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ENTRY FOR THUNDERHAWK7865's VIDEO GAME X-OVER CONTEST
It has been 15 years since Dan, better known as Blue 'Ace' Bass, has been to Equestria. A month before his return, Dan has a dream and get's a surprise visit from an unwanted visitor bent on killing him. Will Ace be able to fight after all this time and survive? Or will the assailant triumph his trial and slay the most powerful Element bearer in history?
Eh. Not a bad implementation, but gratuitous ending. I'd like to point out that, in the abscence of Applied Phlebotinium, scimitars will be... utterly destroyed by a significant application of focalized energy. So, you get a dislike for that. Pity, it was good except for that. And the fact that scimitars don't really impale. They shear.
I appreciate your feedback Infinity. What do you think I could do improve the ending?
Also, in answer for the reason for your dislike: Yes, actual scimitars would be destroyed in real life by that much energy being applied to them directly... BUT Thunderhawk wrote them in as magical scimitars, so no, in this story or his, they wouldn't be utterly destroyed. As for the impaling, they can impale, just not as well as some other swords.
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