Celestia has dropped a bombshell on Twilight. Her, growing wings? How can a normal--well no, she's no longer a normal unicorn: Normal unicorns get old; she hasn't.
What is she, then?
Sequel to Only Got 100 Years to Live.
Well. Looking forward to more of this. I loved "Only Got 100 Years to Live", so this should be awesome as well.
Quick question, why did Luna think that twilight had been dead for a while, celestial knew she was still alive, with a teaching position no less, and unless they never talk to each other, I would assume Luna would know as well
Good to see you continuing Only Got 100 Years To Live, though I have to wonder where are you actually tacking it, the story seemed mostly complete save for maybe an epilogue, tracking.
>>14987301498730 She probably didn't bother keeping track of what she considered a mortal pony, specially one she could come to really appreciate, out of fear of loss. She didn't want to get too attached, and if she didn't actually hear somepony who helped her so much actually died, she could pretend she was just fine, though at best she probably though she was a senile old pony by now. Exclaiming she was dead and Celestia was pranking her was likely the first thing to come to mind when she saw her just as she remembered her. Well, at least that's how I take it, is not like I wrote this...
Actually Celestia seemed a bit surprised to see Twilight as well. I can guess she might have known she was alive but expected to see her looking ancient rather than young. If Celestia had been avoiding Twilight in order to not see her wither away I can imagine Luna had inferred she was long dead by now.
>>14989611498961 As to why I'm continuing it: some readers demanded more, and ideas came to my mind on how to continue it.
>>14994251499425 could you maybe shed some light on why luna thought twilight was dead? I am afraid i do not quite understand hat part.
Good continuation so far, but A question comes to mind. What about Cadance?
Italicize thoughts, maybe?
>>15009151500915 The original doc does do that; I just haven't gotten around to doing it.
EDIT: and done!
>>14999091499909 Mortal ponies usually don't live that long.
Haven't even started and I already know I'll like it. After all, most stories of Twilight turning Alicorn are cool. Yes?
I always use images to convey my thoughts.
Definitely loving this so far :D,
I'd also love to see Twilight and Luna's sleepover XD
When is the next chapter? If you don't post them say every 2 days.... I will have Buck Norris beat them out of you :P
Quick question, whatever happened to Spike? Dragons most definitely do live that long, so unless he's started one of the long sleeps, he should still be around.
This, in most fictions dragons always seem to live for hundreds if not thousands of years. Assuming they are not killed somehow, but they do seem to be prone to falling asleep for quite a long time (length depending on just how longed lived they are).
Good so far, although a bit rushed.
A suggestion to consider:
Twilight, distraught, did the only thing that came to mind; a tactic she hadn't used since she was a filly. She gave Luna her best doe-eyes.Luna didn't even flinch. "Twilight Sparkle, you are going to be training with us and that is final," she stomped her front hoof down.
Luna didn't even flinch. "Twilight Sparkle, you are going to be training with us and that is final," she stomped her front hoof down.
Maybe add in something like.....
She then smiled wickedly and added "Nice try my little pony, but I invented that ploy a couple millenniums ago."
.....at the end of that.
HOW DARE YOU TAKE TWILIGHT FROM HER BOOKS! I DEMAND YOU RETURN HER AT ONCE!
Looking forward to more of this story!
Doe Eyes CRITICAL FAILURE :P
Amazing story, great plot development, i can't wait to read more!!
I'm gonna' enjoy this.
I personally think that peeling Twilight away from her studies so abruptly is going to be detrimental to her psychological health. On one hoof, spending time with the princess and learning about being an alicorn is going to be good for her. However, on the other, I feel that she needs some time to get over the trauma of losing all of her friends and finding out that she's immortal.
>>14989611498961 Mmm, I had the same question but I guess that's as good an explanation as any. Though, why didn't Twilight contact the princesses sooner when it was obvious that she wasn't aging? Why wait 100 years?
Probably because there's no easy way to tell this without causing quite a bit of trouble. After all, if there's also someone else immortal, that would really warp the belief system of thousands of ponies. That's mass panic right there.
