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Ultimate Punch 3733

Joined April 2012
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    Ultimate Punch's Stories (3)

    • Equestrian Idol
      There's a new celebrity in Canterlot, and she definitely isn't Chrysalis in disguise.

      6,164 words · 2,210 views · 263 likes · 5 dislikes
    • Weapon of Math Destruction
      Cheerilee's days as a student at Ponyville Elementary.
      7,995 words · 854 views · 51 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Tough Love
      Our favorite ridiculously pumped stallion has an admirer!
      15,240 words · 800 views · 37 likes · 1 dislikes
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    Resplendent, gifted, sublime; these words have become synonymous with Equestria's newest and brightest star. When this beauteous manifestation of all ponies' desires touches down on Canterlot, a new era of pop culture rises. But nopony seems to know anything about her, besides the evidence of her talent and enigmatic nature.

    Chrysalis hopes to keep things that way.

    First Published
    21st Oct 2012
    Last Modified
    14th Nov 2012

    Comments ( 68 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This fic was inspired by a bunch of female singers and groups, such as: SNSD, Adele, Tennis, Kimbra, Imogen Heap, Beyonce, Gwen Stefani, Doris Day, Late Night Alumni, Lady Gaga, Metric, and a few others I don't remember. I've been addicted to unique female voices as of late, and that really made me want to write a story about an idol or superstar of some sort. Lyrics are hard to write, so there won't be too many songs, but when there are, I'll try to make them not suck. I'm still going to be working on BotB, but this is what I'll be going to if I ever get bored or am struggling with writer's block.

    Now, enjoy this lyrical adventure into Chrysalis' future after the wedding, as well as her past. It's going to be fun. :pinkiehappy:

    Edit: Leave a comment if you notice any typos, have suggestions on bettering my fic, or if you just want to make me happy.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Read it later bet it will be good though:pinkiehappy:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Oh goodness, a new fic from Ultimate Punch!

    Spike, take a quill and parchment and get your dragon ass here, I need to make a checklist:

    #1 call in sick for work tomorrow

    #2 read fic

    #3 stop being a lazy bum and take some time to work on my own fic

    #4 do the laundry

    #5 actually follow the checklist and don't procrastinate (wait, shouldn't this be the #1 item?)

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    hmmm....I see promise in this. well written, a very plausible storyline, and changeling OC's are actually well written and not just generic drones. I'll be keeping an eye on this.

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Interesting concept let's see how Queen will roll it out

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    #7 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1480500"get your dragon ass here" <--Made me smile like a goofball.

    >>1480501>>1480530>>1480560 Thanks for the comments, and I'll try to keep the story reasonable and not ridiculous like my other fics. No promises though...:derpytongue2:

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I like it when changelings are... not just emotionless drones. Although it makes an interesting twist when creatures that feed on love cannot feel emotions themselves, I still find it hard to believe. You've given your lings feelings and loyalty, and Chrysalis is very well in character, stuck up and cocky, but still motherly and caring for her people. She has her doubts and regrets. Very well done.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This is... beautiful. More! More! :pinkiehappy:

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Potential. This has it. And a favorite from me, keepi it up

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I admit I have little interest due to the "sad" tag (sorry), but I always thought this would be a great way for changelings to integrate into Equastrian society: pop-music where love is given ridiculously easily.

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This story sounds Japanese. Throwin it on my read later for sure.

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Nope.

    #15 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    A few problem's with there, their, and they're.

    Other than that this is truly good.

    #16 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1481422 I've seen a lot of anime openings where the characters are dancing to a catchy theme song. They probably affected this story in a way.

    #17 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This story sounds VERY interesting.

    The Queen of the Changelings, being the next hit female artist? All in an elaborate plot to feed her people Love?

    Favorite, and do be careful with this story Double O.

    ............

    Erm, I mean, Ultimate Punch. :twilightsheepish:

    #18 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I've always loved "What-happened-to-Chrysalis-after-she-tried-to-hook-up-with-Twilight's-brother" stories. I haven't even read this yet and I've already favorited it.

    Sapphire Shores better pack her bags. "Equestria Girls" ain't got nothing on "Somepony Like You."

    #19 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1480340 Be happy. Be an insomniac.

    #20 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    We, the hudled masses, demand more!

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    huh, interesting. definitely dropping a watch on this.

    #22 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Looks interesting, faved for later.

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    If you have other things in your life -- family, friends, good productive day work -- these can interact with your writing and the sum will be all the richer.

    - David Brin

    CONTINUE!:pinkiehappy:

    #24 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This is fucking awesome

    #25 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Equestria Idol. Very interesting. There will be no need for world domination in this case.

    #26 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Fantastic premise, great writing, and a glimps at the more tender side of Chrysalis. Please give us more!

    #27 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I look forward to more of it. As a pop star she certainly could feed the hive-and those starving changelings need love.

    #28 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1480340 WHOO SNSD!! :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

    #29 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I hope you will play your cards right. I want it. Badly.

    #30 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Can't wait for the next chapter. Here's to hoping she isn't treated like Sanjaya.

    #31 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    i just made a profile i wanna use these emoticons :pinkiecrazy:

    EPIC FANFICTION GOOD SIR! ENCORE ENCORE! :pinkiehappy:

    #32 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Great story.

    I like the idea of Chrysalis as a singer for some reason, to me it's an original idea, the way she's 'singing for the supper' as it were, great work.

    I really am just waiting for more, this has piqued and held my interest, and to make things better, I didn't see any mistakes. :pinkiehappy:

    Superb work, I'm looking forward to more.

