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After hours at the Sugarcube Corner, a heavy storm thundering outside, Pinkie finds a pony knocking on the door.
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Rarity is totally prettier with a wet mane.
Hmm. Pinkity? Eh...
I dunno. I mean, this is well written and all, no question about that, but I guess it's just an awkward ship for me. Which is why, um, I'm probably not gonna track it. Sorry! 
But, I'll totally drop a like so it can be made known to the people who would like this ship! Best of luck in your writing adventure, my friend! 
So Pinkie Pie is at least sympathetic toward Spike. This makes me curious as to how she'll handle telling him after the two ponies fall in love. But if Rarity gives herself to Pinkie Pie without considering his feelings first, then this'll just be another shipfic where no one gives a horseapple about him.
Hmm... Middle of the featured box, 37:0 like to dislike ratio, no giant feedback.
I'll read later.
I certainly hope this is featured. A much stronger start than most of what I've read in the past few months.
And I know it was kind of the point, but I love just how little dialogue there was up until the very end; it really helped Pinkie to come across as a caring, faithful, emotionally intelligent friend. And the narration wasn't at all lacking, either. Fine work, author.
If you're fine with any ship as long as it's well-written, just go ahead and check this out now. There really isn't too much to say yet; it's just good.
So I went to bed last night after a hard day at work, but before I went to bed, I saw that this story was actually doing much better than expected. This morning... I'm greeted with two things...
The hell!? Did I accidentally log into some other person's account!? I've never had a quarter of that number EVER. It's as if... if...
... *begins hyperventilating*...
... Note to self, make sure to get blackout drunk much more often before writing. Seems to help...
>>1429770 Considering how prolific that one picture of Rarity wet in the rain in "Sisterhooves Social" is, and how many times they've recolored it to fit almost every single other pony out there... I tend to agree Once again, thanks for all of your help!!
>>1429859 Not only is drunken writing funny writing, but apparently it is best writing. Sure, I had to edit out a few lines ("Rarity looked as upset at Republicans were when President Obama won the election" didn't quite work...), but overall, it's all there. As for the Pinkie/X ships, I tend to see RariPie to be the hardest one out there (ApplePie, while the best name, is up there as well). And I have a few friends who would give you nasty looks over saying RainbowPie doesn't work
>>1429904 Hey, I know how you feel. No worries! Thanks for the upvote anyway, though your lack of a track means no pony icon for you!
>>1429918 Anyone that has followed my blog, or at least knows my feelings on shippings, knows that any ship that involves Rarity HAS to incorporate Spike in some way. Now, whether that is an internal struggle because she feels something for him, or just a mention on how to deal with him and his crush (depending on her level of mutual feelings towards him) depends on the story entirely.
>>1429984 Honestly, given the situation, I could see any of her friends doing this KINDA. They would definitely go about it differently sure (Twilight would ask what the hell happened, Applejack and Rainbow would go out to beat the hell out of the guy, and Fluttershy would be too nervous to say anything too awkward), but it was Pinkie that she ran into, and so let's roll with it!
>>1430044 Thanks! And I am so so so so glad that you took the time to help me out with it! Major favor you did me
>>1430223 That thought process might've crossed my mind when I wrote this story......... Anyway, always loved the idea of the dynamic of those two together (not in a relationship, just interacting), and I'm glad it turned out how I wanted it to!
>>1430597 As I said before, I feel that RariPie is "hard mode" of shipping. Two complete opposites, with their only similarity being they enjoy social gatherings (albeit very different ones). This is obviously not the best one out there (by far), but I like to think I've done a respectable job so far!
>>1430737 It's all in the proper drink that you are drinkin'. You drink what I was drinking, homemade raspberry lemoncello, and things get wild. Go with something stupid like a few cans of Four Loco, and you end up taking a dump on your keyboard.
>>1430928 The suspense is killing us all...
>>1431171 A viewpoint shared by myself. I think I would rank this as my #2 ship, or at least in my top 5
>>1431177 As of this typing, it's now 97:2, with some feedback, so read it already!! Also, since you have a sword, find those two, and hunt them down like the rodents they are!!!!
>>1431321 Your wishes have been granted apparently, for as I posted at the beginning of this, it already has! But yeah, serious thanks for the complements. I really try to make sure that my spelling and grammar is well done, even if the story sucks (not implying this one sucks).
>>1431470 You were not surprised, and thanks!!!
>>1431669 This was actually one of the lines I wrote while blackout drunk. I don't remember writing it, but I'm glad my sloshed self thought of it!
