Hm...commence read.

Sorry can't read now, still reading Past Sins. Faved to read asap. Thanks for new story. Will edit comment later to say something useful.

For now sorry.

Late edit:

2 Lines in story is good.

Expecting something to happen in next chapter.

Okay, I honestly have no idea what happens next.

So far story is interesting and promising.

Sad Twilestia? Sounds good to me. I'm reading this as soon as I finish "Secrets and Lies".

Friendly Uncle storreh!

A new Friendly Uncle story!? Screw life, this takes priority.

inb4 featured!

... Hmmm. Not sure how to feel about all of this, actually.

You had an interesting premise with the whole "Twilight and Celestia coming out" hook, but then suddenly! high fantasy intrudes upon the plot. Seems a little... scizophrenic. Also, this looks like this needs an adventure tag.

Its not poorly written at all, just... not what was advertised, ya know?

Oh well. Will continue to watch this like a hawk to see where it goes. The start is attention getting if nothing else.

Alright... let me collect my thoughts about this... 1) You've made me annoyed at Rarity and Spike, everypony is entitled to privacy, and jumping to conclusions is a bad thing... like apparently thinking Celestia is one of the three bastardizations of her character (which I know you aren't make her that).

2) The Secret Society of Secret Secrecy... damn if I'm not wrong then it's not just forcing Celestia off the Helianthus Throne and clamming it for themselves... they want something far more potent than a throne. They want Celestia's greatest burden.

I will have to keep an eye on this.

In the Name of Her Serene Majesty Celestia Everfree,

Celestia's Paladin: Ex Solis et Lunae, Provendtia et Prospartia

PS: Epona and Gaea... you're the guy who did Correspondence...

I am so reading this later

Twilestia is Bestia

Hmm... lack of comedy tag makes me iffy.

Awesome! Keep it coming! The dialogue between Rarity and Spike was hilarious, and I'm super curious to see what happened between Twilight and Celestia.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

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Fuggin' TwiLestia.

Oh dear, this is going to go wrong quickly isn't it?

well they lost their chance to take out Celestia personally thanks to Twilestia ship saving the day.

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Hmmm.... After the light-heartedly tender (and often hilarious) moments of 'Correspondence', I find myself torn to read this.

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On the one hand.... Hoof? Oh whatever! The sequel to such a great little Twiliestia fic like 'Correspondence' will undoubtably be well written, in character, and a good read all round.

And on the other.... 'appendage'. I can't help but notice that sad tag.... And that's a complete about face from it's predecessor.

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Twilestia? Check. 4000+ words in the first chapter? Check. Good reviews and thumbs? Check. Initiate read sequence in 3... 2... 1...

Spike.... Rarity..... WHY....?

You both had no right to see that picture.

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Breakups... dunno if want.

gets to ending of first chapter....

cue dramatic music...

DUN DUN DUUUUUUNNNNN!!!!!

Ugh... I can't even think of anything to say about this story here

I'll just fav and see where this goes

well this is going places

*pulls up chair and popcorn

When Rarity tells Twilight that it was all an accident, Twilight's eyebrows will pierce the heavens!

>>14632251463225

Your #2 reminds me of the fic where Trixie begs/borrows/steals a magic staff and takes over the throne of Equestria. How did Celestia and Luna respond? "Huzaa! Vacation! You want it? You got it! Sucker!" Then Twilight promptly went to go beat up Trixie and told Celestia to "get off of her sexy sexy flank and go back to work ruling Equestria"

Oh yea ..

and we came to a satisfactory resolution.

Oh YES! Sloppy make outs are definitely a most satisfactory resolution.

bonus feature ... Celestia invents Sexting !

>>14633681463368 Look who's talking Mr. FlutterDash, not to mention ScratchTavia (Consider they have 0 canon development, so you're essential shipping OCs.). So why don't you simply go home to your little church and cry about what a pathetic excuse of a writer you are. I may most-to-all forms of shipping, but what you do is beyond disgusting, at least THIS was written better than any and ALL of your fics combined. Learn to write you twat before you start being critical of others. Like honestly, you are the worst kind of brony, one with his head shoved so far up his self congratulating arse it damn near creates a time paradox

P.S You need antibiotic for a bacterial infection, not a viral infection. Retard.

