zyr1987 9 13 150

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zyr1987's Stories (9)

Gimme Shelter
Fleur de lis is thrown out of her coltfriend's home and caught up in the rain, when a helpful stallion offfers her a bed for the night
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The Model Caretaker
Fleur de Lis moves to Ponyville, after finding Fancypants cheated on her, then got her shunned by the Canterlot elite, and slowly becomes infatuated with a certain yellow pegasus. However, she seems to have come down with hoof in mouth disease
25,843 words · 1,253 views · 95 likes · 11 dislikes
Rainbow Dash discovers "The Stare"
After RD pushes Fluttershy too far, their friendship is nearly ruined.
1,941 words · 787 views · 32 likes · 3 dislikes
Luna Looks for Love
Luna calls on the mane six to help her find her soulmate.
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The Storm
2,415 words · 652 views · 25 likes · 6 dislikes
Luna's Power and Rainbow's love
16,054 words · 669 views · 38 likes · 14 dislikes
The Story of "The Stare"
1,858 words · 264 views · 9 likes · 1 dislikes
Fifty foot Applejack
1,246 words · 631 views · 15 likes · 13 dislikes
Breaking through the ice
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Fifty foot Applejack by zyr1987

Slice of Life

After a massive stormfront runs through Ponyville, Applejack realizes she'll have to get the apples that fell off the trees by herself, as Big Mac isn't available. She enlists Twilight to give her the endurance to do this without falling asleep again, but the unicorn's spell goes awry, and causes Applejack to grow to massive size. Twilight must find a spell to get her back to normal, before she does any real damage.

It's a more lighthearted sequel to my darker story, The Storm, though written in a way that it shouldn't require having read that story to get this one..

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9th Oct 2012

Last Modified
9th Oct 2012

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zyr1987

#1 · 32w, 3d ago ·

I freely admit that dramatic stories come to me more easily than lighthearted ones, so this one may not be up to snuff. You be the judge. I just needed to get it out of my head.

SuperPinkBrony12

#2 · 32w, 3d ago ·

First Appletini and now THIS man Applejack sure has a bad track record with staying at a normal size. :rainbowlaugh:

Bronyman1995

#3 · 32w, 3d ago ·

That was fast. I felt like I was watching a movie in fast forward.

Knight Glider

#4 · 32w, 3d ago ·

This was... nice. :fluttershyouch:

It was a good story, just a little fast. It could be expanded.

WanderingHero

#5 · 32w, 3d ago ·

Feels rather rushed and sparse. You could probably have described things more and have done more with the premise

metallusionsismagic

#6 · 32w, 2d ago ·

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Get it out of your head by writing it down as an outline to expand later. That's all this is. No description, just *bam!* She's huge. Nothing happens. *Bam!* Random shipping mentioned in passing. *Bam!* Solution is reached peacefully. Three words: Insert. Shenanigans. Here. This doesn't qualify for a dislike, and the concept is interesting, but you didn't do anything, man! Zyr, I am disappoint. :ajsleepy:

linksbro1

#7 · 32w, 2d ago ·

very mustache worthy

:moustache:

Lucas

#8 · 32w, 2d ago ·

Choppy writing is commonly a problem writers face. I would recommend an editor, or friend that would not mind reading over the chapters. Especially for grammar and a flowing story line.

Hereward

#9 · 32w, 2d ago ·

I'd say this story was something of an anticlimax, except that the anticlimax started at the beginning.

Edeon

#10 · 32w, 1d ago ·

Of all the things this fic needs fixed I really had an issue with two:

AJ's comment on Twi's magic, getting really tired of " Twilight fails a spell" trope, just the comment, the fic justified it.

You said this could be read without reading the storm, however the shipping comes out of nowhere, unless you read the storm.

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