Twilight's best doe eyes failed to move Luna ...
Wow! Alicorns have some Awesome powers!
>>15032531503253 Mass panic? Umm, why would that cause mass panic?
Due to the fact that someone outside of royalty is reaching Alicorn and immortality status. That's not something you should tell a lot of people.
... although, now that you mention it, I don't see why Twilight couldn't just send a letter personally under a fake name.
>>15033091503309 I still don't see why that would cause panic. If a human was found to be immortal, maybe some religious fanatic would try to assassinate them or some government would abduct them for experiments or something, but I don't think it would cause a mass panic. Why would it?
Oh and I have another question for the author, (maybe this was answered in the comments of the prequel, I haven't checked) why didn't the princesses go to the funerals of the Elements of Harmony? It's a bit of a stretch to say they avoided all contact because the Bearers were mortal and didn't want to feel the pain of losing them. Why even bother interacting with mortals at all if they're going to be like that?
>>15033341503334 When Pinkie died, they distanced themselves from the rest of the main six.
Ohh this should be good but maybe some comedy wouldn't hurt... Pwease
>>15026751502675>>15031631503163 Twilight wasn't studying; she was teaching. At least she will be going back to her tower at Canterlot castle with all those books.
>>15034071503407 Yeah I know, but there were no teaching memes! :'(
I wonder when and who Twilight Sparkle will take as her own student once she became an Alicorn. Or if she will have an family on her own or not.
Hory sheet man. You continued it.
"Celestia said I'd grow wings!" Twilight blurted out.
After a couple of slow blinks, Luna did a happy squeal and ran up and hugged Twilight before she could react. "It is great to see that you have grown in power." Twilight began to flail her hooves weakly. "It warms my heart to have a friend to enjoy eternity with! Oh, my sister said you liked stargazing;" Twilight's flailing became more energetic. "we shall stargaze tonight, and we shall eat of the S'Mores." Twilight's flailing had become frantic. "And then we shall have a make-over and… yes, Twilight?"
"Air!" Twilight gasped out.
Luna appears to be channeling Starfire from the Teen Titans cartoon.
On a different note, you'd think a hundred years would be enough for Luna to shake the archaic speech patterns.
Well, think about it. A unicorn becomes an alicorn? Twilight would be swarmed of questions. Ponies gossiping if she's planning to overthrow the throne. Others asking her if she did some sort of spell and if she can perform it on them. The press would bombard her with pictures and interviews.
Twilight doesn't do well under stress as it is. (Not sure how much she's learned to handle it after decades, but...) She can't just simply leave (although I'm not sure why she didn't plan a letter).
Just read through "Only 100 Years" and this, and I have to say I'm enjoying it very much. The shift to a lighter tone is a bit jarring after a half-dozen chapters of mourning and loss, but I am looking forward to Twilight's ascension. Only one nagging point: Where the fk is Spike?
The pacing is awful. And where is all the exposition? Just because it's a sequel doesn't mean you can just jump ahead in a single sentence. Jesus.
Not horrible, but hardly deserving of the feature box. Maybe I'm just spoiled when it comes to quality, but this is not that amazing.
>>15037051503705 wait, feature box? *looks* …oh dear, it is there…
I am not worthy!
What really smashed this story into the floor for me, was one single line.
"No, the recent loss of Applejack hit me hard this morning."
It feels like it was just thrown in for no bucking reason.
I hate it when one of the Mane6 dies or is dead, and for no reason. It doesn't further the plot, it doesn't serve any purpose, it's just there.
I would suggest rewriting that as it doesn't serve any purpose other than giving Twilight a reason to get out of class. An easier solution: She got sick and had to go home and took the time studying Alicorns instead, but returned to the classroom to gather their homework.
I'm not saying that you should take my suggestion of what to replace it with, but I really think you should rewrite it so that it is something less dramatic but serves the same purpose. People kinda tend to want the impact of a dead Mane6 to be felt, and I didn't feel anything, it was just "AJ is dead".