P.S.S To the writer, cheers. Hope you continue

I am glad to see you writing more.

>>14646531464653

I will ignore half of that... but I see your connections

>>14648091464809

Now, personally, me, I have borderline personality disorder. Ergo, every piece of criticism should, by definition, make me overreact. However, every argument you had was SO stupid and SO very biased (not to mention not very bronylike), it actually made me laugh. I'm still laughing.

First off, I hate TwiLestia because of the obvious age/power difference. It's like a twelve-year-old peasant falling in love with the King of England. I like shipping in general because not only is it an easy access to hidden hormones, it's a very open gate to a descriptive storyline, my favourite.

Secondly, three-hundred-some followers and over a thousand trackers say I can write. You've kinda been done in by the masses (same thing with religion, for that matter, religious people make up the majority of Earth's population). Also, how come you're criticizing my writing when you yourself can't use proper English?

Thirdly and finally, I consider over-enthusiastic pieces of shit the worst kind of brony. Much like yourself.

Now fuck off.

>>14649491464949

sorry bout that i was not Trying to be offensive but it happens sometimes

>>14650581465058 Big man can throw some words on a screen, I'm shaking in my boots. Nice try with the whole "I have a disorder herp derp" thing to try to cover how pathetic you are. You take ponies that have had 0 screen time with each other, and ship them. You're shipping OCs, and you honestly want me to believe it's more believable than shipping 2 characters that actually have a connection? Ya no, Fuck you. Also I'm German, you don't have an excuse. Now then you little twat, I find it ironic someone that ships lesbian, considers themselves strongly religious, talk about a flip flop. Now then you want to keep arguing, we'll take it on Hotmail/Skype/IRC/Something and settle this like men. Have a fuck you day.

Assasination plot... Can't say I saw that coming. Also, picture in the scroll?

“Looks like a photograph.”

As soon as I saw that, I had to stop reading for a few minutes. I knew what it was going to be, and I just couldn't stop laughing at what was about to happen. Thanks for that.

>>14651061465106

I'm not even going to go into religion and homosexuality. There's a lot at play there that a prepubescent couldn't understand. And my having a disorder is actually making a POINT: your argument sucked terrible arse, and had no depth at all. Did you think you could hurt me with those pathetic words? Ha. Big man can throw some words on a screen, I'm shaking in my boots. And you want some facetime? I'm sorry, honey, I'm a bit busy at the moment with a piece of life that I created.

>>14651061465106>>14654811465481

Please don't rant on each other in such a place where love and tolerance are the most important things.

Bronydragon

>>14657721465772

I'm not ranting. I'm telling off an arrogant douchebag. There's a huge difference. Trust me, I'm in too good of a mood to rant.

>>14657821465782

Note taken.

But please keep it at bay.

OK?

Bronydragon

>>14654811465481 Blah Blah Blah, plays Disorder thing, you're just an attention whore who can't write for shit.>>14658091465809 Have you ever seen this guy? You say anything to remotly piss him off and he goes off like a F-Bomb dropping internet version of the Hulk.

A sequel to one of the first Twilestia fics I ever read, containing even more Twilestia, as well as her friends perhaps not being entirely happy for her for once, along with a plot under way by a secret society to kill Celestia?

Tracking this so hard that it hurts.

>>14659831465983

Have you ever seen this guy? You say anything to remotly piss him off and he goes off like a F-Bomb dropping internet version of the Hulk.

Blah Blah Blah, plays Disorder thing, you're just an attention whore who can't write for shit.

Have you seen yourself? Stop putting people down and if you don't like it tough. all he did was post a picture which can be easily dismissed and you as a result go off at him.

If you are so high and mighty why are you attacking him.

No more hate please!

You've set the stage for a very interesting story here. I could easily see this going for tens of thousands of words, depending on how you decide to handle the reactions of Twi's friends and the assassination (?) conspiracy. Romance spiced with comedy, drama, and political intrigue? I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter!

