The art is simply eye candy.

Huzzah, first chapter up and ready!

Again, I have big dreams for this, and I hope you all enjoy the adventure with me.

In my opinion, this chapter is best if read while listening to this song . <3

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DEivlTqulxI

(Edit, taken out of chapter and put down here so that it doesn't clutter writing/chapter picture)

Enjoy!

Grammar seems to be okay, but the story isn't developed enough to tell if it's worth reading or not.

I do want to say that I disagree with your statement about the song. I do not think it fits. In fact, I consider it bad form to ask your readers to listen to anything while they read. If you can't write a story using only words, then what's the point of writing it at all?

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Sorry, but I highly disagree with you about the song. It's an add on, but it isn't necessary for any form of development.

Also, I happen to really like the song and think it fits perfect, and is why I chose it.

Several, and I mean several fan fiction writers do it, and I thoroughly enjoy it. (I have also never considered it bad form, I have always found it unique and exciting. Try reading Defender222's Faith and Doubt, he inserts music in a couple of his chapters and has been featured a few  times, his story is really good.)

I thought if I would enjoy it, others would as well.

I wrote this late at night for fun, I wanted to give my OC a story to go along with her art. Nothing serious business.

And what's the point of writing it at all?

That's such a silly question.

Because I wanted too.

Your cover picture is... quite suggestive.   Is this a clopfic? If not, perhaps another picture would suit it better.

(Here is the original cover for future viewers' reference:)

Image: http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/285/5/4/socks_by_dragonlover77-d5hjyr1.png

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XD No, it's not a clopfic. It's a picture I drew that is substituting for now. I haven't drawn the 'real' cover art yet.

Also, my OC is silly, awkward, adorable, etc. Like the picture!

I agree with Metalilusion its quite suggestive , but I'm intressted on where this goes and its not bad so far .

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Thank you! And it is suggestive, but it's not blatant.

I love it.

>>14291681429168 I have seen other authors use them as well. I didn't like it there, either. I feel that "setting the mood" with music is unnecessary.

I admit it doesn't help that I also find it distracting. For some reason, I almost always lose my ability to read a story when music starts playing. Even having a song stuck in my head makes reading tricky.

After your response to my last comment, I realized that, though I don't regret giving you my opinion, I was probably taking things too seriously. I need to fix that...

...There, that's better.

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Opinions are opinions, and everyone's entitled to have them, and that's okay!

Yay! Up and ready.

I listened to this for inspiration while I was writing, so you might enjoy it too!

Sorry about the Cliff hanger, but what happens next needs it's own chapter.

I love drawing.

Timestop looks like she wants a cookie.

Or maybe I want a cookie.

Possibly both.