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      After a Physics experiment goes wrong, James must deal with a world where magic defies science.

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      Three hundred years ago, the Kingdom of Nokshire, led by the tyrannical King Bridrick, invaded Equestria, sparking a war that lasted for more than six years. These are the stories of the ponies and humans that lived and fought in that war.
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    The God Particle

    Chapter 29: The Loyalty of Dragons


    Spike walked down another flight of stairs, then turned to his right, proceeding down the long tapestry lined corridor to the throne room. Finally, he arrived outside the tall gold and silver inlaid doors bearing the royal cutie marks of the two princesses. The two guards standing at the doors recognized him and paid him no mind. He nodded slightly to them, although they gave no response, then raised his clawed hand to knock. He paused. If I go through with this, Twilight will never trust me again, he thought to himself, lowering his hand. But then he shook his head. No … I'm doing it because I care about her. I have to go through with it. He raised his hand once more to knock, but again paused. All his life, since Twilight hatched him from an egg, he had trusted her. He trusted her with his well-being—even with his very life. Should he really stop trusting her now? She had trusted him enough to let him know what she was working on—trusted that he would keep her secret. Could he really betray her trust? He glanced at the two Unicorn Guards standing on either side of the door. By now, they were giving him strange looks. But still, neither of them said anything.

    He made up his mind, lowering his hand from the door and sighing. He turned away, his shoulders lowered slightly and looking at the floor. Then he started on his way back toward the guest room. You better know what you're doing, Twilight Sparkle, he thought to himself. He was already second-guessing his decision. But deep down inside himself, he knew he had made the right one. Mutual trust. That was the most important cement that bonded his relationship with Twilight. If he cracked that cement by telling Celestia what was going on, the bond would be weakened. And if they didn't have trust, what did they have?

    Arriving back at their room, he raised his hand and knocked.

    "I'm here, Princess," the dejected voice of his unicorn friend called back. He cringed at the sound of her voice: Sadness, and fear. He could hear both in the sound. No doubt, she was afraid Princess Celestia would punish her.

    "It's me, Twilight," he answered. "Just me."

    The door glowed with a lavender aura as Twilight magically opened it. He stepped inside, stopping as he saw her.

    She sat on the bed on her haunches, her tail curled around her. The end of it was frayed and wet—wet with tears, he thought. She'd been crying with her face buried in her tail. Her eyes were reddened from the salty tears that had been flowing from them. The fur on her muzzle was still wet, and her ears lay flat on her head in defeat. He felt terrible now. Terrible that he had put her through this—that he had ever said he was going to tell The Princess.

    She looked at the floor, sniffing. He could see more tears trying to come. Then, she spoke in a quiet, timid voice.

    "So how bad is it … Am I going back to magic kindergarten?"

    "I didn't tell her, Twilight … I couldn't go through with it."

    She looked up at him, sniffing again a couple of times. "You didn't?" Her voice was slightly perkier now.

    He only shook his head back and forth once in response.

    Her ears perked back up, a small smile returning to her muzzle. She wiped her eyes once with a forehoof. Her horn glowed, and Spike felt himself being lifted off the ground, surrounded by a lavender bubble.

    "Whoa!" he exclaimed as he rapidly floated through the air over to her. She spread her forelegs and wrapped them around him, squeezing him tightly to her once he got there.

    "Oh, thank you Spike! Thank you so much!" she exclaimed, all of the sadness and fear in her voice gone.

    He grunted slightly from the tight embrace. "… You're welcome Twilight. But you have to promise me you'll be careful. And that you won't try to open any more portals without telling me first. So I can be there to help you if something goes wrong again."

    "I promise, Spike. I promise," she said, still holding him tightly to her.

    He wrapped his arms around her neck, hugging her back gently, smiling at seeing her happy again. But inside, his heart was still in turmoil. He was her faithful assistant. And his place was to be loyal to her. Loyalty no matter what. But if anything happened to her … With Celestia as my witness, I'm going to ask AJ to teach me how to use a rope to tie you up so you can't get in trouble, he thought to himself …

    ...

    Ambassador Firewing nervously paced back and forth through the large clearing in the forest. At the sound of wind above him, he turned his great head skyward to see another crimson dragon coming in for a landing. The other dragon touched down in front of him, folded his wings, then gave a stiff bow. Firewing was sure the bow was intended more to be mocking than respectful. He narrowed his eyes, not even waiting for the other dragon to rise from his bow.

    "What in the name of all the ancestors were you thinking, Cinderfang?" he yelled in a booming voice, the other dragon crouching backwards at the sudden verbal assault.

    "It will blow over, Firewing. It will be forgotten about soon enough," the other dragon said, coming up from his bow. There were damaged scales on his neck and head, a few dried streaks of blood—areas where the Pegasus Guard had made some good strikes, Firewing assumed.

    "No, Cinderfang! It won't blow over! It's not like you stole one of their milk cows. You attacked two squadrons of Royal Guards!"

    "The Elder Council will protect me, Firewing," he waved a wing dismissively.

    "No, Cinderfang. Not this time they won't." He picked up a scroll, unrolled it, and thrust it in front of the other dragon's muzzle. "Written by Celestia herself. Asking … No, demanding that the Elder Council turn you over to her for punishment."

    The other dragon glared at the letter, but now there was a glint of fear in his eyes. He seemed to shrink slightly upon staring at the writing on the paper. "I will not go to Canterlot. I will not be judged by some … pony." He spat the word pony as if he had just bitten into a piece of stink weed. "Not even if it is Celestia herself. I will not spend the rest of my life rotting away in her dungeon."

    "If it were up to me, you would Cinderfang! You should thank the ancestors the rest of the Elder Council is not so willing as I to turn you over to her."

    "Why should you care, Firewing?" the other dragon spat venomously. "Was it not Celestia herself who scarred you for life? Who left your wings and chest disfigured? When she used the solar flame to burn you? Why should you have any love for her at all!"

    "She was not herself when that happened! And I will not get into this with you."

    "Of course you won't," Cinderfang sneered. "Or perhaps you have no love for her at all. Perhaps, you are simply too afraid she will strip you of the power she has granted you—granted the rest of the Council of Nine. We wouldn't want that, now would we. The Elder Council losing their power over the rest of us."

    Firewing was silent for several long seconds before speaking again. He looked the other dragon straight in the eye, his golden irises glaring with anger. "You, Cinderfang, are hereby banished from the Kingdom of Equestria. If I ever see you within the boundaries of Equestria again, I will march you into Canterlot and turn you over to Celestia myself. Now get out of my sight. You have one day to get your affairs in order and be gone."

    For a moment, the other dragon's eyes were wide with surprise. But only for a moment. They quickly narrowed. His chest expanded rapidly as he took in a deep breath of air, preparing to unleash a torrent of flame.

    "You dare threaten an elder?" Firewing boomed out. "Do not even try it, Cinderfang! You may have youth on your side, but I have experience. And have you forgotten that in addition to scarring me, Celestia also gifted me with resistance to flame attacks when she realized what she had done to me? The most intense flame you can produce will not leave a mark on me."

    Cinderfang snarled deeply, but released the breath of air he had taken, now simply glaring daggers at him, but saying nothing.

    "Get out of my sight," Firewing snarled at the other dragon. "Get out of my sight before I kill you myself. I'm sure Celestia will understand if I tell her I had no choice but to kill you because you became combative when I tried to capture you."

