Let me know what you think! Will be writing more, so suggestions are welcome

“Screw logic, be awesome for once!”

"Hey. *Cox Whistle* Listen Ricky."

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"Twilight has saved your known world more than three times now. Saved your town countless times. And helped you sort through your own nonsense over and over again. Now I know you're very stupid, so I'll make this simple for you. You. Insulting Friend. She. Good friend."

one word, d'awwwwwwww

dawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww-Hrrk!-"Someone get the paddles! We have 'dawww' induced cardiac arrest!"

Being friends with a princess will get you the nicest thing.

Nicest things, plural.

Nice start! I'd like to see where things go from here.

>>14189831418983

The idea here is that they're in that awkward stage of fitting the pieces together. I know I for one say some stupid things when I'm in that situation. But yes, I agree, Twilight is a bamf

>>14191211419121

I'm so happy that you got the reference

>>14191711419171

Fixed! Thanks for pointing that out!

“Says you! I don’t need anypony telling me what I am, and am not wearing!”

Best line

And Spike

It was....cute. There is no better word for that.

A blanket that smells like frosting ? Me want.

Oh! And totally awesome chapter by the way.

>>14191211419121

Not sure how well the song goes with the story, but any excuse to listen to the song is a good excuse.

>>14198231419823

Yeah, it doesn't quite go with the theme, but I'm a huge Dio fan and the title just worked. I wasn't going to name the chapters like that originally, but my inner metal head begged me to do it

Came here because of the Dio song.

Stayed for the great writing.

Rock on and keep writing.  

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

D'AWW

Also, is the title a Dio reference?

EDIT: Someone already asked that question.

Also congrats on the feature.

Lol for I second I thought somepony had added my fic to the wrong shipping folder.

>>14198931419893

Thank you! Rock on

>>14199151419915

Whoa I just noticed that Thanks bunches!

>>14199221419922 I remember yours, if yours is the LunaDash Rainbow in the Dark.

The end was fucking heartbreaking.

If it's not, ignore this because i'm an idiot.

>>14199221419922

Oh, yeah I guess I didn't notice that this title was already taken. Either way, I shall have to give yours a read!

>>14199641419964 Lol I bet there's at least one more pre-dating mine, so don't sweat it. I shall too look at yours after I finish some shit.

>>14199521419952 Yes, that is mine. And that ending is still possibly the best thing I have on this site.

>>14198351419835

Oh that subconscious, why must it be so persistent!  Somethings just shouldn't be associated.

>>14198351419835

I get that. My story is named after a metal song, and all of the chapter title are, as well. It started being that the chapter had a reference to the song. Example: the prologue is called Dance of Death, and it includes the line, "rambling, enjoying the bright moonlight, gazing up at the stars" from the epic Iron Maiden song. After a bit, I just said screw it and used songs where the title has something to do with the chapter. Too pretentious?

Anywho, I usually hate inter-Mane Six shipping and lesbian Dash in general, but this was kinda cute. And the Dio thing sold me completely!

>>14201241420124

Not pretentious at all, I've always loved creative naming like that.

And I'm not a big shipper in general, but I'll admit I have a big soft spot for Twi/Dash. As far as the gay/straight thing, I have no real preference.

>>14191711419171

Maybe the author meant that if you're friends with the princess, she will find the nicest item in the entire world and give it to you.

>>14201401420140

Honestly, me neither. I have NOTHING against homosexuality, it's just been done to death in this fandom. Plus, as the little brother of a bigger tomboy than Dash, I just don't see it. I'm a Mac/Dash fan myself.

Congrats on feature! I saw this added to the TwiDash group a few hours before it was featured, and put it on my Read Later list. I'll be reading this soon!

>>14202031420203

To be honest, Mac/Dash is pretty adorbs. Also, sorry if it sounded like I was accusing you of anything, I wasnt And I can totally see why living with your own personal Rainbow Dash would give you more opinions on it, I can only imagine watching the show and seeing any of my siblings as a character

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Thank you! I didn't even notice it was added to that group, but cool deal!

Dude amazing story im a writer myself I must say this was awesome bro "True story."

>>14201451420145 ... Commencing quest for the nicest item in the world. This expedition better not have a cheesy ending, but knowing Trollestia...

