After accidentally letting it slip to Twist that Diamond Tiara has been disingenuous about her special talent with her classmates, Silver Spoon takes it upon herself to bring the candymaker in on what had previously been the notorious duo's biggest secret.
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... but seriously, yes, go on. :)
Nice story. Upvote. ![]()
I wonder if your idea is anything around mine. I wrote a story, which explained Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon's cutie marks (here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/55222/Cutie-Mark-Avoidance-Team )
Good story! But use three instead of 3, the numerals usually interrupt the flow of the story and just generally are a pet peeve for most people.
Ahah! I knew it!
She's the lovechild of Filthy Rich and Pinklestia: A clone created in secret by a shady cabal of businessponies and nobles, using equal parts Celestia's genetic material and candy floss!
My guess? Her talent is making other people look good...and she hates that.
/Gasp
You mean... She's Pinkie's kid? The product of a forbidden affair beween the wealthy and well-respected Filthy Rich with a lowly baker's apprentice, whom, on top of everything, ponies generally consider to be a few apples short of a bushel?
That could be it! Pinkie said she came from a rock farm! Rocks are close to gems! And gems can be set in tiaras! It's all connected!
Like any daughter of Pinkie Pie or any *lestia would have a problem with to much sugar.
No, she's obviously Cadance beloved, but evil twin sister! From the future!
We all know what it is. DT thinks her talent is simply wearing a tiara.
Haha, Silver Spoon wearing a spoon in her mane. Brilliant. ![]()
I'm not sure how I feel about "Bon Bon the comedian" and curse you! Curse you for that cliffhanger. Again!
Hah. So I'm not the only one who perceives Diamond's cutie mark as a talent in being a beauty queen.
Well, nice story. I think it's been overlooked, really. ![]()
Right, chapter 3.
Only took me a month.
I would just like to say that this one was by far the most difficult to write, mainly because this is the point where I actually started having to head the story towards goals instead of being able to just throw cute into two chapters whose entire narrative existed as a framing device for backstory and setting up the sleepover.
Also, big thanks to Sparky Luck for prereading and editing the bajezzus out of this mess so that it could reach the almost passable form you see here.
Haha, you don't mess with party cannons, they are serious business! ![]()
I like your Diamond Tiara - Silver Spoon dynamic, they play of each other quite well.
In regards to "One bad apple":
Will Twist join the "Sugar lump rump"-routine and the dark side?
Or will she mediate DT and SS towards being nicer?
Or will they try to play the thing down? If so: Good luck with that in a town with Cutie Mark Crusaders Private Investigators! ![]()
In regards to "One bad apple":Will Twist join the "Sugar lump rump"-routine and the dark side?
Or will she mediate DT and SS towards being nicer?
I can't say that episode had been out very long (one day) when I was finishing this up, so any allusions to it are going to need to be retconned in. On the other hand, I liked Diamond being terrified of her mother, it links up nicely.
I'm confused about the ending. What just happened?
*Warning: kinda spoilers because the signs are (or should be) there.
Silver Spoon is first in line to inherit control of the Silver Family and it's fortunes, so any relationships she forms are treated by the Silvers as potential interests or mergers.
Mainly because they don't really know any other way of relating to ponies. Social grace having never been their strong suit.
I think I've discovered a fondness for Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara... One thing I would recommend, though, is getting some help with punctuation when it comes to dialogue. You've got several errors related to that in there. Send me a pm if you want my help.
Besides that, this is very intriguing and I'm loving the dynamic between SS and DT!
Bonbon the stand up comedian... Yeah, I see it! Head canon is now officially formed. Ah, another thing you may wanna work on is capitalization. All proper nouns (official names for people, places, and things) should be capitalized! Anyway, I'm getting rather curious as to what the big secret is all about... DT's cutie mark does seem pretty straightforward at the moment.
P-poor Diamond. That's gotta be rough for any young child to deal with... And Silver Spoon, too! I like how you have that they both reacted to the expectations heaped on them in different ways. They're not really alike at all, but still very good friends. I love it!
It's always the little details the author includes for the reader to find that I enjoy seeing, especially when they're clever. I like how you never capitalize Snails's name, denoting his unimportance to the titular characters who are referring to him. I may not like twist, but I like this story. I can really taste the lemon you added to the DT+SS salad, and it really gives it a nice aftertaste.







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