interesting concept. normaly I don't fav a story with only two chapter so far. but this is promising.

would be nice to know if Spike aka greenfire hatched earlier then in the normal universe.

some hints of time line compare to the normal universe would be good at all and what happend to the others, without spike.

Don't normally like stories barely starting off but I think this one would be worth it. Please don't disappoint

So Greenfire is Spike's AU name? Not bad.

Could you make the chapters longer? It makes for a more entertaining experience.

Very good, very good indeed. I especially liked how i could read the movements of Greenfire and imagine him like he was right in front of me. You've earned my respect, not many authors can do that.

Dude, this is the best Sike-uh, I mean, Greenfire story I've read that isn't immediate romance. You've obviously put a lot of effort into each chapter of this story, and you have my gratitude.

I have some interesting ideas for future chapters if you're willing to listen. Y'know, if that's OK with you...

You deserve like and fav, I hope you're not one of these guys who throws few good chapters and leaving story to gather dust and unsatisfied readers:) Better don't dissapoint me. Here take moustache

Spike is one of my favorite characters to have as the main character and this just hits all the right nuances. Good work.

-Sturrn

So does he replace malachite (The dragon in Owls Well That Ends Well)?.............

Oh my god.

What if Malachite and Spike switched...

OMG.

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That seems about right.

Man, this is one twisted tale.  I also wonder if little Sweetie Belle's going to make an appearance in this story ?

Please do keep up the good work on such a great idea.

You got my attention! Tracking

I Like it, fav it, and a thumbs up... I can see myself tracking this future chapters pending

So is this going to be a he ran away from canterlot at an early age or just born and grown in the area?

>>14333931433393 actually i think his cave is in the area near the diamond dogs territory, Malachite (or Razorfang or whatever) is deeper in the everfree closer to the mountains the red dragon was napping... I don't know we need a map of Ponyville and surrounding areas

I'm digging this story!

>>14500161450016

But that wouldnt be as cool....

>>14513001451300 are you kidding it could be cooler, maybe an eventual Greenfire vs Other dragon. although i think you're right, it looks like Spike is the only  Dragon there... otherwise they'd notice each other but with 2 chapters its hard to say

>>14517821451782

And

Twilight: MALACHITE!

Thanks for the kind comments, everyone! (Not to mention all the thumbs-ups and subscriptions! ) Thought I’d address a couple things here:

- I can’t guarantee updates will come quickly — I’ve got lots of stuff on my plate, including RL and other fanfic ideas — but I promise I won’t abandon it. I want to tell this story, after all! I’ve got a rough map for it all, and even some ideas for a sequel.

- The differences in this AU will eventually be made clear in-story, so I don’t want to spoil it just yet. (There is a tiny timeline hint in the first chapter, though, if you want to go searching for it.) I will say that the rest of the Mane Six are going to appear, but it won’t be for a while. The main focus of this story is on Rarity and Greenfire.

- I’m a little over 1,500 words into the third chapter at present, and it feels about halfway finished, so it should end up being longer than the first two. Beyond that, though, I can’t guarantee anything. It all depends on what each chapter requires!

Very excited to see where this goes.

Interesting concept. Consider this faved.

Remember. It's not somebody or someone, but 'somepony'.

Enjoying this one!  keep up the good work :D  

Interesting so far. I'm wondering where/what happened with Twilight without Spike's egg to hatch. What other changes and differences are there from the 'normal' Equestria we all know. Keeping an eye on this story for sure.

I love this idea, it will be interesting to see how his introduction to the rest of Ponyville and the Mane 6 goes.

Hmmm... on one hand, this is a very well done, well thought out story that beckons me to read more. On the other, considering this is your first fanfiction, I'm afraid that it will end up like a lot of others: unfinished.

I'll give this a chance, but don't you dare make me regret it

Congrats on getting on EQD! We also need a update :3

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I like the way this is progressing, I won't say anything about the pacing so far(too late)  because we're only two chapters in, but if this keeps up, I easily see this going places.

Not bad, I will be watching for more of this.

i like the story so far. It's interesting, but I am not seeing much of spikes original personality in this version of spike. Just wanted to mention that

This story is very good so far. I can't wait to see how it developes later on!

