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    • Just Another Average Tuesday
      A 16-year old boy is transported to Equestria and given the form of a dragon.

      88,147 words · 5,072 views · 642 likes · 27 dislikes
    • Elite
      Not every changeling is weak. Some are strong. Very strong.
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    "Ever been called a hero? Ever been called the best of the best? I've been called both of these many times before, and it never ceases to amaze and terrify me. For if I am the best, shouldn't I be able to conquer all obstacles in my path? Shouldn't I be the one to solve problems no one else can? Shouldn't my enemies be dead, my friends happy, and my alliances unbroken? Shouldn't my life be... perfect?"

                               - From the Diary of a Changeling

    It is a common perspective among most species that changelings are, for the most part, fairly weak creatures. They don't have the strength of a diamond dog. They don't have the speed of a vampire. Only a few have even a hope of challenging the knowledge of a dragon. Numbers, disguises, and their Queen is what most hives rely on. This is true of course, and Chrysalis knows it. Changelings are a fragile race, and if one day their unity would fail, a fail-safe must be ready. A fail-safe that, alone, could stand against any threat. Any situation. Any obstacle. A hero, which all could look to when times were dark.

    That had been a long time ago.

    First Published
    18th Oct 2012
    Last Modified
    7th Jan 2013

    Comments ( 45 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I think this was fantastic!

    For someone who writes Only HiE, It's great!

    I mean, it's not like I've read this before.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I enjoyed this and look forward to it's continuation.  It was well written though and gave enough information to make one feel "in the loop", but left enough unsaid that it makes one want to read more and find out what exactly is happening.  Peace, and stay gold.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Have I ever told you that you're fucking awesome? Because you're fucking awesome.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    LOL! That's awesome.

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Very nice.

    The idea of a Changeling super soldier is really cool, and I love your writing style--really breezy and entertaining. :twilightsmile:

    Also, I think Calsor may be Twilight's bee rival for sheer adorkableness. :pinkiehappy:

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    ....I am so conflicted...I now want to read this more than your other stories.

    One thing I noticed was a fistpump. On a changling.....wat?

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Cool story, intrigued,  follow and green thumb)))

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Nice job, have a like.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Interesting concept, tracking and liked. :rainbowkiss:

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Can't say for sure where this is going yet; most changeling stories I've seen start off in a similar situation to this... except for the whole super soldier thing obviously. I'm just gonna have to see how it pans out. Other than that it's well-written, the tension of Corlo's predicament shows really well and I liked your characterization of Chrysalis and her nutty scientists. And hey - I liked your other story so I'll probably enjoy this one too! :eeyup:

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Fantastic! =D Can't wait for more!

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Nice. Really enjoyed it.

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 8h ago · · ·
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    Yes you are very right. Great so far with a nice hook at the end of the chapter to keep me I intrigued as to what will happen.

    Yeoman, out

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 8h ago · · ·
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    Good work, I shall be following this one! :raritystarry:

    #15 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    He should have been to hear these guys from a mile away!

    This should probably say:

    "He should have been able to hear these guys from a mile away!"

    ...

    Anyway, good stuff. :pinkiesmile:

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    That`s good! Really good!!

    Need NEXT CHAPTER!!!!

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1491487 Thanks for catching that! I just started to use a new software after my Word trial ran out. I'll make sure to catch stuff like that next time...

    I need to get Word again :ajbemused:

    #18 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Yay, changeling interrogations, those are always fun, can't wait. :pinkiehappy:

    #19 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Well, damn. Should've stayed hidden til you knew what you were getting into, Corlo! :derpyderp2:

    MOAR is required. :pinkiehappy:

    #20 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Awesome! Can't wait for more! The suspense is killing me, so hurry up! XD

    #21 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I love a good chase scene; great work! :rainbowdetermined2:

    Keep it up!

    #22 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 4d ago · · ·
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    some even reaching the top if the hive and curling around it.
    of?

    That right there was one sweet chase scene. Especially liked how we got both view points of it as well.

    Yeoman, out

    #23 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Loved it. More please.:pinkiehappy:

    #24 · Chapter 2 · 28w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I'm glad you made your writers block story an awesome story to read.

    #25 · Chapter 2 · 27w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is one of my favorite story's that I've seen, maybe even a little better then JAAT, but I request more from both:fluttershysad:

    #26 · Chapter 1 · 27w, 17h ago · · ·
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    Another strange thing about him was his glasses. Imported from the griffons, he wore them about wherever he went and refused to talk them off for anybody,

    One does not simply talk glasses off.

    #27 · Chapter 2 · 24w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You know this is amazing :pinkiehappy:

    #28 · Chapter 2 · 21w, 6d ago · · ·
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    When will you write again? I want to pre-read SOMETHING.

    #29 · Chapter 2 · 21w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1813257 When I'm not distracted by homework and Youtube, probably during Christmas vacation. Actually, if I DON'T write during Christmas vacation, You have permission to break into the Canterlot Palace, steal Celestia's cake, then hide it in my house as false evidence.

    #30 · Chapter 2 · 21w, 6d ago · · ·
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    #31 · Chapter 2 · 21w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Reads JAAT, reads at the end "I'm working on another story, read it while you wait for this", reads this story, looks at last time updated

    FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

    #32 · Chapter 2 · 21w, 2h ago · · ·
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    >>1832730 Don't worry, I'm gonna SLAP some sense into him.

    #33 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Great chapter!

    I wonder what's gonna happen with that blade...

    #34 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    the best thing about be nocturnal is that i get to be one of the first ones to read these kind of stories

    seriously most of the best stories in my favourtes update around midnight.

    #35 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Great bit of mystery going on here. Looking forward to the next chapter.

    #36 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    “My dear Shining Armor, he is an injured sentient creature that probably has no hope of escaping. I expect the wing to be healed.”

    Sentience vs Sapience

    I would expect Celly of all ponies to know the difference.

    #37 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1920119 Huh, the more you know.

    #38 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1921222 WOOHOO! ANOTHA ONE HAZ BEAN CONVURTED! :pinkiehappy:

    #39 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 6d ago · · ·
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    YOU'RE ALIVE!:pinkiehappy:

    #40 · Chapter 3 · 18w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Great chapter, can't wait for the next one:pinkiehappy:

    #41 · Chapter 3 · 17w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Glad to see this back!

    :pinkiegasp: The sword Corlo bought? He lost it? Oh crap, that is one helluva Checkov's Gun...

    And a quick question: Celestia mentions "sending the Changeling back where it came from"... does she plan to release Corlo?:rainbowhuh:

    Wouldn't it make more sense to keep him locked up, or at least under watch? Technically, he's a POW, methinks.

    #42 · Chapter 3 · 17w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I have commented.

    You are a refreshing reprieve from the constant shower of dark and foreboding fics. It's interesting to see this blend of seriousness and shallow humor. My favorite smoothie.   :moustache:

    #43 · Chapter 3 · 16w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The shop part reminded me of XXXholic

    #44 · Chapter 3 · 11w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    I'm not really a fan of flashbacks... my brain gives the "go to sleep" command whenever I read one.

    So I had to skip it. I know it's about the Elite's upbringing, but...y'know.

    So...yeah. Do continue.

    #45 · Chapter 3 · 4w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This is a great story bro, but I haven't seen any activity in you at all. I do know that school work and video games can be quite a booger to overcome so I'm not complaining much, but can you show us some sign that you're alive? I'd hate to see you die. Good day ye chap.

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