    Cinderfang glared back at him and snarled. Firewing braced himself for any attack that might come. But it never did. Instead, Cinderfang spread his wings and took to the sky, turning to the west and disappearing over the treeline.

    Firewing frowned, lowering his eyes, looking down at his scarred chest now. It was true, what Cinderfang had said. It was Celestia who had disfigured him. But she had not been herself when it happened, and he had remained loyal to her, maintaining a good relationship with her.

    He shifted his eyes from his chest to the large amulet hanging around his neck. With one claw, he lifted it, looking at it. It was a solid gold casting of Celestia's cutie mark. At the center of the solar disk, was Luna's crescent moon cutie mark. At the bottom of the two royal symbols, the image of the dragon fang. Around the edges of the amulet, words written in the ancient dragon script translated to Elder Ambassador to the Royal Pony Sisters—the amulet of the Elder Dragon Council Ambassador to Canterlot.

    He let the amulet slide off his claw to dangle down his neck again. For over a thousand years, he had served as the Ambassador to Canterlot, having been appointed to the position at the young age of only four hundred years—young by dragon standards at least. In actual years, he was older than even Celestia herself, although he was not immortal like she was. He figured he probably had another four hundred good years left in him to serve.

    He thought about this most recent turn of events, sighing to himself. He had a good relationship with Princess Celestia. He had been Ambassador to Canterlot since even before the original Nightmare Moon conflict. And he had been there to comfort her after Luna's banishment. He could still remember it like it was yesterday. After the Elements of Harmony had done their terrible work … after Luna was gone … it was said that Celestia's cries of anguish could be heard throughout the entire world. That day, she swore she would never touch the Elements of Harmony again—those cursed objects she had called them—cursed by everything that was evil. It was he who had to stop her from outright destroying them in her anguish. And when he had stopped her, she had turned her anguish against him, nearly destroying him instead. The scars, where she had used the solar flame to burn him, were still visible on his chest, wings, and neck.

    But he had remained loyal to her, and he had comforted her. Many times throughout those thousand years he had done so. As the first decades passed, all of the ponies alive during the time of Luna's banishing grew old and died, and the time came where he was the only being other than Celestia who even remembered Luna at all. He was the only one she could talk to about her sister who would truly understand. And their relationship had grown even closer. There were many nights, where she had slept in his cave, curled up next to him, not wanting to be alone. For every night, she had to endure the torment of raising the moon and seeing the image of the dark alicorn that used to be her sister emblazoned on it. And then, she dreaded going back to Canterlot. For she knew that come morning, she would have to endure the torture all over again when she lowered the moon. It had never gotten any easier for her, he remembered. For a thousand years, every morning, and every night, Celestia had endured the torture. And every morning and every evening he had been there for her. Countless nights, he had been there for her. He was not immortal like she was. But dragons were very long lived—longer lived than any other mortal species in Equestria. And he was the only one who could even begin to understand things from her viewpoint.

    He looked up at the sky again. The sun had set, and twilight was descending on the forest, the very first stars becoming visible in the darkening sky … ever darkening. "I fear we will soon face dark times indeed, my Princess. Darker than the darkest of nights," he said quietly to himself. "Cinderfang will be the least of our worries …"

    ...

    James left the faculty dorm and started towards the physics building early the next morning. The construction ponies were out in force again, taking down all of the Summer Sun decorations they had put up the week before. Trash littered the ground, as if a carnival had just left, or there had been a large concert the night before. Custodial ponies walked down the streets and sidewalks with their carts, cleaning it all up. The massive crowds which had flooded the city just twenty four hours earlier were gone now, the campus seeming eerily quiet without the crowd noise and constant rush of Pegasus Guard patrols overhead. The only sound now was the occasional breeze, perhaps accompanied by the sound of a piece of trash it had caught up and was blowing across the street. The only place in the city now that would be truly crowded was the train station, with ponies who had stayed until the end of the last day rushing to get back to their home towns. Even though the Summer Sun Celebration was over, for some of those ponies, the work it generated was just beginning. Applejack and Pinkie Pie had hundreds of orders to fill for new customers. Rarity had clothing to design and make.

    In most ways, it was a relief that the city of Canterlot was back to normal and the large crowds were gone. But there was also certain sadness to it. Like the sadness that comes after the last day of a large fair, when all of the rides are shut down, all of the venues closed. The spark of excitement in the city over the last few days was gone. And now the routine of it all would start again.

    He sighed as he kept walking. He wished he would have been able to go to the train station and see Twilight Sparkle and the others off. But he knew they had left last night. After the dragon attack, and the long flight home, he was in no condition to go see them off. That, and he knew Twilight would have asked him questions he was not prepared to answer. He was, at least sure they had probably made it back to Ponyville safely. If they hadn't, he thought he would probably know by now … at least he hoped they made it back safely.

    He arrived at the physics building, went inside, and climbed the stairs to his office. Unexpectedly, the gray mane and tailed colonel was waiting for him down the hallway, outside his office.

    "Doctor Peterson," he acknowledged. "Her Majesty, Princess Celestia, requires your presence in the throne room at the castle." There was a definite hint of disappointment in the Colonel's voice.

    "Right now, sir? This early in the morning?"

    "Yes," he responded simply.

    "… Did she say what it was about, sir?"

    "Yes."

    "… May I ask what it was about sir?"

    "No, you may not. She will tell you when you get there," he said, a tone of annoyance joining the disappointment now, although James got the impression the annoyance was not with him. "Do not keep her waiting," the Colonel stated a bit sharply.

    "Yes, sir. Thank you for coming here to tell me, sir," James responded, then turned around, and proceeded back down the hallway. Colonel Stardust only grunted in response as he started to descend the stairs.

    Back outside, and on his way to the castle, his mind raced. Had he done something wrong? Colonel Stardust had seemed disappointed. But again, the annoyance and disappointment didn't seem to be with him. Was it with Celestia herself? That seemed doubtful. Even if the Colonel Stardust was annoyed with Celestia, it was highly unlikely he would have let it show. Yet it seemed odd that Colonel Stardust wouldn't tell him what Celestia wanted, even though he apparently knew.

    The closer he got to the castle, the more nervous he became. Please don't let it be bad news about Twilight and the others, he thought frantically to himself. That was his biggest concern right now. What if they hadn't made it back safely? And the fact that Colonel Stardust refused to tell him the news himself …

    He arrived at the castle, went inside, and made his way along the now familiar route to the throne room.

    "Doctor Peterson," the Unicorn Guard on the right of the door acknowledged. "Her Majesty is expecting you." The two guards turned and knocked on the door. The guards on the inside unlocked it and it swung open slowly. Celestia was already seated on the throne at the other end of the room.

    He entered, walked down the carpet, stopping to kneel and bow at the required distance.

    "James, please stand," the alicorn said quickly. There was no hint of sadness or anger in her voice at all, which helped get rid of the remaining nervousness he was feeling.

    He rose to his feet at the same time Celestia rose to her hooves. She stepped down the stairs leading up to the throne and he bowed his head respectfully as she approached him.

    "First, to put your mind at ease, I want to let you know that I've received confirmation from Spike that they all arrived safely back in Ponyville."

    "Thank you, Your Majesty," he breathed a sigh of relief at hearing that.

    "But that is not why I called you here this morning." She paused for several long moments before continuing. "What I am about to offer you, James, is considered by most, to be the highest honor it is possible to achieve in Equestria. But it is not a life of glory or fame. Rather, it is a life of service to Equestria. A life of servitude to me and my sister. It is not a commitment to be entered into lightly. For if you accept what I am about to offer, you will be bound to me and my sister, both by oath, and by magic. This bond will last for the rest of your life, and can never be broken.