My apologies, I hadn't realised it was a sequel, ignore my critique.
>>15035351503535 XD nice to know I wasn't the only one who thought that! XD
>>15034071503407 Pardon that. I meant teaching.
One of the biggest issues I see is on story pacing. The chapter seems to jump around/change pace, and because of that hard to see any emotional attachment to the characters. I almost thought it was a comedy.
Twilight! You are gonna grow wings, and you're gonna like it!
"But… just as powerful as you!? But your an immortal Alicorn and I'm just…"
It should be:
"But… just as powerful as you!? But you're an immortal Alicorn, and I'm just…"
Grammar is always good to take seriously ヽ(*・ω・)ﾉ
The sequel is off to a very interesting start with a lot of potential to be a good read. As I mentioned in the previous story, there's a severe lack of descriptions of scenery/characters (i.e the senses aren't being engaged. Like, sight, smell, color, feel, etc.) Also, what happened to Spike in the previous story and here? Or did he migrate off to the Dragons once he got old enough etc?
I also would like to know about Spike.
OH MY GOSH SEQUEL TO THAT ONE STORY.
INVOLUNTARY ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE. ARGH.
You could do this better. Your scenes lack the emotional impact of the "100 Years". I'd recommend going back over and adding more description of Twilight's emotional state and making Princess Luna more clearly regal. For example, Luna is definitely old enough to realize that glomping a still-rather-jittery-unicorn-of-comparable power is unwise.
I liked it alright, but it was definitely a bit off in regards to Twilight's emotional state. She'd just hours before had a breakdown due to the death of Applejack, her final remaining friend from her youth. She was acting far too... normal here, in the wake of that. I was attributing it to her intentionally not thinking about it, but then she almost casually mentioned Applejack's death AND her subsequent breakdown to Luna, and then immediately freaked out that she'd missed her classes. You'd think she'd have a stronger emotional response to the memory of her friend's death or her breakdown than to the realization that she'd missed class, especially since she'd already given more emotional weight to the former when she ran out in the middle of the latter.
I'm not saying this is badly written, there's just a very noticeable dissonance between the way "100 Years to Live" left Twilight, emotionally, at it's ending and the way this story is portraying her right off the bat, and it's jarring since this story continues right where that story left off. The way she is here seems more like she's had a significant amount of time to calm down after the other story's ending, which isn't the case.
All of that said, I'm still very much looking forward to more of this!
When did Celestia become a balloon toy?
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THE SEQUEL! YES! Keep going!!!
>>15035351503535 HOLY SHIT YOU WATCH TEEN TITANS. FUCK, NOW IV'E GOT THE THEME SONG STUCK IN MY HEAD.
"I am sorry, Twilight Sparkle, but this is the first time in nearly a millennia for this to happen.”
Umm, no. More like first time in one and a half centuries. Princess Cadance does exist, you know.
>>15668531566853 Cadance was born an Alicorn; Twilight is turning into an Alicorn. A unicorn turning into an Alicorn hasn't happened in a long time.
You must update! One does not simply ignore updating a story into Mordor.
Can't wait for more
Where is spike in al this?
Are you still working on this by any chance?
PS:As for Spike you can either ignore him, or make something up like he became an ambassador for Equestria and has been away for a very long time, or he got killed off somehow.
No mention about Shining Armor's presumed death, or his family?
>>16875281687528 the original fic was written before I knew anything about Twilight's brother. I may add a chapter in Only Got 100 Years to Live if an idea comes to me and FiMFic adds the option to insert chapters wherever you want.
So have you become Madd the Mad yet from the pressure to get up a new chapter?
Just curious if you had found some ideas for the next chapter, it was a good read, although definitely sad in some regards looking back at the original story. Thanks for 'caving' under the pressure and writing this one too, it is nice to see a slight comedic uplifting after having read the previous. Good stuff.
Personal HeadCanon: The Headmaster of the school is Doctor Whooves
I implore you to write more.