>>14198351419835

Awesome song drew me in - and as a bonus, I found a great story.

BTW, if you name every chapter with nothing but lyrics from the song, I'll award you 10 intarwebz.  

Wow just .... wow as I said before I write fanfic/clopfic to and you my friend are amazing at this. I tip my hat in respect for you good sir.

*breathes a deep, satisfied sigh* Ah, scardy-cat Dashie is best Dashie, even better when combined with love-sick Dashie!

Hats off to you, sir; I cannot wait to read more!

D'aww, y'all are too sweet I tried my best

Heh. The best part is that Crazy Twi would be serious about castrating Spike.

>>14191211419121

YEAH, BABY! THAT'S--!

>>14191861419186

Hey, hey! I was going to be the first to make the refer--

>>14198231419823

Oh, son of a Pinkie. Well, maybe it's not too la--

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FFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUU--!!

>>14206851420685

Sorry I was stage 3 in your breakdown.

>>14206851420685

I recognize all acknowledgement of the reference, big and small. As long as we can all agree that Dio was, and always shall be, awesome.

“I’m not tired... I just-” Rainbow explained, until the train passed into a tunnel. All light from the moon was officially snuffed out and all was pitch black. She let out a terrified squeal and wrapped her hooves around Twilight’s body. Her shivers overtook her once more as she snuggled up as close to her guardian as possible.

“And d-don’t get any w-weird ideas...”

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>>14200681420068 It's just so fucking sad, though. Amazing, but sad. My eyes were watering.

>>14207451420745 Lol, mine weren't. I honestly thought it was the cheesiest shit ever with spicy vocabulary and style. I guess you readers really like nachos.

And you think Rainbow dying is sad? Just wait for who dies in the last fic I plan to write. If you aren't on the ground sobbing your eyes out, I will have failed.

*Spike comes in all like *

I KNEW IT I BUCKING KNEW IT....... But I thought it would be Pinkie or Rarity

Haven't read anything more than synapsis and chapter titles... Liking and faving immediately. I approve of tags as well.

>>14210631421063 Synapsis? Synopsis rings a bell =/

impresive will fave to see where this goes

People beat me to it but I will still say it

Like a rainbow in the dark

R.i.p. dio

Holy cow!  I can't find anything negative to say about this!

I actually like it!   Great job!

>>14213761421376

I cried when he passed...

*BAM!!* Right in the feels!!

Sorry for the inconvenience Nightwatch is Currently being revived by our hospital staff he will be with you shortly... by the way his last words was DAWWWWW.

Nightwatch back. I was in cardiac Arrest for 4 minutes my heart blew out thanks to this story and I had to get a transplant.. Luckily they keep hearts for Daw  blowouts in stock. Now if this keeps up I might have to get a upgrade. Great story.

“It’s Spike, if he says anything I’ll have him castrated.” Oh god lord I died at that one

Thumbs up and a gold star for you! No brakes on the shipping train, as they say... Sucker for good TwiDash, I am.

Incredible, you actually got me hooked, and on the first chapter! usually,a story hooks me in the second or third chapter, but you got me on the first try. The final tug that won me over was the part where it was Rainbow that came in;i totally wasn't expecting that.  

>>14208231420823

youuu... you you you. your fic made me sad as well, but what can i say, i love nachos!

ANYWAYYYYY this fic seemed to pick up rather quickly. i mean it doesn't seem wrong in it's pacing, i'm just not used to them happening this fast. diggin' it so far, can't wait to see where it goes next.

oh and two words; MORE CUDDLES!!!!!

>>14188131418813 FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT'S GOOD, MORE!

>>14219621421962

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I'm so happy that so many people are enjoying this! I actually have chapter 3 ready to go after a little editing, and working on chapter 4. As for the pacing, it's just another nudge towards the realistic aspect of this. Love strikes at the weirdest times, and in the weirdest places.