    "There is no shame in declining what I am about to offer, and you will not be thought any less of if you do choose to decline. Most who are offered, do decline, being unwilling to make the commitment required. Of those who initially accept, most change their minds before taking the final oath. For once the final oath has been taken, you can never return to the life you had before taking the oath."

    He listened closely, and she stopped speaking. He waited for several moments for her to continue. When she didn't, he thought she must be waiting for a response from him. "I'm listening, Your Majesty," he answered. After all, there was no harm in at least listening.

    "My sister and I would like to offer you the chance to become a member of the Royal Council. If you accept, you must leave the Academy, although you will still work on projects there with Theory Point. You must move into the castle with the rest of the Council. You will be at the beck and call of me and my sister at all times. Always, we must know where you are. You will not be able to leave the castle courtyard without permission from one of us.

    "As I said, what I offer is not a life that most ponies are willing to accept. And most who are asked, decline. If you wish, you may decline right now and be thought no less of. But it is an offer that can only be made once. If it is declined, it can never be offered again according to Council law. You cannot however, accept right now. You must wait three days before doing that. Council law requires the waiting period because of the permanent life changing nature of the decision. Those three days, must be spent solely on making this decision."

    "… Am I allowed to speak to others about this, Your Majesty? To ask them for advice?"

    "You may speak to whomever you like. But the decision must be yours, and yours alone."

    "I … am truly honored, Your Majesty … I will consider it very carefully," he answered, his mind really at a loss for words, reeling from the magnitude of the decision she had just placed before him.

    "I know you will," she smiled. "Now go, and consider what has been offered. I will not see you again until the three days have passed and you are prepared to give me your answer."

    "Yes, Your Majesty." He stepped backwards, knelt and bowed, before standing back up, turning, and leaving the throne room. He felt strangely uncomfortable inside the castle now, like a feeling of claustrophobia despite the large enormous open spaces inside the castle. No wonder I'm claustrophobic, he thought to himself. They're trying to trap me … the same way the aisling is. He felt like it was a game of tug of war, and he was the rope they were all pulling on—both sides in a race to bind him before the other could do so. The magnitude of the decision Celestia had just laid on him weighed down on him heavily. A million questions flew through is mind. Like a television displaying all channels at the same time, he found he couldn't stay focused on any of them.

    The long, narrow corridors seemed to close in around him as he walked through the halls—they were narrow for defensive reasons, so that any invading force would only be able to proceed down them two abreast. But right now, they seemed even narrower than usual. Even once he reached the enormous grand foyer, the feeling of claustrophobia remained. He was relieved to finally step outside the doors. But even outside, he still found it difficult to focus on any one question.

    At least she had said he could ask others for advice. He made his way back to the Academy campus. But instead of going back to the physics building, he went to the administration building. Colonel Stardust might as well be his first stop. After all, presumably he already knew what Celestia had wanted.

    "Come," said the voice on the other side of the door when he knocked.

    He opened the door, entering and then standing in front of the large cherry wood desk, the gray maned pony regarding him with an unreadable expression.

    "Doctor Peterson … No doubt, you have spoken with Her Majesty."

    "Yes, sir. I have."

    "And what is it I can do for you?"

    "I'd … like your advice, sir."

    The unicorn hesitated for a moment. "It's your decision, Doctor Peterson. You alone must make it. But choose carefully, for the decision you make is one you will have to live with for the rest of your life."

    James was silent for several seconds. Still, he could read nothing in the Colonel's face. Finally, he responded.

    "Yes, sir … But what would you do, sir? If it were you?"

    The pony looked at him for a few seconds, as if unsure he wanted to answer that question. Then he sighed slightly before answering. "You put me in a tough spot, Doctor Peterson … On the record, as your commanding officer, and commander of this Academy, I must tell you that you are an extremely valuable faculty member. Your teaching skills are impeccable, your research detailed and flawless, and I would hate to lose you … Off the record, as your friend … if it were me? And I were younger and did not have a family? I don't think I could pass up the opportunity to be on the Royal Council. Even with all the sacrifices it entails."

    James nodded slightly. "Thank you for your compliments, sir … and for your honesty."

    "You're a smart pon … human, James … you will make the right decision. Now go. You will want to take advantage of all the time you can to consider it."

    "Thank you for your time, sir."

    "You're welcome. And good luck, James," the unicorn responded as he left the office.

    Once outside he made his way back to the dorm, going to Theory Point's room instead of his own. Please let her be home, he thought to himself as he knocked on her door.

    She opened the door, looking like she had only recently gotten out of bed. Her mane was still unbrushed and she was not wearing any clothes. Of course, it wasn't unusual for ponies not to wear clothes, but this was the first time he'd seen Theory Point without any, given the Academy uniform requirements.

    "James? What are you doing here so early in the morning? Come in." She took a few steps to the side, clearing the door so he could get in. "What's on your mind?"

    "I didn't wake you, did I?"

    "No. I was up already. Just starting to get ready."

    He nodded. "Are you doing alright? After the dragon and all?"

    "Still a little shook up I guess … but I'll be fine. That's not why you came over here, though. You could have asked me that when I got to the lab." She eyed him curiously now.

    He nodded, hesitated for a moment. "Celestia asked me to join the Royal Council this morning."

    Theory Point nodded slightly. If she were at all surprised, she didn't show it. "I knew she'd tap you for The Council. You're too smart for her not to. But I didn't think she'd do it so soon." He thought he could detect a hint of concern, and possibly even disappointment in her voice.

    "… How come your not on The Council, Theory? You're at least as smart as I am."

    She gave a brief chuckle. "Me? On The Council? Celestia asked me to join once. I declined. No, that's not the kind of life I want. To always be at the beck and call of the princesses. Like I told you before, I want to have a family some day."

    He nodded slightly, but didn't say anything in response.

    "What are you going to do?" she asked.

    "I don't know yet. I have to think about it for three days before I give her an answer. Unless the answer is no. But I can't accept for three days."

    "You should ask your friend Twilight for advice. Since she's so close to Princess Celestia."

    "I probably will ask her."

    Several long seconds of silence passed before Theory Point spoke again. "James … if you join The Council … your life won't belong to you anymore. It will belong to Princess Celestia and Princess Luna. All of the freedoms they have granted you since arriving in Equestria will be gone. You will have even fewer freedoms then when you first arrived here. You won't even be able to leave the castle courtyard without one of them knowing where you are going, why you are going, how long you will be gone, where you will be staying when you get there, who you will be meeting, and why. And then, only if they approve it."

    He nodded slightly, contemplating what she had said for several long moments. "I'll take that all into consideration."

    For nearly a minute, neither one of them said anything. Finally, he spoke up again.

    "Well … I suppose I should probably go back to my own room and start thinking … Thank you for your time, Theory."

    "You know you can always come to me, James. Good luck." She sounded concerned now.

    "Thank you," he said as he left the room, pulling the door shut behind him.

    Back in his own room, he sat down on his bed, taking a deep breath and letting it out slowly as he tried to organize his thoughts. "Well, that was helpful," he said to himself sarcastically. He had two opinions that were basically polar opposites of each other: One who said he wouldn't be able to pass up the chance to be on the Royal Council, even though the sacrifices were hard. Another who acted as if joining the Royal Council was like spending the rest of your life in the dungeon.

