Wow. Just wow. Part 2 is here already?

Why must I love the changelings so much? It's illogical!

Maybe because Spy is one of my favorite classes.

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Hmm interesting start on 2nd part of story.

But i hope you won't make Chrysalis just next dumb villain with big ego for power. But after that Discord release hmm

wow just gahhhh i love this story so freakin much lol

>>14565391456539

Thank you!!! I'm so glad

>>14565511456551

also i thank you for finally letting us readers know what is happening with Spike. i know i've been pestering you about him lol

I should think that taking on the griffons would be a rather antisocial way for her species to commit suicide.

Great intro to storyline as Spike's letter explained a bit of what the Changelings overall plan are.

It makes me think that we may see Gilda in this storyline of yours, right ?

Also I must say even through the danger, he'll do whatever it takes to make Rarity happy and that means, watching over Sweetie Belle when she's not there.

Great update overall, but I wonder who will react to Spike's letter first ?

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

Part 2!  Yay!  

One typo found: "The changeling's can't harvest"

>>14608691460869

Thanks!

Chapter 2!  A little boring, but we're setting up the stage for battle.  Someone needs to take charge, and I'm sure wearing her magic-Element-crown, Twilight definitely looks the part.

Woooo hoooo they got a plan. Twilight ur awesome.

I just recently discovered my interest in spitfire. I hope her and the wonderbolts are okay

Awww no Leroy jenkins? Fine...

I do love a build up moment.

  I can suppose that Rainbow Dash's reunion with Gilda will not go well despite desperate times.

Even Twilight told Applejack to put aside her anger for the moment.

Still nice update as I can't wait to see what happens next in this tale of yours.

HAH! I told you! You have succumbed to the powers of the Flim Flam fan club!

...

Wait, what?

Anyway, nice. It reminds me of the setup time in TF2... Though I'm not sure why.

".." when you mean "...", twice in paragraph 3.

"canon" when you mean "cannon", thrice.

"Rarity, how are your legs,? aAre you able to walk now?"

"I can walk no problem." - I suggest putting a comma after "walk", or "I can walk without a problem", or otherwise re-writing it.

Am I being annoying?  I seem to be doing this every other chapter or something.

Is it wise for them to split up the Elements?  If one of the Elements gets stolen, then none of them work, unless you are planning some way to make them work.  Better to keep them all in one place, someplace safe, such as Zecora's hut.  Of course, if one of the Mane 6 is incapacitated, the Elements won't work either, but splitting the Elements just adds something that might go wrong.  Unless you are planning for them to be used remotely or something.

>>14626491462649

No, not annoying!  I want to improve my writing, so any help is appreciated!  I think part of the main problem is, I write really late at night, and I get so excited about what I'm writing about that I just don't notice these things, and I don't go back and edit.  I know I've done ".." a couple of times now, and I'm not sure why... I guess I just think when it's in speech, it doesn't necessarily matter, because speech can be sporadic and speech isn't always grammatical.  Or I've just become lazy.

And I know specifically I kept writing "canon" because I had just had an intense conversation about Disney canon, and what was and wasn't canon, and that was still in the back my mind.

Anything could go wrong in relation to the Elements.  The point of each pony being responsible for their own Element, was so that one pony wouldn't be singled out directly if there was a massive attack.  And they can't leave the Elements at Zecora's, they need them with them when they get to Canterlot.

a double update. i feel so lucky. applejack is one of my fav ponies

No she's not. Heaven is just another lie, and if you believe it, you're an idiot.

(please get the reference, please get the reference,)

'We're not soldiers!'

Shut up, bitch.

Anyway, call me crazy, but I think Titan was a father. Anyone else agrees?

oh thank goodness. when i realized that they were at sugarcube corner my thoughts went immediately to the twins. i'm so glad they are okay.

Titan should be changeling hohoho

Man, Fluttershy is really owning it in this storyline so far as she came to the aid of the two ponies who are ususally brave, but due to tradegy they aren't so strong as they used to. So great job using Fluttershy this way.

Great overall update to the chapter, as like Rainbow Dash, Applejack is a tough pony to  get through. With her upset it is a bit understandable for her to lash out like this in a time of grief.

Still, the time for action is now, and the time for true grieving will come later as Fluttershy said.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

AWWW, that was cute and honest of Pinkie to do, it's one thing leaving the grown ups like this, but it's a whole new situation when it comes to kids and babies.

I must say I too agree with Pinkie's methods. Lets just hope that Twilight and the others will agree with her.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

Haaa, totally forgot to leave my usual comments after chapter postings.

Whoops!

>>14675221467522

..I don't get it

>>14685151468515 The Walking Dead. Carl said it to Carol when she talked about...

Spoilers!

Get that one?

The pointer-outer of English errors has arrived.  Found two:

"lashing out because your hurt."

