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'John Smith' has settled in Ponyville with his wife and two daughters for many peaceful years. When the TARDIS gets a temporal distress call, Doctor Whooves and his family find themselves lost in time. Now Derpy must contend with not only monsters and maniacs, but the future and past versions of her husband!
Yes, YES, classic Doctor references for the win! 
It's about time somebody did a Who meets Who meets Who story. Also, Third Doctor is best Doctor, and please tell me Savory is Jo Grant; Jo is awesome, I always imagined Ditzy to be like her when paired as the Doctor's companion, since they are both clumsy and not too bright (how I see Derpy at least), but good hearted and brave. 
You simply must hurry up with the next episode, I command you! ***** stares into eyes **** You will obey, YOU WILL OBEY!!!!!!!
So far, so stunning.
Well written, good character perspectives, and a healthy dose of humor and serious in perfect proportions. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to find out the cause of this little dimensional dilemma. I have my fingers crossed for the Master. Or Discord. Or the Master riding Discord. Or Pinky.
Ya know, one of those sorts of things.
Hmm, interesting combonations of Doctors. Third, Tenth, and Eleventh? I would have included Ninth. Ninth Doctor is best Doctor. How will you be naming them to keep the confusion to a minimum? We have John Smith for Ten, what about Three and Eleven? Simply describing them could still be a litle confusing. Just something to think about.
Also, self-sealing Stem bolts. A DS9 refference, perhaps?
Very good read, tracked like a mo-fo. ALLONS-Y!!!
Bual, Savory is my tribute to all the great female Doctor companions. As you’ll see, she also has some other importance yet to be made clear…
Joeroetzer…INDEED.
Monkfish, great eye!
Jake, I cannot believe you g the DS9 ref. That’s serious geek cred.
Morex25, I intend to keep it accessible. 
That’s why I went to the trouble of having the Doctor explain things to Dinky; I want the readers who’ve never seen the Doctor to know what’s going on.
Normally I steer clear of Doctor fics, but for some reason this one caught my attention. Just as surprisingly, I'm not regretting it.
Figuring out who's who is difficult, especially with the sporadic descriptions and repeated names. I hope we do some more thorough character establishment in the second chapter, because I got lost more than once reading this. So long as that's fixed I can see this being a great success.
Five stars and tracking.
oh, the three doctors huh? I've thought about this and i am sure the movie explains everything, you see, if they touch one another a paradox is formed, but then I think, it makes no sense simply because they've all time traveled and that would or should make it so that the universe would expect the time traveler to come into contact with itself, as long as there isn't a ow...i'm going to stop now before my hoof get stuck in mah mouth
It's the Third Doctor; the car-driving Man of Action with Venusian Kung-Fu! He's just such a perfect foil to the other two. MLP has only had cameos on him and the 5th, and the 5th is very like the others two I'm using. The Third was a natural fit for conflict.
Hoping to get some work on that and School Daze tonight. I have about 1,800 words written of two and 2,400 written in three and four. Hopefully this weekend; I've seen so many Doctor Whoof fics get the the hypothetical 'first commercial break' and die. I'm going the distance.
Actually, the Doctor has met himself multiple times. At the time, the Time Lords were still around, so they had to bend the rules for the first encounter, and the Doctor was forcibly removed from his time stream in the second. One other time it happened at the end of the fourth Doctor's life, when a mysterious "watcher" was actually a future Doctor.
Dear God...it's beautiful...
The Third, Tenth and Eleventh Doctors...all meeting up...and it seems like Eleven's got some explaining to do.
Third's gotta be tearing his hair out at the idea of becoming a father, Tenth is likely to murder Eleven for whatever reason he's no longer with Ditzy, and Eleven is going to feel very awkward introducing Pond to Doo.
All in all, well done you!
>How could a mare named Sparkler not know what fireworks were?
You do a great job of showing that Dinky is a child and thinks like a child!
>He shrugged. “I was learning nuclear physics at her age. Ah, the way education has changed.”
>It’s called the TARDIS, Dinky. It means ‘Time and Relative Dimension in Space.’
Should "and" and "in" be capitalized? I mean, they are only a conjunction and a preposition, but they're capitalized in the acronym. 
>Think of it, Ditzy; our first family trip in the TARDIS! I’ve always been rubbish on family trips; I skip to the good parts.
[Extensive list of grammatical corrections removed, because they've been corrected]
My Celestia this is awesome! I may not be a Dr. Who fan, hell I have never seen an episode but I love this nonetheless. The interaction between The Doctors were incredible and belivable, The 11th(?) Doctor calling Ditzy her husband's nickname for her was a nice touch, meaning that he still loves her.
Also the last sentence is made of Gold. 
But I have to correct you there Doc. only the flutterponies can. Are they going to make an apearance? I rather not, but Sea ponies are OK.
Aside from this chapter needing a serious proof reading, "The doctor raised an eyebrow. “Well, she’s got wings instead of a horn. With two pegasi for parents and no history of unicorns in the family, that’s kind of irregular...." being among the most prominent mistakes, It was well worth the wait.
Also, I called what the monster was the second the first blob was shown.
OH MY GOOOOOOOOODDD THAT ENDING
Amazing
I love your use of alliteration. However, you seem to make quite a few errors with fingers/hands instead of hooves.
>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2UlRhugjlMM&feature=fvst
>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gN51u0yC_4E&feature=related
>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K3L2JthAjwg&feature=related
Man, I've got to tell you, "&feature=" tags are turn-offs to me. 
Great stuff, this. It seriously recreates the essence of an episode of Doctor Who.
Cerulean, are the Youtube links not working for you? 
They show up as text hyperlinks for me and a few others. I did eliminate the feature tag for one of the URL.
Also...you have convinced me as to the reason why writers need editors. I triple-checked that damn story, and those still got past me!