    Surely, it couldn't be as bad as Theory Point had made it sound, could it? The Council members he had seen in the two meetings he had been at did not seem unhappy. Deadly serious about their business, yes. But not unhappy. And if it were truly that bad, surely they would revolt against the princesses, wouldn't they?

    He had told Theory Point he was going to ask Twilight for her advice. But the truth is, he didn't think he would do so. Again, he was sure she would ask questions he was not prepared to answer, or couldn't answer. But there was an even bigger reason he didn't want to ask her: He didn't want her anywhere near this whole mess. He wanted to protect her from this whole thing—whatever this was … If he were on The Council, he might be in a better position to do that.

    He laid down in his bed, staring up at the ceiling now, trying to focus his thoughts. Too much had happened over the last week. The Summer Sun Celebration. The nightmare. The object that had been launched and come down in the forest. The dragon attack. And now this …

    ...

    The blue skies over Canterlot began to fade into darkness with reds and oranges dominating the Western horizon. On the balcony of one of the castle's tall towers, Princess Celestia stood, lowering the sun. Just as she had finished, she heard hoof steps behind her. Turning her head, she saw Luna approaching, joining her on the balcony to raise the moon. For several long moments, the two of them stood next to each other in silence, looking out into the distance as the last sliver of sunlight disappeared below the horizon.

    "You asked him, sister?" Luna finally spoke, without turning her head to look at the Sun Princess, continuing to look out at the horizon instead.

    Celestia nodded once. "I did. All we can do now is hope he accepts."

    "And you were completely honest with him?"

    "I was. Everypony who is invited to join the Council has always been aware of the extent of commitment required. It has been that way since the creation of the Council over a thousand years ago, sister. I told him everything all of the others were told."

    "And the other Council members are okay with it?"

    "They want him on The Council, Luna. They are uncomfortable with the fact that he is so involved, and yet not on The Council. They fear the fact that he is not on The Council makes him a risk." She sighed and frowned, looking down at the ground slightly. "I fear that if he declines, it will be hard for The Council members to trust him at all, Luna."

    Luna only nodded, but gave no response, her dark purple horn glowing with a silvery light as she began to raise the moon. Celestia remained silent for several moments, before turning her head slightly, looking at Luna now.

    "And what about you, sister? I am surprised you even agreed to the idea of asking him to join The Council, given you still don't fully trust him."

    "If he is on The Council, Tia, I will be able to keep him on a very short leash," the dark alicorn responded, her horn still glowing as the silver light of the moon began to sparkle off the ponds in the garden below.

    Celestia frowned and spoke with a hint of sharpness in her voice. "He will be a full fledged Council member, Luna. Not a slave. I expect you to treat him with the same respect you do all of the other Council members."

    "Oh … of course … Leash was merely an … unfortunate word choice on my part, sister," Luna responded flatly. The glow of her horn faded as she finished her task. Then she turned, and walked back inside the tower without saying another word.

    Celestia turned her head to watch her go. "Have a good night, sister?" she said, sighing sadly when she didn't get any response. It seemed, lately, that Luna had become more and more distant, her behavior increasingly erratic. She turned back toward the balcony, looking out into the distance again. "Never have I seen such a strange pattern being woven," she said, seemingly to the sky. "There are threads that remain hidden to me. I fear I may not see them until it is too late."

    She closed her magenta eyes, focusing her mind on the pattern, watching all of the intricate designs and threads woven into it. The Weaver had been weaving the pattern since the beginning of time—since the moment of creation when The Beyond had been pushed to the edge of the dimensional plain. Uncountable numbers of threads made up the pattern now, but she found the one she was looking for—a very bright blue thread. At several points in the pattern, it crossed paths with a very bright lavender thread. For a time, they ran parallel to each other, like two streams merging together to form an unstoppable river of rushing water. Then, they would split off into separate directions. From time to time, they would converge again only to go their separate ways once more. They were the threads of James and Twilight Sparkle. Right now, they were weaving towards each other again. Soon, they would become one once more, baring something sending one of them off in a different direction. Beyond that, she could not predict what pattern the two threads would weave.

    She opened her eyes, took a deep breath, then sighed heavily. So many unknowns, she thought to herself. Other then the fact that she was having difficulty reading the pattern, the increasingly strained relationship with her sister weighed heavily on her heart. It had started several months ago … that day Luna had spent the entire night out, and she had had to lower the moon for her in the morning. Had she been too hard on Luna? Things had been strained ever since. The few times they talked, Luna often found some way to insult her. Such as the verbal barb she had thrown at her yesterday. And then there was her aloof attitude regarding James—at least it seemed aloof anytime she discussed the issue with her—and increasingly erratic behavior, such as what had happened a few minutes ago.

    "Please Luna, I can't lose you again … I can't," she said to herself, emotion starting to overcome her. "Please don't be mixed up in this on the wrong side of things." She looked down at the floor now, turmoil tormenting her heart like waves jostling a small boat on the sea.

    A small green flame, and a scroll appearing in the air, then falling to the floor of the balcony, interrupted her thoughts. She looked down at it for a moment, then magically picked it up, unrolling it and holding it in front of her:

    I have not felt you in so much pain since the time of Luna's banishment, my Princess. My ear, and my cave, are always open to you. Please, tell me how I may help you.

    She smiled slightly at the letter. Firewing, the Elder Dragon Ambassador. Ever since he'd met her, he had called her my Princess anytime formal titles were not required. Even though she had told him he could just call her Celestia, he always insisted on my Princess. He said he thought it was a cute name for her. It always made her giggle when he told her that. He would often contact her when he knew she was emotionally down. Ever since the incident where she had burned him with the solar flame, he had been able to feel when she was emotionally distraught, even when the two were separated by vast distances.

    The slight smile turned to a frown as she remembered that day. That day Luna was banished to the moon. How she was so distraught, she tried to destroy the Elements of Harmony, blaming them for the fact that her sister was gone. How she had brutally attacked him when he stopped her. And how she had nearly killed him before she came out of her rage and stopped her attack. But despite what she had done to him, he had remained loyal to her. Never was another dragon born with a heart as loyal as his. And never, she was convinced, would there ever be another one.

    She rolled the scroll back up, walked inside to her private quarters. Laying down on her bed, she magically retrieved a stack of paper and a quill from her desk and started to write:

    Hello, Firewing. Sadly, it is Luna's behavior that troubles me. She's starting to act a little bit like she did before the Nightmare Moon incident.

    She frowned again. She hated even thinking that. But she couldn't deny it. She hesitated for a few moments, then rolled up the scroll and magically sent it off with a small burst of golden flame. There were no formalities now as there had been at the Council meeting. No royal seals attached to it. Just communication with a loyal friend.

    It wasn't long before another small green flame formed in the air, followed by another scroll falling to the floor in front of her:

    Oh, my dear Princess. My heart aches for you. But I don't think she would do that again. I've seen dark times ahead in the pattern, as you have. But I haven't seen any indication in the pattern that Luna is the cause of them, or plays any role for evil in them.

    That was reassuring to her at least. She had not seen any indication in the pattern that Luna would be involved with any evil either. But of course, she had not seen it coming before the Nightmare Moon incident either … maybe the signs were there, and she just didn't want to believe them?

    There was something else she had to know though. She took another piece of paper and began to write again:

    Firewing, please tell me you weren't involved in the attack on my Pegasus Guards and my scientists. Please tell me you didn't authorize it.

