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The story on what would have happened if sergeant Forge hadn't perished.
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Pinkie Pie seems different to the residents of Ponyville. Very different.
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Something's not quite right. by Jessofages

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Tragedy Slice of Life

Just an average day in Ponyville and everypony is going about their daily business. Except for one particular pink earth pony, who awakes to this seemingly normal day, except she has no memory of her former friends and only remembers herself as the dreary, gloomy and smile-less rock farmer.

Will her friends be able to work out what's up with their favourite party pony ?

First Published
17th Oct 2012

Last Modified
18th Oct 2012

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Diamond Sparkle

#1 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

I like it.

TheNumba1shadowfan

#2 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

You have drawn me in, a very interesting concept. Also, I like this version of Pinkamena. Cranky, a loner and pretty blunt. :pinkiehappy:

Librarian

#3 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

So far quite good. Pacing feels ok. Pinkamina is quite believable character. Go on.

And just to nitpick something. Use commas to set off the direct address("Hey, Pinkie Pie !", "There she is, Twi." <- that is slightly confusing without comma)

loliwillpwnnothing

#4 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

:pinkiecrazy:

Jessofages

#5 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

>>14561791456179

Thanks for the tip. I wasn't quite sure whether to do that or not when they were directly addressing one another.

I'll make sure to do that later on.

Tangerine Blast

#6 · Chapter 1 · 30w, 3d ago ·

This is awesome! Personaly I think Pinkie is very cute with a flat mane, when she isn't a maniac. Cute: :pinkiesad2: Not Cute: :pinkiecrazy:

TheNumba1shadowfan

#7 · Chapter 2 · 30w, 3d ago ·

Yes please, no psycho Pinkamena. That's been done to death, and CrookedTrees made it popular. This one we have here is original and perfect IMO, cranky, asocial, stubborn, blunt and sarcastic. :pinkiehappy:

Tangerine Blast