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This is superb. Although the plot is admittedly a bit cliche, it is thoroughly well written. I think this deserves to be featured.
EVERYTHING Martian writes should be featured.
Not that I'm biased, but... no wait I am!
I almost shed manly tears. being a big brotherr myself, i know how mac must have felt when his sister was in danger. Cliche, as mentioned before, but well written nonetheless. tracked and faved.
Sometimes, cliche works. Glad you enjoyed it! ![]()
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Wait, I did that one before.
Aww you; I'd eat your spleen with the most tender care. ![]()
Uhh, no actual idea; the guy is doing an Upright Bass-only cover of the Chili Pepper's 'Can't Stop'. He does have a link to download an MP3 of it, if that helps: HERE
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This was a good read, I would like to see you pursue more family related writing like this since you did it well.
Favorited and watching for more stuff :P
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10/10, instant favourite. I loved the appropriateness of the structure you used - starting in media res then building up to that point for the climax, and the strictly limited use of dialogue making the one line being delivered with impact. Even the passage of time was implied by the difference in space between falling to the snow and Applejack waking him up. I liked the simplicity of the story - rather than going wide with many characters, you went deep and kept everything a unity, everything necessary to the story.
Holy damn, that was beautiful. ![]()
Sometimes, stories don't need dialogue to convey a message. This is one of them, and I loved every word.
That was a really good story. The Apple family needs more love and this story granted it. Bravo!
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Being the oldest of three, I can definitely associate with Big Mac in this one. Wanting to forge ahead for the sake of your kin and ready to blast down whatever stands in the path. Awesome all around! ![]()
Looks like Big Mac has one interesting story to telll AJ in the coming years
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I loved the story, though being an only child I worry I didn't get the full impact. I definitely got some of the impact, hence an easy like and a favourite.
I also have to comment on how well the author weaves words. The vocabulary and the phrasing are plain and informative where they need to be, and downright poetic where they should be. That's true skill there, and it puts anything I've ever written to shame. The only mistake I spotted was a single "passed" that should be "past".
Bravo.
>>1540376 "Ignore the ache, push passed the bone-deep chill." It's a preposition in that sentence, so "past".
Many a feel in this fic. Short and sweet. And you fleshed out Big Mac wonderfully. Bravo. ![]()
Great story, I'm a big fan of Big Mac as well as any fic that writes him so well. ![]()
Wonderfully powerful for a story as short as this is.
Keep up the great writing. ![]()
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This is a great story! Not is Big Macintosh my favourite character but I can also relate to the contents of this story. Fantastically written, short and to the point.
Simple and Elegant, much like the Apples themselves, an excellent character study.
I know that snow, it's scary. I was outside once when I was about 10. Middle of January, must have been only -10 Celsius at the time. I decided to go explore and I got caught in a huge snowstorm, dropped about 40 cm of snow that day. I was stuck about 3km from home in the bush. Luckily, always kept a lighter and my pocketknife on me. made a small fire under a dead tree and made a small lean-to like my dad had taught me. I was stuck there for about 2 hours, when about 30 cm fell. I found out later the temp. dropped to about -28 with the windchill. I got back though, as soon as I could see clearly I was outta there and runnin' for home! Good story by the way, I really enjoyed it. Possibly because I related to it so well. But mostly because I like how you wrote it. Congrats are in order.![]()
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Damn, Martian. I knew you were good, and then I read this. I had a plan for my reading today; you've just broken it. Off to read the rest of your stories, the other ones in waiting don't seem worth the effort now. ![]()







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