    She hesitated for a few moments, almost afraid to send it. He couldn't have, could he? Not after everything they had been through together for more than a thousand years? Finally, she rolled it up, and sent it on its way. A response came shortly after:

    You know I would never lie to you, my Princess. You also know I would never do anything to hurt you or any of your subjects. Sadly though, I was unable to convince the rest of the Council to turn the attacker over to you. We did find out who he is though. His name is Cinderfang. I banished him from Equestria forever. If he ever comes back to Equestria, I will bring him to you myself. I am sorry, my Princess, that I could not do as you asked.

    She nodded slightly to herself. She had half expected that would happen. Firewing might be a good friend, willing to give his own life for her if he had to. But not all of the Elder Dragon Council shared his love for the Princess of Equestria. The fact that he openly told her he had not done as she asked, even knowing the severe consequences she could impose on him and the rest of the Dragon Council, only proved the unbreakable trust they had for each other. She began to compose her response:

    That's not entirely unexpected. Thank you for your honesty, and thank you for trying. I won't take any action against the Elder Dragon Council at this time. I know you'll keep your word and bring him to me if he comes back.

    Again, she sent the response, and another scroll appeared in the air shortly after:

    Thank you for understanding, my Princess. How is your little human doing?

    She chuckled and shook her head slightly before writing her response:

    I wouldn't exactly call him my little human. But he is doing well. I asked him to join the Royal Council today. Let us hope he accepts.

    She sent the scroll away in another small golden flame, noticing she was out of paper. She hadn't expected the conversation to be so long. She magically floated more paper over from her desk as another response came in a small green burst of flame. She unrolled it and began to read:

    Everything seems little to a dragon, my Princess … There is another of his kind, my Princess. I saw the thread today, very faint and distant. He is not yet part of the pattern, but he is converging towards it and will soon merge with it. He will play an important role in this as well, although he does not know he is involved yet. But he has already been chosen.

    "What!?" She hadn't even realized she said it out loud. So surprised was she by the words she had just read, that she lost the spell holding the scroll in front of her, it fluttered to the floor, like a leaf falling from a tree, landing between her outstretched forelegs. She stared down at the paper, reading the words again, her eyes wide with disbelief …

    Comments ( 46 )

    #1 · 48w, 17h ago · · ·
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    First: Luna will never be best-pony after this.

    Second: Celestia, be honest or go to the moon.

    Third: Don't go over to the dark-side James; their cookies aren't that tasty!

    Forth: Everypony in Equestria is crazy!

    #2 · 48w, 17h ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp:

    #3 · 48w, 16h ago · · ·
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    I hate to say this, but the last few chapters have seemed to ... I don't know, it feels like the whole story is dragging a bit for some reason.  Could just be me personally though, so take it with a grain of salt.

    :twilightoops:

    #4 · 48w, 16h ago · · ·
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    Another human?! O_o

    #5 · 48w, 16h ago · · ·
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    >>789834

    Idk, I'm as excited as ever.  And scared :pinkiegasp::raritydespair:

    #6 · 48w, 16h ago · · ·
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    >>789901

    Haha, well like I said ... that's probably more subjective and opinion based than anything.  If you find it interesting, then that's good as well.  :pinkiehappy:

    #7 · 48w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Great, now I'm going to need to read the chapter where this mysterious other human comes to Equestria (maybe James's co-worker from his old Lab or something). Oh, and I'll also be needing all of the chapters between this one and that one, on my desk by tomorrow evening. CHOP CHOP! :trollestia:

    #8 · 48w, 13h ago · · ·
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    So... yeah, I'm going to go with "Terrible deal for James"

    Pro's for James Personally - Nothing

    Con's for James Personally - Everything.

    I doubt I'd have to have taken more than a few minutes to turn that 'offer' down.  "We'd like for you to become Equestria's/My slave for the rest of your life, without any possibility of returning your freedoms.  Despite that you're a young human, with your entire life ahead of you, so much to do, see and be, we're hoping you accept to living in a maximum security prison forever, and having to get our permission to do anything... If we let you."

    Sadly, I get the feeling that James is foolishly going to accept.

    #9 · 48w, 12h ago · · ·
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    I would sure as hell turn it down.  A gilded cage is still a cage, a golden collar is still a collar.  Why would he want to anyways?  I see no logical reason why he would accept save for the princess asked him to.

    #10 · 48w, 12h ago · · ·
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    :yay: ! Eric is coming to Equestria! Cue more human-pony madness and an ultimatum!

    #11 · 48w, 11h ago · · ·
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    I see Firewing being killed off later in this story :c

    I'm with the others, I'd turn that down so fast. Serving on The Council is fine, but becoming a slave? No thanks. I think James is going to turn it down, I hope he does.

    Eric is coming! Woo!

    Also, I'm starting to really not like or trust Luna in this story at all. Same with Celestia. I know they are doing everything they are doing for the good of everyone/everypony, but they're being so tricky and secretive about things that it's giving me a bad vibe. Some serious stuff is about to go down and I'm going to enjoy every minute of it!

    Have a good one.

    #12 · 48w, 11h ago · · ·
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    >>789834 is the calm just before the storm... maybe it is dragging a bit, but is necesary for the plot...

    Also Pogo hammer FTW

    #13 · 48w, 11h ago · · ·
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    >>790151 lol I wish it were that easy to get new chapters.

    >>790447 I wouldn't say slave, the Royal Council are advisers. Granted there are some massive restrictions that come with the job and when it comes down to it I don't know if I would accept or not in his place.

    #14 · 48w, 10h ago · · ·
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    >>790734

    You must move into the castle with the rest of the Council. You will be at the beck and call of me and my sister at all times. Always, we must know where you are. You will not be able to leave the castle courtyard without permission from one of us.

    Being a slave is about how free you are, not what job you're doing.  One can be an advisor, while still having the freedom of a slave.  The only ways I can really think to describe it is as either a pet, or a slave.

    Essentially, unless he is within his pen, he has no freedom.  Every single movement of his must be reported, deliberated upon, then given the green light... or simply told no.  The holding pen might be pretty swank, but it is still a holding pen.

    I think if he agrees, he'll find that out the hard way.  It might be in a week, 6 months, or 5 years.  One day he'll wake up, sitting there, and think...  Why did I throw away my life?  And he'll be stuck for the rest of his life.  He can never have a change of heart about what direction he wants his life to take, nor can he go back to doing what he enjoys.  Teaching.

    #15 · 48w, 10h ago · · ·
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    >>790809 Actually while Celestia did say he had to leave the Academy, she never said that he wouldn't be able to go back after everything is over with and none of the conditions she gave would prevent him from teaching. He would just need their permission to do so and he would have to leave in the middle of a class if need be. That said, it is unlikely that will happen and the rest of your points are still valid.

    #16 · 48w, 9h ago · · ·
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    Woo hoo hoo, second human spotted, closing fast! Let's get ready to roll everypony!

    If I was James, I probably wouldn't accept Celestia's proposal. Freedom is way too important to give it up, I think.

    #17 · 48w, 8h ago · · ·
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    I flat line would not accept unleass i had full acces to the restricted sections of the royal library and any knowlege i wish to seek that way i can do the job of advisor fully and without any lack in knowlege hampering me.

    #18 · 48w, 8h ago · · ·
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    >>790698  Glad you are still enjoying the story :) Regarding Celestia being tricky and secretive, a short exchange from The Wizard of Oz between Glinda (the good witch), Dorthy, and Scarecrow comes to mind:

    Dorthy: Oh - will you help me? Can you help me?

