Ah Youth.

1420549 your profile is epic

I've only read the first chapter and I already know I'm gonna like this. You write well, my friend. Pure grammar, great description, nice dialogue, and showing the emotions of Rumble was very well done. Let's see how I'm liking this in a few chapters, shall we?

Ok, ok, is it just the liquor or is there a meter? Measure? Poetic aspect? To the paragraphs after he leaves Zecora's

An youth, it is a curse, yet, a blessing

Out of the corner of his ear, Rumble thought he heard something...

Im sorry but, what? how does that work? lol

A few little spelling-and-grammar boo-boos, and I think Zecora's lines could have used a bit more work, but this is a great setup so far! I smell hijinks...

So far, so good. I like the idea, and you write very well. Keep up the great work!

I like where this is going so far.

Rumble fics are best fics.

dat zecora... she gonna rape him

dem feelings.... welcome to puberty kid

Oh what naive youth think . I have seen this kind of story moral in ages (or since Applebloom's first episode, kinda sorta). Can't wait to see what happens next.

Beware Rumble, your little brain isn't prepared to the incoming flow of hormons
I know I'm going to like it, let's read

Video games? They don't have television sets or computer monitors!!!!

I can already tell where this is going. Jealous little brother, hates being a kid. Grows up experiences all the positive or easy things, then is bitched slapped by the terrible things about being a grown-up and turns into a kid again and learns a lesson. Seen way to many times before.

Well, I am definitely now a fan after reading all four parts <3

Seems interesting! I like it so far!

I really loved it! It had beautiful details on his feelings, and I felt as if I'd feel the same if I were in each situation.

1453266 though, this one has sex in it

I'm reminded of Big... that was a good movie.

Awesome start this is looking great!

Zecora’s hips were wider and rounder than most ponies

Dat Zebra Flank tho

“I can indeed give you a potion to change your morphology… but if I do, will you use it responsibly?”

Rumble: "Please define responsibly..."

In the back of her head, Zecora wished she had given him just a taste before letting her go. The way the colt’s eyes had hung on her backside when she bent over reminded her she had been without some proper ‘company’ for a good while.
Well… given Rumble’s behaviour, she could consider that outcome when he came back for a refill.

Should I be proud or dissapointed at Zecora?
Also, the underlined word should be "him".