I must defend my Celestia!

>>14633681463368

Would argue, but past experience says that trying to prove people who post gifs/images wrong never goes well.  Also, busy intentionally spacing out for no real reason other than it feels funny.

Ship wars are never fun, anyway.

>>14651921465192 the "ass." plot has been doubled!

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See that picture? Notice that you can't see Twilight's horn? *waggles eyebrows*

The followup to Correspondence and including the events of Moonshy. Includes pony makeouts, breakups, hookups, crying, flirting, melodramatic plots, political intrigue, OCs, and the occasional magical beatdown. I regret nothing.

What about the fact the the cover art looks like Celestia is giving Twilight a hornjob?

Going up against Celestia? Possible, but perhaps unwise. I've had OCs who've done it, no, nothing published, do I LOOK like i'm a good writer, but they/he/it has had a few billion years to plan things along for Celestia to be born and is quite happy with just the occassional subtle manipulation of he life and, sometimes, mocking her to get hr angry. ...Interestingly, said OC is murderously, literally, protective of Twilight Sparkle, and has begun motions to get the two dating. It's not part of his overall PLAN for the universe, but it'll make Twilight Sparkle happy, he owes her, and that's the important thing. How does a being from the dawn of existence owe Twilight Sparkle anything? Now that's where it all gets interesting.

Hey, everyone else typed out a lot of stuff, why can't I ramble? But, faved and following this, just like the prequel. Rarity? Seriously. If Celestia sent Twilight a picture of her cutie mark and plot, then, I think the two are doing good relationship wise. ...And I predict Twilight freaking about anyone seeing one of the private scrolls, particularly one with a picture. Particularly if it was one of her friends. Yeah, Twilight's going to freak out. Again.

Why overthrow the Princess?

These guys have got no imagination. Wrap her up in a cage of paper and then do what you want whilst feeding her lies.

Pull it off, and she'll never even know...

>>14659831465983

Just a risky thought. Don't say anything that pisses him off.

He has his own mind with things an so have you. There is no need to make a word war over it.

Moreover there is a technic that helps with situations like this. It's called ignorance.

When you see something you don't like just ignore it. And if the urge is too strong just POLITELY ask him/her to please stop posting things you don't like, because this site is about a show, that tries to show of love and tolerance.

Bronydragon

>>14665001466500 Sorry, none of that Love and Tolerance crap works, go try it in real life....See? There will always be hate, and Brony in fighting will always exist, we're only human after all. >>14676711467671 I would try the polite route but have you seen what this twat does to it? He can't take ANY friggin critiques and immediately tells the person providing said critique to "Fuck off and go to hell" and then proceeds to claim that his "fics are great". I'm just trying to put an egotistical dumbass of a "brony" in his place.

>>14670811467081

Oh, come on. Neil Patrick Harris is right in ANY given situation. Also, please ignore the douche of a troll who picked me out to piss off.

I'd read this (and probably track the shit out of it) if it were a comedy, because TwiLestia is a funny concept that can be twisted a lot. But for serious romance? What the fuck.

>>14676711467671

I'm not trying to pull you into this, but let me remind you (because you, of all people, seem like an intelligent guy), that 1. he registered yesterday, 2. he only seems interested in targeting my ScratchTavia, which was a commission, and 3. he's more pissed than I am. I'd take his judgments with a grain of salt... or less.

My Little Pony: Sexting is Magic

"Pony Makeouts."? Im In.

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>>14648091464809 >>14650581465058

Please don't flame each other in the comments. You're welcome and encouraged to say anything you like about the story, but if you're going to argue amongst yourselves I'd prefer you to take it to private messaging.

>>14665001466500 >>14657721465772

Thank you.

>>14633681463368 I must agree. Lesbian romance fics are pretty much the only thing that ever make the hitbox.

>>14684391468439

Oh, we did. He's still ranting nonsensically, but I'm doing my best. Btw, 'opposites attract' is still a thing, right?

>>14650581465058

>It's like a twelve-year-old peasant falling in love with the King of England

>It's like a twelve-year-old peasant

>Twelve-year-old

You know,that comparison would be correct,if it wasn't because of that little bit.Last time I checked,all of the main six are young adults,perfectly capable to work and live on their own.

