at when reading a story and faving it. That aside, I really like the setting of the story, it is very believable, and the characthers are spot on.

It makes me kinda wary that you wouldn't be able to add more characthers since the rest of the show are dead (except Waspinator, that lucky bard), thus the predacons would only have 1 member vs 6+6 good guys . As for how you could bring in more characters, I came up with two ideas:

   1) The Omega-Delta had protoforms aboard (very unlikely)

   2) NMM (assuming she is the blue-mist-thingie) creates more predacons after Megatron's own esscence-or-something.

Anyway, better read the other chapters to see what happens.

Also: EHRMAHGAHDD! ZO MENNY REPHERENCES! gotta love Rattrap

>>23919042391904 Thank you for your support. Don't worry, I've got the character issue covered.

>>21119912111991

I'm reading this for the first time and I'm doing the exact same thing, but the numbers seem to be still a little off, the maximals being up by one member. Am I missing someone?

>>23920852392085

Oh I see. I better finish to read what happened so far before comenting . Great story, BTW!

>>23923312392331 If what I mentioned does happen I will be so very happy. I'm actually impressed that Matrix here was able to capture each of the characters really well. I grew up with Beast Wars, and outside of this marginally small group of people, it seems nobody else did

>>23924012392401 I'm just happy I haven't been torn apart.

>>23924892392489 You've done a really good job so far. Characters are portrayed really well, the story is interesting, and I DEMAND TO KNOW IF WE'RE GONNA GET DINOBOT AND CO.

In all seriousness though, this story deserves way more views than it has right now.

Okay, now that I've read ch. 6 now I can give my informed opinion without sounding like a . *ahem* This is a truly amazing story! Besides the pluses I mentioned before, the scenes are awesome, special mention to the ones involving fighting, and all the characters are amazingly written.

Let's go now to the specifics: I like the fact that you took in consideration the Preds tendency to find overpowered creatures for their alternate forms because of the 'tactical advantage' they could get (notice the sarastic tone) with all and special improvements for each form. Something that took me completely out of guard was Ravage, who I actually don't like that much.

Don't get me wrong, he was pretty badass on the three episodes of the show he appeared in, but I've never seen any other Transformers shows before BW, so I never truly understanded the whole Autobot/Decepticon background, so when he transformed into a cassette --And let me reiterate, A FUNG CASSETTE!-- I literally said "Que Coño?!" what basically means WTF. I'm glad that you put more effort into it and made him a full panther. Kudos for that.

However there is another downside here: Pinkie. I think you took her randomness a little too far, that also includes the fourth-wall-breaking. I'm not saying that you should change the scene of chapter 5, but maybe tone it a little down in the future, like they show in the cartoo.

Nevertheless, this story is great as it is and I'm looking forward to more. Farewell and sorry for the long comment.

>>24026622402662 That was my reaction to Ravage as well. It made more sense when I watched the G1 series, and I liked him even more because he was one of the partners of Soundwave, my all time favorite decepticon. What I don't understand is, why the hell is he suddenly Russian?

I took Pinkie's randomness too far? My Dear Scorpius I have seen people on this site have a blatant disregard of whatever grounding she has to reality so to speak. Read Predator's Moon by Atomic Chinchilla if you haven't yet, you'll catch my drift. I admit, I'm not a fan of omnipotent Meta Pinkie, so I'm trying to make those instance more ambiguous blurbs or cases of deja vu.

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I'm not saying it is a bad thing, it's just that I don't like that that much, but if it works for you then it doesn't matter.

I'm sorry for the late reply.

Fist of all I like the new graph it was good.

Next, I did see some spelling errors.

I find this story very interesting, I just can't wait to see what's gong to happen next.

I hope your working on a new chapter soon.

Good luck in the future and I hope all will work out.  

>>24263212426321 thank you sir.

might I suggest cheetor's cutie marks be a lighting bolt and at the top it has the beginning a cheetah it would be awesome.

while silverbolt's a silver arrow head pointing backwards that has white squiggly lines on on the top and bottom showing how fast its going?  

>>24447352444735 Thanks for the ideas, the only one I've come with a mark for is Rattrap. All ideas are welcome.

What were those green eyes watching Ravage and Zecora? Was that one of the Maximals that haven't shown up yet?

Dinobot maybe? Since they were described as reptilian.

>>24938012493801 Wait n' see.