>>1432405 I hear you there. I realized that it was going to sound slightly misleading, but thankfully, the character tags made it a little more clear. Obviously, the title comes from the very last lines Pinkie and Rarity share with each other in this chapter. I was debating another title like "Caught in the Rain" or "Despondent White", but those sounded... weird That said, I don't like ships with the alicorns at all (the whole ancient pony shipping with a normal one), but I digress.
>>1432445 I'm glad it turned out that way, and not to the point of icky sappiness
>>1432571 ... Sorry, but I can't think of an original response to this. Maybe... take your insulin because you now have diabeetus?
>>1432604 It's funny. Rarity is my 2nd least favorite of the mane six (Applejack takes that title). However, if you look at my stories, you see that she's shipped in more of my stories than any of the other ponies out there. MADNESS I TELL YOU!!
>>1432755 Nah, my huge and epic adventure is the other story I'm writing. Btw, shameless self advertising ftw!
>>1432867 That's an interesting quote. If you were to ask anyone today, I would assume that they would say things like "dude... smoke weed" or "take acid" or other drugs like that, rather than drinking, but hey, who am I to argue with a quote!
And once again, thank you all that commented on this sucker! I like to think that this is proof that I read every single one of them, and actually try to think about everything you say!
Hmm... I had little pony emocons all over my last post, yet they didn't display... hmm... 
>>1432974 \o/ Ain't gonna lie though, I never understood the /) or (\ for a "brohoof". I've looked, and I gotta tell ya, looks nothing like it 
>>1432997 ... Well... this is an awkward situation... 
>>1433111 What? The whole "I'm having a panic attack" sort of situation? Yeah... yeah it's funny. Either way, I just wanna take a second to congratulate you on your story doing better than mine 
>>1433533 Anytime? Alright then. Christmas morning, I'll have five stories for you to edit! 
"A sudden shift from her partner, followed by a gentle rub of Rarity forelegs against her own brought her eyes open again,"
I believe it should be "Rarity's forelegs."
I have to say, I am VERY impressed with how you write Pinkie Pie (and her thoughts). You make her in character, and being peppy and thinking like Pinkie Pie, all while being a serious and well handled character. You took a serious situation and a typically not-so-serious pony and melded them together very well.
Darling, you've captured why I love Pinkie. She always knows just what a pony needs and doesn't need, she is always smiling and willing to help, and this line. "Rarity must have had an exceptionally large soul, with paintings and throw rugs and pretty little knickknacks hung all over the place." That Pinkie logic is wonderful. Please continue drinking heavily if it causes you to write this well. 
I will be awaiting updates with baited breath.
Ciao 
Hmm... So I've realized that this story has almost as many trackers as some of my other stories have views... sweet merciful God, what has liquor done to me!?
>>1433624 Thankfully, I've started to calm down from the near panic-attack I was starting to have. I mean, it's only a few hundred people that are tracking this story now that are now going to judge how my future work is going to turn out and whether it is good or a useless pile of garbage causing them to wield pitchforks and clubs and knives and OH GOD HELP ME!!!
>>1433852 By the way, each of them is as long as Fallout: Equestria ended up being...
>>1433990 I now have 9, so I'm starting to think that they are the same mopey people that go around spamming dislikes because... umm... insanity? 
>>1434060 Heh, well, most of his stories (if not all) were all Spike shipping with someone else (or himself in one case). Of course, I don't plan on getting banned from this site either, so there's that
>>1434148 Pinkie Pie is your former favorite pony? Blasphemy!!! Pinkie Pie is forever best pony, and any argument against that is instantly invalid.
>>1434275 Yay for happy fictions! Dark ones are alright (except gore. I can't do gore), but I get numb to them after a while.
>>1434332 As I said before, I feel RariPie is hard mode of shipping. Of course, I think most ships with Rarity are harder than normal (with the exception of Spike of course), but that's just me.
>>1434600 Please, if she saw this fiction, she would gag sure, but then she would turn around and blackmail Rarity with it a heartbeat later.
>>1434610 For me, it's not quite that. Whenever I see a sad fic, I do actually feel sad (some have actually made me shed tears). When I read a over-the-top happy/romantic fic (if it is well written), I do feel happy. If I read a clop fic, I feel... umm... well... nevermind.
>>1434681 I myself have only seen one other RariPie story out there, and frankly, I think it was better done. Still, I'm satisfied with how this one turned out.
>>1434901 Heh, and that is why I think this ship is hard mode. It's NOT a pair that would really ever get together except in the strangest of situations. Still... I can believe... right?
>>1435638 Good to know! Sweet! Thanks for the info. Sadly, that means I can't spam the emocons all over my comment to each person. I now have to be very selective with who I give them to... 