Wat? I'm sorry, did I miss something? I'm going to have to say the realization/confession felt sort of rushed. Kind of like a guy who was friends with another guy, and then one night when the ”tough” guy breaks down, the other guy comforts him and finds that he likes the dude. In the morning, they fall in love. (I'm just assuming that it's the same for both genders, as I wouldn't know if it isn't) I mean, the scene itself wasn't rushed, it's just that Twilight was too accepting; you would at least expect something like, ”i need time to think” or ” we're still friends no matter what, but I don't know about this. Let's try this and see where it goes.” If the rest of the story wasn't so good, this possibly could've blown it for me. other than that, there was absolutely nothing wrong with the story. And also, Spike should keep his mouth shut if he knows what's good for himlol.

>>14221001422100

Er, well, yes, I agree. As for your analogy... Well I mentioned it was based off of experience Nail on the head and all that... Of course, the whole story isn't a direct recap of my life, just the initiating action is made to be near identical.

>see title

>song starts playing in my head

>I ain't even mad

It has been a good couple months since I have read a twidash that is unique like this.

brilliant.

>>14189831418983

"With all due respect, I disagree with you insulting Rainbow Dash, (As well as find it insulting) because while I, Twilight Sparkle, have saved the town of Ponyville many times, So has Rainbow Dash. And while she has caused, (And has had) many problems over the time that I have known her, she has yet to nearly destroy the town because she was late for a letter, or has nearly gotten her metaphorical son killed because she got a new pet and ignored him, and, while irrelevant to the topic of friendship, she has yet to alienate herself from all her family to the point of them forgetting to tell her that her only older Brother was getting married til a few days before the wedding.

So, if she is a bad friend, I am one too.

If not considerably worse then her.

Sincerely,

Twilight Sparkle."

**( Not to be taken seriously. )**

Ooh, this looks good! Will read later.

Well done; a story that shows the more vulnerable side of Dash is probably a story that I'll enjoy.

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I'm surprised there are so many of my brethren on the site.

\m/

I'm going to start reading now, but I just had to put in my two bits.

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I was just about to create a story with the same title, back to my multiple choice story then.

DAWWWWW!

my hear- *drops dead*

twidash...

HOW FUCKING ORIGINAL!!!!

but seriously though, great story so far!

Ooooh, I like, good start. Keep it up!

>>14224341422434

2012, the year of TwiDash. I remember when TwiDash was my favourite pairing back in 2011, and there were like....2 or 3 TwiDash fics in all of existence.

That's good. Really good. The characters are "in character" and the dialogues are great.

I am prepared to read through a whole day of awkwardness and being unable to express the overflowing feelings with all the ponies around... I mean what else do you do on a train? Eat, talk, play some board games with friends. More like eat and talk while playing a board game...

Anyway can't wait for more.

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Oh, well fuck Dr Cox for defending you Twilight Sparkle. What an asshole :P

by god... this was amazing. <3

>>14189831418983

only you would make a Scrubs reference in a comment on a MLP story, and make it sound entirely natural.

and btw, I'm seriously loving this story. moar soon plz.

Awesome! Actually laughed out loud at the part with Spike. I'd love to see someone depict that scene, the two of them in the bed with Spike standing there, shocked and blushing. Also, there is so much d'aww here.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Oh my gawd! A submissive and adorable to the bone Dashie and a "takes action/lead into her own hooves" Twi - what am i reading and why am i liking this SO much?

Don´t worry, so far it´s perfect.

Expect the castration part, hope that was a joke else this Twi really gonna scare me...

YEEEEAAAAH, GET SOME DIO UP IN HERE.

The title caught my attention, awesome Dio song by the way.

I'll have to save this for later, sounds really promissing.

-faves about 30 minutes ago and goes to read other stories-......-story updates-...... WOOT~!!!

EDIT:... okay.... that seemed... VERY rushed.. and seems like you are creating the solution to every problem as they come. Other than that I really enjoyed it and it was quite funny with some of the interactions ^_^

"I WILL ERASE HIM FROM HISTORY!" using this line for everything that ever will happen or ever FUCKIN MOAR DAMMIT!

*Squee* I love this!

Hmmm, Twi Dash. Interesting. I shall ponder this further

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Calculation Matrix Complete.