Not sure if want.

I always thought Correspondence was pretty good as a self-contained work.

>>14684831468483 That's not his point, all he does is write lesbian shipfics.

>>14651061465106

Oh god, who kicked you in the shins today

He stated his distaste of Twilestia and you completely freaked out and overreacted.

and even though you don't like his stories, that doesn't mean that he's a terrible writer. He has the watchers to prove that there are people who want to read his writing, unless you wanna argue that they are all wrong and that your opinion reign supreme.

I would try the polite route but have you seen what this twat does to it? He can't take ANY friggin critiques and immediately tells the person providing said critique to "Fuck off and go to hell" and then proceeds to claim that his "fics are great". I'm just trying to put an egotistical dumbass of a "brony" in his place.

You never even tried the polite route. You just went full rage mode and then acted like the victim when he responds back with as much vigor.

You could've just as easily said: "Why don't you like Twilestia? I think it has a better premise than OctaScratch fics".

>>14686641468664

In comparison to Celestia, Twilight is a 1 year old, but twelve works as well :)

>>14689771468977 The point was, he flipped out on other people, now me and him are doing stuff through PMs, so you can go back to AppleDash

>>14686641468664

Yeah, and the King of England isn't 6000. Cut me some slack, it's a metaphor.

Oooh, mysterious…! And kinky.  

>>14632251463225 This is a sequel to Correspondence. So. Well, Twilight wrote about 200 pages of clopfiction about Celestia. With poetry. And diagrams. And Celestia found it hot. So it's not Molestia if Twi started it. And hell, in comparison to Celestia EVERYONE is a one year old, so fuck this shit. One's the effin Princess of the Sun and the other is the Element of Magic. Third and second most powerful beings.

  “I’m short,” muttered Spike, glowering. “That’s the angle I always see the princess at."

I'm really surprised Rarity didn't make the connection that Spike must see most ponies from that angle.  She could've been all like, "Well, I suppose that makes sense, so... waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaait a minute!"

Anyway - good stuff!  I'm interested!

>>14689301468930 Still, small problem, isn't it?

Did.... did Celestia send naughty pics of herself to Twilight?!?

... [takei]OH MY[/takei]

>>14698891469889 Congratulations, Rarity. ...Spike finds your plot compelling. *snicker*

I saw the story in the feature box and thought, "well, that looks like another fairly nondescript Twiles-waaaaait, by FriendlyUncle?! I'mma gonna read that right now!"

Like some of the previous posters, I'm not sure about the sad verses comedy tags of the previous (there are rather too many of the former and far too few of the latter floating around the fandom these days), but on the other hoof, I was having difficulty imagining it following on from Correspondance without some humour! Besides, some of the best comedies have a bit of a Shakespearian tragedy in 'em to highlight the contrast - and frankly, I trust you as an author to do a good job.

Looking forward to seeing where this is going!

Oh, by-the-by, you immediately gain points for the bad guy being sensible for once about dealing with his minions. And frankly, as in this universe (as in my own fanon), if Celestia is indeed a goddess (as she says as much in Correspondance (yes, I did re-read that immediatly before I read this!), he'll need to be that smart to even attempt to pull it off.

Loved the twist at the end. A bad guy finally keeping his word.

>>14684391468439

It was a pleasure.

Bronydragon

Good stuff..... fast updates?

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>>14632501463250 its good dpv

Uuuurgh, seriously? Why a revolution type thing? Its Getting old!

Bait and switch.

Love it keep it coming.

>>14750771475077

I've never done it before. *shrug*

I'm trying to do an interesting twist with it. Time will tell if I've succeeded.

Well, I am now thoroughly hooked lol

Awesome first chapter, though I did find one glaring mistake

RAINBOW DASH is best pony!

Waiting part 2 o-o

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...please?

Don't leave us hanging...

to risk being lumped in with the common rabble:

MORE, we need more MOAR!!!!!!!!!

pardon me.

this is good.

Another!

...please?