>>1435813 ... I... umm... well... glad you liked it then...
>>1435995 Yikes! Looks like one was overlooked! Fixed it now! And thanks a lot. I do like the whole "partial 3rd person/pony" perspective that I typically do. It's 3rd person, but the narrator is more inside JUST one character's head, and not the others. I think Game of Thrones did this, but I never read them...
>>1436082 Thanks for the complements, though my liver is crying at the prospect of your suggestion...
>>1437059 Well... umm... I use Hebrew at times as well!
>>1437131 Psh. I'm surprised that nobody really thought of it themselves. It's Donny's Boy's Seeking Beauty. Damn good story.
I have to say... I almost didn't give this a chance. Pinkity just seemed like such an odd ship for me. I'm glad to say that I was DEAD wrong. You made it work in quite a nice way that made me feel all fuzzy and warm inside. Guess I'm proven wrong once again. I once thought that TwiPie was a very odd ship, and now it's one of my favorites, right up there with TwiDash and TwiLuna... Maybe TwiJack and TwiMac. Oh god, all of my favorite ships involve Twilight.
*Ahem* Regardless. Tracked and thumbed up. You deserve it for successfully pulling off a hard mode shipping.
As of this typing, this story now has almost 2100 views, which is almost 3x more than my next highest one-shot. Further, this story has 408 trackings, which is more than all of my other stories combined multiplied by two. Finally, this story has 270 likes, which is by far more people liking my story than that like the real me in real life...
>>1437182 You do that... and tell me how it goes... in Manderin Chinese
>>1437510 Oh you are most certainly welcome good chap 
>>1437534 My only complaint with that list is that, other than Rarity and POTENTIALLY Luna, all of the ponies on that list are influenced by non-canon work. Don't get me wrong, you aren't wrong at all for saying any of those, just I feel when picking favorites, you shouldn't use fanfics and such.
>>1437635 And more you will see... just not this second 
>>1437651 Thank you so much for all of your points. Yeah... kinda sucks what happened to Rarity, but she's a trooper, and she'll pull through. Further, she has Pinkie to help cheer her up, so that's a good thing as well!
>>1437774 Depressed!? 
Over what? The solemn mood that I painted? If that's it... well... err... I got nothin'
>>1437841 You might recognize me from the little humorous exchange we had The Scootaloo Diaries. I was messing with you about the whole "issue" of Cheerilee and Scoot being sisters in another Gen, which culminated into you burning me at the stake. At least, that's how I remember you.
>>1437917 Thanks! A few letters off of the actual holiday, but I mix up the spelling as well from time to time. ... ok... that was a bad joke. Sorry!
>>1437980 If Pinkie is anything OTHER than warm and fuzzy, then I don't accept her as real Pinkie, or something very strange happened in a long story.
>>1438145 Very true. Very very true. But yeah... didn't read that story. Looked... a little out there for me
>>1438161 Not entirely a one-shot! Still not complete!
>>1439515 Thank you good sir, and as with many of the other comments, my liver is crying as a result!
>>1439696 I'm taking a shot in the dark when I say that your favorite pony is Twilight...huh? But yeah, thanks for the try, and I'm glad I didn't disappoint!
Well, the thing is that I often find myself preferring the fandom and its works over the cartoon. Don't get me wrong, I love the show, but I read dozens of fanfics and otherwise get involved with the fandom a lot more. Heck, I haven't even finished watching season 2 yet- I gave up some where around sweet and elite/last round up because at the time applejack and rarity were my least favourite ponies (although my recent appreciation of rarity has taught me that there is no such thing as 'worst pony'), skipping straight to the season final.
As for Luna, my interpretation of her has become so twisted by canon and fanon that I can no longer remember which aspect is which. So yeah, maybe I shouldn't mix canon and fanon characters, but when you have difficulty remembering which is which...
I'm Just going to ask :Who THE FUCKING HELL used Her?
I Just Want To know So I'll KILL HIM AND MAKE HIM INTO A CUPCAKE,A DELICIOUS ONE Love and Tolerate The Shit Out Of Him
Oh my god! You must have some sort of odd Gypsy mystical powers or something!
But seriously, lol. You'd be right. She's the pony I most identify with and enjoy watching. It's Not to say that every ship I read has to have her. Just... Most do have her. I also rather enjoy Rarishy and Rarijack and a few others. Forgot to add Twixie earlier as well. Regardless... Looking forward to more feels from this story.
I have to say I enjoyed this greatly. Very, very well writen. I don't actually support any ships that haven't been hinted at in canon, so I naturally shy away from ship fics. Especially the cliched Fluttermac ones.