I declare that this Twi Dash seems pretty good. Im not one for reading much Romantic Lez Ponies Stories, but this was fairly good. Characters were in line with what I might expect. Not sure if I wanna see Spike castrated , and  I'm also still wondering if this will go beyond what is necessary for fics like this. If it does, I probably wont be reading much more when it happens. But if it remains on its current course of D'AWWWWWW, I think I might continue enjoying this,

calender = calendar

Youre = You're

10 minutes down the track from her on the     =  should be      down the track from here

TwiDash rules and this shows zero signs of disappointing. TS & RD are over the top in the best in-character way possible here. Love it!

Thumbs up and a gold star for you.

>>14234071423407

Chose to quote you because you were the last comment before I did. Thank you all again for the views! For those of you pointing out that the pacing is a little too fast, again I say I agree. It's not something I can fix at this point, though I still stand by my decision to progress the initial action as such. Also, while I plan to make the dawws continue, once they reach Trottingham there shall be actual plot, since, you know, not stuffed onto a train anymore

Also Spike is safe... for now...

"Given the short proximity of time intervals, I have determined that 3 times in the area of 24 hours is at least 84% less cool than the first time, making it pretty lame in retrospect."

Twilight has quantified coolness into a measurable unit.

I ain't even angry.

A quick question, are the girls human or ponies?

Honestly I don't see what the first commenter was saying. Maybe I just have my shipping goggles on too tight, but the pacing seems fine, and the end pretty much throws everything we think we thought they knew out the window. Also, the characterizations are excellent.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

>>14235641423564

Well, they are still ponies. Is it not clear? If something in there confused you then I'd love to fix it, granted it's something I can fix.

I can't help but regret the missed potential of cluelessness about the new relationship. Hope you can make up for it further down the line. And I understand that it's hard to miss something like that by friends. Still this chapter completely repeats the previous. Wake up, confront friends, instantly fail to be evasive, run away, get caught, cuddle. Lack of interaction with other ponies is disturbing. Nevertheless the story is awesome. Keep it up.

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I admit I had to face palm a little when I realized I kind of wrote the same thing twice in a row. I'm working on more interaction with the others for chapters to come.

A few tiny grammar and spelling errors, but over all was a very cute and good chapter.

This is good, nice interactions, no needless drama. Seem very fitting and is very different from most of the other things i see around with the same theme. Have a like, would give all the stars if the system was still with stars.

I could have enjoyed this, but I dislike fanfics in which the author treats Spike like shit. It's disgusting that Twilight would make a castration joke, especially about Spike who already gets tons of abuse, and even worse that Dash would get off on the idea.

This is great! I love how cute they are and how they tried so hard to prevent the others from finding out.

I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep it up!

sut up and take my DAWWWWWWWW

Okay then......

Dashie kinda channeled Cloud Kicker from the winningverse in her conversation with Rarity.

I'm really enjoying the story, thanks for the update

this is the best twi-dash romance fan-fic I have ever read can I be your pre-reader or do you allready have one

>>14198231419823

Damn, ya' beat me to it. On top of that I have been singing that song all day.

What? This seems a lot like the last chapter. And again, it doesn't seemed rushed,i don't think it's rushed, but what's with everyone? I mean, you'd think there might be a problem/conflict between the friends. But conveniently,  there isn't . Or at least, they'd be wierded out a bit. I'm just going to be honest, I wanted to stop reading when this particular problem just solved itself. But I didn't. I'm just going to say, problems don't usually solve themselves, if they ever do, in our lives. Sure, someone might solve it for you, whether you know it or not, but that rarely happens. I just hope that the problems don't continue to just solve themselves. However, despite all that, all the characters are in character, and the surroundings are described with detail; at least with enough detail that I don't have a problem with it. Yup, everything is going (mostly) smoothly. And I shall continue to read this. (Too much information on that last reply. I'm not going to judge, but I didn't have to be reminded. (lol) don't take this ” sub-comment” seriously. ) have a mustache.

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Some advice: never overlook any comments you may get, no matter how pointless or painfully long they may seem.

>>14248851424885

Yes I did feel a little odd about that comment I made, sorry for that I'm glad you like it over all, but I completely respect your opinion that the resolution is a little too easy for your tastes. And I've been reading every comment, and as I'm writing the next chapter I've been taking a lot of them into consideration. Also, I tend to have a problem with writing conflict, always kind of have. I'm working on it! Also, I must compliment you on the swanky 'stache