"I'm... I'm see what's happened"

"party cannon, Pinkie?"

'he "secured the area", Pinkie' - comma-quote placement may or may not be an error, depending on whether you prefer American style or British style punctuation.

"There was months old rotten cakes on the floor, upturned table and chairs." - use "were" because plural things follow, and you need either an article before "upturned" or to pluralize "table".  (I probably don't have to explain everything--you would have caught both if I had just pointed out that the sentence was wrong, right?)

>>14632201463220

But now they're going back to Zecora's to drop off the babies.  And they were planning to meet back at Zecora's in an hour at the end of Chapter 2 anyway.  So unless the Elements are capable of remote action, it would have been safer to leave them with Zecora so that there would be no chance of them getting stolen, assuming the ponies at Zecora's are trustworthy (and nopony said that they couldn't trust Zecora to keep the Elements safe).

>>14700471470047

Thanks unofficial, post-publishing editor!

Laughed my ass of at "I'm... I'm see what's happened"

>>14703241470324

You're assuming Zecora's not coming with them to battle it out at Canterlot?

Thanks again for the typos; I eventually notice them way later on, and always wonder why nopony pointed it out to me

>>14705101470510

No, they're going back to Zecora's before heading to Canterlot, right?

In chapter 2:

"Alright everypony, let's fan out.  Let's meet back here in an hour maximum.  Then we'll regroup, distribute supplies, and head for Canterlot."

So they could leave the Elements at Zecora's while they do the supply-getting, return there, get the Elements, distribute supplies, and then go to Canterlot.

>>14705421470542

Oh I see what you mean.   Yeah, they could have done that, but they didn't.

I thought you meant leaving them behind when they go to Canterlot.

>>14709401470940

So why didn't they?

>>14710851471085

What does it matter?  I guess it didn't occur to them.

>>14720291472029

It doesn't matter too much I guess.  I just found their decision strange.

>>14720531472053

Fair enough.  They'll all be together again soon.  For a while that is.

oh ya you take that you damn changelings. i really hope Trixie and flim will be okay in the end

Yeah, I saw that coming when he pronunced his SSSSS!!!

Nice update and it would be interesting to see what happens next now that Rainbow and Twilight realize the danger they're in.

Nice update, but while I know that it was wise for them to leave Apple bloom and the Twins in the safety of  Zecora's hut with food and supplies, surely they would at least left a few defensive spells just in case the Changlings do figure out a way into the forest, right ?

Nice update and interesting team, it's going to be a fun ride to Canterlot. I can't wait to see what happens next in this storyline of yours. So please do keep up the good work.

"canon", twice.

These changelings are sneaky!

>>14736911473691

You can't beat the magic of the forest; if Twilight felt there was any chance of the changelings finding a way in, she'd have done something like that, yes.

>>14740191474019

That double "n" just refuses to get in there

Oh, poo. When you say 'cliffhanger', you really mean it, don'tcha?

Well, that was to be expected. You said it yourself, a character is only dead when you see it happen with your own eyes. That's also the reason I think

Scootaloo is still alive somewhere.

yes yes yes i knew it, i knew Blinkie couldn't be dead :D

>>14815961481596 aww you just gave me hope for

I hate to break it to you, but as the author, I can tell you that Scootaloo isn't coming back.  While her death was off scene, Apple Bloom confirmed that the fall had killed her.  The rule doesn't always apply.

My version of Blinkie is just too awesome of a character to kill off—I love her!

>>14816401481640

Adrenaline can do strange things for a human or pony body. In what your body thinks are your last moments it's still able to perform a few impossible feats. Like flying with a body that's not made for it, or at least slowing down enough to survive.

>>14816711481671

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! That's really sad :applecry

And NOW AJ's going to lose it....

I have to say I didn't see that ending coming for this chapter as this storyline is gettting tragic by the chapter.

Also the girls are now down one element of harmony as only a miracle can truly save them all now.

Do keep up the good work upon such an exciting and emotional storyline like this one, as I found it a great enjoyment seeing it being told from Applejack's POV.

Dang, why is this story so sad too fast.

Nice update and great reminder of Inkie's way of understanding "Sign-Hooving"

HOW!?! JUST HOW DID BLINKIE SURVIVE ?

I mean that was one surprising chapter update, plus I can see this is where the tide maybe turning again for the good guys favor.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one as I cannot wait to see how Twilight and the others take the news.

>>14815961481596

I always thought that a characters only dead after you see the body and confirmed it.

"for Inkie's sense" - you meant sake right?  I don't know what "sense" means when used in that sense.

"I doubt they jut up and left."

Nochangeling messes with the Great and Powerful Trixie's pinecones!

Well, let's hope that Muffin is a Pegasus who can't fly very well. At least that way, the CMC can sort of continue on as they were. That being said, I should think that the next thing Luna will do is find Flutttershy and BM.