    Honora Imperator

    #33 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Oh my God.  It fits perfectly.  We don't have dozens of aspiring little starlets that all look alike and sound alike, we just have one single changeling.  

    Wait just a minute, there's somepony knocking at my door.  I'll be right back...

    #34 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :ajbemused: you catch more flies with honey than you do with vinigar

    #35 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You have my unbridled attention. Please be gentle with her, and have her back by 10.

    #36 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Potential, this story has...

    The only criticism I can make so far is that I don't think a Changeling's wings would be "fluttering" more than "buzzing."

    #37 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I find myself... intrigued. Please, continue.

    #38 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    POST. FAN. MADE. SONGS. #Savederpy

    i just like typing that. makes me feel important in this pinkie obeying physics-based world. very gloomy indeed.

    #39 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I think the word is hive and not colony. This story has potential, but the beginning doesn't really catch the readers attention. I found myself just kind of skipping through the whole thing. Work on it, and maybe i'll give it a like.

    #40 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    lol the interesting comments from the posters interested in this fic is nearly as interesting as the story itself! :raritywink: Both are heartily enjoyable!

    Will the power of raw will and steely watching :trixieshiftleft: give us another chapter soon??

    #41 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This story intrigues me.  The fact that she sings rarely and only for her subjects may indicate her voice is easier on the eyes than the ears, but I will find the story fascinating whether it becomes comedic or sincere! :derpytongue2:

    #42 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 2d ago · · ·
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    So far, this intrigues me. Since you are held high on my list of great writers, this shouldn't suck. But I can't help feeling this hunch that this is going to crash and burn after chapter 3...:twilightoops: ..not good...keep it up...I want my premonition to be proven false.

    #43 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Wow, now that is a really great premise and a fine first chapter. Can't wait for more!

    #44 · Chapter 1 · 29w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1480626

    Yer welcome.

    #45 · Chapter 1 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1480787

    YES!!

    Very interesting and promising concept here.

    Please sir, can I have some more? :twilightsmile:

    #46 · Chapter 1 · 29w, 12h ago · · ·
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    How did I not think of this song earlier?

    #47 · Chapter 1 · 27w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I put this story into my read later pile because the premise sounded interesting. Many times, amateur writers ( like myself ) mangle good ideas. This is not one of those times.:twilightsmile:

    All that is left to say is:

    MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    #48 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hello, readers!:flutterrage: Down below is just my silly author's comment, so read on if you're curious.

    I've decided to write EI as a full on slice of life. It's a tad slow right now, but things will be picking up super fast. Of course, the speed of my fic's progression depends a lot on how quickly I can write these chapters, which is slow, since I only really work on this when I'm bored of other things. But still, if you care about this story at all, know that more exciting--and I use that term loosely--things are going to be happening to Chrysalis, probably in the next chapter or two.

    Oh, and yay for the second main character! And a hurrah for motherly Chrysalis! I love moms.:heart:

    #49 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    FINALLY!

    AN UPDATE! :yay:

    #50 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This chapter. I like it.

    ANOTHER! :flutterrage:

    #51 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Sweetie Belle! :yay: I never liked American Idol, the judges are plain ridiculous. If you're going to audition somewhere, make sure the judges aren't going to be intentionally over-the-top for TV ratings. And the mention of bank robberies made me think of Changelings as mafia ponies. I really like that thought.

    #52 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Poor Chrysalis, I was hoping that her audition would go well. Better luck with the next plan I guess.

    #53 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    so good TT

    #54 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    And Suddenly... Sweetie Belle!:unsuresweetie:

    #55 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    'No, my home is in an expansive network of caverns far past Equestrian borders, south of the Badlands and the Dry Dry Deserts, and deep in the jungle beyond'.

    And thus my associative mind goes into overdrive!

    #56 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1613025 Someone who got the Paper Mario reference! I just really love the name Dry Dry Desert, and had to use it somewhere. Badlands, however, is a real place in Equestria, according to the map. I've never played that particular Spyro.

    #57 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1613169

    Yep, I know about the Badlands, but I can't help where my mind goes. A friend of mine once bought a bottle of Vitamin Well Focus and, within a fraction of a second, the album Focus by technical death metal band Cynic popped into my mind.

    #58 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1613249Associations. Associations everywhere.

    #59 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Im glad that this is out

    #60 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I was thinking of a different Badlands KOTH Badlands that is

    #61 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 20h ago · · ·
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    More of this please, am really liking this Chrysalis

    #62 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 20h ago · · ·
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    Yay...:fluttershbad:

    #63 · Chapter 2 · 26w, 6d ago · · ·
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    What is an Equestrian Idol story going to be like without Equestrian Idol? :pinkiegasp:  I must know!  Will she try out for other reality TV shows?

    Photo Finish's Next Top Fluttershy?

    Long Face-Off? (Betcha can't make a face crazier than... This!)

    Tartarus' Kitchen?  Iron Will Chef?

    The Tester? (Just kidding. :pinkiesick:)

    Chrysalis would have any of these in the bag (she makes a mean stew, after all.)

    Good luck to Sweetie Belle!

    #64 · Chapter 2 · 26w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1632486 :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Those names made my day.

    Oh, don't you worry about Chrysalis. This isn't the end of her musical career, only the beginning!

    #66 · Chapter 1 · 19w, 2d ago · · ·
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    A really great start!  Very few areas that could have read better, and the plot is quite intriguing so far.

    #67 · Chapter 2 · 19w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This story is excellent.  For god's sake, write more.

    #68 · Chapter 2 · 8w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is kind of an odd turn of events.  No spot on Equestrian Idol for the main character?

    I suppose one of their main choices might have an accident or something but I don't know if Chrysalis left accurate contact information.

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