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Spike has been trying to impress and date Rarity since he saw her for the first time. His efforts has usually been fruitless.
After another failure and an advice from a friend, he had decided to try something completely different but, as usual, it didn't turn out well.
In this story, Spike is going to explain how he got in really serious trouble.
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Epic!
A few grammatical errors here and there, but promising. I hope to see this bloom.
Silly but fun. I'd love to see more of it.
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Some grammar errors but nothing to really worry about. Keep it up.javascript:smilie('
Everypony's so mean to Spike.
Well, I'm glad to see this is just a lighthearted comedy instead of a genuine Spikeabuse fanfic. Let's see where it goes.
.......... It was a good chapter, but it only made half of me say MOAR and the other half say MOAR IN CHAPTER! I like it, but i got a slight headache arguing with myself.
I'm guessing English isn't your first language, huh? It's not bad by any means and it is quite promising, but at the same time,it sounds really unnatural at parts. You could also do with a little cutting back on unnecessary or repeat information. As I said though, it's quite interesting, but I suggest finding a editor or proofreader to polish it up.
everbody hates chris
Inb4 featured. This story has some SERIOUS promise. Keep it up, mate!
Thanks for all your comments!
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My editor works on cleaning my another story now
Besides the 'Hear tattack" this was a pretty awesome chapter. Never thought I'd see the day where Spike starts crushing on another mare. Oh boy, this should be good.
Oh man,
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1458657 Based on the start of the chapter, I don't think it ends well.
1458644 Find another, I have 3 or so. Also, my other story.
I like where this is going. Not too slow to pick up, and aside from a few grammatical errors, is really well written. On top of that, there's not a lot of Spkefics, so I'll give this one a go.
This not going to end well
this is a train wreck waiting to happen...
LETS WATCH!
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I'm liking where this is going. Can we expect a Benny Hill-like scene?
There you go. The second chapter.
I hope it lives up to your expectations
Yeah, I'd of probably defeated the great table monster with my head at that moment too. Poor Spike, that was pretty damn close to a date he just messed up unintentionally.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
When Zecora isn't rhyming you know you've screwed up.
lol
poor Spike
Well I hate Spike as he is the most easily replaceable and weakest character in the show so I think I'll like this story, I'll put it in my read later pile.
1467537 I hate you.
Third chapter. It's a bit longer than other two.
I hope you like it
(On a side note, if you really like this story, you may want to check out my other stories - only comedies there
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And, if you care, please let me know what do you think of the story.
(And point out any mistakes that gouge eyeballs out.)
There were mistakes but I'll let the other readers take care of that. I really do like this story and I am looking forward to your next chapter(which btw I really didn't care that it was longer).
I already figured what's going to happen.
"I name all my bunnies angel."... WHAT
. flutters y u so uncaring
. But great story I cant wait to see what spike does to mess up
1470421 I'm heartbroken, sorry for saying the elephant in the room. All bronies know it's true.
1471114 NO! DO NOT DISCOURAGE! LONG THINGS ARE BEST, LOOK AT EXAMPLES:
> BANANA
> HOT DOG
> ICE CREAM CONE
> PENIS
> STORIES
1473084 I agree, but really, I like long stories. They keep me busy
Poof! Another chapter. I hope you like it.
You probably get the reference from the title
So, please let me know what you think of the flow of the story and point out major mistakes. Thanks in advance!
Oh man, I can see where this is going.
This is awesome
Embarrassment levels gona reach max. Poor spike
Cloudkicker? fanon states Fillyfooler...Clouchaser or Flitter?....Bi? Blossomforth? probably dating someone (Thunderlane based on interpretations). Vinyl Scratch? Berry Punch? Junebug? Redheart? Lotus or Aloe? Emerald? Mane Goodall? Or...Quake(LOL, actually include that, that would be bloody hilarious, Quake is up in the wiki)?...so many to...be rejected from. Once more unto the breach, stout dragon, once more onward!
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Wait a second... Quake is a mare!?
Oh man! 
It's RD, isn't it? RD! RD! RD! I geuss this because Spike didn't cross her out in the checklist!
And RD is just gonna
1473047 Sorry, but f&%# you. Spike gets way too much neglect and abuse, and is anything but replaceable, since he's one of the most important characters in the show and has more than a few ways of pleasing a mare that no other stallion does (fingers, tongue, etc).
Oh, and you're also suggesting that a character's worth is judged by whether or not they're a pussy. Not only is that jacked-up, but you're ignoring the fact that he took on three diamond dogs and faceplanted in lava with no problem.
Have fun in you're little Spike-hating world. It might get lonely.
1476733 I'm thinking the same thing.
Another chapter!
Yep guys, some of you guessed correctly!
And as usual: Let me know what you think of the story in the comments
This is Twilights fault, not spikes.
That's right Spike, fight the power! Rage against the machine! Defy Twilight!
arnbo pls
*ahem* While I do prefer Lesbian Dash, this was nice too.
Rainbow's first date with a DRAGON not a stallion.
He really should stop looking for cool looking names. 9 out of 10 times, they will happen to swing the other way. If he's lucky, at least one mare will swing both ways.
Spike is kinda screwed now because nearly every mare is gay.