Two adventurous philosophers go for a little ride through the multiverse while discussion the generic nature of a HiE fic, from one tiny theory: For any fiction, a ground universe is made, and from this ground universe parallel dimensions are birthed in infinite numbers from any change in a ground universe's canon...
This is my first fanfic, expect it to be utter crap. [Revised mere hours after submission, assuredly still utter crap, I promise]. Consider it as "sleep deprived need to write something instead of just papers, oh god the papers" filler story. I think this one might just break the no-meta humor rule, and I know it's bad, but that's half the fun! I think. Ah well. Aufer!
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This looks like an interesting concept.
Well... It's certainly interesting. Instead of laughing most of the time, however, I was mostly confused. Half the time I didn't know who was speaking, and the other half the story was moving too fast for me to understand what was going on. Unless these were on purpose, try to focus more on the detail around your characters, you know, the soft breeze on their face, the ground beneath their feet. However, I do like the premise of the story, multiverse and all. Overall, I would try to clean up the story a bit, you know, fix spelling mistakes, make new paragraphs per new speaker, etc.
Nice concept bro.
Story itself could be better though. just sayin
Story is now 3% less nonsensical
make a separate line each time you change topic or speaker, with an empty line in between, like this:
"Such a small theory, but yet it covers so much ground. This theory explains that anything is possible, any eventuality must happen, every good, every evil, every action can change the universe infinitely, causing the roots of the multiverse to grow.
Our multiverse is a fickle place, and can be trespassed into with one simple thing:
Write a story in which the multiverse doesn't function the way that it should for one dimension, and place yourself into it.
This is the story of how I did just that, and, to prevent certain eventualities in this universe, I recommend that you don't try it yourself. Multiverse travel is not a fun experience, as we learned, although it does tell an interesting tale."
Another tip that might help you is to start out with a "hook" if you jump into an explanation of the story, readers who focus on characters or action get very bored very quickly.
Try starting with your character describing something like the multiverse being messed up or looking around at a broken timeline before getting into the gritty details.
Just some suggestions, good luck!
1431262 Will take advice and re-edit it in the morning. (I suppose it's morning now, actually. Sleep is for other people!), many thanks!
"How was I supposed to know that irony was actually a multiverse constant?" - This would go a long way to explaining many things in life.
A Fic that is both entertaining and instructional to HiE authors? upvoted my good sir.
The creepy thing is that this might have actually happened to you in a parallel universe. At least my theories about the 4th wall have been reinforced.
Now 4% better written!
Wait, so isn't there a multiverse where ponies figure out how to switch multiverses and get stuck in our dimension?
How co-- one moment, gotta answer the door. Wonder who it is.