Thanks for the pointers, Hornfrog. You actually made me add new dialogue in one of the 'hand' instances.
Wait until you see the ending for part three. I'm planning this as a four chapter story like classic Who, and each of the first three chapter get that classic 'Oh, crap, did that really happen-OOH-WE-OOOOH' ending.
Stoic, I was seriously tempted to like to the song you just quoted instead of the end theme.
Blankflank, the beastie in question is just so fascinating in it's implications I had to pconvert it to a Who beastie.
Good catch, Morex25! That's why I add the 'SAD' tag even if there's not a sad ending. I intend to pull on everybody's heartstrings a little.
No, the links are perfectly functional to me -- just personal turn-offs because the tags are wastes of text and do nothing. I mean, they've got to be there for a reason, right? "Related" has me thinking that they track link referrals. If a fan-fic author links a bunch of readers to a video with the "related" tag, for all we know, we might be throwing off some analytics at YouTube; they'll say to themselves, "Oh, hey, this video gets most of its views from people who watch it after watching a related video. Now, how can we take advantage of these patterns of popularity? . . ." and then go and do silly things based in logic when they've been misinformed, because that fan-fic writer is the only one of those viewers who actually found the video through a related video.
Maybe I'm just being some nitpicking kid, though.
Cult leader Fluttershy will save them. lol
But in all seriousness I am loving this. The only gripe I have is my inability to distinguish the Doctors at times but I blame myself for not watching DW. I can say no more then you have made me want to watch the series.
>>181999 Ah, so you're using the alt-Smooze: a mass similar to the 'gray goo' fear of nannites crossed with "The Blob" crossed with the Replicators from Stargate SG1.
Essentially, it touched you and it absorbs you, converting your flesh into more of itself.
Blobs are why Star Trek phasers have that disintegration setting. ;3
I have only one thing to say:
OH MAN OH DAMN OH MAN OH DAMN
I CAN'T EVEN
I'm not a fan of the show or fics starring the Dotctor but for this art piece I take off my invisible hat, good sir.
You make me want to watch all the episodes from the first Dr to the last.
Ditzy kicking-flanks it's always awesome and the way you write the 3 Doctors is incredible, I feel like I had known them for years, all of them feel unique, the same with both companions Savory and Ripple, at first I thought they were in this just to fill space but I really like them despite not knowing anything about their original counterparts, that is a mark of a great writer, again sir I give you my respect and admiration.
Even though it feels like ages to see and update, if this fic continues to be as good as it is now, I don't mind waiting for this great crafted story.
Thanks for the words, Morex. I was hoping to write this for non-Who fans to enjoy, and I'm glad I succeeded. Chapter four is finished to the tune of 2,500 words; I should have it within a week or two.
Now I needed to finish Ch 4 to see what you'll post next.
Now listen, everybody. Chapter 3 has a pretty big reference to another classic cartoon.
I wonder if anyone will get it.
That's what I expected, but I wasn't getting a particularly matt smith vibe from him (he should've had a fez perhaps? ). Interestingly enough, the blue unicorn chap physically struck me as more the Peter Davison Doctor, if I recall correctly. Loving the story, by the way, and the references.
Well, 3 is the Advisor, 10 is John, and Top Hat is in-between the two if I don't remember wrongly, so we know that 1, 2 and 11 is wrong. We also know it ain't the fourth, since they mention "the buffoon with the teeth and the scarf". Though I do know 7 has a hat, and the umbrella which has been used before, so I do believe it is 3, 7 and 10 who are on an adventure! Also, if I don't remember wrongly Pond Ripple was also red maned, which is a trait that Mel (7's companion) also share.
In any case, awesome fic! Please continue and colour me intrigued!
Here's the inspriation...
It's Matt Smith in his Amy's wedding outfit. To convey Matt Smith, I make his gesture, explain things in weird way, talk about the rules,Say silly things seriously. Also, he's traveling with a redhead Scoltish filly named Pond. Picture him saying this next part; my wife said it was a very Matt Smith moment, but YMMV.
"Top Hat raised a hoof trembling with anger. “We could take mine. It’s got more updates. Well, more repairs.” He cast a solemn look at the UNIT Doctor. “It’s got a swing,” he whispered with deadly seriousness."
No prob. I needed a past Doctor to be shocked at John's family, so I chose the 3rd as a contrast since he's a kung fu gentlemen man of action. Great contrast! 11th was fixed, since I needed a future Doctor to drop cryptic hints about the fate of John's family.
You've managed to get a OH SHIIIIII- reaction from me with every update. You sir are a literary genius. Keep on trucken :D
Remind me tomorrow, there were a few typos I noticed, but its too late at night to go back through and find them again :)
Oh yes, and before I go, your version of Ditsy combined with one other are my absolute headcannon for her character. I'll be writing her into mine eventually (if I can ever get past the endless barrel of exposition that my story needs), and other than her understanding extremely advanced maths but being unable to give the proper words to it, she'll be bloody near identical to yours. Thank you for giving her such wonderful characterization :)
Oh, and you've captured ten and matt brilliantly. Its a bit hard to tell them apart sometimes, but it works well enough that it doesn't really matter. (Which isn't you, it happened in the two other times the series timecrossed multiple doctors at once too)
>>372641 The End has her doing dynamic maths, dealing with giant variables, and understanding how bees make their paths, but because of a lack of such mathematical rigor in the mlp universe, no one knows how smart she is. It made me sad, but happy to have a big piece of personality for her.
Also, for further headcanon (and a good read) The Hostess has my favorite definition of Big Mac
"Derpy shook her head with a pleased smile. “Honey, we’re in a slave pen on an alien spaceship. Someone is going down for this.”"
You, sir, just won a track and a "Like" click for that line.
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