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    • Red Sky At Dawn
      A spinoff of Steadfast sky; five unlikely friends seek harmony in a medieval dictatorship.

      31,228 words · 204 views · 7 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Crisis In Equestria
      An intelligent superweapon lands in Equestria, causing chaos and becoming human.
      9,495 words · 242 views · 4 likes · 1 dislikes

    In a land ruled by the Shadow Stallion, cruelty and hatred have become commonplace, rendering friendship a rare trait. Five unlikely friends must journey through a medieval Equestria under a tyrannical dictatorship, seeking relics to restore harmony. A superweapon from another world, a magical prodigy, a playful orphan, a kindly sister and a hungry changeling a forced together then torn apart in a quest to save the world. However, a terrible prophecy denies them acess to harmony...

    And forces a much darker destiny upon the heroes.

    Set in the universe of Steadfast Sky by thegreypotter.

    First Published
    16th Oct 2012
    Last Modified
    17th Nov 2012

    Comments ( 4 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Couple small continuity errors.... like, how many places can you see a shooting star on a cloudy night? And heck if Equestria's seen a proper, sunshiney sunrise in a long, long time :rainbowlaugh: Unless he broke the cloud layer, like, completly.... hm!

    Other than a few rough formatting issues, this is actually better than expected! How long have you been writing for? Seems like your prose is a little rough, but with a little time and practice, I can see this becoming something pretty great!

    #2 · Chapter 2 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    There's a lot of small formatting errors! You keep missing quotation marks! :rainbowlaugh:

    #3 · Chapter 4 · 33w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Very Ponyastic fill!:ajbemused:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Seems like a good story so far. Definitely needs to be edited though, minor errors and discontinuities. Other than that it's good.

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