    Glinda: You don't need to be helped any longer. You've always had the power to go back to Kansas.

    Dorthy: I have?

    Scarecrow: Then why didn't you tell her before?

    Glinda: Because she wouldn't have believed me. She had to learn it for herself.

    As I've said before, I don't consider Celestia dishonest. But at the same time, she's often not entirely forthcoming with everything she knows. This is actually very canon like. For example, she had already known about Nightmare Moon's return, and she had already known that Twilight would be the one that would defeat her. But she never told Twilight any of this. In fact, when Twilight raised her concerns about Nightmare Moon, she sort of blew her off and told her to stop reading those dusty old books. It seems Twilight had to discover it on her own, with a few small helping pushes from Celestia, such as sending her to Ponyville so she would meet the other Elements of Harmony. Maybe Twilight simply wouldn't have believed her if she'd come right out and told her.

    I tend to think Celestia knows things that others don't know. For example, in my head canon, unlike most mortal beings, she can actually see the pattern weaving. (Firewing can too. He's one of only a small handful of mortals in the entire history of the world that can.) And in her immortal wisdom, she knows there are certain things she can't simply come out and tell others. Perhaps it would interfere with events that must happen. Like Glinda, from the Wizard of Oz, perhaps if she simply came right out and told James everything that was going on, he wouldn't believe her. He might even laugh at her and decide she was crazy. That would ruin everything.

    In the end, Celestia does what she has to. And sometimes, what she has to do, is not what she wants to do.

    Glad you are still enjoying the story :)

    #19 · 48w, 8h ago · · ·
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    The thing that gets me is that this does seem similar to how the Shogunate treated it's samurai back in the old days.  Things like lifelong servitude for the greater whole weren't uncommon, even if it seems restrictive from an outsider's perspective.  The position is exactly what it says on the box, and they aren't hiding it from him.  Really it's falling to the question of the one versus the many.

    From my personal perspective, though, it feels like there's a lot of turning a blind eye to the obvious going on here.  It's mentioned that he saw this as the Princesses trying to trap him in the same way that aisling was, and in some ways that's true.  But at the same time, they gave him three days to figure this out, minimum, to figure it out, meaning that they're willing to let him get some perspective on the matter, but I'm having some issues working my head around a lot of the thoughts going through James's head.  This "I'll protect you by doing so and so" logic is driving me up the wall.  It's convenient for the plot for him to think along those lines, but more and more it feels like he's transitioning from scientist to white knight crusader.  The man has common sense, logic and the ability to think things through, but he keeps bullheading into these major decisions on what feels like posterboard reasoning.  It didn't help that his opinion of the princesses took a 180 in a scene transition, so much so that I can't help but think that Celestia did something to his head when she let him watch her rise the sun, and given how she's acting here it seems more and more likely that she did just that.

    Then there was the whole "No, I won't ask my closest friend because she might say something that interferes with my preconceived opinions and thoughts." line of thought, which is exactly what James says when he justifies it to himself not to contact Twilight.  She really does have the power to sway his opinion on the matter, one, and two, from how she's been acting, could fairly easily point out his odd, circular reasoning by and large.  This feels like his personality is being circumvented for plot convenience.  The scientist in him should be more than able to realize the value of an opposing voice but instead there's all these games of "Talking about these things is hard so we won't because things are hard and we can't talk about them" that's been cropping up lately.  It feels like it's bogging the story down.

    That aside, another thing that gets me is that the story itself has become so James-centric that everyone else seems to have fallen off the map.  Ever since the overarching plot came into being, it's successively cut off a lot of different characters that were major players originally, marginalizing more than a few of them and removing others altogether in favor of this whole doomsday prophecy/conspiracy/Cthulhu-esque abomination line of thought that while I'm sure can tie together on it's own, feels clunky and on occasion forced.

    All that said, these are just my personal opinions.  The story itself is very good and I really enjoyed it up to this point, but I'm losing interest just from how long it's taking to walk down the road, so to speak.  I'm not sure how anyone else feels about it, but there's a large part of me wishing that the overarching plot would just go away and this story could go back to being more slice of life-drama and less action-drama.  

    #20 · 48w, 8h ago · · ·
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    >>791274 Oh yeah. I have nothing wrong with how you're portraying Celestia. I think you're doing a fantastic job of it to. I've read how you see Celestia a few chapter back and I agree with you on how she is. I was just thinking from a personal view, like if it was me in the situation that James was in.

    Have a good one.

    #21 · 48w, 7h ago · · ·
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    >>791282 Thanks for the comments. Glad you have been enjoying the story, at least until now.

    I will say that this was never intended to be a slice-of-life story. It was always intended to be high fantasy. Admittedly, the first 12 chapters did come off as being rather slice-of-life. There was a lot of  character building that had to be done to reach the point where James would be comfortable at all with trusting them.

    To ease your concerns about the other characters being marginalized, I can only say that they will be returning shortly. The fate of Twilight and James being intertwined ensures that.

    His logic for why joining the Council might help him better protect Twilight is that as a Council member, he will have more influence, more access to Celestia, and greater access to information about everything that is going on in and around Equestria, any new threats that might be showing up, and so on. If he were to ask Twilight for advice on what to do, how would he answer the inevitable questions that came up? About why she wants him on the Council? What he was doing on the last day of the Summer Sun Celebration? He doesn't want Twilight involved in any of this mess.

    It's actually a "personality" flaw of James--one that both Theory Point and Luna have called him on. He often deals with conflict by trying to run away from it. He often says nothing, even when it would be in his best interest to speak up (as when he missed the morning briefing). It's something two ponies have called him on, but he hasn't done a lot to address yet. Eventually, it may come back to bite him in a big way.

    Anyway, i hope you start enjoying the story again. Twilight and the others will be returning soon.

    #22 · 48w, 6h ago · · ·
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    >>789803 I agree with all but number 1. Luna is ALWAYS best pony.

    #23 · 48w, 5h ago · · ·
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    I would have declined the council position almost immediately, because as other commenters have said, a gilded cage is still a cage. Sadly, I think James will accept, because otherwise you wouldn't have dedicated a whole chapter to it.

    #24 · 48w, 5h ago · · ·
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    For how smart James is, he sure is a fucking moron.

    Edit: Then again that does fit a lot of the scientists I know. Though most of them were smart enough not to make the monumental bad decisions that James has or continually seek out mental abuse of the highest order as if it were the sweetest of drugs.

    #25 · 48w, 5h ago · · ·
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    First: Oh god don't accept don't accept don't accept

    Second: Oh god here comes Eric

    #26 · 48w, 5h ago · · ·
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    >>791989 He's got two big problems really. First, he needs to be more assertive--something Theory Point has already told him. Second, yes, he's extremely smart. But he's spent almost his entire life in classrooms and labs. He doesn't have a lot of common sense or street smarts. It's almost all book smarts.

    #27 · 48w, 5h ago · · ·
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    >>792133

    It's both painful and enticing to watch. It's like watching a trainwreck really, I can't look away. I know he's going to always make the worst possible decision in any given circumstance so it does kill a lot of the possible tension because he's just going to screw it up. That said you are portraying him just as you described him so I'm not exactly harping on you. I've had a love-hate relationship with this story for the last 10 chapters. I usually read stories with a lot more character development so don't take my feelings too seriously.

    #28 · 48w, 4h ago · · ·
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    And then Molestia stepped in and slapped her other self in the face with a trout and....What?