Seriously, the plot of nearly every Fluttermac is 'Big Mac breaks his thingamajig, Fluttershy helps, LURV'. And no one even stops to think that Fluttershy is not in the least bit qualified to heal him, or the fact that Sweet Apple Arces is closer to Ponyville Hospital than it is to Fluttershy's house.
I challenge someone to write a good Nurse Redheart/Big Mac story. You never see Nurse Redheart shipped in anything but a 2-nd person perspective story.
But back on track.
Despite my aversion to ship fics, I have to say that this was worth the read. Favorited.
Well, I'm now off of the featured page, so I suspect views and comments will drop off like nothing else. So now I feel safe replying again
Of course, I now have more trackers than I ever expected, and I'm fearful of displeasing them...
>>1440008 He is a male that had something to do with Rarity. That's all you're getting out of me right now
>>1440062 Got ya. Yeah. I have trouble with that a lot, especially when I'm writing. The worst is that I have a very long story going, and as such, their characters have all changed significantly because of the events in that story. Then I have to go back, and write this? Wasn't pretty at first, but throw in a pretty heavy conflict, and bam: it works!
>>1440101 Is that a demand for the next chapter? Assuming it is, you shouldn't worry too much. It's coming along nicely!
>>1440107 ... I'm not sure what this was supposed to mean...
>>1440128 I find this acceptable.
>>1440219 Do me a favor: read the first few paragraphs of this chapter. That, my friend, is what I was writing in Janruary. Granted yes, my editors are much more skilled now than back then, but just... LOOK AT IT!!! Point is, find a good and regular editor, keep writing, and make sure your ideas are fresh. The skill will come with time 
>>1440369 Look back at all of the comments that are demanding that I write drunk. It scares it so much!
>>1440733 *slowly backs away towards the door* ooooookay then... I'm going to... umm... check on the ice cream that I... uhh... left in the oven...
>>1441009 Yay! 
>>1441156 Pinkie is my favorite pony, and while she isn't in my favorite ship, TwiPie is my #2 ship. That said, to me, Twilight shippings, other than that, are mostly eh to me, though that doesn't mean if you have a TwiDash I won't like the story. Just isn't my favorite.
>>1441533 Auntie Pinkie is always there to help a pony in need!
>>1442310 It brings out a very interesting dynamic indeed. Even more opposites than TwiPie or FlutterDash ever could have, but at the same time, their love for social gatherings and making ponies happy is something strong that they share with each other.
>>1442362 I'm scared...
>>1442460 *looks at the feature box atm, and the particular story up there now* Yeah... still, thanks for the complements, even though that stake burning really did hurt
>>1442878 I think the way people ship ponies nowadays, at least for the most part, is starting to get clich'e. Like you said, FlutterMac is always that way, though I have to admit, never read a single FlutterMac dedicated story ever (I blame it on my #1 ship being FlutterDash)
>>1443182 Trust me, I have no intention of just dropping this after a single chapter, or making you guys wait months for the update.
>>1443434 Thanks! And thank you for the praise!
>>1443476 Well... I haven't been called cute in a long time. You aren't so bad yourself! 
>>1444780 Don't boss me
>>1444901 Is it now? Well, I expect to have your 200 page report on the matter handed in by next week!
>>1445042 Yeah, I assumed that's what you meant, and I'm glad you are excited!
>>1445542 8 days? What insane thing are you trying to do!?
>>1445545 Hmm... in that case, try what if's. For example, if Princess Celestia and Princess Luna were to fight, and no Elements of Harmony were present, who would win? Take that premise, and make the entire story a buildup to that. Granted you've gotta have side-plots and such like that, but think about a climax to your story, and then from there, work on the rest of it. Hope that helps!
>>1445578 Do you mean I said one? Because if I did, I'm shocked as well... because I don't know what's going to happen next either!
>>1445591 Yes I am!
>>1447032 Yup. More to come!
>>1447687 And considering you help me become this way, I consider you brilliant as well!
>>1447950 Never say never, my friend. Just keep at it, and stay classy! 
>>1448685 Two things. First, last day to withdraw from classes way yesterday, so too bad. Second, I have personally decided that censoring "fuck" with "buck", while appealing at first, makes things awkward... especially when Applejack discusses what she does for a living 
>>1449088 Well... umm... dialogue and characterization ftw? Not sure what else to tell ya.
>>1449833 And you should make sure never ever to do that ever again. Sounds terrifying.
>>1451810 ... I can honestly say I have no clue what you were trying to say there, so have a pony emocon I've never used before as an apology 
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