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After an incredible celestial event, Twilight realizes there may be somepony who needs help. The search for this pony evolves into a much greater journey of forgotten metropolises, a dangerous unbalance of magic, and, most importantly, memory.
The direct sequel to A Rose is a Rose (though you need not have read that).
(ARIAR EQD link: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/09/story-rose-is-rose.html )
>>1431691 Yay first comment on a brand new story!
Thanks for sticking with me. It really means a lot. I just read your feedback... and yeah, I agree with all of it. I'll make some changes.
But really, thanks so much. Seeing as to how chapters 2, 3, and 4 are already done, I still need to figure out a release schedule. Like I've been saying, I REALLY wanna structure this one and plan ahead, unlike in ARIAR.
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG A SEQUEL!
SQUEAL OF CAT JOY!
This gets the Chessie Seal of Approval!
-Chessie
Gawd Twilight! Stop lying to Nova! You're going to have to tell Nova eventually!
And very well done as always.
Wow, so Shy was injured quite badly, interesting. Looks like that crisis is handled however, since Nova made with the inexplicable magics. One question though:
I sent out a message to the others while you were on that tirade.
If there is no magic, what sort of message did she send?
The pacing in this one is a lot slower than ARIAR, I suppose. It's still exciting to read though, gotta love world building. 
...that strange hue that only seems to exist in the latest hours of night when the grass has begun to dew and your breath is pierced by those rays of white that travel billions upon billions of miles in a journey that takes years even at the speed of light...
I don't know if it's intentional or not, but there's a sudden shift to 2nd person. Or something, what do I know about words? 
>>1717884 It was intentional.
Also, yeah, little slower paced, I guess. The next few chapters won't be so slow. Though they may take longer to arrive.
I'm actually surprised people found this chapter to be slower paced. The thing I was most afraid of was that Nova had to learn something the reader already knew, and it's a bit boring being told something you already know. I just didn't have any other way, really. Not that it's bad... I actually really like this chapter, so, again, I'm a bit surprised. But hey, the people want what they want... and I'll try to give it to 'em! Next chapter will have more forward action.
oh man spacebrony i just started reading nova yesterday because my friend told me you posted a sequal to a rose is a rose which is my favorite story of all time. and regardless if people think chapter 4 is slow nova might take over as my favorite story. your a great writer cant wait for part 5
I've finally gotten out of my reading slump. I'm reading things again! And then I remembered I hadn't read this yet. And that is an issue I must solve right now. Because ARiaR was excellent, and I should have been reading this from the start! 
That said, you're off to an excellent start. I want to hear this tale of Dash's too. Onward!
That lie is going to come back and bite them in the butt. Here's to hoping they can handle it properly when that situation arises.
Anywho, all in all, excellent story so far. I am incredibly excited for all future chapters. And, in theory, I should be reading them in a much more timely fashion 
Do it, Twilight! Try to teleport there with all your friends and lose them in the void! I'm sure you're smart enough to modify the ritual Thade used to bring back five ponies, and you are literally in the best position of anypony in all of Equestria to kidnap a princess and to steal the rose before it can be used against you. Nothing could possibly go wrong. It's not like there's anything important out of range of the safeguard, and I'm sure it's recharged by now.
The first law of magic: magic repels other magic. And Nova certainly seems magic; who knows what would happen if you tried to teleport her?
And somepony really needs to get that mythology book from Dash's house; her refusal to tell the truth about the myth could be the difference between saving the world and destroying it, as far as we know. And how'd she know Nova was yellow? The star pony in the myth wasn't yellow.
And how'd she know Nova was yellow? The star pony in the myth wasn't yellow.
:O thank you for finding that! That's the result of a change I made in a more recent chapter, which caused me to go back and make that revision, while missing the significance of the coloring. That will be fixed! My bad.
Silly Twilight. Falling stars are meteors, which become meteorites when they hit the ground, which are rocks. Therefore Nova is a rock. She is also clearly a pony; however there are no recorded cases of an earth pony or pegasus being a rock; therefore she is a unicorn or alicorn, and can use magic. It's simple logic.