    #29 · 48w, 4h ago · · ·
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    >>792156 Well, I don't really agree that he's made the worst possible decisions he could make. The worst possible decisions probably would have him in the dungeon instead of holding a very prestigious position at the most prominent educational institution in all of Equestria. (For example, if he'd decided to take the "I don't have to respect the princesses cause I'm not from around here. They can just kiss off" course of action).  Also, he could have agreed to serve the aisling, if he had believed it when it told him that he could save Twilight by doing so. There are definitely a lot of places where he could have made far worse decisions than he has.

    The fact that he's been offered an advisory role to the most powerful ruler in the world is also nothing to scoff at.

    #30 · 48w, 2h ago · · ·
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    >>792309

    See, you can say that since you're the author. You can play it out in your head, but from how I see it, he may have been better off in the dungeon or with the aisling depending on how things go :rainbowlaugh:. It may have kept Luna from screwing with his head constantly for months on end:trollestia:.

    The real issue is that James has been 'aimless' the entire story. I have never felt like he's had a goal or felt comfortable or anything really. His relationship with Twilight has seemed...weird, maybe 'forced'? So I simply don't see him with a strong connection to Equestria. Thus while I understand his choices, he's kind of just keeping his head down and doing whatever it takes to get through another day. Intelligence aside, having him be on a decision making body only emphasizes how 'limited' Celestia's judgment really is because when I think of people I want to entrust the future of lots of sentients with, it sure isn't James. The position requires he bind himself to the council, country and rulers, and for life at that! Given his reactions throughout the story I can't see how he'd be willing to do that or why he'd even consider it. It just doesn't make sense from how I understand his character.

    Heck Theory point explained that she didn't join since she wants a family. Hope he doesn't intend to ever fall in love, or have a life outside of the council (from the sounds of it). Which is only amplified since I've always read James as being half-hearted at best in his feelings about Equestria. Then again he has probably been one of the most wishy-washy protagonists I have ever seen in an HiE fic (not a complaint, just a statement of how I see James).

    It could be the most prestigious position in existence but that doesn't change the crazy impacts it will have on your life. I'm all for dedicating yourself to a cause but if anyone has a reason not to in Equestria, it's James. Poor guy's been jerked around since the go and has never really seemed to acclimate to the situation he's in. Not that I can blame him.

    I guess I just see your character as fundamentally different from how you see him. Perhaps it's time for me to move on because a lot of the time when you respond to me, I go back read the chapter and am still confused at how you arrive at your justifications.

    #31 · 48w, 2h ago · · ·
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    >>792866 Well, you're assuming it's Luna messing with his head. It hasn't been established that it is. In fact, she denies that she has anything to do with the current dreams he's having. She's given him various cryptic prophecies and such, that's true. But she has also tried to explain things to him in ways he could understand. Such as how the aisling is able to make him see various people he knew in his dreams without being able to read his mind.

    As far as James ever falling in love, it's unlikely, at least from his current point of view. The closest thing he has to a "love" relationship right now would either be Twilight, or Theory Point. And he doesn't see himself ever having a true romantic relationship with a pony. Only very close friendships.

    As far as James being wishy-washy and never really acclimating to the situation he's in, are you sure you're reading the same story? He's settled into life in Canterlot very well. Perhaps even a little too well. He's become fast friends with Theory Point and several other ponies. He hangs out with them, goes to clubs with them, and in general, has basically become one of them.  He's settled into Canterlot life so well that Twilight is worried he's completely abandoning who he was before he arrived in Equestria. I just don't see how you can say he never really seemed to acclimate to the situation he's in. He's pretty much accepted that this is life now, and there's little chance of ever going back to life before Equestria. He's made the best of it that he can. He's obtained a very good job, he's doing research, teaching, and even hanging out with friends. If he's not acclimated to life in Canterlot, then I guess I'm at a loss to what it is you think he should be doing?

    If you recall, when he had dinner with Theory Point, she asked him what he had wanted out of life when he was back in Chicago. His answer was "name recognition among my peers." Doesn't it seem like some of that is still driving him? Taking a very prestigious job even if the culture of the Academy was not exactly a good fit for him? He's pretty much accepted the fact that his peers are no longer human beings. And he's trying to make the best of the situation he's in. Trying to live his life as normally as possible, to whatever extent he can have a normal life in Equestria. Again, I'm not sure what you think he should be doing differently if you think he hasn't acclimated to the situation he's in. He has a good job, he hangs out with friends at clubs, he goes out to eat with them, he attends cultural events like symphonies, he's found other things he enjoys doing, like watching The Wonderbolts practice. What should he be doing differently?

    #32 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    So we're 29 chapters in now, and I'm not entirely sure what to make of the story as it stands. I feel like I'm reading this weird amalgamation of an adventure story and a slice-of-life story, and it's having a negative impact on the pacing. Sure, the show itself combines both of these, but the episodes are self-contained so it works much better.

    Recently the story has felt like it's started to pick up the pace more with the whole search for what is technically a UFO, but now that seems to have been derailed for the time being to focus on a brand new subplot involving the dragons. Not possessing mind-reading powers I can't claim to know how it ties in to your master plan, but it did make me groan a little inside because it adds to the feeling of the disjointed pacing.

    In my opinion this is still one of the better HiE stories out there, not least because it involves a relatively normal and sane protagonist, and the writing is mostly of high quality, but I'm beginning to suspect it could do with a rewrite to tie it all together and to give the story a more decisive identity.

    But hey, subjective opinions and all that.

    #33 · 48w, 57m ago · · ·
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    Another human? Well 'who' it is, isn't hard to figure out, but 'who', 'why' and 'what' is the questions here...

    I'm very cryptic at 1am in the morning...

    -Glassed

    #34 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>789803 I take it you've been to the dark side then? How else could you have tried their cookies?

    #35 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>790550

    Indeed. The restrictions are excessive. I am actually disappointed in Celestia and Luna for having them at all, regardless of whether anyone agrees to accept them or not. Then again, I'm already disappointed in their behavior in this story, so I guess it's really not much of a change.

    #36 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    My only issue with this story would have to be Luna. Her distrust of James to the point of using psychological fear made me want to grab her by the horn and sling her into next tuesday (excuse me if that seems violent). She seemed like she was warming up to him enough that the nightmare incident was forgivable, but the last statement of keeping him on a leash rubbed me the wrong way. On a side note I still love the story and am looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.

    #37 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    The baddies are trying to lock James in fear.  The princesses are trying to lock him in a castle.  He comes from America, where freedom is held in the highest regard, where all people are free to go where they wish when they wish how they wish, only limited by resources and binding commitments, like jury duty and the draft.  No way in hell I'd take that offer.

    Now I'm going to petition the President to make a national moon-an-alicorn day.  Freedom!

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    #38 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>797922 That's partly true, but even in America, people with high level top secret security clearance often have great restrictions placed on them regarding where they can go and when. And they are subject to constant monitoring and surveillance because they are a security risk.

    The draft and jury duty are not really the best comparison. Both of those are compulsory. and you can be sent to prison for refusing either one. James is, at least, being given a choice. And Celestia was up front and honest with him that most ponies do decline because they are unwilling to accept the restrictions that Council service entails.

    Since you mention military service, and freedom, it's kind of ironic isn't it? The freedoms that most of us enjoy are kept safe by people who willingly gave up a lot of their own freedoms to make sure the rest of us would have them. It's also rather humbling when you think about it. So for anyone reading this who happens to be in the military, thank you for everything you do.