This should be sequleized please, or continued?
(Was that intentional Dr. Whoves?)
>>19562301956230 Nope, not an intended Dr. Whooves appearance.
Oh my it updated! I've been waiting for this
Somehow had this in my favorites. Not that I regret putting this story in there, but it HAS been a while
Seriously glad to see this updated! I hope future updates don't take as long!
"Nothing could happen to you!"
>Luna turned into Nightmare Moon
>Celestia failed to keep Discord contained
>Celestia also failed to defeat Chrysalis
Twilight has some major bias issues.
It probably depends on the different between neutralized/injured and killed.
Sure Celestia can be injured and hurt by something immensely powerful, but Twilight might have been under the impression that actually killing them was impossible.
When both princesses turned to look at her, she amended "Princess Celestia," she amended, making Luna scowled.
Multiple amendments, scowl should be present tense
I think she imagined they had the kind of immortality where they can be hurt or seemingly slain but will recover from even complete destruction in a day or so. Like in Sharing the Night: the sisters' bodies are sunlight/moonlight and magic and killing them just demanifests them briefly.
>>20150422015042 You and me both, Gandolf... You and me both...
... Sweet been awhile though Not Complaining this is amazing... just awhile.
Hey. Don't bring up Chrysalis. Think about it... Celestia single-handedly populated Tartarus with all of Equestria's demons. We can surmise this because it is her pet dog Cerberus who guards the gate to pony Hell, as is shown in the episode. Chrysalis is sort of like the alicorn of the Changelings, so sure she's pretty damn powerful - which means one thing.
Celestia couldn't deal with Chrysalis with only a small fraction of her power, and if she'd opened up the floodgates of her magical strength, unleashing the sun's wrath -right there in the middle of Canterlot, not ten feet from Twilight Sparkle and everyone else- what do you think would have happened? COLLATERAL INCINERATION.
That's right, my friends. Celestia CHOSE not to win that match, because it would have killed her precious subjects and beloved apprentice. Chrysalis is not stronger than Celestia, she is stronger than Celestia who is -keeping her powers sealed for the safety of the crowd-, which makes far more sense.
Wow, it's been a long time since this updated. Worth it, though.
Now don't ever let it happen again
What happened to the Prologue? Half of chapter one doesn't make any sense anymore because we lost the backstory in the Prologue
A technical point: A horse's anatomy makes it very difficult for food or drink to go down "the wrong pipe". (I even looked it up to make sure I was right. Excuse the wikipedia articles.) I think it's always important to remember we're not writing for humans, and so we need to come up with some unique and humorous situations due to their inhumanity.
It was a bit weird that Celestia told Luna to stay, had a very short conversation about one thing, then told her to go to bed. It was a bit abrupt.
>>20169972016997 There wasn't a prologue: this is a sequel to my other story "Only Got 100 Years to Live." That story should still be up.
YAY, an UPDATE!!
YAY AN UPDATE...exactly 3 months appart...BUT AN UPDATE NONE THE LESS
I can't remember where any of that is from. Please sources?
Watch the series. Everything you need to make the connections is in there. All logic is present. All base information is contained in the episodes.
Telling Twilight that alicorns can die right after she has a breakdown over the death of her last pony friend in the world? Nope, I don't see anything wrong with that!
I was thinking that that information would be of some comfort to her since she would know that sometime far far into the future she could pass on and be with her friends again.
Now whether or not those old tales are true and not some fabrication of a storyteller or a being like Discord...or worse yet some time travel hijinks ...who but the author can say, yes?
In a vacuum, maybe she'd be comforted... but the entire context of the conversation is the possibility of her losing Celestia and Luna, not her own possible death.
I'm glad to see that this story has taken a slightly cheerier note than its prequel. "Only got one hundred years to live" was good, but extremely sad, and I like to see that the entire story arc won't be like that.
What a blind luck you have. I mean it. You sturt this fanfiction where Twilight Sparkle become to an alicorn than a few month later she offically become to an alicorn in the cartoon too.