Being isolated for 1000 years is quite damaging on the psychosis on man and pony alike. Princess Luna, now being freed of her former alter ego, must now learn to move on in a world that has left her behind, and deal with the scars of her past, as well as her damaged soul.
I am partially writing this as an experiment into a new style of writing, one that will hopefully make the reader feel more involved in the story without a "birds eye view" narrator.
This will be a sad/ dark fic, but still touching. I intend to have a resolution so the reader will cry in sadness, but shed tears of joy by the end. I am open to criticism as this is my first fic that I am ever uploading.
Chapters (13)
This is a very interesting idea. Yes after 1,000 years, all of that under the control of some kind of mental instability or, possibly, even an external malignancy, it is understandable that Luna would be disoriented and would have a difficult time interpreting the world around her. This could only have made her attempts to reintegrate harder. When you're unsure of your senses, how hard is it to learn?
This looks to be a promising Luna character-fic. I'll be watching out for new chapters!
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thanks!!
A guilty conscience is a nasty thing to have and, as Nightmare Moon pointed out, it's a hard thing to escape. I think it will be a very, very long time before Luna is able to forgive herself for what she did and what she nearly did.
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hit the nail right on the head, sir ;)
how are you liking it?
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So long as you realise that it is a series of POVs and introspectives, it's great. It doesn't really have a plot so to speak but it doesn't really need one. It shows a great deal of understanding of the characters of Luna, Celestia and how their relationship must have evolved over their long lives.
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There is a loose plot, but as you said, the man focus is on the minds of the characters
thanks for the input!
I wonder if the alicorns' mental level is related directly to their physical maturity? So, when Luna regressed to an adolescent, she became a younger teen in her mind too. I also wonder if Celestia had to raise Luna from foalhood, which is why their relationship often seems mother-and-daughter rather than that of sisters.
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SPOILER ALERT:
Once again, you are right on the money ;)
A thousand years is a long time, Luna, a long time when you've been nothing but the boogiemare to countless generations of ponies. "Be good or Nightmare Moon will get you!" they'd have been told. That sort of conditioning is hard to beat. Give them time.
I'd think she'd need a tutor to catch up with 1000 years of history first....
And, mostly the whole fandom agrees that she'd take a refuge in Math, as numbers would be very much unchanged.
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the whole tutor idea is what I was going for when Tia asked Showers to take her in
Luna at school? That could be interesting; it could be apocalyptic too, but only in a funny way.
It's a sad fact that no-one ever writes a front page newspaper article about good news. Only bad news, scandal and disaster sell newsprint (at least that's what the cynics in charge would tell you). Consequently, they have to be looking for a malign element to Luna being healed and returned. Creeps.
I'm not sure that 'Nightmare Moon' is a separate mind. I think that she's an avatar of all Luna's guilt, insecurity and, yes, the anger that originally started the whole thing off. She won't be able to escape that echo until she comes to terms with her own mistakes and those things over which she had no control.
Woah! MPD!Luna! I've read this fan theory before but this is the first time that I've read a serious treatment of it (the other treatment was semi-comical and semi-parodiac of the whole field of modern 'celebrity' psychiatry).
2 things:
What if the blanket only stores the bad dreams ie Nightmares, and when it fills up, the Nightmare escapes!
also, the hurricane? that's you're excuse? Imma have to start pestering you for more chapters in the hallways...
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If I see you in study hall/ self directed, I fully expect you to tackle me with questions about the plot direction XD
Glad to hear you're alright, especially after seeing everything that Sandy did to the east coast. Now on to grammar nitpickery of this excellent story (my guilty pleasure).
“I suppose you could head upstairs to your observatory, the maids have kept you telescopes in working order, so I think you’ll get a pretty good view of the speech”.
the bolded should be your. Also, though this one could easily be ignored, periods should stay within quoteation marks, if the sentence ends in dialogue.
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Thanks for the heads up, that's embarrassing XD
My keyboard likes to mess with me sometimes.
Zyr's nitpicking service, away.
I climb to the top of my tower, and trot happily through the observatory, excited to watch Tia deliever her speach.
speech
The guard transfers my to a unicorn, who rushes me through the cavern to a thick metal door labeled ‘royalty’.
transfers me to a unicorn
The problem of being a gentle and benevolent tyrant is that the ambitious and ideologically-driven don't fear to oppose you, no matter how little real popular support they have. Interesting that there is a panic room in the castle. I wonder how heavily shielded it is.
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I apologize, I finished this late at night with a keyboard that wants me dead.
I swear to you, I'm a much better author than that :/
Tia curls into a tight ball with me in the center, and wraps her wings around us, completely covering me.
Celly can wrap her wings, around, herself?
Also go Alicorn parents, kill those dragons so at the end of time they don't take Asgo, er, Equestria!
It's too early to say this is an official act; it only takes one radical lunatic with a home-made rocket to kill dozens of innocents and trigger a war that neither side actually wants. I seem to remember a certain Anders Brevik claiming that he was but the first and yet none of his alleged colleagues have ever been seen. So, I wonder if this is just that most terrible of things, the lone gunman.
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Every comment you post is right on the money
Your psychic powers are beginning to wear on my sanity ;)
Some typos and awkward sentences I spotted.
“lobbed an smoke based explosive onto the stage, which later exploded fully once arriving at its destination.
lobbed a smoke-based explosive onto the stage, which detonated on landing.
and criss- crossing his beak are cracks and scratches running its entire length.
and cracks and scratches criss-crossed the entire length of his beak.
I pick her up and hold her to my bosom in an attempt to calm me, but this psychopath is giving me a strange feeling as well
Based on context that should be "in an an attempt to calm her"
Furthermore, send a missive to Zebrica in case we need to raise an army within short notice.
On short notice sounds better
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I'm sorry :/
Editing my own works has always been a challenge. Thanks for the input
well, took me awhile to read this due to not caring at all. But that was because the summary didn't sound good...at all....at least to me. But once I started reading, I REALLY enjoyed it. I hope to see more soon!
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I'm glad you enjoy the story
Is there anything in specific that you dislike about the synopsis?
I giggle wildly as she weaves in between esteemed nobles, maids, and guards, most of whom are wearing expressions of pure shock, or annoyment.
Annoyment isn't a word, so far as I recall. Try annoyance.
why at the mention of Dr. Sigmund, the ponification of the medic from TF2 occurred to me
it was quite a fascinating story, it’s a pity that he never reached its end.
Continua a história por favor 🙏☺️
How convenient