    #39 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>797983

    That's basically why I'm a bad fit for military, despite the fact that I'd make a good intelligence officer.

    My point is that there are certain civic duties that are required to be a citizen.  The draft hasn't been active in quite a while, but I am currently on a federal grand jury.  We meet one day every week, and the service lasts for 1.5 - 2 years.  We only need a quorum of 16/23 to conduct business, so we do have room to get about, but not a month ago someone was arrested for dodging grand jury duty.  Smooth.

    Now, those secure positions you mention are compulsory, as is the council duty.  Which frankly makes it a lousy idea for the princesses to use as a control mechanism.  Is the academy position military in nature?  Can he be ordered about (more than the laypony), and could he resign if he wants?

    Note at this point, I am wondering why "laypony" is highlighted as sic. :facehoof:

    In august I will be driving with my mother and dog 3,000 miles across the country to celebrate my uncles 50th birthday.  And then another 3,000 miles back.  It will take a few weeks, and I will miss multiple work days and jury meetings, but I can still do it.  I wonder what restrictions there are on top-level government officials.  I believe that senators and representatives are required to live in DC, but beyond that I can't remember anything.  No idea about the cabinet.

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    #40 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>798049 The jury duty you have could definitely be a lot worse, yes. At least you aren't on one of those sequestered juries for a trial that lasts a year during which time you have to live in a hotel room with no television, no Internet, no access to newspapers, and any visits from your family have to be supervised, all while getting paid a salary that is barely high enough to cover basic living expenses.

    Those secure positions aren't compulsory. You don't have to take a job with the CIA, for example, that requires very high level security clearance. But if you do choose to take one, you have to be willing to accept a lot of restrictions and a lot of invasions of privacy that most people don't have to accept. The Council duty isn't compulsory either because he can tell Celestia he doesn't want to be on the Council. (You can't tell a judge you don't want to be on a jury. Well, you can, but you might end up on the jury anyway).

    The Academy is somewhat military in nature. And yes, James can be ordered to do something by superior officers at the Academy. But he could resign anytime he wanted. So it's not like the military in that sense, where he has to fulfill a minimum service commitment. Also, unlike a true military institution, he can't be jailed / thrown in the dungeon for refusing to follow orders from a superior officer, or being disrespectful. The worst that could happen is he would lose his job at the Academy, or get demoted.

    Also, keep in mind Celestia never said he couldn't leave the castle courtyard. Only that he would need permission to do so. The restriction is mostly in place to ensure they would know where he is at all times in case they needed him in an emergency. (Keeping in mind there are no mobile phones or even telephones in Equestria. So they can't simply call him up and tell him to come. They have to know where he is and send somepony to get him). The actual nature of this restriction will become more clear in the next chapter, which should be out sometime tomorrow.

    Senators and representatives do have to live in the DC area, yes. I'm sure the cabinet does too. And cabinet members are basically on call 24 hours a day 365 days a year. The president could require their presence at any time if an emergency comes up. But of course, they all have pagers and can simply be paged, no matter where they are. There are no pagers in Equestria, hence the main reason Celestia and Luna need to know where the Council members are at all times.

    Thanks for the thoughtful comments! And hope you are still enjoying the story!

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    >>798329

    Yeah, more of an annoyance.  And I meant the opposite of compulsory.  The selection for my jury was completely random, after those with excuses left.  We're only 2 months in and already 2 alternates called. I mean, really, now?  Fun fact: Mine is the first GJ to be selected in the new courthouse, which is one of the most advanced in the country. Link Link (2)

    If there were cellphones in Equestria, the council members would be able to get permission more easily.  The data plan restrictions, though...

    Couldn't they put a tracking spell or pendant on him?  Or enchant themselves phones?  Yes, the nature of the restriction is important.  All we know about so far are clandestine meetings.  Even boy scouts have clandestine meetings...

    Of course I still enjoy this.  Why would I write comments like this if I didn't?  As far as the actual conflict, it sounds like that other part of their universe is making a move.  Very vague though.

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    #42 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>798516 Well, a tracking spell would probably be even worse from a "big brother" standpoint. A tracking spell would imply that she doesn't trust her Council members at all. The way things work now, they have the opportunity to lie to her about where they are going. A tracking pendant would also imply a lack of trust--that she doesn't trust them to tell her the truth about where they are going. The Council members would probably see it as degrading--like they were criminals that had to wear an ankle bracelet or something. They don't mind telling her where they are going. But they do want her to trust them.

    As far as enchanting themselves phones. I don't really want to go down the road of having them be able to create anything they need magically. Once you start down that road, you create too many problems. ("Well, if they can magically create phones, why can't they magically create such and such as well? That would have rendered this entire quest  unnecessary," for example)

    Thanks again, and glad you are enjoying it! :twilightsmile:

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    >>798793 Pendants can be removed.  Think of a Star Trek com badge.  They wouldn't necessarily have the vision to create a telephone or videophone, but maybe a simpler buton-push code device?  A glowing light that means they are needed?  And I suppose the possibility of summoning (teleporting) council members from wherever they are also falls under deus ex magic.

    I read a short parallel-reality story in which the Inca advanced greatly, and encountered european civilizations something like 400 years ago. (Darwin was a cleric or something)  Because the only permanent form of information storage in Incan civilization were quipus, or knots, their computers were like big sewing machines that constantly retied knots instead of using punch-cards or light bulbs like our civilization used at the equivalent era.  They had submarines and bio-suits, as the europeans had diseases.  They also dropped "sun bombs" in every capitol.  Apparently the reason they advanced, their inspiration, was the mysterious swirl that could only be seen from the southern hemisphere.  Apparently the star system in that reality had been tossed out of the milky way in the distant past.  Neat story.

    At any rate, if you follow that logic, you will wind up with horse-sense "technology" and other horrible puns.

    I noticed someone else's comment near the beginning... is there a completed version of this story posted elsewhere?  I could never be bothered to put my stories on multiple sites, unless requested - yeah, right.

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    >>799263 When it comes to com badges and such, this story is definitely more in the high fantasy genre than the sci-fi genre, despite the scientific content. Some kind of little push button device that can communicate over long distances like that is getting further into the sci-fi genre than I really want to go.

    As far as teleporting, in my head canon (and from what we have seen, in actual canon as well) teleportation only works across short distances. After all, Twilight has to travel by flying chariot to get from Canterlot to Ponyville, it seems even she can't teleport that far, despite the fact that her magical prowess far exceeds that of most other unicorns. So teleporting council members isn't a viable option. At least not in my head canon.

    That parallel-reality story sounds interesting, if a little bit impractical in some areas. A computer that relies on tying knots would be both extremely error prone, as well as likely too slow to be of any practical use. But the story sounds strange enough to be intriguing.

    There isn't a completed version of this story published anywhere. Originally, I started publishing on fanfiction.net. I had published about 10 or 11 chapters there before I started publishing here. So it took a while for the story on this site to get caught up to the same point it was on fanfiction.net. But ever since about chapter 12 or so, I've been updating on both sites at the same time. So it doesn't really matter which site you follow the story on now.

    #45 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>789803

    LIES I TELL YE' LIES.

    THE DARK SIDES COOKES ARE DELICIOUS

    (Don't listen to him they brain washed him. He never got any cookies)

    SILENCE TRAITOR. *Force Lightning*

    (GRAAGHRGH)

    Now that that is done why don't i send you some delicious test samples. I Garentee they will make you change your mind.

    #46 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>814475 since when did the Might of Demacia ever eat Dark Side cookies?

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