>>14818461481846

Yeah I meant sake :P

I knew it when I said he saw something. There was defiantly something up.

By now, it's obvious the ponies will win.

Sad, because I've been rooting for the Changelings since the beginning.

So far, better than the first part. Still some rather lackluster events here and there but overall not bad. The action is progressing better as well though it might be hurt more than intended by the constant change in perspectives. I am disappointed that we no longer have that potentially heartwrenching scene where the final hope that Scootaloo is alive is extinguished. Coulda been a good scene had you not confirmed her dead in the comments.

Overall, good job. I'll check in again when there are more updates. You can ask your bro to chew me out if you feel I was unfair with my comment. He knows me by Sketch. Also, if you want some art that isn't from a website for your new fic, let me know and we can talk about what you want.

Erm i don't get it, why they can't just zap that cocoon what hold Flim?

I dont get it... why not just free him?

>>14858731485873 Because he's too annoying and they're better off without him, so Twilight won't let them.

>>14858731485873

They're still in the meadow, the chapter just ended when they saw he was in the cocoon.  There's no indication that they've left him behind yet.

>>14856521485652

Thanks for the comment!

All stories need the lackluster events to build up on.  Can't make a house without some foundation

Why... do... I... like Changelings!

Now I feel how the people who like BLU team (e.g. almost everybody) feel.

To bad they'll inevitably lose.

I'm glad Im not in their survival group. I hate apples. I mean I really HATE apples. I vomit after eating two.

It's not that black and white

Yeah, so maybe not all changelings are evil, huh? HUH?

>>14871361487136 Because that would be convienent.

Just a small update

Ah. Well, Luna did 'sort of' encounter them. In any event, the story isn't going to be over just because the Changelings get defeated. They've left a lot of damage in their wake and the clean-up will take a bit.

i'm so happy to see they are both okay. i was worried you were going to kill off another character.

>>14937341493734

I'll try to refrain from doing so.

just not trixie

>>14937621493762

Trixie and her pinecones are too magical to destroy.

Plus, I plan to do a series of short-stories that happen post-reception (aka, set in the same world after the changelings are defeated) and I have a little storyline planned for Trixie.

Yay, great update!!!

I hope one of the Post-receptions stories are at least Scootaloo's funeral with Rainbow, Apple Bloom, and Sweetie Belle if they were all to survive this.

Also I do wonder how will Aj and her family move on from the lost of Granny Apple.

Do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

"Big Mac on the path of grass" - you mean patch.

Uh, thanks for un-cliffhanging somewhat.

Do Shadowbolts need to eat, like real ponies need to?

Will there be a relationship between Fluttershy and Big Mac? Because that's a bit cliche, but I'll be okay with it for a while.

>>14978251497825

I don't care if it's cliche, I like it.  But while they're waging war, there's no time to forge the beginnings of a relationship, so, there's just hints of relationships throughout the story.

Some of my post-stories might develop these.

>>14991251499125 Welp, I'll be okay with it then.

>>14991311499131

Glad to hear :)

"I guess our only option right now is

to continue on foot"

Shouldnt that be hooves ? Anyway, great chapter.

>>14995561499556

Haha, I remember thinking "on hoof, continue on hoof", but I guess my fingers had other ideas.

Thanks!

>>14991371499137 But who has time to have a relationship in the apocalypse?

Oh my god, she is the most beautiful girl I ever laid eyes on.

I'm gonna kill a Tank in her honor. No, wait, I'll kill a Tank, and then name it after her!

Zoey, Zoey, Zoey, Zoey!

You've got problems boy. Deep down problems.

Besides everyone's favorite zombie killing mechanic.

>>15027741502774

Sorry Bookworm, once again your references escape me.

>>15028471502847 Left 4 Dead 2, The Passing. When the new survivors meet the old ones. And then Ellis falls in love with Zoey.

Wow. This is a rather nasty turn of events.

Bits and pieces of an overall plan of evil.

I, too, am curious about the Changelings master plan for Equestria.

Nice update, please do keep up the good work upon such a great story.

>>15032701503270

Elaborate?  Nasty because they left Flim behind or... because Chrysalis is planning something so evil it will blow your socks off?

>>15033161503316

The latter, of course. Time for her to totally freaking die.

"they figure they killed of Fluttershy"

(... but they didn't, so )

Is there ANY chance for peace? Some Silurians killed many humans, yet the Doctor is still friends with them.

"Alright everypony; is everyone ok?" Twilight asked

Why not just- "Alright, is everypony ok? I think the everyone is pointless but its just my opinion

>>15052431505243

It made sense in my head.

i hope pinkie aims that cannon of hers straight at Chrysalis's head

awesome i was so excited to see two new chapters. i did notice one thing in chapter 12 you have twilight saying they need to conserver their power fire, she should probably say fire power. also the twins  aren't both colts, one is a filly