You have an interesting concept here so far.  And I really like the character interaction and development between Rarity and Greenfire (what little of it there has been since there are only two chapters up).  If I had one critique so far, it would be to make the chapters a bit longer.  Not to say that you need to make them monster 15k+ words or anything, but hitting at least 2k is a good milestone to aim for.  

As others have already said, I look forward to seeing what you have in store for us in future chapters.

Hm.

I like it! Lots of questions to be answered, an alternate universe, and Spike with a different name? What's not to love? Definitely tracking.

You know, this is the very first 'Spike' and Rarity fic I've ever genuinely enjoyed for what it is.

I am very much looking forward to the rest.

'Greenfire had never exactly envied unicorns ^ their magic, but ~'

^ there should be an 'or' In there

Well done storywise, youve earned yourself another follower!

More please!

Will this continue?

ho shi--

Me likey very long time. Fav'd.

Moar moar moar

>>14662681466268

So I guess this is pre-pilot?

>>15968691596869

'envy unicorns their magic', meaning 'envy unicorns because of their magic'. It's a cromulent construction!

Please continue, this story is awesome

Aww no new chapters

I'm running out of reading material

I'm stacheY

Alright! <3 Best surprise of the night, I'm really curious to see where this is going!

Sending to my Kindle…

Finally an update I'm so happy today

I definitely approve of this chapter... with the exception of the short length, but I'll forgive you this time

My curiosity is running rampant on what turn of events happened differently so that Greenfire is a wild dragon here, and not Twilight's assistant. Did his egg not get gifted/stolen/whatever? Did Twilight not succeed her test? Was it a different egg that she had to hatch? Hmm...

Question though: Is Spike in this story the same age as Spike in the show, and is just larger because of the hoard, or is he just larger because he's older?

I would like to say yeah very heartwarming

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH need more updates for this...........please?

More, now!

I thoroughly enjoy this story and getting to read an update for it has made my night. It's nice to see how living on his own with no one to true has affected Spike. His attitude is much darker, and that's very realistic to his life experience.

this gives me a small smile. Thank you

I dunno. Spike's not my favorite purple dragon.

An update, yes!

Very good, please keep it up. I like how easily Rarity can read our favourite dragon. Then again, it's not like he has a lot of social experience, now, is it?

I'm curious too as to how he ended up alone? Did Celestia let him go after Twilight hatched him (Did Twilight hatch him)? Honestly, if one thinks about it, letting him go to other dragons would have been a plausible thing to do at the time. Still, I love the characterization in this story. I wonder if the rest of the Mane 6 will meet Spike...er Greenfire? Oh heck, I'm just eager to figure out what happens next. Have a moustache! This was a wonderful chapter.

This story is fantastic. I love the way it's been progressing at the perfect speed. I can't wait for your next update. Keep up the good work!

Yes, updates! I am looking forward to finding out about Greenfire's past, I want to guess at it but, I'm afraid that I might be right, and I don't to be that guy, i also don't won't to be hilariously wrong either.

FANTASTIC, will wait for the next chapter!

Also, i really like rarity in this story.

>>16920401692040 i think the diffrence is when twilight hatched him and he grew large he didnt just stand there  but ran off and the magic seeped out of him and he shrunk to his proper size and from there he grew natrually

Rarity is:

     Such an easy character to overwrite, but you're really capturing the essence of her here.  Nicely done all around!

                  Mike

>>16920401692040 I think it might have something to do with the fact that Greenfire wasn't exposed to young Twilight's magic, remember when Twilight turned her parents into plants and caused spike's egg to suddenly hatch and grow incorrectly? I bet that messed up spike's growth rate in some way.

>>16923251692325 It's Spyro isn't it?

Heh. Cute.

Wow, nice.

This was just plain cute. The two of them...

No I'm not crying! Bugger off!!!

>>16921291692129 I CONCUR WITH THIS FINE GENT!!!!!!!!

Man, this is a great read so far.

I cannot wait to see how you'll deal with the fire ruby issue.

I also hope to see other ponies in the tale as well.

Do keep up the good work.

Oh man I waited soo long and it was worth it.

