Unfortunately, the species has since become extinct because of one mare's actions the species is now extinct...

Might wanna clear that up.

Also how is the species extinct but the last of them is living with Twilight? That would mean that their not extinct.

A pretty big history, with low views, even few likes...

Maybe I should review this.

>>14392451439245 Well, ASIDE from the three, later four but that's partially explained, there are no other Trossels left, hense why it's called Fall of the Trossels. Honestly, I don't even know why I put this here. it got good reviews on fanfiction.net, but I'm so ashamed of it that I had it rewritten and nearly everything in this was retconned. Trust me, the remake--Ethereal Chaos (which may be renamed Aethereal Chaos)--is a billion times better.

>>14388921438892 awkward sentence is awkward

>>14435191443519  Redundant statement is redundant

2 likes, 2 faves, 108 views? People, Ethereal Chaos is a MUCH better story. Don't bother with this one, just leave it to fester on its own little island of awful with My Immortal, Sweet Apple Massacre, and Sailor Moon: American Kitsune. Okay, maybe it's not THAT bad, but it's just so absent from GOOD that you really shouldn't even bother.

This story has been reviewed by The Equestrian Critic Society.

Story Title: Fall of the Trossels

Author: JudgmentisForbidden

Reviewed By: arandompenguin

Fall of the Trossels has an interesting premise, a near-extinct species having to cope with their loneliness and live amongst the ponies. However, due to rather poor characterisation, backstory, pacing and plot, this story falls flat. It’s a shame since (mostly) it’s grammatically watertight and the idea behind it is original.

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Score: 2/10

>>23426132342613 honestly, I kinda forgot that I submitted this to this group; I really just regret EVER submitting this to the site, period. I was NEVER happy with this fix, and its mostly just something that I really wish I could forget about--this is the Sonichu of fanfics for me, the Birdemic of fanfics, hell the Troll 2 of fanfics. Every complaint about this (the dialogue, the story, the pacing, the characters, the world, their development, just about everything) is more than fixed in the remake Ethereal Chaos, which I'd highly recommend checking out if you want to wash out the horrible taste of this. In the remake, the characters are much more developed, the story takes a bit more of its time, and Twilight and Infernalo's relationship feels a bit deeper; the world is even fleshed out a bit more as well as definite and threatening antagonists. For some reason, if I had to guess I'd probably say people mistaking it for so bad it's good, people just seem to gravitate towards this festering carcass of a story and almost ignore the polished silver chalice of the remake.

Uhm, not to appear crude or anything, but you might want to check the comment, my good sir.

I'm just doing one of my duties as an admin for TECS, the real reviewer of your story is arandompenguin, who read your story.I merely skimmed through the first chapter to make sure his review wasn't out of hand. (AKA I have no idea about the intricacies of your plot and/or storyline)

I thank you for taking your review well though! It makes me happy to see there are still decent and tolerant writers out there in the internet community

>>23436672343667 If you're tired of people looking at this story, then why don't you delete or unsubmit it? Seems a lot easier than complaining at everyone who comes here to comment.

>>23571322357132 Honestly, I knew this story was bad; I really just keep this story around as a joke/trolling.