The third law of magic: magic cannot be created or destroyed, only utilized. Unless Thade's spell is still running (and I think we'd notice) the magic is once again available. If the Spring runs dry, it means that there is a preposterous amount of magic locked up in currently active spells; the golem could perhaps have created such a situation while it was alive, but certainly not after it was dispelled unless the unicorns were unforgivably sloppy. This annoyed me back in ARiaR when Luna said the Spring would run out in the distant future, but it was too incidental at the time to bother pointing out.
I think I was right about Nova being too magic to magic, but I kind of assumed that the one most damaged by an attempt to magic her would be the caster. Guess I was wrong about that.
>>1919378 If you have any questions about this, I can answer them (I have everything worked out and in order in my head) and it'd also be nice to know what points are confusing so that I can clear them up in future chapters.
There should be some confusion, though, which is purposeful and will be cleared up eventually. Thanks again for your very thorough comments.
I guess my theory that Nova was once part of the unicorns' magical construct has been shot to pieces. Ah well.
Hmm, interesting theory. I'm glad people are thinking along these lines.
EDIT: and just thought I'd put this here: bonus points to anyone who can find the two lines I wrote in iambic pentameter. They both occur in the same line of text. I'm sure there are plenty of 10-syllable sentences in this chapter, but it's pretty obvious which two were done with the purpose of being poetic. I actually spent almost 20 minutes trying to get those two short sentences to work. (edit 2: they're not two sentences, but rather one sentence split by a semicolon)
It's interesting that Dash and Shy can still fly despite the lack of magic. Maybe this was previously explained and I'm just forgetting, but I'm assuming that must mean unicorns are the only type of magic using pony in this version of Equestria and that the others operate through purely physical means?
Thinking about that a little more, it looks like Pinkie Sense is still working too.
I don't know. Why didn't the people of City 17 rebel against the Combine in Half Life 2? Well, they did, after Gordon came along. Because that's normally what it takes: one person to inspire and unite everyone else.
Do people think this really needs explaining? If it does I can definitely try to work it in to the next chapter. I just thought it made sense. I hope the story doesn't make it seem like the guards described in the chapter are the only guards in the whole city.
Anyway, the next chapter might take awhile since I have a story for a class due in the near future, meaning my pre-sleep writing time will be occupied by that instead.
Hope you guys are enjoying the story. I love your comments so so much. I hope I'm doing an okay job, and that I've shown some amount of improvement over my previous stories.
Still, why would they need more inspiration? It's not like they don't know how bad the situation is. Also, why are the guards so loyal to the king? Why don't they betray him?
Don't ask me. I'm just the writer.
I don't define human nature--people do that. I just try to emulate it. These aren't questions that need to be answered by the story. These are questions that I'd expect the reader to ask, but I'd also expect the reader to answer them himself/herself pretty quickly. All it takes is a little historical context.
I guess if you were to ask my opinion of it, there's definitely a bit of an "And then they came for me" attitude (I'm going to assume people get that allusion), but the rest is for the reader to fill in the blanks. There's really not a lot to it. That's why I'm not going to bother explaining it--it's not something that really needs explaining.
As far as I know, the cause of revolutions is not that one person to unite them all. The cause was some sort of shift in power, that makes revolution feasible (like advancements in guerrilla warfare strategy or greater ability to communicate ideas, like the internet). Once a revolution becomes feasible, someone will quickly step up and become the leader of the revolution.
>>2181923 Well, since this world is technically mine, and since the show hasn't commented on it, this is what's going on:
a) Unicorns channel magic from its very source, the Spring
b) Pegasi/Earth ponies do not channel magic. They're born with it inherently within them, though it is a very, very small amount. Just like Celestia's vial in this story contains pure magic separate from the Spring, so do Pegasi/Earth ponies contain separate magic within them. Again, though, it's a very small amount--nearly immeasurable.
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