You know this story can exist pretty much by it's own without any MLP references

you couldn't make me happier today, after days of hardtudying, this is a nice gift for me to spend some of my free time reading such an amazing story. Looking forward for another update, of course, I really like where this is going

Nice going so far. I'm hooked! Just a little bit of advice, though: when you italicize certain words to add emphasis, you may find that it can potentially distract the reader. As my English professor always said, "Your writing should be descriptive enough and the tone should be established well enough so that italics are unnecessary for emphasis." In my opinion, you already do a good job in describing the mood with enough detail to carry the tone that you intend. I tell a text, in this case, are not necessary. We know that Rarity speaks with emphasis on certain words - this can be understood, there by limiting the use of italics inner thoughts or in-narrative texts.

This is just my advice and you do not have to follow it if you do not wish. By all means,  narrative and your style to do with as you please! Keep on writing and I look forward to more from this unique little story.

Regards,

-Justin

So is this some universe where Twilight died as a filly and Spike is on his own in the world alone right now?

Im liking this concept!

Its good, original, and I can smell the "Beauty and the Beast" wafting in the air!(and it tastes WONDERFUL!)

Even when Spike is not Spike, he loves his gem of a pony and we will always have our Sparity!

>>16921291692129>>16933911693391

I third the motion for, "more,now!"

Start your betting!!

$10 says we see Greenfire's tragic back story, explaining why he is a hermit dragon and the glanced at corner of the cave, in 3 chapters.

It isn't often that go for AU tags, but this is quite good. i think my problem with AU is that it is often used as an excuse to break the characters or make the world darker. But you capture the feel of the show quite well, giving us a different take on a one of the classic ships, Bravo good sir, Bravo

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......................moar

Great read, keep the awesome coming.

Awwwww.... all my feels for this chapter ^^

THIS IS GREAT!

I wonder what you'll do with twilight, nightmare moon and such. If you'll even touch it at all.

I love the slice of life way of things and would love to see more of the ponies, maybe see some discussion on the way species interact, about the prejudice. Could be nice, but whatever, this story is already great.

AWWW so cute concept...

Great to see this story updates and that some things hold true even in alternate realities. I'm wondering now more than ever what exactly happened to Greenfire in this universe. He seems to have as little knowledge of dragon nature as he does in the show, and beyond being slightly rougher around the edges is still a rather decent being.

Was he still hatched by ponies and the other dragons decided they didn't want anything to do with him?

Is he simply an orphan who had to raise himself?

Does he just differ from other dragons on some fundamental level?

I'm excited to find out.

I like as the things are walking slowly.

>>16930921693092

Yup. Spyro was my childhood.

>>16984741698474 Hooray for the epicness of the Spyro games! (minus skyfakes and dawn of the dragon fly)  Brohoof! /)

>>16985611698561

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Finally! I really like where this story is going. Can't wait for more chapters.

This story is fantastic so far, well written, no noticeable errors, and it's adorable and kind of sad at the same time. I'd say that I can't wait for more, but please take all time necessary to make the next chapter just as amazing.

This is sweet, I like it. for some reason I  see some kind of business relationship so they can both get more gems for their collections

This looks to be pretty awesome. I can't wait to read more!

Love this story, awaiting developments!

You gonna go on with this?

Will you update before the end of the world?

Will you update before the end of the year?

Needs moar update.

the first shipping fic I've read that is solely a shipping fic. I've got to say, I think i'm hooked. This is awesome.

Will you ever update?

Please, another.

Bloody fantastic. I love this fic.

UPDATE!

YES!

Ooh, Rarity, you sly pony!

Befriending a dragon, which are supposedly the most territorial and vicious beasts in Equestria.

Recruiting that same dragon to help you excavate gems. Brilliant, I must say. Although I don't know if it will work, because his pride may or may not get in the way.

Hey, author, is Twilight still studying the Magic of Friendship, sans Spike? Because this would be a lesson for the ages right here. Having a tea party with a dragon.

Yeah, I'm with kage, twi still doing her "celestia's student thing?"

Awesome.

This was a delightful chapter

I know it's a Sparity fic and all, but I hope that for one of their visits, Rarity decides to bring 1 or 2 of her friends along; Probably Twilight and Pinkie Pie would be the most curious.